Thanks for your service thanks for this share, yes as we age our perspective does change some as time goes by, well hopefully, and hopefully for the better. Yes, freedom can come at a heavy and high price and it is not free. Thank God for those that have chosen to serve, are serving, and will serve for freedom's sake.
Interesting I am a writer but not a gamer however my son is a gamer and that is putting it mildly, this kid eats, sleeps, and dreams games. His whole world is a game he would gladly go live in a game world I think if that were possible. The games he loves are challenging but not too complicated, kind of fast pace has some form of a fight and or magic in them. In many of the games, he can teleport and or time travel or something. They have to make sense though and be something he can wrap his head around at least a little or be able to wrap his head around what is going on at some point. It needs to keep him interested. Something he sees himself playing for hours and or days. So if you could make a game like that he would probably be all in. He is a student at Full Sail if that tells you anything about his level of love for gaming. Hope that was helpful.
Okay, nice story however it feels rushed maybe if it was slowed down with more explanation and details that would make it better. Thanks for sharing this piece it has great potential that is for sure I just felt like I was being pushed or rushed ahead to the end. I couldn't slow down and enjoy what was happening with each person really.
This is the start of a great story thank you for sharing what a birthday for a 5-year-old to have. When you are 5 a lot of things have wonder though to be honest however a unicorn would top most everything else I am sure if you are 5.
An interesting and weird,kinda cute little poem about much of nothing. I guess it will do if you want to go to Wonderland doing nothing but trying to figure it out up from down, left from right. Wondering how did I get here and how shall I get back from this weird trip I am on. Once in a while visiting Wonderland is okay as long as you don't ecide to stay. Thanks for your share.
Thanks for your share this was a little odd of a reading for me and I am not getting the overall point or vibe of this story. I am not sure why I am not fully getting the point or maybe that is the issue I am looking for a point, either way, this story didn't really grab me and pull me in. However, for someone else, they may say this is the start of something great, either way, keep writing.
Cute and a little funny however it would only be funny if he doesn't flee with your stuff. Thanks for your share keep writing we need a little laughter in the world we live in. Playing with words can bring about some humor at times I guess and if not then maybe it was supposed to do something else.
Interesting view of the moon I think it's the sun however that does most of the work. Although it does do its a fair share of work I think just not really the shining thing at least not without the muscle of the sun anyway. Keep writing thanks for your share my view point is off today so if you like it then that is really what matters most.
Interesting thanks for sharing yes there are folks among us who practice the healing arts vs modern and traditional medicine. I guess there is room for all of it I guess if it works. However, there is there is an exception for those practicing the dark arts because that can work too to a degree however that is a no, no.
Keep writing glad you like to write and also like to share. Writing is a special art it really is and if we use it correctly then we can make others think, feel something or understand if only they care to embrace what we have written.
This went over my head just a little I will have to think on this a little more and maybe it will come to me. I think it will be very enjoyable for those that can truly understand this writing. Keep writing everyone's writing is not for everyone.
Oh, wow really wish I hadn't read this however it is what it is. This was very detailed is there some understanding of bees because of research or experience I wonder. It would have at least been a happy ending if she would have died like her sisters versus being a slave and a house for bee's what a sad fate to be enslaved to anything or one other than God they tell me however even that comes with a price.
This is an interesting piece that may make a good story. I think that you seem to have a good imagination. Keep writing and sharing your pieces of work because there are always folks that love this kind of thing. A witch that lives in the woods it may need a little bit of a twist would be my only advice.
This was an interesting piece and one is only to assume by reading this that the writer like spring however winter not so much. thanks for your share and yes I enjoy spring myself as a matter of fact it's my favorite time of year it is. It is always saying to me life is starting a new and that the earth and those upon it have another chance for growth.
Thanks for your share even if a sad share it's your share so it matters. someone maybe can learn something from this piece or maybe a least get a reminder of how cruel the world can be, a reminder that we should never let down our gurards and pray often.
Okay thanks for your share it’s interesting for sure even if it’s not my cup of tea. Keep writing I am sure many liked this poem quite a bit and for others not so much. I guess it stands to say you have a very good imagination a little twisted but a good one.
Thanks for the share and reminding us that some don’t look forward to the first day of school and for reminding us that parents can help with that some. Thanks for sharing your poem with us it was nice and had a good flow.
Interesting story however failure is apart of the human experience ,even in science it just is. However the young Seth is a bit of a jerk and so is Miss Cain to me. The one is no better than the other as far as I am concerned. Failure is apart of not only life but also learning,growing,understanding and being successful . I wouldn’t listen to a man/ woman that has claims they have never failed ,let alone a scientist who has claimed to never have failed or doesn’t know it’s importance.
This is an odd but interesting story of sorts,sounds like addiction to me. I am not sure how addiction it’s a kill and this sounds like the story one of many of addiction. Addiction takes you further than you want to go and keeps you way longer than you want to be kept if it doesn’t kill that is. Just like sin it always takes you further than you want to go and keeps you longer than you want to be kept unless it kills you of course. Thanks for sharing your story. I wonder does it really matter at all about the mirrors?
Interesting is life an Illusion or a dream or a nightmare I guess it depends on who your asking or does it? Looking up the meaning of illusion I don’t think it can be an illusion really however that just one lady’s thoughts on the matter and maybe this all is some weird illusion or reality or something. I guess anyway it something to ponder maybe? Thanks for your share.
This was pretty good if you could get past the grammatical errors.I think this piece needs a little more work however not bad ,not bad at all. It’s a little hard to read because in some places and the story’s not as clear as it could be however maybe that’s just the grammatical errors. Reread and write this maybe with help of a friend or family member and see where it goes. I would love to see a rewrite. Keep writing a good story is in there I do believe.
Wow that was such an interesting thing you wrote and I find we like some of the same things and dislike some of the same things small world huh.As different as we are as people we aren’t thanks for you share.
I am glad you shared your work with me and I don’t take that lightly.You are a good writer I think ,however I think you can get in your own way and you try too hard. I think with this one you tried to hard this was a hard read it felt like homework and not the fun kind.Keep trying and keep writing and write for the bright intellectual and the dimwit and everyone in between.
Thanks for sharing your work it reads well and flows nice.It is very interesting to hear someone else view on creation.Seems like you gave this poem lots of thought.The piece is short and sweet which I also like.
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