I received your review request, i apologise for not getting around to it before the request expired.
I did, however, have a read of this.
I like the idea of it, understanding that it is just a chapter at the beginning of a longer story though is imperative, because there are many loose ends in terms of the characters and descriptions. Also, if its the first chapter of a longer epic, it seems like there is a lot happening in a short space of time in terms of action and setting the scene - it also jumped between the two quite dramatically. I like all the descriptions though, gives a good image. Is it in France? (just guessing from the names). A few spelling and grammar errors, that wouldn't matter but the ones i mention in particular detract from the effect of the specific section.
As i said previously, i'm confused about the whole witch, reaper, bone, little girl thing...
I think if its a first chapter to a longer piece, trying to put all of that information, along with the setting, and the main characters and the death and pre-lude to an entire piece, it is a little short - i realize that sentence makes no sense...but if you catch my drift, there is a lot going on for such a small space when the story is clearly going to be much longer.
Also, the stuff about the old man being lazy and praying to God for water...I don't really understand the relevance of that. You probably understand it better and it might play a role in the future of the story, but i forgot about it entirely until just now and flicked up to see how much space it took up...its quite long for a part of the story that i found played no role.
Sorry again for the delay...i hope you get something from this.
Let me know if you don't understand any of it, or want some more feedback - to be honest this was quite rushed, so if you want more, let me know and i will get around to it as soon as i have the time.
(also, this is far less harsh than i intend my description to denote - but like i said, it is in a rush hehe)