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Review of New Beginnings  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, debmiller1 , I'm Snow Werewolf , I'm reviewing "New Beginnings because I discovered it on the sci-fi genre page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Rachel's sudden change of locations. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like this metaphor, Pine boughs danced to the music of a gentle breeze. because it is fresh and descriptive.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of Rachel.

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Review of Stand Aside  
Review by Snow Werewolf
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, dragonwoman , I'm Snow Werewolf , I'm reviewing "Stand Aside because I discovered it on "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Vander Abbott driving with his windows open. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the twist at the end, because it suggested that Annella Lee was a ghost.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the twist at the end.

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Review by Snow Werewolf
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi, DRSmith , I'm Snow Werewolf , I'm reviewing "The Awakening Of Aquarius because I discovered it on the inspirational genre page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the awakening of a Gnostic vestige. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the part where Crippen healed Juan Gomez.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of Crippen and Juan Gomez.

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Review by Snow Werewolf
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, jackson , I'm Snow Werewolf , I'm reviewing "The Copenhagen Faux Pas because I discovered it in "Action/Adventure Newsletter (September 28, 2022).

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the splinter under the fingernail. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the way the main character convinced himself that he should spend the money on himself instead of his father's Copenhagen.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the main character.

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Review of GREYHOUND GRIFTER  
Review by Snow Werewolf
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, laidman , I'm Snow Werewolf , I'm reviewing "GREYHOUND GRIFTER because I discovered it in "Short Stories Newsletter (September 28, 2022).

First Thoughts: The second paragraph hooked me with Ellie not wanting people to think she was a silly dreamer. The interaction and conversation between the characters moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it left me wondering about the identity of the real grifter.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Review of The Lie  
Review by Snow Werewolf
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Choconut , I'm Snow Werewolf , I'm reviewing "The Lie because I discovered it in "Short Stories Newsletter (September 28, 2022).

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker wanting to hug her husband. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while revealing the broken relationship between herself and her husband.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the way each interaction between the couple moved the plot forward, while revealing their personalities.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the lesson about what happens to a relationship that is built on lies.

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Review by Snow Werewolf
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi, Avid Novel Reader , I'm Snow Werewolf , I'm reviewing "The Repentant Bully because I discovered it in "Short Stories Newsletter (September 28, 2022).

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Ron's reluctance to go into the hospital room. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense. The conversation among the characters reveals their personalities and relationship.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like both Ron and Samuel because they are sympathetic and intriguing characters.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction between the characters.

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Review by Snow Werewolf
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, sindbad , I'm Snow Werewolf , I'm reviewing "Transformation of Divine Dragon because I discovered it on the mythology genre page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the description of Redfin Carp's spirit and character. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the way Redfin Carp became a dragon.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this wonderful myth.

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Review of Old Lady Tales  
Review by Snow Werewolf
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jacky , I'm Snow Werewolf , I'm reviewing "Old Lady Tales because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker walking home for the store. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the speaker's reaction when she thought the clown was juggling a live frog.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the clown and the frog.

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Review by Snow Werewolf
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Averren , I'm Snow Werewolf , I'm reviewing "A Frog by any other name... because I discovered it on the food/cooking genre page.

First Thoughts: Liam's knowledge that something would go wrong hooked me. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like Liam because he is an intriguing and a sympathetic person.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the main character and his muse.

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Review by Snow Werewolf
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi, A*Late30s*Faith , I'm Snow Werewolf , I'm reviewing "The Greatest Motivator because I discovered it on the comedy genre page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Amy's question. The conversation between the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the description of the dog.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this because of the conversation between the characters.

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Review by Snow Werewolf
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, AmyJo - pumpkin eater , I'm Snow Werewolf , I'm reviewing "Halloween is Coming because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp forum page.

First Thoughts: The first stanza establishes the plot, form, mood, and speaker of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words complimented each other, while the rhythm moved the plot and emotions forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the last stanza because it climaxed the poem's plot.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this scary Halloween poem.

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Review of Heavenly  
Review by Snow Werewolf
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, dragonwoman , I'm Snow Werewolf , I'm reviewing "Heavenly because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Gayal being a new angel. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the way Gayal caused the rainbow to appear.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of Gayal.

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Review by Snow Werewolf
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Wickedfugitive , I'm Snow Werewolf , I'm reviewing "The Writer's Cramp because I discovered it in "Fantasy Newsletter (September 21, 2022).

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the world changing. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the idea of a jinn speaking with a Scottish accent.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the jinn.

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Review by Snow Werewolf
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Andrew W , I'm Snow Werewolf , I'm reviewing "Chronicles of Aaron: Survivor's Guilt because I read part one.

First Thoughts: This part reveals depth of Aaron's emotions for Eric. It also show the way Aaron changed from blaming himself for Eric's death to accepting it and remembering their feelings for each other.

Suggestions: A word choice in this phrase, grateful from the amount of time, I suggest changing from to for because for is a better fit in the meaning of the phrase.

My favorite part: I like the way this part showed the change in Aaron from survivor's guild to moving on while remember the joy he and Eric had together.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of Aaron, who is an intriguing and sympathetic character.

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Review of Death Wink  
Review by Snow Werewolf
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Kotaro }, I'm Snow Werewolf , I'm reviewing "Death Wink because I discovered it in "Mystery Newsletter (September 21, 2022).

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker picking a horse for the next race. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like this simile, like wipers in a storm, because it is fresh and descriptive.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the way the speaker changed his habit of gampling.

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Review by Snow Werewolf
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Andrew W , I'm Snow Werewolf , I'm reviewing "Chronicles of Aaron: Mars Colony because I discovered it in "For Authors Newsletter (September 21, 2022).

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Aaron and Eric leaving their apartment. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like both Aaron and Eric because they are sympathetic and intriguing characters.

Final Thought: The climax of this chapter arouses the reader's curiosity about what will happen to Aaron without Eric

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Review of the tryouts  
Review by Snow Werewolf
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, JCosmos , I'm Snow Werewolf , I'm reviewing "the tryouts because I discovered it in "Short Stories Newsletter (September 21, 2022).

First Thoughts: The first sentence hooked me with Sam Adams wanting to be on the track team. The narrative moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The surprise climax, I did not expect Sam to die because of the heat.

Final Thought: Good surprise ending.

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Review of Bad Friend  
Review by Snow Werewolf
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Sumojo , I'm Snow Werewolf , I'm reviewing "Bad Friend because I discovered it in "Short Stories Newsletter (September 21, 2022).

First Thoughts: The question in the first sentence hooked me. The conversation moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax, because it suggest who got the part.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story, because of the characters.

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Review of The Legacy  
Review by Snow Werewolf
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, My Sox Rox , I'm Snow Werewolf , I'm reviewing "The Legacy because I discovered it in "Short Stories Newsletter (September 21, 2022).

First Thoughts: The first sentence hooked me with the speaker's aim being the worst in the family. The speaker moves the narrative and plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The last sentence is my favorite because it gave me something to think about.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the speaker.

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Review of Problematic  
Review by Snow Werewolf
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, dragonwoman , I'm Snow Werewolf , I'm reviewing "Problematic because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge forum page.

First Thoughts: Amalda's question hooked me. The conversation among the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax, because it made me smile.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the math problems.

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Review of For His Lord  
Review by Snow Werewolf
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, dragonwoman , I'm Snow Werewolf , I'm reviewing "For His Lord because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with George riding through the night. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the way George fell asleep when he saw the princess.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of George, who is an intriguing and a sympathetic character.

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Review of Specimen  
Review by Snow Werewolf
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi, Words Whirling 'Round , I'm Snow Werewolf , I'm reviewing "Specimen because I discovered it on the dark genre page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Anwen waking up. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems. My only suggestion is to use Anwen in another story.

My favorite part: I like Anwen because he is an intriguing and a sympathetic characters.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of Anwen.

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Review of WHERE IS MY MIND  
Review by Snow Werewolf
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, penelope moonbeam , I'm Snow Werewolf , I'm reviewing "WHERE IS MY MIND because I discovered it on the comedy genre page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker's mind mysteriously going blank. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while giving a good description of the moment a person's mind goes blank or wanders off.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the part about the days not a single thought enters the speakers mind.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this amusing story because it made me smile.

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Review of Busted  
Review by Snow Werewolf
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, SherritheWriter , I'm Snow Werewolf , I'm reviewing "Busted because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the description of the crime scene. The conversation between Jain and Officer Delaney moved the plot forward at a good pace while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the way the crime was solved.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction between the characters.

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