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Review of Rule Seven  
Review by Snow Vampire
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, T.J.Gunn , I am Snow Vampire , I discovered "Rule Seven in "Drama Newsletter (October 28, 2020).

First thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with an author about to die. The narrative moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

I like: I like the way foreshadowing is used with Mitch having saved implicating evidence before, and the CPU sending a hexadecimal string to the server.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the way it demonstrated the quote.

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Review by Snow Vampire
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, G. B. Williams , I am Snow Vampire , I discovered "Is "He" Real -- God That Is? on the spiritual genre page,

First thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the question about wondering if God is real. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while telling why she believes God is real.

I like: The metaphors in this article are fresh and descriptive. I especially like this metaphor, I chose to divorce the devil in my life.

Suggestions: A typo in this phrase, T Having had several, I suggest removing the T.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed read article because of the author's logical approach to the subject.

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Review by Snow Vampire
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, BusmanPoet , I'm Snow Vampire , I am review "Just Be Yourself because I discovered it in the prompt for "Space Blog

The first stanza establishes the form, mood, message, and theme of the poem. The rhythm flows easily from line to line and stanza to stanza, which makes this poem a pleasure to read aloud. The rhythm moves the message of the poem forward at a good pace.

I like the repetition of the title through out the poem, because it emphasizes the poem's message.

I encountered no distractions.

I am giving this thought provoking poem a 5.0, because of the lesson it revealed.

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Review by Snow Vampire
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, G. B. Williams , I am Snow Vampire , I discovered "Nothing Will Separate Me from God's Love on the spiritual genre page.

First thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the person who prayed for healing for two years, and was not healed. The author moves the narrative forward at a good pace.

I like: This is my favorite sentence, "I will let nothing separate me from the love of God!'

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: I am giving this article a 5.0 because it caused me to think about my faith.

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Review by Snow Vampire
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi, Beholden , I am Snow Vampire , I am reviewing "In Praise of Door-to-door Delivery because the title aroused my curiosity.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker having problems with disposing of the evidence. The speaker moves the narrative and plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

What I Like: The first person point of view and voice is a good choice, because it helps the reader understand the speaker's motives.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final Thoughts: I am giving this chilling story a 5.0 because of its comment about modern life.

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Review of Getting Lucky  
Review by Snow Vampire
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Hi, Blimprider , I am Snow Vampire , I am reviewing "Getting Lucky because the title aroused my curiosity.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the hand fate dealt George. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

What I Like: The metaphors and similes in this story are fresh and expressive. I especially like this simile, like a woodpecker at full throttle. I also like the story's climax.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the well-written characters.

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Review by Snow Vampire
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hi, Violet , I am Snow Vampire , the title "The Abbott Hotel (Chapter 1) aroused my curiosity.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the name of the receptionist. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

What I Like: Tatiana is a sympathetic and intriguing characters. I also like the way this chapter ends.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the type of hotel.

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Review of Am I haunted?  
Review by Snow Vampire
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi, Gabby , I am Snow Vampire , I am reviewing "Am I haunted? for the fall Power reviewer's raid.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with summoning ghost. The narrative moves the plot forward at a good pace.

What I Like: The way the certain actions suggest the person is haunted.

Suggestions: A typo in this phrase, hat they want. I suggest changing hat to what.

There are several places as is used. I suggest removing some of them because they are unnecessary and slow the reader down.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this because of the actions that suggested the main character was haunted.

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Review of A Haunted House  
Review by Snow Vampire
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi, hullabaloo22 , I am Snow Vampire , I am reviewing "A Haunted House because the title aroused my curiosity.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Ben's statement. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while the conversation between the characters builds the suspense.

What I Like: The description of the cottage was eerie.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the surprise ending.

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Review of The Vampire Blues  
Review by Snow Vampire
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi, Wickedfugitive , I am Snow Vampire , I am reviewing "The Vampire Blues because the title aroused my curiosity.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the difficulty being a vampire in the modern are. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

What I Like: The first person point of view and vice is a good choice, because it helps the reader sympathize with the main character.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the main character.

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Review by Snow Vampire
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi, Richard Lynch ~ Prin. Chambers , I am Snow Vampire , I am reviewing "The Black Cat's Tale because the title aroused my curiosity.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the black cat staring out of the shop window. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

What I Like: The cat's reaction to the trinket is normal, while suggesting the cat is something magical.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final Thoughts: I am giving this story a 5.0 because the action kept me focused on the stories plot.

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Review by Snow Vampire
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi, Kåre Enga, P.O. 22, Blogville , I am Snow Vampire , I am reviewing "Over my dead body... so she did [246] because the title aroused my curiosity.

First Thoughts: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, and plot of the poem. The rhythm flows easily from line to line and stanza to stanza, which makes this poem easy to read aloud. The main emotions of this poem are despair and fear.

What I Like: The last stanza if my favorite because it climaxes the plot with the most emotions.

Suggestions: I encountered no distractions. My only suggestion is to write a story based upon this poem.

Final Thoughts: I am giving this chilling poem a 5.0 because of the way it expresses the dark emotions.

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Review by Snow Vampire
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, n.lea , I'm Snow Vampire , I am review "The peace she brings because I discovered it in the prompt for "Space Blog

The rhythm of this free verse poem flows easily from line to line, while moving the narrative and emotions of tranquility and peace forward at a good pace.

I like the repetition of I need through out the poem, because it helps the reader understand the importance of a beach to the speaker.

I encountered no distractions.

I am giving this poem a 5.0 because of the way it showed the emotions of tranquility and peace.

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Review of Beauty  
Review by Snow Vampire
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi, Nikola , I'm Snow Vampire , I am review "Beauty because I discovered it in the prompt for "Space Blog

The first stanza of this free verse poem establishes the form, the theme, and the mood of the poem. The rhythm flows easily form line to line and stanza to stanza, which makes this poem a pleasure to read aloud.

I like the choice of the rose font for this poem, because it reminds me of a rose.

I encountered no distractions.

I enjoyed reading this poem because of the descriptions of beauty in relation to a rose.

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Review of Twenty-nine  
Review by Snow Vampire
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, T.J.Gunn , I am Snow Vampire , I am reviewing "Twenty-nine because I discovered it on the Newsfeed.

First thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the early death of great writers. The conversation between the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

I like: This is my favorite sentence, You write—therefore you are. I like this sentence because it is true and it made me smile.

I also like the way this story ended, because it confirmed the statement about great authors deaths that was in the first paragraph.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because the action and conversation between the characters kept me focused on the plot.

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Review of What if  
Review by Snow Vampire
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi, Gabby , I'm Snow Vampire , I am review "What if because I discovered it in the prompt for "Space Blog

The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and emotions of joy forward at a good pace.

The last stanza is my favorite because it gives good advice.

The only distraction I encountered was that some of the stanzas did not rhyme.

I enjoyed reading this poem because of the advice to keep "What if" in mind.


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Review of A lesson for life  
Review by Snow Vampire
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Vertika Saxena , I'm Snow Vampire , I am review "A lesson for life because I discovered it in the prompt for "Space Blog

The rhythm of this free verse poem flows easily from line to line, which makes it easy to read aloud. The first person point of view and voice is a good choice, because it expresses the speaker's emotions, and shows the lessons the speaker has learned.

These are my favorite lines, I like these lines because the gave me something to think about.
This is the lesson,
that I would give to everyone,
don't compare and don't confront.

I encountered no distractions.

I am giving this well-written and thought provoking poem a 5.0/

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Review by Snow Vampire
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, K5Rakitan , I am Snow Vampire , I am reviewing "Kaiba's Prostitute - Part 14 at the request of the author.

First thoughts: Chapter 66: Gratitude reveals more about Joan's background and gives information about her relationship with her mother that helps reader understand both Joan and her mother. Each chapter moves the plot forward at a good pace, while giving the reader more information about the characters and their relationships with each other.

I like: One of the things I like about this part is the dream Joan's mother had.

This is my favorite phrase, love is nothing but an illusion brought on by our hormones driving us to breed. I like this phrase because it reveals Laura's disillusionment with her life.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this part because of the characters, who are well developed characters.

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Review by Snow Vampire
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi, Zombie Hanging In Here & There , I am Snow Vampire , I discovered "The Beautiful Maiden & The Child in "Horror/Scary Newsletter (October 14, 2020).

First thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Mari looking for a candy shop. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

I like: The metaphors and similes used in this story are fresh and descriptive. I especially like this simile, like a needle stuck on a gash of a record, playing the same notes over and over.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because the action kept me focused on the plot.

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Review of One Million Stars  
Review by Snow Vampire
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Don Two , I'm Snow Vampire , I am review "One Million Stars because I discovered it in the prompt for "Space Blog

The first stanza establishes the form, mood, rhythm, and theme of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the musical rhythm moves the narrative forward at a good pace.

The fifth stanza is my favorite because of its emphasis on hope.

I encountered no distractions.

I enjoyed reading this well-written and inspiring poem because of the subject.

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Review of Come unto Christ  
Review by Snow Vampire
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi, King Merrio , I am Snow Vampire , I discovered "Come unto Christ on the Read & Review a newbie page.

First thoughts: The first paragraph of this essay hooked me with people believing that God punishes. The author moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while showing that it is wickedness that punishes.

I like: I like the emphasize on doing good.

Suggestions: A typo in this phrase, They so called, I suggest changing They to The.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this essay because the author took a positive approach to the subject.

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Review of Snokum Joe  
Review by Snow Vampire
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi, Fly On The Wall , I am Snow Vampire , I discovered "Snokum Joe on the Community Newsfeed.

First thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with One-Eyed Billy being in a graveyard on Halloween night. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace while building the suspense and the terror.

I like: The simile and metaphors in this story are fresh and descriptive. I especially like this metaphor, A mallet of wind.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this frightening Halloween story.

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Review of 9-11  
Review by Snow Vampire
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Brujo Schnujo , I'm Snow Vampire , I am review "9-11 because I discovered it in the prompt for "Space Blog

The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while giving a picture of the events of 9-11. The rhythm flows easily from line to line and stanza to stanza, and carries the emotions froward at a good pace.

I like the repetition of the lines back in 2001 and that day in 2001, because the help the reader understand the emotions of this poem.

I encountered no distractions.

I am giving this poem a 5.0 because of the way it express emotions.

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Review of The Way I See It  
Review by Snow Vampire
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Dr Gonzo , I'm Snow Vampire , I am review "The Way I See It because I discovered it in the prompt for "Space Blog

The first stanza establishes the form, mood, and theme of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative forward at a good pace.

The last stanza is my favorite because it climaxes the plot of the poem, and gives the readers something to think about in relationship the their actions.

I encountered no distractions.

I am giving this well-written and thought provoking poem a 5.0.

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Review of Resignation  
Review by Snow Vampire
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Diane , I am Snow Vampire , I discovered "Resignation in "Comedy Newsletter (October 14, 2020).

First thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me because of the reason Ima Outahere was resigning. The writer moves the narrative, smiles, and laughter forward at a good pace.

I like: The second paragraph is my favorite because it made me laugh aloud.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: I am giving this funny letter a 5.0 because it made me laugh.

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