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Review of Mug Shotz  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi, ⚓GivingThanksBrad ⚓ , I am Prosperous Snow Thankful , I discovered "Mug Shotz on the Newsfeed.

First thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the two women going into business together. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace.

I like: I like the name of the coffee shop.

Suggestions: This story was told and the action described rather than shown.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because it demonstrated the problems people have in opening a new business.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, ⚓GivingThanksBrad ⚓ , I am Prosperous Snow Thankful , I discovered "You Don't Have To Cook on the Newsfeed.

First thoughts: The first stanza establishes the theme, mood, and speaker of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative forward at a good pace.

I like: This is my favorite line, Steaks made from tail of gator. I like this line because of the tail of gator.

Suggestions: I encountered no distractions.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this well-written poem because it reminded me of Dr. Seuss rhymes.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, ⚓GivingThanksBrad ⚓ , I am Prosperous Snow Thankful , I discovered "A Thanksgiving Mishap on the Newsfeed.

First thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the question. The conversation between the turkeys and the dog move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

I like: I like the smooth flow of the plot from the beginning to the climax. I also like the way the conversation flowed.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, BIG BAD WOLF Is Howling! , I am Prosperous Snow Thankful , I discovered "'Til Mossflower is Free on the Newsfeed.

First thoughts: The first stanza establishes the speaker and plot of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the plot forward at a good pace.

I like: I like the way this poem suggested a battle song.

Suggestions: I encountered no distractions.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the speaker.

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Review of Strange Orchids  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, BlackAdder , I am Prosperous Snow Thankful , I discovered "Strange Orchids on the fantasy genre page.

First thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Moira Radcliffe looking at her reflection. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace while building the suspense.

I like: I like the way the story ended because it was unexpected.

Suggestions: A word choice in this phrase, But was she saw, I suggest changing was to all.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this chilling story because of the smooth flow of the plot.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi, Kotaro , I am Prosperous Snow Thankful , I discovered "In Whose Image We Create on the Sci-fi genre page.

First thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the Jaguar. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

I like: I like the similes and metaphors used in this story because they are fresh and descriptive. I especially like this metaphor furniture a sad starved appearance.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this chilling story because of the active descriptions.

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Review of Honing the Craft  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Tinker , I am Prosperous Snow Thankful , I am reviewing "Honing the Craft "One More Time - Verse Form An Aquarian for "I Write in 2019.

First thoughts: The poem follows the form and looks good on the page. The first stanza establishes the theme, mood, and plot of the poem. The rhythm moves the plot and emotions of boredom forward at a good pace.

I like: The last stanza is my favorite because it emphasizes the endlessness of the task.

Suggestions: I encountered no distractions.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the subject.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, LazyWriter , I am Prosperous Snow Thankful , I discovered "Humanity, Regardless of Race or Religion on the religious genre page.

First thoughts: The first stanza of this prose poem establishes the form, theme, and mood of the poem. The rhythm flows easily from line to line and stanza to stanza.

I like: This is my favorite line, because it states one of the basic problems of humanity today.
What’s it all matter when we’ve lost the spirit of our beliefs?


Suggestions: I encountered no distractions. My only suggestion is to give the scripture verse and translation of the quote in the last line of this poem.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because it emphasized the need for humanity's unity.

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Review of American Haiku  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Blimprider , I am Prosperous Snow Thankful , I discovered "American Haiku on the Newsfeed.

First thoughts: The first paragraph explains the concept of "American Haiku in a clear and understandable way. The second paragraph gives enough information, so that he poet can write an interesting poem.

I like: I like the title of this message forum because it aroused my curiosity.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: This is a well-planned message forum, therefore, I am giving it a 5.0.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, K.M.Baker , I am Prosperous Snow Thankful , I discovered "Things that go Bump in the Night under Read a Newbie.

First thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the questions. The narrative move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

I like: I like the way the speaker builds the suspense as the plot moves forward.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the way the author built the suspense.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Lucky Lady , I am Prosperous Snow Thankful , I discovered "It's About The Heart Not About The Color on the Read & Review a newbie page.

First thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker's admission that she did not want a third failed marriage. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while revealing the process of healing.

I like: The first person voice and point of view show the process of healing on an individual level.

Suggestions: There are several places in this story where the personal pronoun I is in lowercase. I suggest changing the lowercase i to and uppercase I.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the way it expressed the speaker's emotions.

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi, 🌙 HuntersMoon , I am Prosperous Snow Thankful , I discovered "Dawn Of The … Recruits? in "Comedy Newsletter (October 30, 2019).

First thoughts: The first stanza established the form, mood, and speaker of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming word compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the plot and the laughter forward at a good pace.

I like: The last stanza is my favorite because it climaxed the poem's plot and made me laugh.

Suggestions: I encountered no distractions.

Final thoughts: I enjoy ed reading this poem because it made me laugh.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Paul D , I am Prosperous Snow Thankful , I discovered "The Birthday Party in "Comedy Newsletter (October 30, 2019).

First thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Randell's statement. The conversation between the characters moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense and laughter.

I like: I like the twist in the climax because it was unexpected.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because the climax made me smile.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Detective , I am Prosperous Snow Thankful , I'm reviewing "I Heard the Sound of Raging Thunder for "I Write in 2019.

First thoughts: The first stanza establishes the speaker, plot, and theme of the poem. The rhythm moves the narrative and plot forward at a good pace. The main emotion of this poem is hope.

I like: This is my favorite line, At the other end, I see the sunlight, because it emphasizes hope.

Suggestions: I encountered no distractions.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the descriptions.

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, {suser:abaru }, I am Prosperous Snow Thankful , I am reviewing "Shirley Suspicious in response to a request by the author.

First thoughts: The first paragraph with Oliver waking up in the hospital hooked me. Each speaker moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

I like: I like the way the death of Kenna was concealed until the last paragraph.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: Using two different points of view to tell about Jennifer's death helps the reader understand Oliver's motives, and why he could not remember what happened.

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Review of A Fish Tale  
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi, Bob's Turkeys , I am Prosperous Snow Thankful , I discovered "A Fish Tale in "Short Stories Newsletter (October 23, 2019).

First thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Henry's knowledge of fishing. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

I like: My favorite part of this story is Henry's battle with the fish.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the main character, Henry.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi, K5Rakitan , I am Prosperous Snow Thankful ,I'm reviewing "Kaiba's Prostitute - Part 5 because of a request from the author.

First thoughts: The fact that Joan can be honest with her mother without Gertrude becoming extremely overbearing show a good relationship between the mother and daughter.

In this part the relationship between Joan, Mokuba, and Seto increases and become closer.

I like: I like Gertrude's prayer because it was nondenominational and nonjudgmental.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: The change is Seto is increases with each part, which shows good character development. The changes in Mokuba are a bit more subtle in each part, however, the do occur.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Keaton Foster: Know My Hell! , I am Prosperous Snow Thankful , I discovered "Open Are His Hands when I clicked on Read & Review,

First thoughts: The poem looks good on the page. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions forward at a good pace. The main emotions of this poem are depression and hopelessness.

I like: I like the rhyme on breath and death because those lines express the poem's main emotion.

Suggestions: I encountered no distractions.

Final thoughts: The first person point of view and voice are good choices for this poem because they suggest the speaker is talking directly the the reader.

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Review of dissapere  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Heaven Alexandra , I am Prosperous Snow Thankful , I discovered "dissapere when I clicked on Read & Review.

First thoughts: The rhythm of the English version moves the them and emotions forward at a good pace. The main emotions of this poem is sadness and depression.

I like: The last line is my favorite because it explains the title.

Suggestions: I encountered no distractions.

Final thoughts: I like this poem because of the way it expresses and reflect depression.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jkenley1 , I am Prosperous Snow Thankful , I discovered "Feeling Your Feelings...Worthwhile? when I clicked on Read & Review.

First thoughts: This non-fiction essay gives logical reasons why we should express negative emotions rather than keeping them bottled up.

I like: I like the way the author uses personal experience to make her point.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: I like reading this essay because it showed that negative emotions are dangerous when bottled up.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Camistare , I am Prosperous Snow Thankful , I discovered "A NEW STORY, A NEW JOHN when I clicked on Read & Review.

First thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the beautiful dream turning into an ugly nightmare. The narrative moves the plot forward at a good pace while building the suspense.

I like: I like the metaphors used in this story because they are fresh and descriptive. I especially like this metaphor "The bile within her could kill a million Nile crocodiles and the entire population of world polar bears."

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: This story does a good job in establishing John's motives.

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Review of Broadway Awaits  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Yoyo , I am Prosperous Snow Thankful , I discovered "Broadway Awaits when I clicked on Read & Review.

First thoughts: The rhythm moves the narrative, mood, and plot of this poem forward at a good pace. The main emotions if this poem are sadness and depression.

I like: I like the way the sadness builds toward the climax of the poem's plot.

Suggestions: In this line, Cannot hurts them again and she left, I suggest changing hurts to hurt, because hurts does not fit the context of the line.

Final thoughts: The author does a good job of expressing the emotions of sadness and depression.

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Review of Highway of Life  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Dave , I am Prosperous Snow Thankful , I discovered "Highway of Life when I clicked on Read & Review.

First thoughts: The first stanza establishes the theme, mood, and plot of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and plot forward at a good pace.

I like: The last stanza is my favorite because it emphasizes success and hope.

Suggestions: I encountered no distractions.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this inspirational poem because it showed success results from work.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi, Rima: Back To Work , I am Prosperous Snow Thankful , the title, "When Two Worlds Clashed, aroused my curiosity.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the interrogation room. The descriptions are part of the action and move the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

What I Like: I like Darlene because she is an intriguing character with an interesting sense of humor.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final Thoughts: The first person point of view and voice were a good choice for this story because they revealed the main character's motives.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi, Lisa Noe Kittyluv um Puppyluv , I am Prosperous Snow Thankful , I discovered "This World while looking for something to review.

First Thoughts: The first stanza establishes the theme and the mood of the poem. The rhythm is smooth and flows easily from line to line. The first stanza shows how the world should be, while the second stanza describes how the world is.

What I Like: The first stanza is my favorite because it shows a vision of the future.

Suggestions: I encountered no distractions.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because it encourages the reader to work for the vision of the world shown in the first stanza.

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