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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi, Neil , I am Prosperous Snow Globe , I discovered "Application For Refugee Status on the Read & Review a Newbie page.

First thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the question in the first sentence. The interaction and conversation among the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

I like: I like the way this story ends because it was a surprise.

Suggestions: In this phrase, are have guests, I suggest changing have to having.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction among the characters.

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Review of Where's Waldo?  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, NordicNoir , I am Prosperous Snow Globe , congratulations on winging "The Writer's Cramp with "Where's Waldo?.

First thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker's alarm waking him up at the programmed time. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

I like: I like the way the story ended because it showed that one should not assume anything.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because the climax made me smile.

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Review of The Last Stand  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, vastowen456 , I am Prosperous Snow Globe , I discovered "The Last Stand on the unreviewed & new page.

First thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker's question about the amount of liquor he drink. The conversation between the king and his new general move the plot forward at a good pace while building the suspense.

I like: I like the description of the Vekh because it made them sound terrifying.

Suggestions: In this sentence, In the floor, I suggest changing in to on.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the main character.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Linn Browning , I am Prosperous Snow Globe , I discovered "Mechanical Illusions on the Steampunk genre page.

First thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the question in the first sentence. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

I like: My favorite part of this story is the conversation among the characters.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this short story because of the speaker.

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Review of A Bridge Too Far  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Beholden , I am Prosperous Snow Globe , I discovered "A Bridge Too Far on the fantasy genre page.

First thoughts: Mugglegub hooked me because it sounds like the name of a troll. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

I like: I like the metaphors and similes in this story because the are fresh and descriptive. This is my favorite metaphor, Dawn was nibbling at the edges of the night.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because it made me smile.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, santhanam nagarajan , I am Prosperous Snow Globe , I discovered "THE GLORY OF BHAGAVAT GITA – PART I when I searched writing.com using the key word scriptures.

First thoughts: The first sentence concerning the Gita aroused the reader's curiosity and establishes the spiritual nature of this article. The author moves the narrative forward at a good pace while giving important and thought provoking information about the contents of the Bhagavat Gita.

I like: My favorite parts of this article are the quotes of Lord Krishna from the Bhagavat Gita.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems. My only suggestion would be to include a link to Part II of this article after the last paragraph.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this educational article because it was about the Bhagavat Gita, one of the sacred books of God.

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Review of A Place Of Peace  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Dreams - Anon, who are you? , I am Prosperous Snow Globe , I discovered "A Place Of Peace while portfolio surfing.

First thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the author's description of arriving at the airport in Jeddah. The author moves the narrative and spiritual emotions forward at a good pace while a pilgrimage to the Kabah.

I like: My favorite part was the description of the Kabah.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this educational article because of the subject and the information it contained.

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Review of A Letter to God  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi, K5Rakitan , I am Prosperous Snow Globe , I discovered "A Letter to God on the spiritual genre page.

First thoughts: The first line in this letter hooked me because the speaker woke up with a song going through her head. The rhythm of this prose poem moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while expressing the spiritual emotions of love and faith.

I like: I like the way this letter shows the spiritual emotions through the action of the people in the dream.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this letter because of the way it expressed emotions.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi, IceSkating SugarCube , I am Prosperous Snow Globe , I am reviewing "24 Syllables Book 2 "Amber Waves of Grain? for "I Write in 2019.

First thoughts: This beautiful 24 syllable poem makes the reading think of several different brands of beer in amber bottles. The rhythm carries the narrative forward at a good pace, while keeping the reading focused on the poem.

I like: I like the use of the question mark in the last line and in the title. I also like the title because it suggests a patriotic song and the a drink made of grain.

Suggestions: I encountered no distraction.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because it made me smile.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, debmiller1 , I am Prosperous Snow Globe , I discovered "From Grandma With Love and the description aroused my curiosity.

First thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the taxi pulling stopping in front of Karen. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation between Karen and her brother build the suspense.

I like: I like the way this story demonstrates one of the downsides to technology.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this amusing story because it made me laugh.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi, W.D.Wilcox , I am Prosperous Snow Globe , I discovered "Fairytale Email From Uncle Rumple on the fantasy genre page and the title aroused my curiosity.

First thoughts: The salutation hooked me. The narrative moves the plot forward at a good pace while including enough information about the two fairy tales to determine what Uncle Rumple is talking about.

I like: I like the subtle humor of this letter because it made me smile.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: I am giving this funny letter a 5.0 because it made me smile and laugh.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, LazyWriter , I am Prosperous Snow Globe , I am reviewing "The Child of the Water because I recommended by another member of writing.com.

First thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Rarbyakh's age and the sea monsters. The descriptions are part of the action, and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

I like: I like Rarbyakh because he is a sympathetic and intriguing character.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: This is a good character description because it shows Rarbyakh's abilities and fears.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi, TATSUYAKEMI , I am Prosperous Snow Globe , I am reviewing "I used to sing a song!!! in response to a request.

First thoughts: The introduction of the diary in the first paragraph and the desire of the speaker to sing suggested the story's plot.

I like: I like the way dates are used the separate the sections because it helped in keeping track of the events in the story. I also like the choice of the first person point of view, because it reveals the main characters personality and attitude.

Suggestions: In this phrase, by flipping pages and pages, I suggest inserting the after flipping and removing the last two words, and pages. The reason for this suggestion is that and pages is redundant.

In this phrase, hiding with my parents and smoking, I suggest changing with to from because the story's speaker appears to be smoking in secret.

In several places Mr. Mori is referred to as she. I suggest changing the Mr. to Miss or Ms if the person is a woman or girl.

There are technical issues in this story, which make it difficult to read. I suggest rewriting this story by starting a second document, while keeping this document the way it is for reference. I suggest printing out a copy of this story, because it is easier to rewrite a printed copy rather than a virtual copy.

I also suggest using different chapters for the different times in the novel.

Final thoughts: This story has a great deal of potential. The main character is sympathetic and intriguing. The flow of the plot is not smooth, because of the speaker talking about different time periods in his life; this method of telling the story revealed a lot about the main character, who is the speaker.

I enjoyed reading this story because of the main character and the lesson this story taught about a person losing their dreams as they grow older.

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, K5Rakitan , I am Prosperous Snow Globe , I am reviewing "Kaiba's Prostitute - Part 2 in response to a request.

First thoughts: The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The emotions, which are revealed through the active descriptions, keep the reader focused on the characters and the way their interaction helps move the plot forward.

I like: I like the way the characters emotions are shown through their expressions and their actions. I also like the use of metaphor and simile in showing the characters emotions. Another thing I like is the way the change in Seto is show because by the end of part two he has become a more sympathetic and well rounded character.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems. The way the characters emotions are shown through active descriptions help the reader relate to the main characters.

Final thoughts: Keep up the good work.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi, Jeannie , I am Prosperous Snow Globe , I am reviewing "Native American Heritage of Minnesota because the title aroused my curiosity.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the way Minnesota got its name. In this documentary, the author tells about the Native American's contribution to the culture and heritage of Minnesota.

What I Like: I like the way the author show the contributions of both the Dakota Sioux and the Chippewa to the state.

Suggestions: In this phrase, “sky-tinted water, I suggest closing the quote.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this educational documentary because it taught me something about two Native American tribes.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi, TATSUYAKEMI , I am Prosperous Snow Globe , I picked "Indigenous Ainu of the North of Japan because I know very little about the Ainu people of Japan.

First Thoughts: This column gives enough information about the Ainu people to encourage the reader to do further research.

What I Like: The last paragraph is my favorite because it gives information about the Ainu's belief in the world after death.

Suggestions: In this phrase, the deads make a village, I suggest changing the spelling of deads to dead. I also suggest expanding this item to include more about the Ainu people's beliefs and life.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this educational and thought provoking item because I learned something.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi, Lisa Noe~Kittylove , I am Prosperous Snow Globe , I'm reviewing "Poetry and Writings from 2019 "My grandma is Cherokee proud aroused my curiosity.

First Thoughts: The first sentence of this essay hooked me because the author was raised knowing her Native American heritage.

What I Like: In this essay the author gives a beautiful picture of her grandmother's personality and physical beauty.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems. My only suggestion is for the author to write more about her grandmother's family.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this wonderful essay because of the author pride in her grandmother.

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Review of Headstones  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, Mastiff , I am Prosperous Snow Globe , I am reviewing "Headstones for "I Write in 2019.

First thoughts: The first stanza establishes the speaker, theme, plot, and mood of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the plot and emotions of mourning forward at a good pace.

I like: The last stanza is my favorite because it climaxes the poems plot with the speaker setting a goal.

Suggestions: I encountered no distractions.

Final thoughts: This is a well-written poem of mourning, because it reveals both the speakers regrets and sorrow.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, PastorJuan , I am Prosperous Snow Globe , I discovered "Journey to the Planets on the fantasy genre page.

First thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the aliens arriving. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace while building the suspense.

I like: I like the informal voice used by the speaker because it suggests he is talking to the reader. I also like the way the story ended because it implied there was more to the story.

suggestions: I found no technical problems. Is there another story following this one? If not, I suggest writing one.

Final thoughts: This is a story that held my entire attention.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Sunnie , I am Prosperous Snow Globe , I discovered this group while reviewing a non-fiction essay that was inspired by this group.

First thoughts: The graphic at the beginning of this group establishes the group's theme. The introduction is well written and use different color fonts, which helps focus the reader's attention.

I like: My favorite part of this group introduction is the graphic.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: This is a beautiful and well-planned group page.

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Review of Fool Yourself  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, Mastiff , I am Prosperous Snow Globe , I am reviewing "Fool Yourself for "I Write in 2019.

First thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker picking up the visitor's pass. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

I like: I like the daughter's response to the bullies.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the main characters.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, New England Ŵeb☆Ŵiɫch , I am Prosperous Snow Globe , I discovered "Survival of Cultural Childhood Conflict in "Comedy Newsletter (June 12, 2019).

First thoughts: The author move the narrative of this monologue forward at a good pace while making the reader smile and laugh.

I like: I like the poem at the end because it gave me something to think about.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this item because it made me smile and laugh.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi, 🌙 Darleen , I am Prosperous Snow Globe , I am reviewing "Hell's Gate Bridge because it was submitted to the fantasy newsletter.

First thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Penny looking for a street sign. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction between the couple builds the suspense.

I like: I like the description of the deer because I could visualize them in my mind.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this chilling urban legend because of the active descriptions.

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Review of Starting Over  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Patrick McDonagh , I am Prosperous Snow Globe , I discovered "Starting Over on the Newsfeed.

First thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the main character embracing the winds of change. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while revealing the essence of freedom.

I like: The last paragraph is my favorite because of the woman's statement of freedom.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this beautiful prose poem because of the way it defined freedom,].

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Hi, Beholden , I am Prosperous Snow Globe , I discovered "The Man in the Silver Suit on the inspirational genre page.

First thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the advice about being generous to a man in a silver suite. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

I like: I like the lesson this story gave about hospitality.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this inspiring and educational story.

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