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Review by Prosperous Snow
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, Christopher Roy Denton , I'm Prosperous Snow , I am reviewing "A Day in Scarborough " , because I discovered it in "Fantasy Newsletter (September 20, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with it being the most depressing day of Bob's life. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The climax is my favorite part of the story, because it was a happy ending.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the happy ending.

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Review of The Ancient Chest  
Review by Prosperous Snow
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, BlackAdder , I'm Prosperous Snow , I am reviewing "The Ancient Chest" , because I discovered it in "Fantasy Newsletter (September 20, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Oliver being Cassandra's most trusted servant. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The climax is my favorite part of the story because it was a surprise.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because the action kept me focused on the plot and the characters.

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Review of Repetition  
Review by Prosperous Snow
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, Beholden , I'm Prosperous Snow , I am reviewing "Repetition" , because I discovered it in "Comedy Newsletter (September 20, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Konstanz Bleeg talking to the room. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation and interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: Konstanz Bleeg is an intriguing and sympathetic characters.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this amusing story because it made me smile.

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Review by Prosperous Snow
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi, PureSciFi , I'm Prosperous Snow , I am reviewing "The Creators at the Pleasure Paradise" , because I discovered it on the Request Review page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with multi-colored liquid coming out of someone's mouth. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: A word choice in this phrase, monitors was behind him. I suggest changing was to were because there are multiple monitors.

I like: The descriptions of how the DeathBringer kill his victims is creative and well-written.

Final thoughts: This is a creative and intriguing story. The interaction among the characters held my focus.

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Review by Prosperous Snow
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jacky , I'm Prosperous Snow , I am reviewing "The Toaster Incident" , because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Impression: The second paragraph hooked me with the speaker needing the baby setting job. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: My favorite part of the story is the speaker finding the talking marble. I like that part because it made me smile.

Final thoughts: The first person voice and point of view are good choices for this story because they reveal the speaker as a sympathetic character.

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Review of Adriana's Tale  
Review by Prosperous Snow
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, W.D.Wilcox , I'm Prosperous Snow , I am reviewing "Adriana's Tale" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: Adriana the first paragraph hooked me with Adriana hiding in her secret place. The description are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The metaphors and similes are fresh and descriptive. I especially like this simile plans spun in her mind like a spider's web.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because the action kept me focused on the characters and the movement of the plot.

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Review by Prosperous Snow
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Kotaro , I'm Prosperous Snow , I am reviewing "The Universe is a Rubik's Cube" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Jimi leaving the bar. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The climax is my favorite part of the story. I like the climax because it suggested hope.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of Jimi, he is an intriguing and sympathetic characters.

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Review by Prosperous Snow
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Intuey-Moving , I'm Prosperous Snow , I am reviewing "Coffee, The Magical Elixir" , because I discovered it on the self-help genre page.

First Impression: The poem follows the stated form and looks good on the page. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions of desire forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite line, with a wonderful, magical, miraculous, mystical coffee bean caffeine. I like this line because of the alliteration.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the subject .

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Review of Cloak and Flame  
Review by Prosperous Snow
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, James Erikson , I'm Prosperous Snow , I am reviewing "Cloak and Flame" , because I discovered it under by online authors .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the exhausted mage going to sleep in front of the fire. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The climax surprised me because I did not expect the mage to open a door in the side of the mountain.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the mage.

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Review by Prosperous Snow
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi, Novice Author , I'm Prosperous Snow , I am reviewing "The Veiled Girls Of Gynarchy" , because I discovered it under read a newbie .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with males having nothing to say worth hearing. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems..

I like: I found this story intriguing, thought-provoking, and a bit troubling.

Final thoughts: This is an intriguing concept. Have you considered using this story as part of a novel based on this subject

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Review of Broken  
Review by Prosperous Snow
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, ridinghhood-p.boutilier , I'm Prosperous Snow , I am reviewing "Broken" , because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Impression: The poem follows the form and looks good on the page. The first person point of view and voice is a good choice because it shows the broken emotions.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The third and fourth lines are my favorites because the emphasize the emotion of depression.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written poem a 5.0 because of the way it shows emotion.

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Review of Of Frank and Fate  
Review by Prosperous Snow
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Jack L. Grey , I'm Prosperous Snow , I am reviewing "Of Frank and Fate" , because I discovered it in "Short Stories Newsletter (September 13, 2023)" .

First Impression: The descriptions are part of the actioon and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation among the characters build the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The conversation among the characters kept me focused on the movement of the plot.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Review by Prosperous Snow
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Hope , I'm Prosperous Snow , I am reviewing "Opening night at the Delicatessen" , because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Impression: The second paragraph hooked me withe Walter’s statement. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation and interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: Walter is an intriguing and sympathetic character.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of Walter.

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Review of The last stand  
Review by Prosperous Snow
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, DragonPrince , I'm Prosperous Snow , I am reviewing " The last stand" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the dead body. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The first person point of view and voice were good choices for this story, because they keep the reader focused and the show the speaker's emotions.

Final thoughts: I am giving this exciting story a 5.0 because of the way the speaker expressed their emotions.

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Review of Alive (Nightmare)  
Review by Prosperous Snow
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi, Daniel Parker , I'm Prosperous Snow , I am reviewing "Alive (Nightmare)" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The description of the guy talking in the first paragraph hooked me. The speaker moves the narrative and plot forward at a good pace, while making the description part of the action.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems. I am looking forward to reading the next part of this serial,

I like: This is my favorite simile, as inconspicuous as a pair of rhinos in ballet. I like this simile because it is fresh, descriptive, and visual.

Final thoughts: I am giving this exciting and well-written story a 5.0 because of the active descriptions, which kept me focused on the movement of the plot.

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Review of The Journey  
Review by Prosperous Snow
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Thankful Sonali HAPPY 23 WDC! , I'm Prosperous Snow , I am reviewing "The Journey" , because I discovered it in "Short Stories Newsletter (September 13, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with someone going away. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: My favorite part is about the child holding up the plane because she had to go to the bathroom.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of its emphasize on friendship.

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Review by Prosperous Snow
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Espero , I'm Prosperous Snow , I am reviewing ""Hello Kitty, Hello Kitty.'" , because I discovered it in "Short Stories Newsletter (September 13, 2023)" .

First Impression: The eight foot kittens hooked me. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The antics of the eight foot kitten made me smile, because it was typical kitten behavior.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this amusing story because of the kittens.

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Review by Prosperous Snow
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Dr Gonzo , I'm Prosperous Snow , I am reviewing "Molly...Meet the Giant" , because I discovered it in "Short Stories Newsletter (September 13, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Molly growling. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: Reading about Molly is my favorite part of this story.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed this story because of Molly.

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Review by Prosperous Snow
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi, ruwth , I am Prosperous Snow , I am reviewing "ruwth is writing..."  "~ Three Things That Worked ~"  because the title aroused my curiosity.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph aroused the reader's curiosity about the things that have made the author's walk through life better. The rest of the essay gives the reader an indication of why the three things make the author's life better.

What I Like: My favorite suggestions is about focusing on one's own thoughts. I like this suggestion because it is something many people have difficulty doing.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems. My only suggestion is to write another essay about focusing on one's own thoughts. Does one begin with prayer to help focus?

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this item, because of the three suggestions.

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Review by Prosperous Snow
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi, WriterRick , I am Prosperous Snow , I am reviewing "The Day Helensburgh Stood Still " , because the title aroused my curiosity.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with it being an ordinary day in Helensburgh. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

What I Like: My favorite part of this story is the climax, because it taught a lesson.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of time standing still.

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Review of Paige and Donnie  
Review by Prosperous Snow
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi, tracker , I am Prosperous Snow , I am reviewing "Paige and Donnie"  because the description under the title aroused my curiosity.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Paige remembering the day Donnie left. The speaker moves the narrative and plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

What I Like: The diary entry was a good choice for this story, because it shows the speaker's emotions.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems. My only suggestion is to make this part of a book about Paige's struggles.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story, because it was a diary entry.

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Review by Prosperous Snow
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi, Joseph , I am Prosperous Snow , I am reviewing "Quest To Find The Tree Of Life"  because the title aroused my curiosity.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooks the reader with the way the planet was destroyed. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

What I Like: The description of Chris, as a mountain man, does a good job of revealing his character to the reader.

The climax is my favorite part of the story, because it was a surprise.

Suggestions: In this phrase, had heard not of, I suggest switching the positions heard and not, so that it reads not heard.

A typo in this phrase, boulders’ tare apart, I suggest changing tare to tear.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this intriguing story because of the interaction of the characters.

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Review of Bearing Trouble  
Review by Prosperous Snow
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, dragonwoman , I'm Prosperous Snow , I am reviewing "Bearing Trouble" , because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Impression: Glade's question in the first paragraph hooked me because questions like that almost always foreshadow trouble. The conversation and interaction between Glade and Sophie moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The climax is my favorite part of the story because it was a surprise.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction of the characters.

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Review by Prosperous Snow
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi, Krista , I'm Prosperous Snow , I am reviewing "Izzy & the Timeless Forest" , because I discovered it on the fantasy genre page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the path covered by willow branches. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: Izzy is an intriguing and sympathetic character.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of Izzy.

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Review of Campfire Tale  
Review by Prosperous Snow
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Allen Mitchell , I'm Prosperous Snow , I am reviewing "Campfire Tale" , because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Taylor's statement. The speaker moves the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation among the characters build the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite sentence, To this day, death metal and a screaming baby sound the same to me. I like this sentence because it made me laugh.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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