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Review of They Come  
Review by Noah Youngson
Rated: E | (5.0)
I really like this one. I am particularly fond of the way that you incorporated the inevitability of death into such a short poem-- to really signify the brevity of life.
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Review of Short Stories  
for entry "Heat Rises
Review by Noah Youngson
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
You seem to have a natural gift for storytelling. I believe that a writer who can write 687 words about something that would seem incredibly mundane and arduous, and use diction and syntax in such a way that keeps me engaged in the words, is a true writer/artist. I think it comes down to relatability.
I know this piece of writing is somewhat dated by now, especially in the midst of your plethora of work, but my only suggestion would be to find a different opening sentence for the 6th paragraph from the last. It seems a bit repetitive since the paragraph before that begins with,"I grew hotter and hotter as the day wore on." Especially with the use of the phrase "wore on."
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Review of The Way I See It  
Review by Noah Youngson
Rated: E | (3.0)
I would either find a different word to replace 'decidedly,' or move it in front of the word 'change.' And the word 'loose' is spelled incorrectly in the sixth stanza. Lastly, I'm not sure I understand the 'Compare it to...' line. However, I like the general idea of the poem. It reminds me of a quote by Leonardo da Vinci: "Learn how to see. Realize that everything connects to everything else." And another: "The greatest deception men suffer is from their own opinions."
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Review by Noah Youngson
Rated: E | (4.5)
This was an incredibly beautiful and moving poem, especially the last two stanzas. The raw, yet subtle emotion throughout this poem is what makes it so authorial. I really liked the 'wind chimes' metaphor. In that same line, however, I would change the semicolon to a colon since they're not two independent clauses. Besides that, I think you did the poetry genre justice by your use of imagery, subtle emotion, and abstract meaning.




-Noah


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