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Review by Nikola
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as a judge for "What a Character! : Official WDC Contest"   by Writing.Com Support . Thanks for entering!

*Laugh* I so enjoyed reading this! It is well told, entertaining, and well, funny! I was smiling and laughing throughout.

The tale flows nicely and the egg related terms and such added such a nice, um, flavor!

Nice!

~Nikola
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Review of Nobody Loves Me  
Review by Nikola
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as a judge for "What a Character! : Official WDC Contest"   by Writing.Com Support . Thanks for entering!

I enjoyed reading this! I related with the "middlers."

The description is wonderful! I loved that the "underdogs" won in the end. Someone finally showed them that they had value.

Nice!

~Nikola
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Review of Beast of Chicago  
Review by Nikola
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as a judge for "What a Character! : Official WDC Contest"   by Writing.Com Support . Thanks for entering!

This is a really interesting read! I wonder how the real person would perceive it.

I've never heard of the Beast of Chicago but now I will have to read up on him. I love true crime as well as crime fiction.

This read as a real life entry. I felt I was in the mind of this madman.

Well done!

~Nikola
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Review by Nikola
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as a judge for "What a Character! : Official WDC Contest"   by Writing.Com Support . Thanks for entering!

This entry is a great way to help civilians better understand what our military goes through. Thank you for your service!

I was relieved that the patrol all made it back on this mission.

~Nikola
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Review of AN EXTRA VIKING  
Review by Nikola
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as a judge for "What a Character! : Official WDC Contest"   by Writing.Com Support . Thanks for entering!

Sounds like someone has had some experience with working as a movie extra! The detail in this is wonderful!

I like how the action is explained blow by blow so that readers understand what being an extra entails.

Nice!

~Nikola
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Review of A Dark Art  
Review by Nikola
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as a judge for "What a Character! : Official WDC Contest"   by Writing.Com Support . Thanks for entering!

This is perfectly creepy! The narrator is so calm in his explaining of his art. It's as if he's discussing "normal" subjects. He would be perfect for an episode of Criminal Minds!

Nice!

~Nikola
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Review by Nikola
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as a judge for "What a Character! : Official WDC Contest"   by Writing.Com Support . Thanks fro entering!

I like this. It's personable and feels as if the narrator is talking directly to the reader.

Description is wonderful and adds so much texture to the story.

Read the first paragraph again. Wouldn't the first several sentences be ended with questions marks? Isn't the narrator asking questions here?
See what you think.

~Nikola



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Review of Introducing Falco  
Review by Nikola
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as a judge for "What a Character! : Official WDC Contest"   by Writing.Com Support . Thanks for entering!

I really like this! Though the narrator tries to remain aloof and cold to humankind, he lets humanity peek through. The references to Nayera and
Midnight Sun. He also shows appreciation for nature.
Falco's tale leaves just enough hanging that the readers will want to know more about him and his life.

One thing: consider leaving an extra space between paragraphs. It makes so much easier on your readers' eyes.

~NIkola
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Review of STARMAN  
Review by Nikola
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as a judge for "What a Character! : Official WDC Contest"   by Writing.Com Support . Thanks for entering!

This had me a little confused. What was the truth Starman was to reveal? Most folks know that celebrities (though not all of them) tend toward drug and/or alcohol abuse, broken marriages and living with other people. I was expecting a major bombshell.

I love music. Musicians are a lot like writers. They tend to feel the world more, I think. This would also make them more descriptive. Adding
description and more depth to his story would really draw your readers in.

Keep at it!

~Nikola
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Review of My name is Nate  
Review by Nikola
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as a judge for "What a Character! : Official WDC Contest"   by Writing.Com Support . Thanks for entering!

I like where you are going with this. At times, it is confusing to read. With more description and explanation into the character, I think this would
be a good, and really fun, piece.

~Nikola
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Review by Nikola
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as a judge for "What a Character! : Official WDC Contest"   by Writing.Com Support . Thanks for entering!

This is well written! The narrator draws in your readers and hold their attention throughout. The flow is great as is the description used.
One can't help but feel for this poor guy.

Nice!

~Nikola
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Review by Nikola
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as a judge for "What a Character! : Official WDC Contest"   by Writing.Com Support . Thanks for entering!

I think this has some real potential. It feels rushed. I didn't feel the confusion and frustration Patrick should have been feeling.
While I would agree with there being no family or friends, with his line of work, I would think that he would be well protected.
He would know things that the general public, including hospital staff, shouldn't be privy to.

Slowly revealing his discoveries will keep readers in suspense. They will stay with this and want to know what memories slowly surface.

Write on!

~Nikola
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Review of I Am Jill  
Review by Nikola
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as a judge for "What a Character! : Official WDC Contest"   by Writing.Com Support . Thanks for entering!

I would have loved to read more in-depth. Utilize descriptive words, not only for the physical but the emotional as well.
This will help your readers to connect.
There is so much emotion here to be tapped.

Keep writing!

~Nikola
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Review of Wanted  
Review by Nikola
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as a judge for "What a Character! : Official WDC Contest"   by Writing.Com Support . Thanks for entering!

This was suspenseful and powerful. Holy crap! I was glued to the page.

The dialogue propels this story forward nicely. Word choice is great. I could practically taste the tension.

I was destroyed by the ending. My heart went out to the detective.

Nice!

~Nikola
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Review by Nikola
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as a judge for "What a Character! : Official WDC Contest"   by Writing.Com Support . Thanks for entering!

I couldn't imagine giving up food! Who knows what future times will bring.

Adel is engaging while remaining business-like. She relates life in her time well. I can understand and envision life as
she describes it.

Nice!

~Nikola
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Review of The Alpha Lights  
Review by Nikola
In affiliation with The Writer's Cramp Judges ...  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophurky . Thanks for entering!

*Laugh* What a great poem! From beginning to end, I was enthralled.

This piece flows well. The words bring to life humor, characters, and setting.

I enjoyed reading this!

~Nikola
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Review by Nikola
In affiliation with The Writer's Cramp Judges ...  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophurky . Thanks for entering!

I love the word picture that is painted here! The senses are called forth as I read.

The poem flows well and, as mentioned, the words are well chosen.

I was a little unclear on the "Never say never" part but that may be intended. Sometimes poetry leaves us to our own interpretations.

Nice!

~Nikola
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Review by Nikola
In affiliation with The Writer's Cramp Judges ...  
Rated: E | (4.5)
HI!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophurky . Thanks for entering!

This story reads like an adventure I would face!*Laugh* The lesson here to ask for verification before paying up.

This flows well and the dialogue is good. I like the first person narrative. Word choice enhances the tale.

Comments:

Our road *boarders a white water babbling brook.
*borders


I enjoyed this!

~Nikola
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Review of The Wish  
Review by Nikola
In affiliation with The Writer's Cramp Judges ...  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophurky . Thanks for entering!

What most of us would give to go back in time and make changes for the better! I think this story will speak to all of your readers!

This flows well. The thoughts of Terran as well as dialogue between she and Eva show the story in a way that's personable. Frank comes
across as the jerk that he is.

Nice!

~Nikola
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Review by Nikola
In affiliation with The Writer's Cramp Judges ...  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophurky . Thanks for entering!

I love this take on the prompt! It is fun and imaginative.

The story winds easily to its end where any questions the reader might have are answered. I had several different scenarios in mind
as to what was going on with Cinderella. None of my thoughts were correct. That's a good thing because it gave me a surprise at the end.

Dialogue and the characters are great.

Nice!

~Nikola
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Review of Songbirds in Snow  
Review by Nikola
In affiliation with The Writer's Cramp Judges ...  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophurky . Thanks for entering!

The boss, and his wife, must be extremely powerful to have such connections! Scary!

I could feel the desperation in the words and thoughts of the narrator. The description and flow of the story are well done.

One thing: On it were three lines
This should read "two" lines.

Nice work!

~Nikola
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Review of Blue  
Review by Nikola
In affiliation with The Writer's Cramp Judges ...  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
HI!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophurky . Thanks for entering!

This is intriguing! Poor, ordinary Fred! Of all the interesting things to happen in his life.

This flows well and is told in an engaging fashion. It drives home repeatedly that Fred is just a simple, honest guy then you hit
your readers with the twist. Nice!

Two things you might want to consider: making your font a little larger and leaving a space between paragraphs. This will
make it easier to read.

~Nikola
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Review of She Knows  
Review by Nikola
In affiliation with The Writer's Cramp Judges ...  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophurky . Thanks for entering!

I really like this! The set up leads to the conclusion in such a way that held my attention.

Your characters and dialogue are believable. Your description allows readers to see your story.

Nice work!

~Nikola
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Review of Discretion  
Review by Nikola
In affiliation with The Writer's Cramp Judges ...  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophurky . Thanks for entering!

I like that this entry is told from the view of someone other than the "victim" and in such a way as the narrator attempted to help
poor Jill.

This flows nicely and the rhythm enhanced the humor.

Nice!

~Nikola
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Review of My Moment of Fame  
Review by Nikola
In affiliation with The Writer's Cramp Judges ...  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophurky . Thanks for entering!

*Laugh*I wonder how many of us have had similar things happen to us. Thank goodness my "glory days" were long before
social media!

This is fun! I was laughing from beginning to end. It flows well and the words are well chosen for maximum effect.

Nice!

~Nikola
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