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Review of Stooge Dot Net  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

I loved this! What fun! Choosing the Stooges as your intended recipient as well as the inadvertent recipient is priceless!

Your word choice makes this piece a fun read. It flowed well and I saw nothing out of kilter.

Nice!

~Nikola


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Review of Two Parachutists  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

What an adventure these two took the city through! Being a "why" person, I wondered what they were doing in the first place. Thrill seekers? Terrorists? I'll go with the first since the tone of the poem is light. *Wink*

This poem flowed nicely and the word choice added to the light-hearted feel of it.

Fun read!

~Nikola


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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

It's always so difficult to lose a loved one, especially in a sudden manner. I've been there. It is a fact of life but still a hard thing to deal with.

I like how you showed the different ways that two people grieved. The descriptions of memories is nice.

There were a few words that were out of place. Once or twice I noticed tense changes.
For impact, why not choose one or two vivid memories to share with your readers? I feel it would add more impact to this piece.

~Nikola



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Review of Bookends  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

I love the bookstore setting and especially the quiet spot in which to enjoy it. I think I would be camped out all the time!

This is a good scene between two people once in a relationship. I have to admit I wanted more. I wanted more detail on why it went south in the first place.

The description is good and the dialogue is believable. The awkwardness came acorss well.

~Nikola


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Review of Hazardous Brother  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

I really don't think Travis is all that smart. Smart folks don't text and drive!

I see two themes when I read this. One, a moral about said texting and driving. Two, a sibling lost in the shadow of her parents' favorite child. Both, to me, were heartbreaking.

Your narrator's voice is wonderful! She is engaging and has a sense of humor which I imagine kept her sane more than once. The story flow is nice.

Great work!

~Nikola


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Review of I, Zombie  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

I like that you put words to a zombie's thoughts. I never considered them to be anything but mindless brain-eaters!*Laugh*

Your choice of words brought across your point well. I smiled and I also thought about how awful it would be to be in that state.
Flow is nice.

Well done!

~Nikola


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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

While I read this I thought of my cousin. She was an absent mother to a wonderful daughter. She constantly made promises that she didn't keep. Her daughter is now married with a child of her own. While she has forgiven her mother, she is still wary of her promises.

This story brought to life the pain of the child for your readers. The words you chose easily helped your readers to be part of the story. It flows nicely right up until the conclusion. (I was proud of your character for making the decision that she did!)

Nice!

~Nikola


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Review of Sugar  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

Love it! As addicted to sugar as we are, it would come down to downright ugliness if the powers that be took that away. The high taxes on sugared items causes me to think of the cities that have considered measures on soft drinks.

The song lyric was something my dad used to sing all the time. It brought back warm memories that aren't sugar related.*Smile*

Well written. The story moves along with no skips right to the triumphant victory of the people.

~Nikola


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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I'm reviewing your item as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

I relate with this poem. So little in this world makes sense nowadays. I can see the lines of tearing down churches to build parking lots both literally and metaphorically. Either way, it's a sad tribute to the way society tends to view life.

This is well written and gets your point across nicely. Your word choice enhances that as well as the flow.

Nice work!

~Nikola


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Review of Cake to Die For  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

This is an interesting take on the prompt. I never would have considered a different dimension. I wonder why her body won't work in the dimension that she finds herself in.

Your description is nice and helps your readers to envision your story. The dialogue moves the tale along well.

Nice!

~Nikola


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi!

You reviewed a piece of mine on December 16, 2008. Although late, I wanted to repay the favor.

After many years of wandering lost, I'm finally coming back into the Christian fold. The folder that I found this piece in caught my attention as did this story.

This story left me with a sense of hope for the human race. If a man such as this could find it in his heart to change, we all can.
I like the pay it forward message here. If we all lived in such a manner this world would be a much better place!

Well written. This flows nicely and tells the story in its entirety right up to how the banker's deed paid itself forward.

One comment:
In the first sentence, did you mean "hardcore?'

I found nothing else out of kilter. A nice read!

~Nikola


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Review of Dead and Gone  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi!

I saw this on the Shameless Plug Page and thought I'd check it out.

This was a fun read. I liked getting the guy's view on this "fun" little slice of the old west. There were several times I was laughing. Loved the bad guy in the Yankees cap (what other team would a bad guy be wearing?)
It seems like the narrator and his honey have seen all there is to see in one day, yet she's booked it for a week. I wonder what other "adventures" there are to be had.

Comments:

Fun fact: speakers were poorly wired 1820.
*in 1820

Fun Fact: saloons in the Old West were evacuated whenever the pianist exploded
*Laugh*

~Nikola





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Review of Depression  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi again!

Once again the title grabbed me. I suffer from depression. Well, it was diagnosed as such at first but I actually have bipolar disorder, heavy on the depression. Mix that with panic attacks and you have a doozy!

At first I would have thought the lines could be broken up and more uniform. Then I realized that the thought process of someone with depression resembles this.

You describe everything from the feeling, or lack thereof, to the reactions of loved ones. It is so hard to help them understand. Words don't do it justice.

Heartfelt and so very real.

~Nikola


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi There!

I saw this on the Shameless Plug Page and it caught my attention.

I'm a southern gal as well and could relate to this piece so well. Like weddings, funerals don't always go as planned. We had just finished up the graveside service for my uncle last year when my sister tripped over another relatives stone and went kerplat! Life, and death, are just that way.

Some comments:

So digging, actually really being an archeologists because my Aunt's threw nothing away.
This doesn't quite make sense.

lookin'indecent."
Run together.


I got at the funeral home

"Arrived at" or "got to."

Here's a list. You will need someone for music or we could use the boom box. I looked at him quizzing, "Why would I need a boom box, pray tell?"{/c
Quotation marks at the beginning. Perhaps "quizzically" rather than "quizzing?"

All in all I enjoyed reading this since I can relate so easily.

~Nikola



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Review of No Trespasing  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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I'm reviewing your entry as the judge for "Top Hat's First Blizzard on Christmas"   by Lesley Scott . Thanks for entering!

I really like this story! It has a different take on the "no trespassing" sign and the meaning behind it.

I like the way that you switched between characters in order for your readers to follow each separately yet it is part of the whole.

The flow and action is nicely done. I like the way you left your readers hanging--not knowing whether Tasha would tell the truth or a lie.

I found nothing out of kilter. Nice work!

~Nikola


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Review of The Chosen One  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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I'm reviewing your entry as the judge for "Top Hat's First Blizzard on Christmas"   by Lesley Scott . Thanks for entering!

You had me right until the end of this! I was thinking in terms of fantasy and you dealt me drama and mystery. Nice!

This is well thought out. You lead your readers through Raimey's mind and his quest in a way that, when the truth comes out, they are (or should be) surprised.

And, I'll admit, you had me til the end. I thought the Great Beast was a polar bear!

Excellent!

~Nikola


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Rated: E | (3.5)
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I'm reviewing your entry as the judge for "Top Hat's First Blizzard on Christmas"   by Lesley Scott . Thanks for entering!

A mystery! I wonder who the girl was, how long she'd been missing, and who had left her there. You told your story in entirety and left the reader to ponder these questions.

I like the idea of the story. The plot was good and flowed well. However, I just couldn't believe the dialogue. How old were the boys? The way they spoke sounded too adult at times and not really as friends would talk to one another.


Comments:
They looked up and down the access road before slipped into the woods.Either "before they slipped into the woods" or "before slipping into the woods."

Nice!

~Nikola



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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

I love music! I'm way past my teens but I still remember the feeling when I went to a concert then. I still go but the teenaged crush is gone. The music still takes me out of myself.

I guess what I'm telling you is that I can relate to your words. That's a good thing! You want your readers to feel.
Your description moves your story along with the frenetic pace of a teen girl's mind. I could feel her excitement. I could smell the smells of the concert.

Nice!

~Nikola


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Review of The Cottage  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

Wow! Now that's quite a twist on the prompt! I can sympathize with Maggie. I wouldn't want to go back to the city either. I don't think I'd take quite a permanent approach though.*Wink*

Tom's reaction kinda surprised me. He seemed more angry than grief-stricken. Perhaps his way of dealing with that grief? Either way, it's tragic.

One thing that I questioned: Why would a city boy have a shotgun? I could buy a handgun but shot guns seem to be more of a country boy weapon.

Nice work!

~Nikola


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Review of The Cloud Demons  
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

This is ominous! Kinda reminds me of spring in Oklahoma! *Wink*

I love the choice of words. The poem builds as a storm would. Even the shape of the poem looks like building storm clouds.

One comment: base drum should be bass.

Nice!

~Nikola


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Review of The Muddy Feet  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

This is a cute children's tale. It relates that even the one who would rather goof off than participate can still solve the band's boot problem.

This was a fun read. One thing to remember, bold the prompt words for the judge. It technically disqualifies your entry.*Frown*

~Nikola


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Review of Autumn Forecast  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

I love poetry about nature, especially the changing of the seasons. I always look forward to autumn after a hot summer!*Smile*

This poem flows nicely. As I read, I saw the sights and heard the sounds of the geese. I could feel the change of season. This is exactly what poetry should do.

Nice work!

~Nikola


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Review of The Fence  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

Now that's something you don't see everyday! I have to admit that I envisioned Frankenfurter's castle blasting off at the end of The Rocky Horror Picture Show!

It's enough to make one rethink about their choice to live in the country. Then again. folks in the country often see strange things.

Love you description! It's colorful and helps your reader to experience it more fully.

I enjoyed your story!

~Nikola



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Review of Nature of Wrens  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

I like this take on the reasoning of the fence! Of course the wrens would love it. A new perch is always appreciated by our feathered friends.{e:smile]

I love that, instead of taking this new eyesore personally, the narrator would focus on something positive.

Love this!

~Nikola


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Review of Strange as Can Be  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge in "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

I love the rhyme and how it moves the poem along. This flows well.

Sounds like a strange awakening for the narrator. I wonder what the next move was in this encounter. Oh, the possibilities!

Nice!

~Nikola


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