I really enjoyed your little piece. It has a positive and interesting sentiment. And that is a good thing. Sadly, there are so many grammatical errors, it makes it very hard to read, or to even concentrate on the actual message of the piece. I think you can do a better job than this. Good luck with all of your writing.
PS - If you clean this up, I will be happy to come back and re-rate it. It does have possibilities.