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I like to give friendly advice that I hope will help, not harm.
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I enjoy picking out spelling mistakes. Bad punctuation also bothers me.
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Fiction
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poetry, fan fiction, fantasy, anything erotic or about death, gay or lesbian
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flash fiction, short stories
Least Favorite Item Types
long stories, novels, poems, lyrics. I don't write them so I don't feel as though I can review them.
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Anything erotic or with cruelty to people or animals. I will not review anything dealing with the gay/lesbian lifestyle.
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Review of The Semicolon  
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Point well taken. Or should I say, semicolon well put. I guess I am not comfortable enough using it, although I am sure there are times I should or could.

Love that quote from MLK. And as the article states, each clause builds to the end. And putting a period at the end of each would deflate the building rage.

Good article. Good argument!

Thanks for sharing. I will now definitely reconsider the usage of the lowly semicolon.

Queen Normajean - always ready to learn. *Crown* I just wish the scribe in the kingdom would listen to me.


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In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Ahhhh......fireflies. I used to collect them in jars and take them to bed to watch at night. Every so often one would crush and the glowing cells would collect on my fingers. Amazing little creatures. We don't have them in Montana. *Sad*

Thank you for a nice little glimpse backward to a childhood memory of humid Ohio nights.


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Review of On The Write Path  
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
"I don't like the drama that surrounds drunks like a funeral-shroud." What a great line and image is that!! You definitely get my mind going off in different directions, Kare.

45 degrees this morning in Roundup. I'm freezing. My hubby said, 'Don't turn on the heat.' My response, 'DUH! It's August.' How did he know I was thinking of doing that?

The Queen is off to find a mink blanket to keep herself warm. *Crown*


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Review of Imposing Memories  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Great story. I love the images. You wrote a wonderful, emotional tale. Thank you.

I saw no glaring errors in spelling or grammar to criticize.


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In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Ha! Better than the candidates we have for President. I'd vote for one of them. 4 stars just for the timeliness.


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Review of Toe in the Water  
for entry "Prompts and All That" 
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Very well said. I find the multi-word prompts discouraging at times. But then sometimes they are the nudge I need and the story just flows.

If you are truly a great storyteller, just one word can get you going in many directions. All you needed that day was that one verb or noun and off you go.

Thanks for a great little article!


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Review of Research Cramping  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Fun little poem like essay. I liked it. No criticisms from me.


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In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (1.0)
I wish I could review this, but it's in a language I don't recognize.


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Review of Toe in the Water  
for entry "Google that!" 
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
You made me click.


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In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Fun! Even better that it's from real life. You did miss a spelling, though. Cheten or Chetan? Invigilator - new word for me! Never heard that term before. Filing it away for future use.

Good job - hope you win!


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for entry "Redundant" 
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I am reviewing your blog on behalf of The Talent Pond. I sure do understand 'Forks in the Road'. I've had so many forks in the road in my life I could set a table for eight. But like you, I have few regrets about the choices I made in the past. They led me to the life I lead today. All the way I can see the hand of one greater than I leading. I am a Christian and I know God had led me all the way.

I don't really have any criticisms of your writing style. Perhaps I would tighten up the lines, make the paragraphs more cohesive, instead of one line below the other. But that is no real big deal in this sort of venue.

Thanks for letting me into your life.

Queen Norma Jean of the Grneyes *Crown*
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Review of Above the Fold  
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
b} Hello flyfishercacher ! I am reviewing your story 'Above the Fold', which is a great title, by the way, but I digress, for The Talent Pond.

My Thoughts: I can feel myself in the newspaper office, feel the heat. You gave us the smell, the angst of not being a favored reporter. I am moved along in the story and was surprised at the end.

My Favorite Part: Actually two - the title and the ending. The title is perfect and the ending is unexpected.

My Suggestions: You had some grammar errors, and here, the world; where a reporter separate into two sentences. Lose the semicolon. Again here, put the junk in his basket; she didn’t like him.perhaps not use the semicolon. I would separate the sentence. she didn't like him. could stand alone. I think that would help this read better.

So those are my suggestions. This is a good story. Good action, leads me along from start to finish. Good ending. Best of luck in the contest.

Keep Calm and Write On!!

Norma Jean Queen of Grneyes *Crown*

"Writing is magic, as much the water of life as any other creative art. The water is free. So drink." Stephen King





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In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (3.0)
Kind of fun - but I got confused. Is it Bella or Belle? And then Prince Omar or Mr. Amari? Maybe I missed that part of the story.
This reads like one of those pulp fiction stories. Fast and dirty. Was that the intent? There were some misspelled words and some problems with punctuation, but since this is entered into a contest, those are items you'll need to work on after judging in my opinion.

Good luck in the contest.

Queen Norma Jean. *Crown*


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In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello BEAR ! I am reviewing 'Lookout the Moose' on behalf of The Talent Pond.

My Thoughts: You state this is a children's story about a moose looking for friends. I thought it was fun.

My Favorite Part: When the moose starts to believe that his name is actually 'Lookout'. And then you use that in the story effectively.

My Suggestions: I would go through this with a new eye and get rid of most of the 'and' in the story. There are times you could get rid of that word and it would read a lot better. There are a quite a few spelling errors, as well as grammar errors.

In my opinion, the entire paragraph about the fire station is too long for a child's attention. Maybe think about making that shorter.

Then there is this line: The little girl looked up at Lookout, while hugging her dog; sitting on the ground = is one example. Confusing to me. Who or what is sitting on the ground? Perhaps reword like this: A little girl sat on the ground hugging her dog as she looked up at Lookout. Just an idea.

So, those are my thoughts. You have your own style. This is a fun idea and does have some potential.

Keep Calm and Write On!!

Norma Jean Queen of Grneyes *Crown*

"Writing is magic, as much the water of life as any other creative art. The water is free. So drink." Stephen King





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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Love the story - l one the involvement of a WDC member - love the joke - love the grammar lesson.

Love it!

Queen Norma Jean *Crown* of the greeneyes kingdom


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In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello 'Happy to Write'. I am reviewing 'My Birthday Balloon' on behalf of 'The Talent Pond'. Your poem is very informal. I don't see any rhyme scheme.

I can see by the poem that this balloon was special to you, it was a fun gift. I do see some problems with punctuation, however. But then again, perhaps that is your style. Perhaps you meant to leave out commas on purpose.

I'm not sure if there is any other reason for your poem but telling us about the sheer enjoyment of receiving a purple balloon for your birthday. And if that is the only reason, then fine. So be it! Celebrate it! Use exclamation points!

Thank you for letting me read your poem.

Queen Norma Jean *Crown* of everything greeneyes


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Review of Wasted Talent  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello my friend Angus ! Your little flash fiction tale, 'Wasted Talent', is being reviewed on behalf of 'The Talent Pond'.

My Thoughts: Well, I was confused by the term, 'His art teacher was a fair lady'. Does that mean she was 'fair of face'? or 'fair in treating'?

My Favorite Part: The young man's effort to please. Every artist's effort identified in those two sentences just to have his hopes dashed by the critic.

My Suggestions: Perhaps giving the characters names would help me identify more with the struggle. Right now it seems too impersonal, kind of like the teacher and her criticism.

Keep Calm and Write On!!

Norma Jean Queen of Grneyes *Crown*

"Writing is magic, as much the water of life as any other creative art. The water is free. So drink." Stephen King





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Review of Toe in the Water  
for entry "Summery Thoughts" 
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Ah yes, the wonderful checkups. I can sympathize. I am in pretty good shape for the decade I will leave next year, except for an annual neurologist check. At that check I have an MRI to make sure no weird goings on are happening in my brain. I think it is to make sure there are still parts of that still there after two surgeries. But the best part is the actual MRI. I enjoy the half hour nap with the clangs and bangs and whirls. They always ask me if I want music and what kind. I always say no and the reaction is always the same. Total disbelief. What? Nothing to mask the noise? Nothing to block out the mysterious goings on? Nope, just the headphones. After all, it's just a few moments between me and God. We talk, He listens. Then I'm good for another year.

Getting old is not for the weak. And definitely not for the faint of heart. Here's to another good checkup. May many more be in your future!


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Review of Naming Colors  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello flyfishercacher ! I am reviewing your piece on behalf of The Talent Pond. I remember this challenge about colors.

My Thoughts:I think the reference you made about a simpler answer is a good one. Everyone always tries to make things harder than they are. Blue to one person is not blue to another. Think of people who are color blind. How do you describe the blue of a bluebird or the blue of a summer sky in Montana? Impossible. I recently had cataract surgery. It was like a yellow film was removed and suddenly everything was brighter, clearer. Colors, I think, are an individual idea.


My Favorite Part: Your last line.

My Suggestions: I have the idea for a good color name thesaurus - the paint chips at the hardware store. Have you ever looked at the names? Dozens of names for every shade of green, blue, red, yellow, orange, and purple your little heart desires.
And they are free! I'll be waiting for my 1,000 gift points for that tip.

Thanks for the read.

Keep Calm and Write On!!

Norma Jean Queen of Grneyes *Crown*

"Writing is magic, as much the water of life as any other creative art. The water is free. So drink." Stephen King





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Review of The Party's Over  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
So, turn around is fair play. I'll never forget this day either. I was in Ohio, my husband-to-be, whom I had just met, was in Chicago for work. He woke me that morning with a phone call. "I'm all right."

"That's great. Glad to hear it."

"Do you know what's going on? Turn on the TV."

Our lives all changed that day.

And now, in this craziness, our lives are changing again. The year 2020 will also be remembered. Where we were, what we were doing when all the world went mad.


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Review of Mouse Code  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Ned ! I am reviewing your story on behalf of The Talent Pond.

My Thoughts: I liked this little tale of the adventure in the lab. It showed some imagination.

My Favorite Part: The pun at the end and the title.

My Suggestions: I would go through this and tighten up some of the comma usage. There are times where you use a comma where a period would be a better idea. But maybe that is your style. So, those are my ideas, take them or leave them. Everyone has their own style. Thank you for letting me read this fun story!

Keep Calm and Write On!!

Norma Jean Queen of Grneyes *Crown*

"Writing is magic, as much the water of life as any other creative art. The water is free. So drink." Stephen King





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In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Happy Earth Day 2024! ! I am reviewing this story on behalf of The Talent Pond.

My Thoughts: This is a little story of two very different friends. I love the cooperation between the two as they help each other.

My Favorite Part: The charming illustration of the ladybug and dragonfly.

My Suggestions: This line: watch out for one another shouting out warnings : seems to be awkward. Perhaps a reword with a comma or making another different sentence would help break that up.

As always, this review is just my opinion. Everyone has their own style. I liked this little children's story. It could make a lovely little picture book. I think a book with just illustrations, not photos, would be the way to go.

Keep Calm and Write On!!

Norma Jean Queen of Grneyes *Crown*

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In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for a kind remembrance.


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Review of Wake Up Mama!  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Somehow I knew that was the case with Mom. Only criticism I have is the use of Mom. Capital or not? You have it both ways - Mom and mom. I would decide which I would use and be consistent. Oh, and I think whisky is spelled 'whiskey'.

Sad for the kids, however. Heck of a deal but you know that happens all the time.

Keep Calm and Write On!
Queen Norma Jean *Crown*in Quarantine just a little while longer


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In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Fun. I like this! So anyone who wants to compare you to a weed, well. Weeds have found a way to adapt. They thrive and survive when coddled plants have a hard time.

Thank you for the read.


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