I also like to express my feelings through poetry. If you ever need help, don't be afraid to ask a trusted figure in your life.
Your poems leave room for the reader to use their imaginations in creating the context, just don't leave so much out that we are confused on what you are even trying to convey.
I really liked the hook you started with. "I only date astronauts" gets readers very interested right away. You had a few grammatical errors, but I think that just going through this you could find them.
One suggestion I have for you is the unnecessary information you gave us at the beginning. We do not need to know that he is six foot or a nerd. If you want to add this information, try doing it in the dialogue. To show that he is a nerd, do something like this:
"Is that an undertaking? You would date me if I got aboard an extraterrestrial vessel, and went to space?"
Izzie stared at him. "Dude, no one understands nerd. Talk normally."
A question I have for you is: How did Jonas know so quickly that they were terrorists? And how did all three get aboard the spaceship so easily?
Otherwise, I very much enjoyed this story, and the creativity put into it. Good job!
Hahaha, I love it! Very funny, and is very true! It is cool how you picked a very random topic, and were able to write such a funny poem about it. This 100% deserves 5 stars, well deserved. I have tried to write funny and creative poems, but I am not very good at it, so I stick with stories and serious poems. Thank you for bringing some laughter into my life today! :D
This has very strong symbolism. You speak about moving mountains, which is very powerful. By writing something like this, you are giving people a taste of what it means to be truly in love, and not in a toxic relationship. I love this piece of writing a lot.
I like this poem very much. It is relevant to everyone, not just a few specific people. It is short and to the point. I should use this to reflect on my own life, and whether or not I am using my moments the best I can. I regret not doing certain things, even though I didn't think I would when faced with them.
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