hi Darrin,
I agree with you completely.If the beginning fails to grab the reader's attention, it is very likely that reading will stop right there.You have shared all writer' dilemmas-to get that all important hook.
Here's one from Gyan Prakash's The Mythic City, from Mumbai Fables-it is just before two o'clock in the afternoon in April, the hottest month of the year. A tiny speck appears on a cloudless poona sky, moving steadily toward the Tower of silence, the funerary place where the Zoroastrians expose their dead to be consumed by birds of prey
Getting attention is right up there where it counts when you put your first line on paper.
Technically, your item was flawless.I'm glad you gave examples.
Sincerely,
nwriter
Hi Dan,
That was a simple, honest story told in an endearing way. Very inspiring.As someone said, aspire to inspire before you expire.
sincerely,
nwriter
Hi April,
You have a way with adjectives.The only thing I feel is that the writing lacks tautness.The language is great.The characters promise to be interesting. I will definitely go through your other chapters.
sincerely,
nwriter
Hi April,
The prologue does make me want to read more.Wild imagination!Eternal premise-good versus evil.Would not know the outcome yet.
The word sentient beings caught my attention.According to Jain scriptures, living beings with five senses, are further divided into sentient as well as non-sentient.I had not heard of this word elsewhere, so was a bit surprised.In jain Scriptures humans are the sentient beings.I have heard of others in western literature, but do not know much about them.I guess your book would make inyteresting reading.
sincerely,
nwriter
I have rated it five because she had the courage to write about this.She did not repress her feelings. Writing leads to healing and then closure. It would be madness to lose faith in love because some men turned out to be cads.I have been married to my husband since 1979. I freelance. I keep my own money. Because I'm in India, as per our culture, my husband and children pay all the bills. I spend a lot of my husband's money. So, yours is an alien situation. Please don't let it get you down, all men are not like that.
sincerely,
nwriter
hi Christina,
Wow! I know how difficult it is to show and not tell. That was heartrending.
Just a few days ago, I had participated in a yoga workshop. There was a Polish group attending it with me. So, when I saw the word Poland associated with your item, I clicked on it.
Why did this happen? We are told that such things happen because people who know better remain silent. If one witnesses something that is just not right, one should always speak up. I guess, we don't.
hi Joy,
that was very well explained.I'm just about to take part in the contest,'What A Character,' so, your advice will be most valuable.
Sincerely,
nwriter
Hi Kittymae,
I've rated you 5 because of the feelings expressed in the poem. I agree, relationships can be scary, specially when you believe in total commitment. You know that you have to make it work.
regards,
nwriter
Hi Galatea,
That was quite a read! It was a normal story, but told in a very different way. You seem to know the culture well. It was poignant and moving and best of all, no melodrama. I noticed that it had more romance than graphic descriptions of love.This is a good thing!
sincerely,
nita
hi,
That was very helpful.I'm in the middle of a narrative right now. Coincidentally, my story starts with a disturbance. Anyway, it was great reading you. I'm sure many aspiring scriptwriters will find this item useful.
Dear M-15,
That was a sweet little poem. mother's day has just happened, so guess it is kind of appropriate. My daughter-in-law aent me an sms which describes why a mother's job is the hardest. poetry like this makes up for it.
regards
nwriter
hi,
I'm writing a story at the moment and I feel the same way as you do. I too agree that adverbs were made to be used together with adjectives.Why restrict yourself?
Well-done, it was a very thought provoking poem.In India we have another saying that means the same, Let the dogs bark, the elephant doesn't care, it just goes on.
I'm a web content writer, so I found your story really informative.When i write webcontent, i actually keep the subject in mind and then the keywords.This really helps.I will definitely go through the websites you have referred to.
Hi,
I would have given you 5 stars if Michael jackson was still living.
As a piece of writing, it was perfect. It is not easy to get your point across only with dialogues, but you did it rather well.
hi,
that was a very good effort to organize your thoughts-you are brave!now sleep on this and then after some days, you will have a new directon. you have taken the very important first step, of execution, putting the words down. that seems self evident,but it is not. i myself find it difficult to physically put words down on paper.just sitting down and writing is the mark of a professional.
regards,
nwriter
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