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Review by Nwriter
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi,
You are so right.The writing is so clear on the wall, but still people don't see it.I mean why/He does not want-you are better off without him.

You know, for me as an Indian woman, this is not really an issue.generally indian men look for marriage.Even then, why should a successful woman want to validate her ecistence through a man?

A well written piece that is tightly focussed and makes the point well.

Sincerely,
Nwriter
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Review of Still Here  
Review by Nwriter
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Fyn,
I am reviewing after a long time. Did you experience this, or was it imagination?

Sometimes we don' t always realise our true treasures. It was a very sweet story. The pathos was palpable.

A lot of hope, courage and optimism.

Very positive. Glad I read it.

Sincerely
nwriter
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Review by Nwriter
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Simi,
That was a very lucid description of Holi.You described it well.I guess like all Indians, your English is faultless.

I looked up festivals because I am doing a project on Sikh and Parsi festivals.I came across this and decided to review it.

write on-
sincerely,
nwriter
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Review of Writing that Hook  
Review by Nwriter
Rated: E | (4.0)
hi Darrin,
I agree with you completely.If the beginning fails to grab the reader's attention, it is very likely that reading will stop right there.You have shared all writer' dilemmas-to get that all important hook.
Here's one from Gyan Prakash's The Mythic City, from Mumbai Fables-it is just before two o'clock in the afternoon in April, the hottest month of the year. A tiny speck appears on a cloudless poona sky, moving steadily toward the Tower of silence, the funerary place where the Zoroastrians expose their dead to be consumed by birds of prey
Getting attention is right up there where it counts when you put your first line on paper.
Technically, your item was flawless.I'm glad you gave examples.
Sincerely,
nwriter
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Review of The House Elf  
Review by Nwriter
Rated: E | (3.5)
Well it sounds to good to be true.It was quite entertaining, though predictable.
Language was perfect.
nwriter
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Review of The Wager.  
Review by Nwriter
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Dan,
That was a simple, honest story told in an endearing way. Very inspiring.As someone said, aspire to inspire before you expire.
sincerely,
nwriter
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for entry "Chapter One
Review by Nwriter
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi April,
You have a way with adjectives.The only thing I feel is that the writing lacks tautness.The language is great.The characters promise to be interesting. I will definitely go through your other chapters.
sincerely,
nwriter
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for entry "Prologue
Review by Nwriter
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi April,
The prologue does make me want to read more.Wild imagination!Eternal premise-good versus evil.Would not know the outcome yet.
The word sentient beings caught my attention.According to Jain scriptures, living beings with five senses, are further divided into sentient as well as non-sentient.I had not heard of this word elsewhere, so was a bit surprised.In jain Scriptures humans are the sentient beings.I have heard of others in western literature, but do not know much about them.I guess your book would make inyteresting reading.
sincerely,
nwriter
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Review by Nwriter
Rated: E | (5.0)
I have rated it five because she had the courage to write about this.She did not repress her feelings. Writing leads to healing and then closure. It would be madness to lose faith in love because some men turned out to be cads.I have been married to my husband since 1979. I freelance. I keep my own money. Because I'm in India, as per our culture, my husband and children pay all the bills. I spend a lot of my husband's money. So, yours is an alien situation. Please don't let it get you down, all men are not like that.
sincerely,
nwriter
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Review of The Pit  
Review by Nwriter
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
hi Christina,
Wow! I know how difficult it is to show and not tell. That was heartrending.

Just a few days ago, I had participated in a yoga workshop. There was a Polish group attending it with me. So, when I saw the word Poland associated with your item, I clicked on it.

Why did this happen? We are told that such things happen because people who know better remain silent. If one witnesses something that is just not right, one should always speak up. I guess, we don't.

nwriter@writing.com
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Review by Nwriter
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
hi Joy,
that was very well explained.I'm just about to take part in the contest,'What A Character,' so, your advice will be most valuable.
Sincerely,
nwriter
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Review by Nwriter
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Kittymae,
I've rated you 5 because of the feelings expressed in the poem. I agree, relationships can be scary, specially when you believe in total commitment. You know that you have to make it work.
regards,
nwriter
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Review of Talofa  
Review by Nwriter
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Galatea,
That was quite a read! It was a normal story, but told in a very different way. You seem to know the culture well. It was poignant and moving and best of all, no melodrama. I noticed that it had more romance than graphic descriptions of love.This is a good thing!
sincerely,
nita
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Review by Nwriter
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
hi,
It was funny. Making people laugh is serious business. keep it up.
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Review by Nwriter
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
hi,
That was very helpful.I'm in the middle of a narrative right now. Coincidentally, my story starts with a disturbance. Anyway, it was great reading you. I'm sure many aspiring scriptwriters will find this item useful.
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Review of A mother so dear  
Review by Nwriter
Rated: E | (4.0)
Dear M-15,
That was a sweet little poem. mother's day has just happened, so guess it is kind of appropriate. My daughter-in-law aent me an sms which describes why a mother's job is the hardest. poetry like this makes up for it.
regards
nwriter
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Review by Nwriter
Rated: E | (4.5)
hi,
I'm writing a story at the moment and I feel the same way as you do. I too agree that adverbs were made to be used together with adjectives.Why restrict yourself?
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Review by Nwriter
Rated: E | (4.0)
Well-done, it was a very thought provoking poem.In India we have another saying that means the same, Let the dogs bark, the elephant doesn't care, it just goes on.
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Review by Nwriter
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
It was hilarious.Writing for prompts always gets unpredictable results. It was very imaginative and I enjoyed reading it.
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Review by Nwriter
Rated: E | (4.5)
I'm a web content writer, so I found your story really informative.When i write webcontent, i actually keep the subject in mind and then the keywords.This really helps.I will definitely go through the websites you have referred to.
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Review by Nwriter
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi,
I would have given you 5 stars if Michael jackson was still living.
As a piece of writing, it was perfect. It is not easy to get your point across only with dialogues, but you did it rather well.
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Review by Nwriter
Rated: E | (3.5)
Short, but creates atmosphere.You can feel the excitement. Very different from other subjects.
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Review of Gentle Hands  
Review by Nwriter
Rated: E | (3.0)
hi Ken,
A good effort.
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Review of Judge me not  
Review by Nwriter
Rated: | (4.5)
I think that was stupendous for someone so young! Very perceptive, specially after having been on earth for only 17 years
Poetry is always difficult.
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Review of Tuckaseegee Park  
Review by Nwriter
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
A very incisive pice of writing.Also a very personal viewpoint.Reminded me of Jim Carrey giving a ride to a shelter less man in the movie 'yes Man'
sincerely,
nita
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