Well done Brimstone&chocolate. I like your writing style it's smooth and easy to read. I'd prefer if the paragraphs were separated, it makes it easierfo rme to read, but that's superficial. The story is very good. welcome to WDC and to the Fantasy Group. I started writing fantasy a few months ago and realized I really enjoy it. Once again, welcome to our world.
Wow! The writing is superb and flows so well. This is definitely something I look forward to reading. I just started writing fantasy and need all the inspiration I can get. Although I am a historian I tend to stay with the Roman era, but, I also delve a lot into Medieval history quite a bit. This story is right down my alley
An excellent story Julius. Only we can determine our fate, no other. Even if Frank died in that next assault, he died a man and not a coward. If he lived, he probably became a great father and leader of other men.
A beautiful little poem with a whole lot of meaning. I really enjoyed this. I am no poet, just dabble in it.
You are 100% right about WDC. I have written three of my 8 novels on WDC and find that it is inspirational and I have received wonderful (and not so wonderful) comments. Most of the people here are helpful and friendly.
A wonderful place to write and share.
P.S. We too often forget that moderators are writers too.
I think this was very cute and very well done. I just started writing fantasy and each time I read more, I want to write more. Thank you Amanda for sharing this cute story. The writing and transitions are smooth and the dialogue spot on.
Well done! I'm out to get a feeling for the medieval era fantasy that I am presently writing about. I know a lot about medieval warfare, weapons, clothing, etc. But not a lot about the women.
Need research and I find yours great.
Will read more.
Exactly how I feel about poets. If I enjoy reading their poetic efforts, that's good, don't ask me to break them down or describe them. I am not a poet, I dicker in poetry occasionally.
You have quite a portfolio here, I will mark you down as a favorite so I can return and dig for goodies.
Thanks for sharing.
Astonishingly good Bob. I just wrote my first story for the fantasy genre, and I find it fascinating. I thought about turning it into a novel but need to do some research first and read much more fantasy. I get the feeling that you already know more about fantasy than I will learn in a long time. If you get the chance, please check out "The Lone Traveler". It is a first attempt and needs editing. I noticed in your bio that you were born in July 46? I was born in March 46. Our fate is similar, you were in Nam 65-68? I was there 69 71. Back to basics. I was thinking along the same lines as you have written in this wonderful piece, my Analia is the heroine who saves the day, eventually, and she is a seed from wise faerie ancients.
Looking forward to reading many more of your items.
Oldwarrior. P.S. Most of my oil portraits are of American generals, Patton, and many others, plus several Command Sergeants Major. I have done some native American oils, but, I have fallen in love with the written word now and can's seem to get back to my oils.
Excellent job here, Timtu. Your rationalization is spot-on. I just happen to believe very similar to this concept, although, I find it hard not to back-slide to my Catholic and Native American beliefs. If God, the creator, cared as much for us as religious doctrine implies, why doesn't he/she/it interfere to prevent the miseries that humankind creates? Simple answer, we decide our fate... not some supreme being.
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