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Short stories.
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Review of Something Unknown  
Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I take it that 'Gas, gin and genies' were your prompt words. I'm glad you put in the line “Anyone have a dictionary?” because I was thinking the same when I read the victim's words.

You managed to show the scene in just 239 words. It would be interesting to see what you could have made of this without the word limit.


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Review of GI Turkey  
Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
War is hell, especially on the stomach. I have to say though, I have eaten NATO ration packs and they're not bad. I wrote a similar item about the lack of eggs in WWI. You could probably find some kind of wild meat locally that would be better than Spam.



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Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: E | (4.0)
You are so like me. You go to a new place and what is most important? Where will I eat? What will I eat? You have made me hungry.

I would have liked to see more of the place itself. I understand that you were there to work, but you had to walk down the street to each restaurant you feature. What did you see on the way?


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Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I have to say that I have never heard of Lydia Sigourney. I guess her work never made it across the pond. I see that you have premium membership and wonder if it would have been a good idea to include links to examples of her writings.

As a piece of writing, this is well put together. I like the way you have linked this biography to a family member as a way in. You are right about religion being used as a form of control. This was the case in UK right up to the 1960s.


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Review of Chapter One  
Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
More, more, more. You've got me hooked. Eric Calanthe, the writer with a secret. What is in that envelope? The not so holy Pastor Goode, using blackmail to gain a piece of valuable real estate.

In just one chapter these characters are known to us. We even have a glimpse of the mousey Mrs. Goode.


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Review of Holder  
Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
An interesting take on the prompt. The first part describes well what happens if you ride the slide. The second seems to be a flash back of how Jacob came to be in that predicament. I found it slightly confusing.

There are a few places that call for a comma. Read it out loud and you will soon spot them.


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Review of Along The Way...  
Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I don't normally review poetry but this sparked something in me. You get to a point in your life when what is history to one person is actually a record of your living it.

I have over the years been forced to leave things and people behind. I realise that my bucket list will never be completed. But the memories are still with me.


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Review of Untitled Story  
Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I will be interested to see how this story pans out. It is a good idea to leave spaces after each speaker. It makes reading from a screen easier. I see no other problems with spelling or grammar.

I have to ask - would an autistic person be capable of speaking to a large group? My grandson struggles with crowds.


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Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
A short but charming piece. More of a blog entry than a story. Watch out for those repeated words. You could build on this with stories of Nala's antics, the birth of the kittens, finding homes for them.

By the way, I do hope the kittens haven't been removed from their mother yet. They should be at least eight weeks before they leave home.


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Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
An interesting article with a personal touch. You relate your decision making process, with all it's twists and turns, in a manner that could be a conversation with a friend.

I have seen other articles on the subject which go on about 'meanings', cultural references etc. From one of those I learned that 'combine harvester' is a girls name. Who knew?


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Review of A Summer Quest  
Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
That little adventure was way too short. He's with Grandma for six weeks. The treasure hunt lasted a few hours. Lloyd could have found it necessary to study the geology book to find the next clue. His hunt could be interrupted by meals and bedtime. The treasure could have been something which would lead to a lifelong interest.


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Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Where can I buy Gloppo? An interesting ad for a non-existent product(unless you know something I don't). Layout could be improved, colour, font etc.

Who is selling Gloppo? Which planet does it come from? Why is the pricing different in other parts of the galaxy? This could form the start of a sci-fi story.


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Review of Dad Holmes  
Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
The case of the missing peanut butter. Rebecca Brookes is on the case. Having interviewed the available suspects she came to the same conclusion. Elementary Mr. Holmes.

A nice little domestic drama. I see no problems with spelling or grammar. Not sure that peanut butter is good for squirrels though.


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Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
More 'tell' than 'show' but still a good story. I wonder if his prayers were answered? It sounds as though he lived a good life, so nurture overcame nature.

I see no problem with spelling or grammar. Try building on this with more description of his life.


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Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Not really my kind of story but fairly well told. For reading on screen it could do with more spacing. Use a new paragraph for each speaker. I see no problems with spelling or grammar.

I am glad to see a Newbie entering contests. That is a good way to make friends, get reviews, learn from other members of the community.


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Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Woops! Who's got it wrong? Joy, for smiling or Clara for saying not to? It seems the smile changed the Ambassador's mind, but what were the consequences for Joy?

There is no clear POV character here. I also spotted at least one typo; 'are' instead of 'our'.


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Review of First Lessons  
Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This is the sort of lesson kids should NOT be taught. However, you did a good job of relating it. You captured the father's accent, his harshness, and the boy's fear of getting it wrong.

There were a few mistakes. You need a comma after 'right hand', a missed speech mark before 'I take the time', a few other places that might benefit from a comma.

This is not enough to detract from the story itself. I hope this is written from your imagination and not from personal memories.


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Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (3.5)
This feels a little simplified. Give a feel of the streets he ran through. Describe the monsters, friend or foe. Add more depth to his feelings.

I get what your story is saying. As a senior citizen, my schooling was very much about learning facts so you could pass exams and conform to the norms of society. Hopefully that has changed.


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Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
A very insightful article. Written in 2013, the only changes have been for the better. You give plenty of detail, which could help anyone new to the site or even considering joining.

I see no problems with spelling or grammar. Keep on writing and encouraging.


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Review of January Meeting  
Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Well, it didn't take very long to get to know Marcus. Some people could find his love of trivia challenging. Although this is a complete story, it is also something which could grow. Already, we have moved on to February facts. And there's a whole year to work through.


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Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is so true. I have a mug with the legend 'I'm not overweight, I'm undertall'. I am happy when I see larger models, actors, popstars. So why does everyone on social media use filters to look thinner?

At 67, I really don't care about other people's opinion. I have the same figure I had aged eighteen. Live with it!


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Review of 452-8652  
Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
An unusual combination of short story and poetry. I take it from the bolded last line that this was a contest entry. We get to know Jade, but Elliot is left as a bit of an enigma. It used to be a flower in the lapel, or a rolled up paper; since when has blind dating been reduced to a number. So impersonal.


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Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
I think I married him. There are a lot of Kennys in this world. More tell than show, but an interesting life story. With a lot of work this would make a good novel. Use this as your outline, then expand each stage in Kenny's life into a chapter or two.


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Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
If only life was that easy. I can't even get my shopping delivered without photo ID. I thought hermits shut themselves away, not travelled the world. He sounds more like a fake than a fakir, conning his way through life. I know what he means about every day being a celebration. I've got to the stage in my life where I celebrate just waking up every day.


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Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
A good start, but flash fiction should tell a complete story, this doesn't. As a snippet of something much longer, I am intrigued as to where it is going. I see that you have listed it as sci-fi. Maybe a 'men in black' kind of thing? I worked as a temp for a while. Nothing so interesting happened to me.


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