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Welcome to WDC.
I hear an accent running through your story of the first day in 7th grade. I take it English is not your first language.
Plot and characterisation
The plot is simple. New class, running late, teenage embarrassment. You relay those feelings of uncertainty well. Liza is the typical teenager, just discovering the opposite sex but not sure what to do about it.
Spelling and grammar
There are a few typos. The grammar may not be 'right' but it displays Liza's accent well. Intentional or not it works. Maybe more paragraphs, especially for being read on line, would make this story easier to read.
A charming story from a young writer. Keep going, hone your skills, try some contests to stretch yourself. Don't be afraid to ask for help from us oldies.