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Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Lockdown has had an effect on everyone. Anyone on their own at this time is likely to talk to an imaginary friend. I'm on my own. My friend is the television. I shout out quiz answers, talk to characters, challenge opinions quite vocally sometimes.

Your dialogue makes sense. Thinking about the past can be a distraction from current reality. I must say though, any Brit old enough to remember Harold Wilson will have also lived through the three day week, power cuts, the miners' strike ...

We've been there, done that. We will get through this.


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Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Very interesting. This is undoubtedly the sort of first chapter that would attract attention. Placing your story in both Germany and USA gives you a lot of scope. It is not clear yet who the protagonist is to be. Is it the reporter, one of the cops, a family member or someone we haven't met yet? Don't leave it too long into the story to establish this.


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Review of That Chair There  
Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I see this is a first draft. I like what you have so far. If you are going for the rhyming thing you must stick to it. I like that you have a reprise - "That chair there. Let me think while I sit." Children like that.

This is probably for quite young children so would need illustration. How you would draw a chair that looks like a child I don't know. There are a few illustrators on WDC. Once you have your final words down, put a shout out on the newsfeed.


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Review of Grief  
Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
A nice little horror, without the usual gore. The required phrase probably should have been bolded for the contest. Was Charlie known to be a cross-dresser in life? Or are you saying that the woman changed places with Charlie? If he's been dead a while he must stink.


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Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I know that feeling of disappointment when plans change. Mark is a typical bloke, only interested in his game and his stomach. Covid put a stop to my plans. But, instead, I did my dream trip virtually.

I get a good sense of Mark and Janine. It seems Bitsy was the real winner.


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Review of The Face of Death  
Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with Dreamweaver Bar & Grill  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Obviously a flash fiction entry, this piece feels abbreviated. Talk about turning the tables! The 'victim' gets in first. Mickey is a real turncoat. One thing I struggle with. If Charlee is unconscious, how could she hear what Darlene said?

You fulfilled the prompt and the word limit with a story that could become a lot more.


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Review of Pit Stop  
Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Why do I get the feeling there is more to this story? I get the reason they are travelling. I'm not surprised by the argument. Is finding themselves in this backwater coincidence or divine providence?

This feels like an opening chapter. Kimberly has a story to tell. How/why did she die? Was she really the innocent Nicky believed her to be? Or did she have a dark side that led to her demise?


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Review of Desert Mirages  
Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with Dreamweaver Bar & Grill  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I could certainly feel the heat of the desert as Morty moved from office to diner. It took a while for me to realise that Marlena is a co-worker. Obviously attracted to her, I'm glad he finally realised she was not to be trusted.

The bus episode had me a little confused. I thought the pass offered him a way out of the desert. But he doesn't appear to have gone anywhere. Maybe that was his fantasy, to get out of the hell hole.


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Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
The first thing I noticed was that this is listed as children's activity. I don't think so. This is certainly adult, although very funny.

You should list it differently, before the admin come across it. I suggest you list it as at least 13. And change the genre to comedy.


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Review of Wheel of Fortune  
for entry "January 1, 2022" 
Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
A person of alternate spirituality, you practise many customs I have never heard of. Hey, with the year we've had, I'll try anything. You do know the death card doesn't necessarily mean death. It can also mean a new beginning.

Let's hope this will be a new beginning. An end to Covid and a return to good health.


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Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Very existential, this could be read in many ways. I saw it as a representation of Winter. At its peak in January, facing its death knell in May.

The use of French was interesting as the language suggests itself in this piece, with Jeune, Jaune, Janvier being alliterative and fitting with the sense of the work. The only thing I am not sure about is where the shooting of the bird comes in?


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Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with Dreamweaver Bar & Grill  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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 Chad Kilroy(Was Here):Missing Manuscript  (13+)
Teen detective helps find a speech. Finally posting this so I can stop being such a baby.
#2259825 by KatRenner56


Initial Impressions

An interesting take on the detective genre. Definitely aimed at kids.

Plot and characterisation

Your two main characters are well drawn. Not just a simple lost and found, but a life lesson thrown in for good measure.

Spelling and grammar

I see no problems.

Overall Impression

What happened last summer? Will we ever know? I write in this genre but very much for adults. This has the necessary innocence to make it fit for a younger audience. I guess writing brings out my wicked side.

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Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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 The Blackout Butcher  (18+)
When a small coastal town loses power, a serial killer stalks the streets.
#2263940 by MysteryBox


Initial Impressions

I don't normally review pieces this long, but once I started reading I couldn't stop. This is my kind of story.

Plot and characterisation

A killer stalks a town in crisis. Your descriptions of the storm brought the whole thing to life. We know little of the killer, but small details bring the victims alive (until they're not.)

Spelling and grammar

A couple of word transpositions but otherwise no problems.

Overall Impression

You could easily tur this into a novel. This would give you more room for more description and allow for some police action. He disappeared with the light but no killer of this type ever stops.
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Review of Such is Life  
Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with Dreamweaver Bar & Grill  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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 Such is Life  (E)
Flash Fiction
#2264138 by Jacky


Initial Impressions

A nice story, rushed at the end. Darned word limits!

Plot and characterisation

A party that got out of hand. It is not made clear until the end that this was set soe time ago. I thought it was a social media flash mob until the end.

Spelling and grammar

I see no problems.

Overall Impression

You need to set the time period. You talk of gaming; modern concept. Then you write about fifty years later. Confusing.

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Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.5)
You are never too old for a bit of fun. My experience of homes for the elderly are that the majority are pretty dour. I hope when my time comes that I will have a Becky in residence. Or maybe I'll be Becky.

I like the little touches like sneaking M&Ms. Celebrating New Year at 8 sounds about right. If the prompt allows, write more little gems about Becky. You could eventually have a novel on your hands.


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Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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 A Feigned Encounter (Flash Fiction)   (13+)
An arrogant outsider encounters a Louisiana native on a mission.
#2227034 by Foxtrot Victor


Initial Impressions

A simple tale with an unexpected twist.

Plot and characterisation

We don't learn that much about Myla or Mr. Suggs in this short piece.

Spelling and grammar

I see no problems.

Overall Impression

I am not sure if you were working to a word count, but a bit more description, background, emotion would elevate this story.

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Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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No More Miss Nice Girl  (18+)
It was time to be selfish ... First Place, What a Character
#1985894 by THANKful Sonali LOVES DAD


Initial Impressions

I knew without seeing who had written this, that it was an Asian author. Indian stories have an innocence, a moral at the centre.

Plot and characterisation

A chance comment sends Sanvi down the wrong path. Thankfully, she recovers in time.

Spelling and grammar

I see no problems.

Overall Impression

If someone made that comment about me, I might be tempted, just to show them. I'm glad Sanvi saw sense.

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Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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 You'll never believe what happened next!  (E)
Three Minute Read
#2138222 by Jacky


Initial Impressions

An interesting conversation between two teenage boys.

Plot and characterisation

Randy obviously DOES have a thing for Candy Miller, despite his protestations to the contrary.

Spelling and grammar

I see no problems.

Overall Impression

Once Randy comes round I would love to know who DID turn up at Uncle Ralph's.

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Review of A Liberated Man  
Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with Dreamweaver Bar & Grill  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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 A Liberated Man  (ASR)
I grew up in the seventies. And I'm his daughter.
#2258166 by THANKful Sonali LOVES DAD


Initial Impressions

A good insight into your life in India.

Plot and characterisation

Dad the baker was indeed a liberated man, especially in India.

Spelling and grammar

I see no problems.

Overall Impression

In the seventies my dad would have struggled to feed himself let alone bake a cake. I don't know how much has changed in India, but in the UK many men are now the cooks in the family. This is probably because the majority of women now work.

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Review of Hunted  
Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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 Hunted  (18+)
for the 55 word contest
#1580485 by Dawn Embers


Initial Impressions

A complete story in just 55 words.

Plot and characterisation

She is alone. She is nervous, hence the keys. A determined predator still gets her.

Spelling and grammar

I see no problems.

Overall Impression

We get the setting, with good description of the darkness. We feel the victim's fear of walking alone in the dark. We discover her fate at the end.

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Review of Summer Love  
Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Summer Love  (18+)
Chelsea and Adam spend their summer together, but now it's time for him to leave.
#2095065 by Purple is House Florent


Initial Impressions

A beautiful love story. Sensuous without being graphic.

Plot and characterisation

Chelsea and Adam have a summer romance. This is full of emotion as Chelsea shows her feelings for Adam.

Spelling and grammar

I see no problems.

Overall Impression

This leaves me wondering if they will stay in touch. It could be the start of something longer as the relationship develops.

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Review of The Pale Princess  
Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with Dreamweaver Bar & Grill  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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 The Pale Princess  (E)
A twisted little prose about a princess who must be served by those who dare.
#2061435 by Keaton Foster: Know My Hell!


Initial Impressions

An Avante-Guarde piece, but interesting. It has been a long time since I have read this kind of work.

Plot and characterisation

The Pale Princess could mean different things to different people. It has a multiplicity of meanings.

Spelling and grammar

I see no problems.

Overall Impression

Not the usual type of work we find here on WDC. Very much the kind of writing appreciated at my old alma martre, Dartington College of Arts.

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Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (3.5)
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 Christmas Shopping   (E)
A holiday shopping trip brings more gifts than expected.
#2261836 by M. L. Laroche


Initial Impressions

At first I found the spacing a bit weird but I'm presuming this was because you wrote it on different software and downloaded it. A simple tale of a shopping trip and the start of a romance. The first few lines were more 'tell' than 'show'. It improve when you brought in some dialogue.

Plot and characterisation

Joy is divorced with no kids. Christie is married with 'two'? We don't know that much about the women yet.

Spelling and grammar

I see no problems with spelling but watch you close those speech marks. You don't need to say who's talking every time. You can let the reader know that by actions around the dialogue. And revise to get your paragraphs back together.

Overall Impression

I liked the tale of the biker. Build on that. Let us know what these women look like. It could develop into a nice little romance with a bit more work. Keep writing, get more reviews, develop your style.

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Review of Twenty Wishes  
Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with Dreamweaver Bar & Grill  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Some of your twenty wishes might be hard to achieve. Remember though that WDC is international. If you want to go somewhere ask the locals on here. They might be able to accommodate you. They can certainly point you to places of local interest. I'm in Plymouth, Devon. It's a great base for touring Devon and Cornwall. If you don't mind roughing it, I can put you up for a few days.

I wish I could go with you to Transilvania. Unfortunately, health problems keep me home.


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Review of Life of a WOMAN  
Review by Odessa Molinari
In affiliation with October Novel Prep Challenge G...  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Believe me, this is not limited to India; it is a world wide problem. Laws may be made against discrimination on the grounds of gender, but the glass ceiling is still firmly in place. Women take breaks in their working life to have children. They never get the opportunity to go back to work at the same level, or to advance up the corporate ladder.

On the physical front, the stages of a woman's life are rarely, if ever, taken into account. From the schoolgirl, having her first period, wanting to be excused from physical activity, to the pregnant woman, to the menopausal. No account is taken about their discomfort.

Something else should be taken into account. How many times have you heard a woman described as someone's daughter, wife, mother, rather than a person in their own right?


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