|Having recently been meditating on/exploring similar themes in my own writing, this poem really spoke to me. Firstly, I have to congratulate you on your use and choice of language, and the way the poem is structured. Your words flow effortlessly, and as such I was easily able to follow the and fully immerse myself in the flow/rhythm of the piece. One of my favorite parts being;
And when the water was still,
With you looking into it,
I somehow knew that I must
Keep that image safely in my mind,
Not understanding why, until now
We have all known the feeling of trying to hold on to the memory of a perfect moment. Like taking pictures whilst on holiday. It always seems like something is lost when looking back at the photographs. It is as if the memory has been diluted; a mere memory of a memory. The image will never live up to the beauty of the actual moment. However, in our attempt to capture the moment, we do so as best we can. In this piece, Adam knew and had an appreciation for 'the moment' and knew he had to treasure it as best he could.
Considering the setting of the piece being Eden, and the tragedy that is the expulsion of Adam and Eve from paradise, it is fitting and romantic to imagine that between Eve and Eden, you could almost say that Adam saw more of Eden in Eve than he did in the Garden, however both live in his memory of a perfect moment. (at least in my mind/opinion)
This poem to me is a beautifully written, well considered and excellently constructed piece.
If I have mis-interpreted please accept my humblest apologies.