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Review of Adam's Memories!  
Review by Dean Jolly
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Having recently been meditating on/exploring similar themes in my own writing, this poem really spoke to me. Firstly, I have to congratulate you on your use and choice of language, and the way the poem is structured. Your words flow effortlessly, and as such I was easily able to follow the and fully immerse myself in the flow/rhythm of the piece. One of my favorite parts being;

And when the water was still,
With you looking into it,
I somehow knew that I must
Keep that image safely in my mind,
Not understanding why, until now

We have all known the feeling of trying to hold on to the memory of a perfect moment. Like taking pictures whilst on holiday. It always seems like something is lost when looking back at the photographs. It is as if the memory has been diluted; a mere memory of a memory. The image will never live up to the beauty of the actual moment. However, in our attempt to capture the moment, we do so as best we can. In this piece, Adam knew and had an appreciation for 'the moment' and knew he had to treasure it as best he could.

Considering the setting of the piece being Eden, and the tragedy that is the expulsion of Adam and Eve from paradise, it is fitting and romantic to imagine that between Eve and Eden, you could almost say that Adam saw more of Eden in Eve than he did in the Garden, however both live in his memory of a perfect moment. (at least in my mind/opinion)

This poem to me is a beautifully written, well considered and excellently constructed piece.
If I have mis-interpreted please accept my humblest apologies.



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Review by Dean Jolly
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Words from the heart.
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Review by Dean Jolly
Rated: E | (5.0)
I have to this this is a quite beautiful tribute to a lost friend. Poignant and full of love for a life that must have shared many experiences and fond memories with you. No better tribute could be asked for in this life. Thank you for sharing this. :)
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Review of Born Coward  
Review by Dean Jolly
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a very thought provoking piece! I must confess that I have fallen victim in the past to a cowards mentality of knowing and not acting and thus being guilty by assosciation. It is a terrible thing to live in fear, yet worse still to be the one who everyone is afriad of. Keep writing! :)

Dean
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Review of I Miss You  
Review by Dean Jolly
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
wow this is a very powerful and emotional piece. It really got under my skin. Thank you for sharing this. Keep writing :)
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