|Thank you for sharing this here on writing.com
I wish that I had read the first chapter before reading this.
Kudos Though You have done such a good job in the opening of the second chapter. The reader can feel the characters mental and emotional pain and guilt. This is believable because many of us have lost someone close to us in a tragedy like this. Then your character flips and becomes angry with the deceased for getting involved with the guy who was driving. Carissa is very real as if I know her.
Without warning, you flip to Ireland's point of view and it becomes as though we are in purgatory, this could be a little confusing to the reader. Not sure how to do it but a little smoother transition would be advised.
I want to know a little more about this building, according to "Ireland it looks grand we need more description here.
Why does Ireland dislike Remington so much? He seems like a likable person or angel not sure at this point which one he is.
I am not really one for reviewing grammar because, I am not that great at and I struggle with it in my own writing.
I am looking forward to reading more of your story so please let me know as you post more chapters here.