First of all, happy account anniversary! I'm OOT™ , and I'm honored to review your work.
My Thoughts: I dropped by your port for an anniversary review, and the title of this piece caught my eye. I enjoyed reading it, and I'm sure most of us can relate to the hearbreak and despair that Lisa was feeling. The scene was perfect, and I could easily imagine Lisa sitting on the floor of her bedroom, mourning her lost love. The piece also made me remember being in similar situations a few times in my life.
I really liked the apparent starkness of the bedroom, and I think it was the perfect place for the story to occur. It contributed to the feelings of hopelessness and despair that Lisa was experiencing. You packed a lot of emotion into such a short piece, and even though the piece was extremely short, it was complete and interesting. Good job!
My Suggestions: First, I suggest you change the description to give the reader a hint as what the piece is about. Similarly, I suggest you change the genres to better reflect the piece...maybe "emotional" and "relationship". I also suggest you separate the piece into paragraphs to make an easier and more visually appealing read.
As to content, I suggest you edit to make sure you stay with one tense, in this case, past tense. While most of the story is in past tense, in the middle, you change to present ("She stare's...", "She wonder's" and then return to past tense. (Also, if you were writing the story in present tense, 'stares' and 'wonders' should not have the apostrophes, which are used to show possession).
Regarding these 2 sentences, "A moderate sized bed sat in the middle of the room, taking up most of the space. It had burgundy bedding on it, with one lone pillow that had lost its case awhile ago.", I think there are a number of ways you could combine them to make the piece seem a little less explanatory. Maybe something like, "A burgundy covered, moderate sized bed with a lone, caseless pillow took up most of the room."
Overall: Thank you for sharing this emotional, relatable piece. I enjoyed the read, and I look forward to checking out more of your work. I hope you have a wonderful WDC anniversary month and continue to share your talent with us!