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Review of I Love You  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings krysta,
The title offers great readership as I always believe that love is the greatest.
This sounds like a happy song.
The poem is nice and very sweet, and YES ! The last two lines made it so PERFECT !
Keep living and keep loving.
HAPPY HOLIDAYS!
Write On !
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Review of The Only Choice  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings ironworker,
An adventure with suspense !
My suggestion inthis work:
"apologize for the destruction of you ship"
Please change this to..
"apologize for the destruction of your ship"
The story has a good flow and I wish to know what will happen next...
See you again in this awesome community.
WRITE ON !
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Greetings KATO24,
A loving tribute to Tim, "THE GREATEST MAN WHO EVER LIVED". The story has a good flow and deeply emotional.
I agree with you on your admiration to this man who died very young, and I am sorry for your loss. I also was not able to attend the burial of my dearest brother but I have no regrets becasue there is always a good reason for everything.
Surely, you have an angel cousin in heaven watching for you, and that gives joy to your heart knowing that.
Back to my review, my suggestion:
The first line of the story, the word, destinied.........please change this to....... destined
The third line, "that wer all proud of"..Please change the word wer to.....we're
Suggestion Only !
Thank you for sharing your work.
Keep living, keep loving and be very happy !
Also Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello julzy564,
The title made me wonder what is this poem all about when all I know about love is like the lyrics of the song...."a many splendoured thing"..
Reading between the lines, I understood the poem is about admiring someone secretly.
The poem has a good flow and it has a good rhyme.
The last three lines fully described the given title.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
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Review of What I Did  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings sum1,
HAHAHAHHAHHAHHAHAHHHa ! Truly funny ! The rhythm and rhyme, the presentation, the words, lines that completed this comedy poetry......makes me agree with the caption below the title.
Very talented ! Very impressive !
Thank you for the laughters I gain reading your work.
WRITE ON !
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Review of Opinionative  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings canadianarywhal,
I believe this short piece makes a good advertisement about this awesome community. Along with this review, May I invite you to visit my port and read my item with a title, "Why I Love Writing.COM?".
Thank you for sharing your work to all of us.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings Liam,
A laughter that can never ever be forgotten.Sad to know that it raptured his abdomen but glad to note that he laughed, and it has given a BIG IMPACT in your memory as well as in your relationship with your father.
The story has a good flow, descriptive and it is fun reading it.
Written for a contest, I wish you luck !
Thank you for the read.
WRITE ON !
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Review of If Only  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings AidenBlack,
The title captures my reading interest because if life, there are many "If Only" as in it is too late so we have to move and express our feelings NOW, not later, not tomorrow.
Reading between the lines, The last stanza answers my curiousity and it also happens to be my favorite stanza or lines in your poetry.
I admire how you put the words to complete this work. Splendid !
Thank you for the read.
WRITE ON !
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Review of Permeation  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello Again Elemenopy,
The drama of life.....I admit I read it twice to understand fully the whole story. It's confusing at first but as I reread it I got the essence of "Permeation". A love story. The story is about a complicated situation
ended in violence.
Yes ! Rated 18+.
Written for a contest , I wish you luck !
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
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Review of The Fog  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings Elemenopy,
A great story of love in narrative form. A short story yet so full of meaning, sense and sentimentality..
Nicely and perfectly done. Yes ! I strongly believe that this is PERFECT as far as Writing is concerned , all the way.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
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Review of Buried Treasure  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings Tuckerhet,
This biographical story touches my innermost soul. The chosen words are brilliant and so sincere. I can relate because I also lost a brother who is so close to my heart. Reading the whole story, this sounds like a sad, lonely yet so beautiful prose, beautiful with the purity of heart. The conclusion shares joy to your readers.
My suggestion in this work:
The presentation, possibly you can put a space or two spaces in every paragraph.
Suggestion Only.
All in one, I strongly believe you are a talented writer.
Thank you for sharing "Buried Treasure"
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Review of My Lianna  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Greetings greeneyedbeauty,
The heart and soul weeps expressing sorrow of a lost friend. It also expresses so much longing.
The poem has a good flow and deeply emotional.
My suggestion:
"I wanted to say good-bye:( "
Please delete the unnecessary sign :(
I wanted to say goodbye
Suggestion only.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Greetings Maretta,
An unforgettable experience. I enjoy reading this "Helping a Customer". This is well-presented and there is a good flow.
My suggestion:
The word definate.......Please change this to.... definite
"definite respect."
"definite plus"
Suggestion Only ...
Thank you for the read.
WRITE ON !
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings nelladella,
Very observant, very true and the last line expresses that life in the city is so full of stress. Life in the city is not easy, one has to have the strength and stamina to live in the city especially in the busiest part of the metropolis.
Yes ! this poem is descriptive and it has a good flow.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings E,
Wow ! I am very proud of myself today. Why ? For the first time in answering quizes in this awesome community, I got a perfect score, WOW ! Coincidence or not, whatever, But I got a perfect score. Hahhahhahhha.Possibly my being so musically inclined helps.
Anyway, thank you for the joy I feel, thank you for the challenge that I accepted, and thank you for making this quiz that brightens my day.
Most of all, thank you for sharing your QUIZ ...
WRITE ON !
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Review of Earth Eagle  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings Dan Sturn,
Nice poem that gives also a nice message.
"Opens up our inner vision
rising to such height!"
My favorite two lines which for me it means, "Move forward, soar like an eagle" making life so wonderful.
Thank you for sharing "Earth Eagle"
WRITE ON !
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Review of Distant Love  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings Tina,
A love poetry that is deeply emotional as in your heart speaks. This sounds like a ballad with a lonely tune but at the refrain a joyful sound can be heard.
The last stanza offers wonderful tomorrow especially the last line. You are an authentic poet.
YES ! Let go, Let God, Let Live and be very happy.
Thank you for the read.
WRITE ON !
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Review of Confusing Poem  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings narusasuluvr19,
I was captivated by the title.
Reading between the lines, I admit that I enjoy reading your work especially the "tick-tock, tick-tock" part.
I look forward to read more of your writings.
Thank you for sharing a confusing work that gives joy to my reading time.
WRITE ON !
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Greetings ankimiss,
You have a wonderful view of your nation, India. The prose is lovely and full of greatness.
My suggestion:
Possibly you can improve the presentation and the more this will be admired.
Also please change the following:
i............Please capitalize this to letter I
u know.......Please change this to ........you know
It is always nice to know when one and a lot of people are proud of their nationality as well as of their country.
I look forward to read more of your works which I believe there will be more and more.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
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Review of My Dad  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings Mara Shelly,
Very touching. WHEW ! This writing proves once again that LOVE is the greatest. A story that makes me sad and yet makes my heart so glad because after all LOVE prevails.
We may not see our dearest ones physically around but surely in spirit they are always present, and the most important fact is : We live in their hearts forever and vice-versa.
Thank you for sharing your well-written "My Dad"
WRITE ON !
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Review of BedBugs  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings Reagan,
A ghost story, a short one and a very convincing one.
Yes ! I do believe in ghosts. This sounds like a scene in a movie and you put words wisely to make a story.
My suggestion:
Possibly you can divide this to three paragraphs.
Suggestion only.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Greetings Francesca,
A prologue and a Prose with a sad message. Sad to note that she has chosen death as an answer. Very sad indeed.
There is a good flow of this writing.
My suggestion:
Possibly you can put a space or two in every paragraph.
Suggestion only.
Thank you for sharing.
Write On !
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings Sphere,
I believe that this draft makes a good nomination. It is direct to the point and the message is clear.
My suggestion:
You need to make the presentation wonderful to attract the readers approval. In this writing there is one line that separated from the whole sentence ;
goals and
resposibilities and was expected.......
This must be aligned.
Suggestion only.
Thank you for sharing.
Write On !
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Review of Our Family Secret  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings aralls,
That's it !Hahahahhahhahha! Yes ! "We have our secret. You have yours" Very true.
The last three lines you made me laughed some more.
Funny! Crazy Funny ! and truly what a comedy should be !
You've got the power to write and to made me grin so widely.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of Among Mortals  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings In2Writing,
The deepest emotion is showing here as I read between the lines of your free-verse poetry.
A big release of such emotion and I believe you feel much better or relieved after writing this poem from the heart.
I have nothing to suggest or to correct. Keep it the way it is,
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
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