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Review of Envy Is a Circle  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Greetings mjbourne,
An artistic way of describing this unpleasant feeling called envy or jealousy that paralyzes the wholebeing, un-able to move with harmony.
The poem is well-written and each chosen line fits for the given title.
Good luck for the contest.
Thank you for the read.
WRITE ON !
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Review of O Lonely Night  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings aprildesiree,
Oh, so lonely as in having nobody around to care. Deeply emotional piece with a wonderful presentation.
The last two lines expresses a positive twist of the poem and the last two lines inspire.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
WRITE ON !
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings aspasia,
Interesting comparison of a man and "The bud of the flower".
Artistic, dramatic and full of life poem.
The chosen words, lines of the last stanza are my favorites.
A beautiful poem.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
WRITE ON !
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings carlypop,
I can relate to the poem as I also remember the wonderful times that the memory lingers and can never ever be forgotten. Sad to note but sometimes it also gives us strength knowing and believing that love lives forever in our hearts to those so close to our lives.
This is hw I understand this well-written, impressive "Better Than Anyone I Know"
You expressed your words so nicely.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
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Review of Remembering  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings galr,
A love poetry with a message to someone special.
Nostalgic and yes, hopeful !
The last two lines are very captivating lines that completed this poetry.
Thank you for sharing your talent through "Remembering"
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of Last Visit  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings lorrielee,
A prose with a sad message.
There is a good flow and the presentation is highly admirable.
A relationship that was good at the start and eventually became sadly unpleasant as distance of the heart prevails. Like a heavy drama.
A very sad ending.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
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Review of I Believe  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings Dallas,
I love the title. It expresses strong faith and greatness.
I love the essay too as it shares wisdom with its truthfulness and all honesty.
I love the last line most because it made me laughed so loud.
You are a talented individual and there are lots of opportunities waiting for you to be embraced and enjoyed.
Be free to respond happily to whatever comes. Each day is as ripe and as full with true adventure and meaning as you choose to make it.
YES ! Life is wonderful and tomorrow will be a beautiful day !
Move forward unafraid !
And, GOD BLESS !
Thank you for an insightful read.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of A heart  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings Crecent Moon,
A poetry that gives a vivid descriptin of what "A heart" is.
I admire the creativeness.
"to see a light
that shines bright
before all"
Nice words that completed and concluded your work.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
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Review of Anachronism  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings debmach,
An intriguing title that made me very curious to read.
Personal as in biographical and philsophical in its own unique way.
Deep in its highest form of art.
Thank you fr sharing your talent through "Anarchronism"
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of Life begins at 40  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings carolels,
So interesting topic to share and I truly enjoy reading this article written with all honesty.
There is one very powerful line that I admire, to quote:
"I discovered that life has seasons and each with a purpose: that of learning and growing."
WELL SAID !
My suggestion in this work:
Possibly you can make a space r tw in every written paragraph.
SUGGESTION ONLY !
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings rueprim,
The title captures my interest.
The free-verse poetry is unique in its own way.
The last two lines are my faforite lines, to quote:
"This time you'll sing me to sleep
So I may fly with mockingjays so sweet."
Nice to lines that completed this work of art.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
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Review of True Love  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings landon,
A romance/love poetry .
I wonder why these words were written in the title(Help Please).
The poem has a good flow and the poem is great.
The last line offers a better tomorrow.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep psting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings Redtwrite,
A love story through a well-written poetry.
Intriguing as well as fascinating. Fantastic conclusion and heartily dedicated to someone very special, making this work most fulfilling.
The title is full of life so captivating.
A wonderful product of a very talented poet.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of Drought  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings tlsea,
The title expresses a very unpleasant situation as in DRYNESS of the spirit, dryness of a place.
The poem is well-written and well-presented, lovely as it is and it has a good rhyme.
The title fits for the chosen words, lines that completed this poetry.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
WRITE ON !
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings thebluehue,
A poetry that describes a flower, the queen of all flowers, ROSE. In this poem it expresses the symbol of what this flower is all about as far as the color is concerned.
Beautiful poem. beautiful flower.
The story behind the poetry has a sad ending.
This is well-written and well-presented.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings touchwood,
A wonderful essay expressing one's great blessing and the many more blessings in life like the gift to write, and the pleasure and joy of living near the sea wherein the
connectedness with nature is highly appreciated.
The essay has a good flow and the message is full of life.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of A BABY SHOWER  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings Itchy Water,
The color blue in every letter added more meaning and beauty to your poetry.
An acrostic that expresses a message of joy and great expectations.
WOW !
"Realization that I am about to be a Grandmother."
CONGRATULATIONS !
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
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Review of Lonesome grave  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings ganja,
A love poetry and is deeply emotional. The rhyme is lovely and the message is lonely.
My (minimal )suggestion:
"Trying to solve your hearts mystery"
Please put an apostrophe in the word heart's
Trying to solve your heart's mystery
SUGGESTION ONLY.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of I AM  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings iloverainstar,
I admire how you afiirmed yourself in this poem, especially the "I am Creative and Witty". Very honest, " I say a lot of things I don't mean" and the hopeful " I hope my life turns out okay".
Keep loving your individuality and keep living happily with your beautiful poem as your inspiration surely all will be well.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
WRITE ON.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings anitha,
A beautiful free-verse poetry dedicated to your mother and to all who love their mothers. How nice and how sweet of you.
This is a wonderful word that expresses your respect, honor,love and care to your mother who upon
"hearing the little one cries,
feeling as she recieved a world's richest prize"
PLEASE NOTE :
The word recieved......please change it to ....received
Thank you for sharing your talent through an inspiring poem.
WRITE ON !
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Review of The Inner Me  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Greetings The Word Bending Turtle,
This is informative and the details pertaining to Asperger's syndrome made me understand more about this autism condition.
I salute you for being a very talented writer that explains fully and wisely and I strongly believe that in one way or another you are
greatly blessed.
I have a lovely niece, Ayumi who is autistic and she possess some of the above features or characteristics especially the "High intelligence" noting that she has a very good memory.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of Another Birthday  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings Itchywater,
A SATIRE.... One hundred twenty years.....I can imagine the physical and mental deterioration of a human being at this generation.
I myself never wish to reach this age, 120.....Hahhahhahha.....I may look so very ugly and wrinkled then ...hahhhahaha..
All in one, I like your poem that rhymes beautifully.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
WRITE ON !
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings goodsen,
Interesting and captivating title in a fifty-five words story.
AHA ! "It seems the path was shorter than I thought".
You are a clever author.
Written for a contest? I wish you win !
Thank you for the read.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of To the reader  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings ljanderson,
I am a writer as well as a reader thus reading the title of your work made me very interested to know about this poetry.
AHA !HAHHAHHAHHA! I agree except for the last line, simply because I wish for you to keep writing and for me to keep reading.
How about this line, for a happy conclusion"
"Yes ! Alright !"
SUGGESTION ONLY.
Thank you for the read.
Keep writing and keep posting,and Yes ! I keep reading.
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Review of Hope!  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Greetings hamouda,
I love the title.
An inspiring article about hope, a virtue that I highly value everyday of my life. The message truly is meaningful.
My suggestion:

Possibly you can make this into three paragraphs putting a space or two in each paragraph.
The word "god". Please change it to ...God....."knowing that God will be always there for you."
"i see someone hurt...." Please change this to ...." I see someone hurt
"africa or asia"
Please change this to.....Africa or Asia
I believe that once corrected this will be more admirable.
SUGGESTION ONLY.

Thank you for sharing.
Write On !
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