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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings revolution00,
This article interests me a lot. I am fascinated in the choice of words that completed this work. Very real thoughts.
My only suggestion:
Please put a space in every paragraph.
Suggestion only.
Thank you for sharing.
Write On./
Happy New Year !
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Review of Dew of hope  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings lillievalley,
Part 1 and I consider this a very interesting story to share. Historical, dramatic and surely full of suspense.You can make this into a novel and possibly a bestseller.
As the thoughts keep pouring, keep on writing too. Write and write and edit it afterwards.
My suggestion in this story with a good flow:
"I could feel it i my bones"
Please change it to :
I could feel it in my bones.
"i would be out in Russia"
Please change it to:
I would be out in Russia...
Thank you for sharing and WRITE ON!
Happy New Year !
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Review of Knock Knock...  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings nansier,
The images shown added more insight to this very dramatic, artistic work.
The positive thinker that I am believe that Year 2012 is a year of many blessings and opportunities to all of us.
YES ! Your article is truly inspiring.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
HAPPY NEW YEAR and Be Very Happy ...
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings Merisol,
A collection of poems and I like most the one with the title "Winning Is Everything". It is so right.
I wonder what's the title of the other poems.
I admire the creativeness.
Thank you for the read.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Happy New Year !
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Review of The Letter  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Greetings Complexity,
OH ! Blackie the cat, as harmless as...."The End" of this horrifying story.
I admire your talent of writing a story out of a very few words.
Written for a contest? I wish you win !
The story is convincing.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
Happy New Year !
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings Redtowrite,
The poem has a good flow and the chosen words, lines fit this emotional piece. The hard life in the past makes someone's fear to experience it again thus I understood of the given title and stanzas that completed this well-written poetry. Sad but true.
Thank you for sharing once again your very impressive talent.
WRITE ON !
Happy New Year !
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Review of Ode to New Year's  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings debmack,
I love acrostic poetry and this one fits for the occasion or for the season that brings new light, new hope and new
beginning for every possibility as we all continue our journey.
The poem is truly beautiful.
Thank you for the read.
WRITE ON!
Happy New Year and Be Very Happy !
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings dansturn,
Dedicated or written for a 97 year old Grandma. WOW ! I am happy for you to have a grandma who lives life so long, like having a GREAT BONUS as far as living is concerned.
The poem speaks of her in a philosophical and loving way.
The presentation of this poem is highly admirable.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
HAPPY NEW YEAR...
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Review of True Love  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings brandondream,
Truly a "True Love" is the message of this poetry.
It has a beautiful rhyme and it sounds like a ballad to me, expressing great love to another person.
"to make it worth it to you and me"
Possibly you can change this to:
To make it worth it for you and me,
SUGGESTION ONLY....
Thank you for the read.
WRITE ON !
Happy New Year !
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Greetings okyep,
The poet has another poem to share and this one has a great wisdom, especially reading the last line that for me completed your poetry so wisely.
My suggestion:
"wakeing and loosing them"
Please change this to:
waking and losing them to reality...
Thank you for sharing your free verse poetry.
WRITE ON !
Happy New Year ....
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.0)
GREETINGS iCASEY,
a VERY HONEST POETRY.
My favorite lines :
"Whatever they say I just ignore
For I do not care because I am just having fun. "
My suggestion:
"they are different then me"
Please change the word then to....than
Suggestion Only.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
GREETINGS Tim Chiu,
A poetry that describes the present political situation of he most powerful country in hte world.
free verse and the message is clear.
My suggestion:
"An homage to moderate"
Please change it to:
A homage to moderate..
Thank you for sharing.
Write On !
MERRY CHRISTMAS !
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Review of Dear Daughter  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Greetings JamieLynn,
A very touching letter from a father to his daughter. So deeply emotional and here,TRUE LOVE prevails in everyway.
So truthful and so honest, and the last line " To ease your heartache, I'd trade my heart." makes me cry.
I am not going to edit anything about this letter, I must admit that I admire it the way it is, so very ORIGINAL.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings fryo6,
I like it from the title to the very end. Joyful and inspiring with wonderful thoughts.
The title reminds me of a beautiful love song with a happy tune and with the same title and I love to sing it to my mother and father during school programs..that was so many years ago.
The last line is soooooooo GREAT !
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
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Review of The Storm  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings the giirl next door,
Yes, deeply emotional and I consider this a very inspiring prose, especially reading the conclusion. Truly the last line offers wonderful tomorrow.So let it happen.
My suggestion:
"sometimes i would for a minute...."
Please capitalize the letter I
Thank you for the read.
WRITE ON !
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Review of At the Beep.  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Greetings peacekai,
The story behind the poetry is the happening of this modern world. Terrible and horrible experience.
Truly an emotional piece as in heavy drama.
I admire the creativeness.
Thank you for sharing "At the Beep"
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of Why Do I Write  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings QueenErini,
You express fully what you want to express in this very meaningful poetry. I like the way you did it, the presentation and the choice of words.
VERY REAL ! The authentic you through poetry.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of The Color of You  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings swordoflorn,
A poem that spreads warmth and radiates glow in the wholebeing.
I like each line that completed this work.
My favorite lines are the last two lines as if telling this very special someone, "It is nice to be with you !"
Thank you for sharing your talent.
WRITE ON !
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Review of Prolouge  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Greetings lucylu,
Good Luck for this book. As the thoughts keep pouring keep on writing and writing, and you may edit it afterwards.
My suggestion in this work:
The word Prolouge.........Please change it to.......Prologue
"english countryside" Please change the word english to.....English
Suggestion Only.
Thnak you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
Thank you for sharing.
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Greetings natalie,
The title is captivating. The storyline is very touching, and the presentation is nice in its own way.
"I need to give my mind a rest." Wise conclusion.
My suggestion in this work:(Minimal)
"Got eachother....."
Please separate the two words.....each other
"its not a coincidence"
Please put an apostrophe int he word "it's"
Suggestion only.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
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Review of Silent Rain  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings Kevin,
A deeply emotional poetry written with much sadness and grief.
The poem has a good flow and the "Drip, drip" adds more meaning to your work.
This sounds like a ballad with a very lonely melody.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
WRITE ON !
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Review of She  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings dreamer,
A very interesting character that describe this person as a "She" a woman so full of strength.
The poem has a good flow and the message is clear and descriptive of her.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
MERRY CHRISTMAS !
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Review of What is Love?  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Greetings socawska,
Yes, I read this in the Holy Bible. I look forward to read your very own work that describe what love is, in your very own way.
There are so many songs.poems, stories written about love and I truly believe that Love is the greatest.
Thank you for sharing this.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Greetings falconclaw,
You are sharing a very important topic through your essay, and it is about fear. Very true, each one of us has our own fear, countless kind of fear.
The essay is well presented and you express your thoughts freely.
My minimal suggestion in this work:
The title, "Faceing and Freeing Fear"
Please change the word Faceing to.... Facing
Thank you for sharing.
Write On !
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Review of My velvet rose  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Greetings Truefreedom,
A love letter so deeply emotional.
My suggestion in this work:
"I cannot stand another minute you."
Please change this to...
"I cannot stand another minute without you."
"I used to believe in god.........."
Please change the word god to.....God
The caption below the title, the word solider....please change it to....soldier.
The last line, please retype it as the word goddes is quite a distant from the word...my.
Suggestion Only and I think that once corrected this will be a very meaningful love letter.
Thank you for sharing.
Write on and HAPPY HOLIDAYS !
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