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Review by Patrick
Rated: E | (4.5)
Reading your letter Iam aware of the deeply never ending real depth of God,
in simple terms from the bible.
such as "Male and female he made them," quietly loaded prose,
hmm your writing is very clear, and your tears come through loud and clear,
Family stuff is at times ecrucuaitingly hard to figure out... why God?/
jesus doesnt put us on this sea only to sink. but why lord ?
well, like the apostles in the storm, it makes us cry out to him.
Listen,hmm,,,,,that hmm,? is me, waitin tuh see what Jesus tells me to write, others reading this may laugh, but who cares, okay words came down,
a storm is no fun,you have one,
But take heart, not just a slogan, but it will be one unless you start crying out to jesus. i know you are .be assured...he hears, we know this from exodus, " he has heard the weepin of his people,,,yes, we know that he finally freed the captives in egypt Becasue, " he hears the weeping of his people,
men and weoman differnt, well um, uh yeeahh, anyway... in the boat with jesus during storm,Those guys didnt 'weep' to jesus..no, they didnt, they actually yelled at God," Master dont you care about us," to which Jesus/God almighty summarily yelled back at them..{where is your faith?)Jeus hers your prayers,, cry out
So dear woman "pray" in faith, for the littel boy,
I wish i could see him,
hes probly struggling with the catcalls and identity problems from other boys, peers, really dont know,,
only know weep for him, jesus hears an cry out to Jesus. he will aid you.
amen.Patrick
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Review of Why in the World?  
Review by Patrick
Rated: E | (4.5)
Well.um..yes it has a sort of simple lack of detials and realities that leaves one happy, with the vehicle and its premise.However,if i chosse toleave it as an entertainment i would be sorely amiss, let me explain..the two genre tags or waterholes for those who are truly seeking. what is the big picture of teh toatla realityo folife admits meaning are, this one and the religion outlet which is Religion.
Im not sure if its proper that you were placed as a sponsored item, but conagatulations it is what it is, however, it important to express some thouaghts on th matter, an add some particulars for thougth for the author; and they are these,It is dealing with verydifinative invisible realities as as homour piece, fro lack of any real or definative understandig of god given realities, o honestlydont think you wil be offended becasue secretly i beleive you know that. and the soiritof tehoeice left us to know that.
Yet, i feel somethiang behooving me reluctntly to have a care, why?,, un well, by the skill adn ascnedancey of your status as a sort of leader by the clarity skill and some humour, you can lull, not willfully, its rally moreof a vieniality of literary skipping around an singing in a meadow of lets us jsut imagine shall we,
none the less, sadly adn honeslty i have done the same, but closer in amy pesonal raltinshi with God as a peronlist christian have many times been metaohysically disciplined.
know this..God is not a man,inadvertantly theres some mocking, but you have two things going for you, and avocate in Jesus who was human and me.
yes,we intercede, in love for you....
in closing, dont be angry be fieinds,we write, and have thiags in commnon, ive recieved these ranting rereviews and there God awfull,,jus sayin,
so uh ileave a sort of conagratualtions for your ascendancy,
but. now dig deeper,
momentous realities have advented from realities that created this abode, the world,
of the earth in which you were born and live.
God really was here,study his words and life, seek real work, and writng, to win ohters to his words of laove and truth in realities that thoug invisible, its not obovious... seek, feel, detect, to know they truly exist, an have power over all of us. whether we beleieve it or not.
Be a leader of true seers, with your gift,
not an entertainer,
but, use this gift by all means. thank you congratulations, but go further in jesus truth and name. patrick please confer adn make acquaintance tnrough my sermons, thank you for your piece, very clear, well done but..uh above stuff, pax in christos
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Review by Patrick
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
um..hmm, you must understand, you can be reviewed by people who do not beleive invisible realtires that you have grasped by faith, but, take what they say about the c clarity or lack of expressing it only.
Strangley and appreciatively, oneof teh best critiques of what iam as an evangelist trying to share, promote, or make folaks realize is true before they pass into eternity, without it being revealed, was given by an unbeleiever.
It was for " the woman at the well"..my least read and perhaps due to my lackof understanding of the opposite sex, has theological difficulites here and there , but is sound in its cryptic analysis of jeusus being the living water,and only after this realization will a man or womnan understand teh coanstitutionlly mandateded reltioanship of men and weoman.
The guy who read it disagreed completely, with the order and emperic ascndancey of jesus over all realations.
and honestly but alas he will find realsitically that men adn weoman are made to serve God /jeus together and then he realeases the harmonoy of men adn woman working together in a raltinship that he has formed perfectly.
Well he was a very learned, well educated and perfectly expressive dude whofrist explained this wasnt true to him, which was fine. i disagreed,but such is freewill
Tehn he excoriated. the endless typhoes, adn genreral mechanical ineptitiuse of what he considered genreally "good"..,but, also lazy writing, and editing.
These things take discerning, and gratitude foe helping to see,,, teh error in Mechanics of the vehicle.
If its broken, confusing, and simpley icognizant to the reader truth will be screaming under a barrage of rubble.
in closing, i love the poem in the spiritual Genre, concise to the point and a breath of real heartfelt feeling adn esecially important a real picture of struggle winning. Iam quite lazy and not a very good student of essay or exposaes, the above text on revieiwing will be given a review and consideration later,
today, its simply too long..not that, thats a problem,
its was espescially curious,
the above mentioned review of "woman at the well" was by a non believier,
And is or was to date... one of the best ones..
it helped clerically quite a bit, i couldnt see the mess, he was quite polite, but truthfull..jesus said unto pilate "his followers seek truth"
in closing,, you seem like a young person..Im kinda old...so i exhort you "keep sruggling in faith,"as Paul said "we must overcome many hardships to enter the kingdom of God." bless you. you have faith and good writing skill..so, in jesus name ans power alone alone, fight on ,,, patrick

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Review by Patrick
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
um..hmm, you must understand, you can be reviewed by people who do not beleive invisible realtires that you have grasped by faith, but, take what they say about the c clarity or lack of expressing it only.
Strangley and appreciatively, oneof teh best critiques of what iam as an evangelist trying to share, promote, or make folaks realize is true before they pass into eternity, without it being revealed, was given by an unbeleiever.
It was for " the woman at the well"..my least read and perhaps due to my lackof understanding of the opposite sex, has theological difficulites here and there , but is sound in its cryptic analysis of jeusus being the living water,and only after this realization will a man or womnan understand teh coanstitutionlly mandateded reltioanship of men and weoman.
The guy who read it disagreed completely, with the order and emperic ascndancey of jesus over all realations.
and honestly but alas he will find realsitically that men adn weoman are made to serve God /jeus together and then he realeases the harmonoy of men adn woman working together in a raltinship that he has formed perfectly.
Well he was a very learned, well educated and perfectly expressive dude whofrist explained this wasnt true to him, which was fine. i disagreed,but such is freewill
Tehn he excoriated. the endless typhoes, adn genreral mechanical ineptitiuse of what he considered genreally "good"..,but, also lazy writing, and editing.
These things take discerning, and gratitude foe helping to see,,, teh error in Mechanics of the vehicle.
If its broken, confusing, and simpley icognizant to the reader truth will be screaming under a barrage of rubble.
in closing, i love the poem in the spiritual Genre, concise to the point and a breath of real heartfelt feeling adn esecially important a real picture of struggle winning. Iam quite lazy and not a very good student of essay or exposaes, the above text on revieiwing will be given a review and consideration later,
today, its simply too long..not that, thats a problem,
its was espescially curious,
the above mentioned review of "woman at the well" was by a non believier,
And is or was to date... one of the best ones..
it helped clerically quite a bit, i couldnt see the mess, he was quite polite, but truthfull..jesus said unto pilate "his followers seek truth"
in closing,, you seem like a young person..Im kinda old...so i exhort you "keep sruggling in faith,"as Paul said "we must overcome many hardships to enter the kingdom of God." bless you. you have faith and good writing skill..so, in jesus name ans power alone alone, fight on ,,, patrick

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Review by Patrick
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
um..hmm, you must understand, you can be reviewed by people who do not beleive invisible realtires that you have grasped by faith, but, take what they say about the c clarity or lack of expressing it only.
Strangley and appreciatively, oneof teh best critiques of what iam as an evangelist trying to share, promote, or make folaks realize is true before they pass into eternity, without it being revealed, was given by an unbeleiever.
It was for " the woman at the well"..my least read and perhaps due to my lackof understanding of the opposite sex, has theological difficulites here and there , but is sound in its cryptic analysis of jeusus being the living water,and only after this realization will a man or womnan understand teh coanstitutionlly mandateded reltioanship of men and weoman.
The guy who read it disagreed completely, with the order and emperic ascndancey of jesus over all realations.
and honestly but alas he will find realsitically that men adn weoman are made to serve God /jeus together and then he realeases the harmonoy of men adn woman working together in a raltinship that he has formed perfectly.
Well he was a very learned, well educated and perfectly expressive dude whofrist explained this wasnt true to him, which was fine. i disagreed,but such is freewill
Tehn he excoriated. the endless typhoes, adn genreral mechanical ineptitiuse of what he considered genreally "good"..,but, also lazy writing, and editing.
These things take discerning, and gratitude foe helping to see,,, teh error in Mechanics of the vehicle.
If its broken, confusing, and simpley icognizant to the reader truth will be screaming under a barrage of rubble.
in closing, i love the poem in the spiritual Genre, concise to the point and a breath of real heartfelt feeling adn esecially important a real picture of struggle winning. Iam quite lazy and not a very good student of essay or exposaes, the above text on revieiwing will be given a review and consideration later,
today, its simply too long..not that, thats a problem,
its was espescially curious,
the above mentioned review of "woman at the well" was by a non believier,
And is or was to date... one of the best ones..
it helped clerically quite a bit, i couldnt see the mess, he was quite polite, but truthfull..jesus said unto pilate "his followers seek truth"
in closing,, you seem like a young person..Im kinda old...so i exhort you "keep sruggling in faith,"as Paul said "we must overcome many hardships to enter the kingdom of God." bless you. you have faith and good writing skill..so, in jesus name ans power alone alone, fight on ,,, patrick

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Review by Patrick
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Well here is the diagnostic of this writng. It seems to be a very introspective following of the mind taking information to form an emperic source or voice or light of whats happening,
however, as a pice of wrtitng its somwwhat tedious,
its not as "essay' because its nor trying to explain or express anythtng concrete, i cant grasp onto a point or an emoeiric thrust,,
it is an impressive attempt to express how you see things,moment and thougth by thohght.
Iam concerned adn sightly interststed in it with it as iam introspective myself,
you must wonder in the face of realiry how many people really are indtersted init hmm..i don mean to be rude.....few are this astue ..intelectually, the soul is lead by the mind, some...,,hmmm in closing..hear me oh seeker for your soul eternal joy..ima serioaus now.. words are evetyhting and then notihing, who wields them...,me a christian servant.. ..read on..
it is a lot like what happened to Me when I tried valiantly to get my sermons posted in the siritual and reliogous sites,
there were instructional exposaes available, but uh ...my mind.// ability to read instructionla information....lacking order and concentraiton, my backgrwound is sports, im alittel intellectual but,,, uh no not reelly as amauch a aa you,,,thsoe were very long circuitous sentences,,..i get lost,uh anayway, lets simplify, this is the same thing that happened whne one of my customers wanted me to put his ikea entertainment center together it got curuoser and cuiouser but never got done...simply to omany unknown and conafusing varibles, seeker,you dont have an emperic truth, or path,or good easy to foallow instructions,,Freind join me, mine is jesus, for me o rest in this ..sorry distracted,
finally, in regads to the positng sermon on the sight,but it was done, read them, its an empeoriv truth of God,,in jesus, may master..yours? who knows? rest in them, like i do, anyway practically speaking, I humbly asked my son to help me, i was guessing an grabbing at straws, and may vivid imagiantion and lack of reading instructions necciesitated higher help...i am using an "analogy' for you,
dont be mad, let us, yes, let us be friends, surprise, I was a vaisnave,u are indian beleive I sense in may soul, I believe that you must commit to the true triuned God for concret answers of what is happening and why.
Iam a thinking "Christian' rest in Jesus,sir, forogive my boldness,iam a driven man. you must realize you are a crated being, an will never know anything without conclusive Gods help.. rest in him patick
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Review of Why Do I Cry?  
Review by Patrick
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for your poem,
my younger brothter,First leieitntnt army.
had to do many tours in the middle east ,
i had bad dreams about the whole fam going to a miiltary funeral.
um ,,hmm/you have free will, yet perhaps, only but uh,,teneuous with souls am I, uh..perhaos have care in lamenting?,
but you are given free will to do so..
what i mean is this,
the agonay is a kind of "birth pains',
or if u will or will not, your call soldier,.... a sort of " growing up" maybe maybe not, Of the nations who God created,
until..yes until,thats the rub,, they recognize the son of righteousness that must rise in the hearts of all nations. his wiil, will be done. a thousand years a day to him..selah selah lamenting soul..comfort comfort
yes the pain is agonizing,it is yours alone oh soul..
yes maybe, anger, anger..yes, i swallow my overbearing offense toyou if it happens in christ, as his servant alone alone////
After all .. who am i?, non the less,, froward no retreat
I pray deeply for you, (i just did},, that it will be assuaged in you,
in closing,,,i beleive rigthly or wrong im failable..no suprise!!
you may be a veteran?,
however. it is whatt is,
yet ,look! it is written, by his liutetenant, Paul in contemplating his risen master.."where o death? is your victory? where o death is your sting?",,,, my only hope. is together we grow, to actualize this faith, ove death, an conquer this pain an suffering by faith.your stuggle too,
ahhh the critque, so amiss? am i, as usual? on and anon,
well constructed and personal poem of true sorrow,sound, weighe\ted nicely, balanced well, but. "rise up' rise up!!! in "faith' hear now,, the last Trumpet soldier, soul human, and exalt, in God's triumph in his sons victory....amen
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Review by Patrick
Rated: E | (4.5)
Well,Well well, um, easy read and engaging, kinda parabolic and rather pleasng tos see and hear.
As a particular point of interest to you might be a vaster and perhaps less "pedestriain" i choose to hate thang, but been there
(Pedestrain? not a jab at you but rather a new toy monkey found and he dances laong the jungle road with it like a little boy who found a horn to honk on....ha ha), What i was going to say is we are at times tempeted to kind of be judge and jury when we see the folks Slurping up th mammon of noce sutits, jewelry, title class, an all the Gee gaw we steal from santa clause with our dilgience hard work and sneaky im solcever ways,
but jesus,God,, the creater and omnipotent one in charge of this big ol coo coo clock,has left a solemn door stopper, that cannot be moved,,,"Vengeance is mine sayeth the lord," and so to to a certain tiny little know it all way to me to tell the writer this" dont be mad i do this stuff too,,, after i drop atoic bombs the silence adn inability for me to love is solemen, why this,,uh we apparently ate satans delcious brownie and got a tummy ache, ve wise hear the forbodiding of the ache,
so ahh i will recant an be silent... what ho is this, a poem willrise in may heart for you.....it may or not bless you..read an see oh seeker



Many couldnt see
be gald you
sorta can
you third

of
Three blind mice
once we were nothing
But now,,,glory be
squeak squeak
hallujah we be here and see!
once, in this ratrace
an all knowing God
Saw all of us in
mouse traps
it most certainly
"aint written'
But
He heard are "sqeaking'
and "blind" so he lead us out
many were ungrateull
and once free
Said
" Lets cheeze it?
" But, "Squeak squeak..say What?"..hmm. uh? .okay" afew lingered
moved by his love
these became "evangleist' of his love love
every ounce of my fallen nature
says "hate"
But he said "love"
iam bound to it
Hallujah, whatt a saviour

penned by "Biggee gratefull rat" patrick
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Review of The Wisp  
Review by Patrick
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Iam unhappy, i wanted to read "cracked" again, Um forgive me but, it had a very real sense of being short on funds,
And passed over by society that is so teneuous, and causes depression, I lived in the shadow of the worlds finer things an had to use soup kitchens,
but thanks to my personal christianity it is gone,
even now i dont believe in The masquerade, of the finer things, but i have to be thought of as normal for the gospel of jesus,I dream of getting a bike adn going from town to town to preach on streets...jesus seems to be saying...
Stop!
Sooo wife, kids, job um if you must know the queries,that the little man made about Fo Bras,
this intrigued me, i wonderd what it was inside of you that kept the tale alive, though it was but a carefully planned masquerade.......wont judge but... im not sure what to say about the other offerings,um...The suspense is kinda uh "muted" because its too obvious whats comin,little bread crumbs for birdie reader's more judiciously and cleverly hidden i guess
sorry, its true man..
this literary critique isnt really my thing, please just think personally without the catholice gee gaw, only only this,// feel the incredible seperation of the son from the father, "Why have you forsaken me", The pain he underwent, somehow covered all our emtiness, take this gift , it works, be whole, without it i was broken.. must do..over now.
The genre you chose detective, horror, are not my favorite.
As u can see I have tried to correct my glaring and annoying typhoes, run on sentences and manic bouts of running all over the page like a drum major wearing the tall tall mecurial hat, and doing the high stepping as iam want to do.think on the jesus thing, we are all coming aroudn the corner
happy thanksgiving an merry Christmas Bro..patrick
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Review by Patrick
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is an intersesting study but,It is rather well known that People do this, its commonly known as "looking out for number one".
You have been graced with the anti dote,But here are some intersting spiritually blind things that people do that makes life harder and less in keeping with being in Gods image,
First there is an attraction ti them as leaders, we follow giving and sharing people, christian ideally, yes but many are not, they and are just generous and not selfish.
Ghandi spent long years as a kind of pretend cabinet member in a small cafefully emperioualsy Englishmen watched forum, with very limited power to change anything, he was a lawyer and was admitted to it an never missed a single session. He did so becasue he loved his people,
later he risked prison s,,tarvation and thoghhg not a natrual public politician, he devised ingnenious public demonsntraitons in traditonal indian dress,
which to englishmen of that era looked like a man in a diaper with a shirt like a table clothe,
his love for his people, and the dignity that he beleived they deserved,, was "somehow',,, recognized by Englishmen,, somehow they were moved to Grant aunonomy to his nation and self rule, perhaps thiry years, before it would have been conceded,,,
indians have an incrdible literary history,It is sort of a great detrement to Chriatianity, however, much of the lore and stories are exalting "Mothers unconditionl and long suffering love,hmmm why this oh pen'
though this was definateltly anchored deeply in his heart. how else could he have ben so long suffering and adept at change..love is wise.
in closing im kinda confused where this writing went, as a Christian?, but Paul said somethiag about love, of any kind to his followers (sorry parapahrsing aaa gain," Whatever is noble, whatever is moving and note worthy meditate on these things". and so I have done, India is a vast puzzle, but hallelujah King of love is on his throne,,,yes hallelaujah he surely is, and he will lead, all nations, safely Home... .

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Review by Patrick
Rated: E | (5.0)
It is a refined and deeply deceptive trap that many fall into.... that is to know or be fooled by the adversary of man that the pastor the teacher,the bibe teacher one with the living God,
The allure is nothing at all like the illusons of wealth fame notoriety.
you really have not seen or know anythong, about pride until it is the facade of knowing, about God? Jesus.
The pride, is sometimes a seamless illusive,but massive and unbelievably subtle,
but this is an insight and that though painfull is neccesary, learnadn put it behind you please
candidates must be scrutinized continually, I have read pilgrims progress so many times,and it has helped me a lot,
It is one ditch or lying person or misinfromed person seeking an easy way to the Celstial city, ir a false professor giving one wrong way after another.
At first it seems like an entertainment, and its just fot dramas sake, but listen, when the bibles says enter by the wicket or narrow gate , for wide is the way to destuction,Its not a falbel now, clearly u see its true
However,when paul,( where would we be withuot him?)
When he say be as wise as serpants but as gentle as lambs, he wants you too knows, as did the puritan john bunyan that many things on this road to jesus, many teachers or master are not what they appear to be.
why is this.... perhaps, becasue it is dealing in invisible realities that cannot be tested or touched,
pastors, teacher are many ties giving advice or admonshments that noone can really prove are correct,
So whether we are in a church or group it is imortant to be holy and prayerfull and pure in all our conduct and pastimes.
Carefull should be made of pastors..holiness and purty to see with our souls eyes are imortant..personal jeus knows,,be holy be pure
Well in closing, the poem was telling that the trials the illusions, the dyanamics of danger loss and deception in Pilgroms progress are alive and well, in clos
ing i read John Wesleys devotional this morning or was it yesterday morning,...hmm Imigoing to get it,and share a short part of it with you,
it heloed me an will help you too....excuseme ima gettng it now,,,,unfortunately the text couldnt be found,but i remember it and it flowed thusly, "do no think that when Christ was on the earth that he in any way or form was moved o,r decieved by the adversary, as we are, yes he was sorely temepted and his thinking was clouded, (he was in the flesh) but no Grouod at all was given by our God and saviour,our divine and perfect lamb without blemish gave him no victory or ground.
so look to him not to or at fraill men, and rejoice in him in love and security alone,
I hope this has helped you, many time as man iam tempted by pride, but Jeus save me, hallelujah ,what a saviours..listen and obey him alone...in ajesus name amen

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Review by Patrick
Rated: E | (5.0)
?o it nice to have the prose opened and explained, its a nice
piece of medicine,good to be reminded of his benfits,
I cant really think or force myself into a critique,things God Gave us to say, graded?,,cmom?
academic scrutny,no way
pharisees Queried,"How did he {jesus learn so much wihtout school,?" school? He was God silly,
we are his vessles so too it is like him some, it is, a drink of water, Thank you, I was thirsty
when i go into the religous Genre
lately when ima in church people think its school days,with bible apaologetics,
no its lif,e then eternity, be ready,be oceanic, be born again, im tired of head Games.. "i kinda want to go, "what?" that not whatt that means,, or he didnt mean that,but its flesh
The relaigouos Genre.. seems to be more of a freedom of expression, poetry share, its poetery live a little with Jesus.its okay
still
I have pause to wonder about some of it, huh? goodness no, yikes,
also u ,cant look for cleverness or style,just power, or freedom from worries by there stuff,
theological mistakes,..Away away.just.Catch the spirit catch it,Stop thinkin, many are just peacefull happy, daily thanks.Jesus is good.... to them, so i just sing happy littel birds, happy yes, gratefull good, ...But unfortunatley some is just wrong,
thank fully not too much,
if im not sure about that, i just pray for them, actually , im not sure i do really pray...honesty
thats a good thing, just sayin... words are not lostned to mauch lately, , The nation,our home chruch, is full of dissension,.. people listentowhat you say, so hust sow love for all, such scrutinizing,,sowearhing really
one nice poem was in there about praying hard instead of doing nothing jusr praying?,lil skeptical, then in the end i really liked it, the nation needs prayer warriors,,,it difficult to speak out, countries like a big jingha ready to fall,.Sow love, pray to jesus.,..
uh i gotlost..oh well
David fascainting, arc comes back,,David,wow, hes ecstac, dancing ,. But Michals the queens "eyes'..her souls decievd, seeing a sinner being a fool, no you are the fool madaam,
passage is so telling,of the eyes of eh soul,
of sins ugly nature when faced with true worship So true is this like all of us, we are sinners with sin vison,Jus woship freely sing dance dont be afaid of your exstacy, i wish allwould dance loe david
procliviities and obcessions and endless misteps make uswary...but if we love jesus deeply enough we are holy and have freeom and can dance an sing,
we get excited but they think crazy people,, no happy people, many in that genre really are o commend them as the on.y real Genre, you listneing , reading,,join us? we are not mad, we found the desire of the ages..our lord jesus....
Its odd. its all poetry, but, thats teh skinny of the personal walk with jesus,I bring a boatload of fishes
in closing, we are not kings or queens,like David and michael, but someitmes we are under the illusion of being nobodies, but,dont lay down in this, get up, put onyou rdancing shoes, we can "see"things, others cannot,
unlike David we hace th holeu spirit adn are blessed inour agoe to be born again, many things david traveersed snfully for and got , we will not do.... yet,still. he sang and danced befor God. as he was a man after Gods heart, and his child,
thank you for the poem, send more,,the releigous genre and critquing community must grow,
my goal is to rennovate this place, in the future maybe not a temeporal profesional writing veunue... through no fault of anyone it is is whatt it is,,,,, eterrnal life upgrade i say,, WeHeappered in a dream, sad laonel degectedmthoahg incredibley skilled, cant see. and express the anyting trul new...trully time to time, Famous wiiters get depressed, the world is not enough, dont say, no no! ,,cmon,u have dreams too,",, show jesus to others... forgive me, or not time to time I gotta crow for jesus heis freedom, thank you for your poem..patrick

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Review by Patrick
Rated: E | (4.5)
okay im glad that you were not offended, you actualy recognized what iam most intersested in about the gospel messages and what I was saying,
I worry about critiques because im rather erratic, as a result many times its a slew of angry spaghtti like words spewed at me, for typhoes, run on sentences, and the nuts adn bolts that i crated my vehicle of expression with,
they are technicians not one in purty an the spirit,they seem to enjoy mocking,
we maust a paul said suffer many sufferings to enter the kingdom of Our master. Jesus..my writing is at time hard to read cause im lazy,
you have a large body of work, ITs rather school bookish, remember waht God proises thase aho follow him , I will reveal deep an hidden things,, perhaps find em,
I wrote four sermsons during th pandemic, and call the readers to see the reality of Jesus,but i sense they think them too long,
so they wont read it even if it lead to have eternal life, honeslty i wonder if anyone will beleive in Jesus unless the spirti leads them .
SO i ask him what am i doing wrong constanly,The answer, its usally my selfishness and I dont lsiten to the holy spirit,
the servant must listen, cry out to him its important
Revealation for me is not exciting but terrifying, only lately with the times so unusual,so I remotley embrace that It all will occur,,,,you right about it, but im amazed personally that its so like laik a movie production,
i mean honesly! look a how folks freak out when they wake up an have a flat tire, or a tree falls on their shed...the stuf mentioned is catalclysmic,but will come to pass just as their judgment will be at the end of heitr lives,
its a real act of faith to emebrace it all isnt it
but I honeslty wonder if i wont end up like the cowardly lion goin, 'I do beleieve, i Do bleive....I dooo believe"
it really isnt funny at all but some leivity is a littel okay, or perhaps not, tis is lack of holiness in literary musings, i repent
anyway, Only now is that book one that should be opend and studied,
thank you for your study of it, if wish to write about it for others to read and be quickened, you might have to read some puritan writers."Johnathan Edwards" ""Sinners in the hands of an angry God" scary but reall.. be holy be scared
For me,personally what makes me bleieve it is, a deep and forboding feeling, its two things,
first, God has had enough,disbeleif and lack of holiness, times just up, and..the othter that Jesus, when he ascended, after his ressurectin and training his diascioles a littl more, he was attended by angels who asked the amazed disciples "why do you stare at the clouds men of galilee, jesus, will return, the same way that he left ", it states" in the clouds"
Then he exhorted then of to go out itno the world and preach the good new of his completed sacrifice and the new birth to all mankind until his return. adn so this is what we should do
In closing two things, firsr since you love the book of revealation, you must dig deep in concordances for it, here various an many,
for the tangeable meanings of these events,its based upon his vengeance for disbleif, and lack of holiness, its a hard book to wins souls with, but there are God given meing behind it all. thank you for your work. patrick


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Review by Patrick
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Tremendous amounts of cryptic information,
but believe me when i tell you ive seen these cryptic theories turn into long knitting balls of of theieogoical yarn an grown men adn weoeman reduced to angry Kittis arguang ove the meanings the shrouded things.
I found most of it correct, but "unmoving' and obtuse perhaps,
Only a critique, a notion, mind you step back from the doctorial theolaogical choo choo trains running in the night with a sense of academic urgency urgency, its is moving so fast no-one can get on the train.
sorry kinda rude,critiquing.. i apologize,Hmm yes..
Hmm? remember, what the master said about this generations blaisae attitude to his life his words his activities," what can i say of this Generatiaon, I played the flute for you , but you would not dance, i sang a funral dirge for you, and you wouldnt cry" sorry paraphrsing badly, in end this means, his stuff, hislife his words wer from God adn was good heart and soul moving way to fall in love with him, many did adnlater were sanstified by the holy spirit ,
,, but in closing we must play his hits and mmake the readers dance or cry, t isknow this
is not sentiment, its Gods plan. my friend..thisis my take on it, you are entitled to see ti differntly . but express his love and espescially his "care' for the lost,
See,The lost lonely woman a the well, was found,
The blind man was rescued from the legalisma an hypocrrysy of his teacher and leaders, and "hallelujah". one sweet dream came true, when with his faith and common sense he schooled them" and.. entered the kigdome of heaven
when he fell down to worship jesus he was saved
My missiona is to show he is worthy of worship
And, remember too, the scholar Nicodemus, all theology cannot sustain or hide, the terrible hypocrysy an unfufilledness that he felt,
only jesus life an words saved him.
the masters concern love and corect theologey, you have it but it doesnt sing g or dance.. as of yet... is think it will



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This is not to say, that, or take issue with anyting you have written,
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but and iam speaking crypitically a littel when i say " No tears/ soul speak" from the Author no being moved by the reader unles he is moved, you are not proone to ppmakng anyting up, but yuou sometim theorize and i wonder about this some
please know, i foundn no grave errors in what you said, and much good work went into it,howevere: it may simply be, iam an evangelist first adn a scholar second, Continue on in what you are doing, it is much needed in th venue you and i ere in in.Be not angry with me
for we are brothers in Christ Jesus .patrick
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Review by Patrick
Rated: E | (5.0)
Well,Yes what you have written is quite true,It is as if faith or Beleif is a sort of wish fufuilling carousel of usubstantiated phantasy with nothing on the other side of spritual reality
Many take these vehicles if beleif into eternity,
one can only imagine the sounds of smashing into some cataclysmatic clanking cans of colligenenus false soul matter into what God has actually said, or told folks to believe
They who have these wrong beleifs are sometimes lake the Wizaerd fo OZ with the victims of tjere imaginations, no unlike the winsomely timid tin man, shaking before the chatlatan potentate, he goes up in his ballon and confessed to Dorothy " i dint know how this thing works....Dorothy looks up sadly and demurely pretty,.but she should be mad
I must confess many times even in my walk iam deeply doscouraged and confused.When this" happens fellow seeker i minimalize eveerything down to teh sound of a clarion reality,
an Avatar, of truth came down, i ate his words and was satisfied,
Oh yes, at times I say this or Write that and people counter it..or doubts assail me, but I return to him and keep walking in his words.
your Poem is metered an written impeccably, carefully,but it would appear you have become weary of discerning what is Behind faith and belieief,
yes i agree it is at times smoke ana mirrors, im almost loathe to use such an antiquated term,, but here goes "take heart", dont give up,you have an advocate for truth that you are seeking.

John:18:vs,,,34-38.
Jesus said,"My kingdom does not belong to this world,:If my kingdom belonged to this world, my followers would fight to keep me from being turned over to the Jewish authorities!
No, my Kingdom does not belong here."
So Pilate asked him,"Are you a king then?"
Jesus Answered, "you say that Iam a king, I came in to this world for one purpose, to speak about the truth. whoever, belongs to the truth, listens to me".
so Pilate asked him,"And What is truth?".....In closing,Please.. seek truth still benot diccouraged and fall away he has it, to this i swear,,,have a nice day, we have conferrd slightly before, and i have recieved some pleasant notifications, they have cheered me, im not bieng fecicious or false when sometimes i look at the reads "looks' at my sermon, and they are the smae day after day, sterile Perusall's make me sad, I say "is anybody out there?" Let us be friends, God bless you and keep you in jesus and in his truth, patrick, thank you

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Review of Life  
Review by Patrick
Rated: E | (5.0)

Well,You are cheerfull for a stoic,uh ?
is that flag, New Zealand's banner?.
Thanks for writing back thought fully,very nice, Sometimes when i see the rereview im always excited, but then th authors bite me with a sort of effete derison for what they believe is over bearin childish Christian naivate, How dare they?.its easy. they dont believe you,,,.,people must realize whether they likeit or not that the things written will definatively be made real, believing in the present reality because you can see and, touch it, short sighted ness to god who made us in his image...free will is a snare tath will make poeple greet eternity with endless absence from the creater, he honors faith in hin , this will exclaimed loudly and definatively.Im so weary of the street preachers screamning Damnation an hate at people whao are gay,lesbian,or transgendered adn fighting hatefully with them...I tell them boldly allahve sooned and fallen short of teh glaory of God..all flesh with souls inside need only accept jesus witha heart felt thank you and enter in.....there was a truly glaoriou paoem wirtten about william boooth teh ceater od teh salvaltion army, he went blind,and wore a genrals uniform he didnt judge but screamed for more lost to come to jesus and be made clean...he lived adn breathed jesus glory and damned self rigteousness wherever it was, a glorious street being being
hmmm.. i don know why but i rather liked the essay /poem, strangley "positive' it reminded me a lttel of how The two men at the end of "Hamltet"... where thinking about falling to there deaths,darkest humour, one is oblivious to its imortance an the other deepay concerned about its importance, i suppose its an honor, thems being Englishmen. i have the bard upstairs on a book case, but my wife has endenutred me to a myriad host of house chores, im wondering deelay if she really believes in jesus or just getting me to do things she wants done...its llike being in a workig concentraiton camp..ah me jesus anullled divorce.....


since your a nice Gentlemen and Im will shorlty burden you with a few little thiings, to assit you to have a happy landing after you fall.
I do this out of concern, first, a littel tale just for you,
im really cheap, sooo i tried to do all the home repairs myself, rather than let the plumbing guerillas in, i never really unederstood why God comamnded us not to kill one another, until a greedy littel plumber wanted about 1000 doallars to installl a toilet,greed in the land is rabid,
so i thought dont commit a homicide do ir yerself.
so got teh toilet and started on may adventure,, Its not a hard thing to do, but u need to studay a how to do book which home depot publishes. did i do that? uh,,, nope.
After many fails i hated that littel greedy little man who inadvetantly, made me attempt this,
however, a friend, thats kinda "me' to you i guess, said,,get the home depott Book adn follow it religously you and you will succed, i couldld say i did completley,and allwent splendidly, bu in truth i sorta folloed it and it was passable,,,,,,,,,im sure, your going What the hell does this mean,?
i will also worry some about the re-review,i have coaurage an say whatever it .. it is.. but will manfully check it out if u write one,,,,kinda scary but...deliciously intriguing as well.
Heres may point, the bible is the "how to book' of how to live, see, adn be fullly realized in who and what we are... created biengs in need of our creaters love, Jesus is the way to get it and be whole...he is "the way'..Sorry, rather long and,,,eeeh gaddity perhaps annoying,, but, soulfull an heartfelt,
I wrote it cause your pretty sincere guy an our insight are quite good, but slighty cynical. ,, life on earth, with all foibles an challenges is still,,,about..goin point a..this, life tuh point B.....heaven... The bilbe is the way to get there, listen...in the book of "john' the first seekers upon being called by God/
Jesus inquired mundanely."TEAcher.Where are you stayng?," True to form, ( God uses curooausity to draw us in) his answer was crypotic adn mysterious, " come and see"...
So,They did adn found God, i did too, and found him,...iam the same as i was before, but decidedly not the same as i was before, the "soul' is mysterious, but it aware of faith, id it bleieves in jesus promises it will be seen by God and chronicled by God, the fall will be soft and eternity spent in love and peace,
your going " how nice"...but dont doubt,sir, the child speaks a truth...Im a littel about waht i have written, but i have Written it for you, please Listen...I bleive you will consider it somehow
in closing, many people in the site are wary of me an may proseltyyzing attempts, as they see them, but i will be bold this day , and ask you to seek deeper, full realization comes by just believing simply... (it is written) unless you believe like a chld, you willnot enter the kingdom of God" thanks for reading this, be blessed and just believe
.....your new friend patrick, pax in christos



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Review by Patrick
Rated: E | (4.5)
You bring up intersting conundrums, but "faith" that is strong or real is not blind, it must have grounding or its just phantasy.ee
The idea of just jumping in someones bandwagon is a real possibility if peope a hoping to live off the vapors of everyone else who is going just to be going,God/ jes,,us in my opinion frowns on this," How weary iam of these lonely posoeurs"
he must say.
to many beleive it or not, they refuse to even take th baby steps of crying out becasue of what people will think, its foolish but, true.
I dont really dont know you, but... you migth be surprised at what will happen if you just jump adn start investiagating what, happens if you call out to jesus,
its not a magical thing that occurs,but... you might, detect a change in the weather spirittually, thanks you for your letter, very real,uh Bye

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Review by Patrick
Rated: E | (3.5)
Now um,Hmmm, well one thing youve proven is that the coherency of a long sentence is saved from being a run on sentence if the writer is blessed in The automatic blessing of im definatively feelingittedness. some leivity
Provin aliens exist i believe this cant be done,
but.., a diveriosn,
Uh.. hmm?
isnt it a littel like the song of the late David Bowie," starman" when the two kids are calllin each other up before knockin off to beddy bye....and they have the same iconic Teenage dreamy epiphony....
"Hey did you see him in the sky?"
"What?,,, I mean yeah i did... wow u saw him too?...."
and then the teen hymn starts starts in in the church of Phantasy.
thank your for your "notification'...no lecture, just another souls take on the U F O thing,
The abductees Tales intriguing, but not conclusive, and seem to rabidly be enjoying attentnion,
One guy told do ruffian "alien' tired of the aductees struggleing said, "calm down we always release you after" I mean honestly its intriguing copy But
a lottle too muchiike a little to like the eighth graders bullying the sixth graders
I willhave to use scripture,,,,,:"let your yes be yes adn no..well,,no, lest it become tainted with evil" from James.
So um... No, its just us brother
So lets go back to the two littel english sixth graders, a charmimg epiphony, but a literary device um...not for me,
In closing the devil is in the details, to keep him out jesus has shone me the abject simplicity and soundness of the planetand its other bodies above, and assured me spiritually and scientifically its just us down here.
we must go back to the basics,only God in the form of a man came down adn said to all who bleive in him he gives the right to become his Children of God, chlldren of the "day' to see, to walk an see what is and what is not.
Just sayin.... not a fight, so wear of it. soo thats me..and you for now may not agree,,
thanks fot notification, and praise Jesus through him in all things were created, wihtout him nothing, bless you, in his all encompassing name, your studies your work and your students in you care professor..patrick
But we have free will, so




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Review by Patrick
Rated: E | (4.5)
I enjoyed your memoir,its Patrick by the way, Still cutting lawns in Greenbelt, Terribly sorry, the town you live in and serve as mayor escaped me, i recall only it was knda near Greenbelt.
your piece showed tha When we hinor our parents we aee made happy and also cheering for others to read.
I liked the ending line an it is a benefit of all who cling tothe feet of our saviour that death cannot to swallow up relationships after people pass.
Just wanted to say " hello".....
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for entry "The Passion of David
Review by Patrick
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
Im not completlely sure the particulars of the incident is/ are, represented correctly,
Although its presumtuous for either of us to speculate, i believe he was oblivious to his outer robe fallin off in ecstaic joy at the arks return.
This passage is realted by me in a sermon about jeus healing a blind man, It is showing Michael's "blindness" to how and why his robe fell of,
she couldnot see that that his main ojective was to glorify God..only,
Sin blinds people to see the worst in others unfortuantley,When we worship jesus we get a new way to see and live.
What our fleshly eyes see and our carnal minds believes are not what God created us to see and believe, Anyway, i must thank you for your study it is isnteresting,Als there is the possibility that perhapsm David simply removed
his robe as it encumbered him,
but in the end it was between him and God, The common weoman of jerusalem were not displeased or pruruietly curious, but aware at his ecstacy adn his intent to please the God of Israel "only:.. as they perhaps kept time with timbrel. Thank you for your love of the bible adn its pastimes,
In closing, sorry too much me but uh,,,in my portfolio "Nicodemus' (purporteadly rather too long,) I ceated a "Museaum' of historic pastimes in the Bible,
on sunshiny day enter this olace an if u want, "see' some of them...Bless you sir and thank you fro your work and love of David. Patrick


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Review by Patrick
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you, wrote it late, kinda uh ,,hmmm..uh? emabarassing,.
how in the heck did you read that thing....?
The aniticipatory rush of what would maybe, happen with the John's gospel message's...and what actually did...un well,,Frankly, turned into a great deal of angst and and dissapointment,
It didnt help that it had been so long since i wrote, i had no idea how to use the plethora ofnew tools, and each one, took about a week to edit,For or five weeks to get, the offering ready,
Its nominally edible verbiage.. drags a lot..pushy and in some rambles, boring uh if wanna read one..A few folks gave some reviews as my own thiking without a conacordence of any kind,,,Not true..a few,maybe two, in the beginnim beginnig of covid as much more enalightened than i actually deserve to be thought of....
Still lately rarher desondent
unhaooy concensus is the venue is not really going to bear fruit..
never say never with God..But,,well look man,,its professional folks dreamin of being a paper back writer's...The oceanic and unfathemable cosmic consequences of just bleiveing in jesus is real, an deserves at the very least a thank you to Him..I worry for these people, they believe what they wish to..,,in regards to eternity stupidly subjective, feels good ,,,uh now!!
but... though im turned off by our "writers", ima convinced with the mild hybids of truh.. like welsey, its going down as God has ordained....
Im not yet what we shall, " street preacher im mad ar you,yeah yeah im mad at you guys an that all there is to it..you rebels you",,.an unforunate childish syandrom syndrome.Which alienates people to jeus gift...
Im really not going there,,They have sinned to run people off as they do...thia I know, but, the lack of hits, and any quickening at all in many, sota gave me a window into why they get so hatefull,
they will be rebuked in the end for driving away sheep
Um sir, the siundest of the vehicles in the foursome, Is probably "Lazarus,' but the most hits and may favorite is stangley, "Nicodemus"...."wowman at the well" the first to go in, is not fully fleshed out, but, married couples, lovesick girls and all whoar ahuam adn like to be e\"in love".. will be woken up by its honesty about how far love goes or doesnt...
After i wrote the mess last night Jesus said....You will reap what you will, p yet your letter gave me hope for th foursome to live...how may oh brother of these folks here we amuse ourselves with literarilay, But jeus makes me wonder sadly, will we see im heaven..?truly dont know, perahos if we sirit driven manage to make one or two or many a thank you to jesus, By our Gdd inspired literature, the thank you f sincere will be chronicled..what a delight to see them.. i his place he prepared.
together let us try...thank you so much, for considering my request for help.dont you dare feel "jammed" oh brother,, be free,,Be real, with me, in our personal master jesus we are alone Free,amen amen an amen Patrick b
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Review by Patrick
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi bob, its patrick, the salty humanity an winsome honesty of flesh adn blood people is alway enduring, uh.. So often i took refuge in the small town world, *im from pittsburgh,) around me adn the rhythm of nuances an strugglesof the likable and winsomely homely n bruisinglay charming ways of working class hmm,nice literary inaterlude, i readit months before,,,
Uh heres a little update of what ive been doing, im doing this because something i wrote u gave, the space ship organ piece,um.. in your RErereview you told me if im not msistaken that you were a "minister" of jesus. i belieive you..
Christianity, curiously,is in my opinion, the only safe and reliable way to have the happy ending on the other side, however; it is the one spiritual thrust that condones preaching,(jesus example) the boat slightly off shore "his pulpit',,, we follow,,also, as the remote places where there was nothing to feed the people, until..well my point is this
( i realize of course this is a critiquing sight not a venue for requests for assistnce form evangeists,,oh well tool ate now,
It is my intent to move people to salvation with sermons in this writin site,this little automatically writtne thing could help..revealing christians humamnity, yieah peoe we are jaut like you in many ways...
i willl in no ways be fecicious or falttering if i asked for a short, (yes its labor i know..we both know,as minister or trying to be one) not only wouid it help me in my long an delrious climb to the destiny that he is calling me to..for a criique a gains being boring,,ifits boring how can theye be saved? must Be real
In closing hoW many times sir, have both of us listened to a message purportedaly to get us to see jesusn but unforotuantlely, and brother i speak truth, many times we are bored to death,,,it is the christan faiths dirty little secret..Er the preachers lose our listener attention.......We know its true,
the "prodigal sons" dinner story was not so..nor i blieve anythign the master did, he was heoroically an beautfully gloirous to the end...Therefore if yo could,,.critique mostly for lag in interest and if any grave theological errors,I dont believe there are any,,,
i want my listenr engaged..not restless adn bored. yes,I have in my writing acredoutmy anst and unahppiness but..iam human man...he is working on me,Iam still learnning
my main sruggle is to move the heart...To see his Beauty and though humble, his very real God head, his back drop an ugly unloving world,,surely many will go to him, i push and believe absolutely in each souls ability if they blieve in him persoanally, to make the reader confident that his simple childlike beleif in him well be rewarded, jesus never he has but left to prepare a place for us in heaven.he is true...
up to you,,any help appreciated ..thank you brother,,, your voice was deeplay encoauraging in our thank you for my reiviw,,sorry if indulgent adn graspng or indulgent, ..iam of course a sinner patrick
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Review by Patrick
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
wherever the servant of God goes and witnesses, he gets funny looks,
Rather than do the obvious thing an go " "I will give him a piece of my mind",
nope, instead ill telling you some intriguing thing.. that happend to me,I was taking a writng class,uhh..hmm?Well.. after it, i had to get groceries... I notiice one of my classmates animatedly, but seemingly joyfully refuting Everythng an Evangelist was preaching to him,
The two of them were doin a kind of animated "u say potatao// i say paa tott,,opphh" you know, a dance of "apologetics" before all of the shoppers in the giant Eagle,
Each one had a smile a mile wide,...as i watched them, things got curiouser an curiouoser.
Later on, in the week i saw may classmate,
I tried hard to just mind may own business, (i never can,uh.. does it show,?"
oh well, I couldnt help but ask him,
"What in the world was going on between you and the evangelist in the Giant Eagle?.
Again he got his coast to grin, and his eyes became wide with pleasure, that i was watching the whatever, it was that went down between them
He said.." well, when those people proselaytize me with big smiles I go into battle mode and summmarily out happy them."
At the time I just laughed,and laughed. yep thats what he said.....
My name is patrick, I studied Theatre, English writing( primarialy fictioan writing.. and lead bible studies in my church, your writing was crisp and easy to understand,and though i dint agree with with you, fighting won get us anywhere...We shall end this conversation.....With the iconic meldaoy and happy but childish old sonog " why cant wee be freinds, .why cant wee bee friends etc etc..have a nice day sir,patrick



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Review by Patrick
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Genuinely intriguing,
you could give me a good run for my money as the most inetersting man in the world,if it were not that the two of us are also rans,
in comparison with the sojourns of saintly men listneing to jesus and then actualizing wonderful things in the fallen world, I also read "soon" which showed off your ability to engage the reader, but in a macabre way.
the formatting for "soon' took me by surprise, as it was not the call and response with the little mary had little lamb ringtone.
truly, theres a lot to be said for a sort of steam of consciousness,that offers up intriguing things that are real an not forced upon folks,
forgive me you seem to have been raised and than fled catholicism when teh flying magical twists an turns of its chitty chitty bang bang path to heaven took liberities of a sentimental an literary tragectory.its not apsostate but..hmm im taking the Jeuus train,you?
I should talk, i mean sometimes when i scribble things, i know intutitively that my errant veniality to be the most inersting man in the world is at the cost of the holiness to lead people to jesus is lost,
Jesus is mercifull, he knows our proclivities sir,his yoke is light, still im chstised some
Im repenting an learning, pruned adn chasitised but not cut to the root jesus is like a kind elder brother who is also God.yes really!
i know, i know we were having a good time chatting in our attmepsts to be the most ineersting men in the world or the little site we hang out in, and then, the proselytying. maybe? yeah ? but his mercy is great an it is true,
any way back to a real critique, um about "soon',
heres a lil story, its real,
Uh hangin oout in a university section in Pgh, oakland bein the most inersting man in the world with street theatics i wasnt happy just lively, hauled in like a fish by missinary koreans and in the long circuiotous,
Darn it again! too much me,sorry, see jesus warns me,,,
any whoo one of then tol me a lil story,
Koreans are incredible folksh story tellers, when allowed to live in the free world, can u beleive north korea,i mean steal a tank an get out,
anywhoo again sorry, its in regard to "soons' ending, still criquin , uh sorta, by the way, its ending too open ended an not crypticallly going anywhere.."soon' your tryin to dig up mystery, but uh,,the hole not big enough or someting...it sorta just sits there,,maybe jus me,
inconclusive,
sorry you may feel this guys collecting me in his army of "most inersting men in the world" to make me an evangelist,um man,n goin,, what is it? i gotta get tuh work
.anywhoo... this little korean woman, told me a story, of her family who were not happy about her conversin and bleifs, particualrlay the ressurection, they were apparently viewien cadvers in a douamntrary together watchin boob tube,viwieng a tomb, such as the one you showed, an fam memberss open facedly an annoyingly( they scraap all the time) asked her, "do you really bleive these rotten things can be brought back to life, you must join us in our adultness an stop this "nonsense o sister,"
there faith was dead, when folks are dead they stay that way, kinda un sunshiney, sumpin like that,

But to her, and to me beleieving this is possiible to b made alive for an omnipotent God is a baby step,
the "real' mountain is maintaining faith in a day to day pragmatic an reall world of flesh adn blood an dollar adn cents an and tangable "adult' realities that mount pretty impressive assaults on our child like faith, a child has come to help you in this its me man
What do I say to someone like you,?
Hope all things, beleive all things, an accept all our masters love an what he has promised,he "was" here!
when the scripture says they will mount up as eagles. its implied, "eagles plural'. its a fraternity of Eagles,
join me man, dive head long into it, it is written for all those who bleived he gave ther power by faith to become children of God, not born of the will of man or flesh an blood but of God and spirit, "
(forgive me im paraphrasin), but, do uh, you hear wind brother? do you hear a call to go up into a wind draft, with a cavalier cry beside you,"
Are you coming, say yes not no ....so tired of no,
just spread wings n believe God is with you, jesus love is real.. hey,, stop doubitn,
thank you for your time,
you write quite well, may Jesus bless my words so as to see you in the beyond,simply say thank you to jesus, if your so moved, check out portfolio, in closing say thank you to jesus for his seperation from Father to cover yours and all the worlds sins once, an its secured in his chronicles, i want to see you in this place please do so
Bless you patrick
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Review of A Quiet Place  
Review by Patrick
Rated: E | (5.0)
Yes, i see you are new,I read your piecem you capture well the quaint ad simpple ways of what childhood is,Also the penny piching an bondage to money mom experirences for the medication for Marcus,Also, the Expletive head Dad who takes the batteries to bring peace which is neccesary but a heartfelt dad expalinin or makin supplication fro his sons emor joy would please jesus, nope jus another damned tyrant,uh i got kids butif u mustknow id be checkin out the rocket ship adn puttin it thriough its paces, Hmmm your, writing is easy to read and it shows you clealry understand the nature of familail relations an compassion or lack of it in these situations.You have a good sense of reall dialogue and deftly go
intho the psyche of the speaker or thinker. thisloolks like its an excerpat from a novel about this family, a sortof grapes od wrath thing but they live in a
apartment on teh dole or something,hmm so in closing, uh this,sorry have ot be alil pasurial adn soiritual for your sake, uh.. in justice ineqity in deaing with kids, peopole all of us do this, we see peevishness adn kinda go uh Tahtone ison my list of those who icnt loveo rhang out with due to there behiviour in treatin me,yeah it happens ithappend to me in a large family wherien i sorta figures out realituy and how to mangage all by mysellf adn kinda was unurtured
i becam ecceedingly creative, that may g=have been waht made u like my little thiag i wrote. Jeussh heloed me toget by in my earlytwenties an now.oam able to appera sa a normal chriatian man ,but its not easy, my childhood was as anatelete whodidnothing in school, i wasa winsoe tarzan in sorts crazy america, a coolwild an craze kod,but not rally an aceptable little fellow who nly made his way by his creativity an athleitc talents. that he learned from watchin tv or coaches who he wearied,
not evryon in the fam ,was able to resolve this lack of care, love adn trainig, children need endoemoaus nurturing, an some in fam are deeolay damaged, an just lament,
i fraternize with all my bros an sisses, im am imploring them tow write stuff or make cool artistic stuff fro u tuebe, many are musicians or witers like me, we are irish, and lsot a couason to acohol in clossin sister, as a a chriatian i no longer party but talk to them, but my eledest brother only lamests childhoods inequities adn the crappiness if his rearing, adn selfishness of mon adn dad with nine creative needy Irish kids , in the end my child, all wounds all indequity, yes its real, u showed it, adn brusqueness of handling due to exterteriour inequtities, can be overcome with Christ, teh ganrled tree can grow into a beautifyul creature, if they find jesus personanlly an hold to hos feeet like a worshiper in thw first church at antioch, I see you as just such a woman of faithm by faith and by creative but mostly faith dreaming, thank you fro ntification an a like patick
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