***In the title of your story the "d" in "decision" needs to be capitalized.
***Here, because you wrote "had",
"chose", should be
"chosen" instead. (It keeps your writing in the same tense.):
"...yet he had chose no side."
***Here see comments in green lettering:
"...aching he felt every day,(replace comma with a period, then capitalize the 'H' in he.) he tried to cure it with love (comma) but..."
***Here, to keep the subject in agreement, I suggest the following:
"...feeling out of reach with itself..." (Change
"itself" to
"oneself".)
***And here, you need a space:
"...meant to be alone, (space) indifferent, (Get rid of the comma here. The word "and" takes it's place.) and misunderstood."
***There is a misspelling here:
"Months past (Should be "passed") and he realized..."
***Here you need a comma after the word
"however":
"One day however (comma) as..."
***In this portion, the space is misplaced:
"...town ,he decided..." The comma should be up against the word "town", not the word "he".
***Here, it would read much smoother as indicated:
"He found the man's wallet shortly after the beginning of his search..."
***Eliminate the first word of this sentence, to give it more of a "show, don't tell" feel: "
Then He exited without saying another word."
***Here you need to separate these words:
"...at (space) least."
*** When the main character re-approaches the body, he checks the ID for the address. It doesn't say if he kept the wallet, or took the rest of the money. But earlier, you wrote that he took Twenty bucks. Then later you said he cheated the dishonest police force out of a thousand bucks. This needs to be clarified for the reader. Did he take the rest of the money out of the wallet? Obviously he must have, but this needs to be stated to avoid confusion. It says he put the wallet on the windshield, but nothing about the rest of the cash in it.
***You wrote:
"She saw him loot the body..." But how did she see this if she was in the home, and he discovered the body and took the wallet in a different location?
***Finally, I would recommend you run this, and any works you write through a grammar checker. I noticed several missing punctuation marks, but am far from perfect with punctuation
, so would like to suggest this to you. I like paperrater.com. It is a free online grammar checker, and really helps a lot!