|Please understand that this review is based on my own opinion and thoughts. I am not a professional editor or writer, although, I wish I were!
A Raid review for you! From: Lady Patrece of House Hightower "Game of Thrones"
Initial impression of your piece:
Wow! Excellent writing is demonstrated in this piece. You must have worked very hard on the editing and creation of it. If you did not work hard on editing, then I wish I had your knack for grammar and such.
I did notice, that during the dream, Kyle told Lisa to relax, that he wasn't going to bite her. But yet at the end of the story, when her friend Kate announced she was coming over, Lisa noted that the puncture marks on her heck, were nearly faded. Hmmm, that's curious for sure. Especially when to Lisa's knowledge of the dream, she was told she only drank of 'his" blood.
What I really liked:
Believe it or not, my favorite thing, is that Lisa did not eat her cat! . Okay, so I am an oddball to choose this, but, I do so love animals, and just don't like it when they are victimized.
Spelling, grammar and punctuation :
No errors noted here! Great job.
Final Thoughts / Side Notes:
Strange, that one who passes out at the site of a scratch on her knee, or her monthly cycle, is now offering to commune (via her own blood) with her best friend. It did seem that initially, Lisa was trying to figure out how to hide what happened from her friend, but by the time her friend got there, it was implied, that she were sharing her own fate with Kate.
Lots of plot twists, and turns are incorporated into this work. It definitely keeps the reader on their toes!
Just do the next WRITE thing!