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Review of A Helping Hand  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Please understand that this review is based on my own opinion and thoughts. I am not a professional editor or writer, although, I wish I were!

A raid review for you! From: Lady Patrece of House Hightower "Game of Thrones

*Paw*Initial impression of your piece:
An excellent short story that grabs the reader by the eyes, and doesn't let go until the end. Great work! The reader cannot help but to worry for and pity Rob. He is already going through enough with his recent break-up. Now, he is an accessory to a murder, and seen as such, with the shovel in his hand as the officer approaches them. One can only hope for Rob's sake that the officer overheard the conversation prior to him making his presence known. However, there is nothing to indicate this is the case. Moral of the story, be cautious as to when and how you will lend others, even family, a helping hand.
Very well written, has a nice easy to follow flow to it, and leaves this reader wanting to know more!

There is a certain amount of sympathy to be given to Mike, as he was trying to protect his children from a terrible future. However, he went way too far and went about it entirely wrong. A lesson to be learned by others, without learning it the hard way.

*Paw* What I really liked:
I like that Rob, in his heart of hearts, wanted to deal with the situation in the right way, even though he let it get too far out of hand. This teaches a moral lesson. Do what is right, even if it is difficult.

*Paw* Spelling, grammar, punctuation & suggestions:
In my humble opinion, I would have liked to have read more description of what was being seen by Rob, when Mike dragged him to the bathroom, and seen by the officer upon his arrival. Maybe a description of how Rob and Mike 'felt' when the officer arrived. It would just help the reader feel more like they were right there in it all.

*Paw* Final Thoughts / Side Notes:
You have a wonderful talent, and I have enjoyed reading this short story very much! Thanks for sharing. Now...Just let me know when the novel that it belongs in is released! *Bigsmile*

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Review of Mommy Dearest  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Please understand that this review is based on my own opinion and thoughts. I am not a professional editor or writer, although, I wish I were!

A raid review for you! From: Lady Patrece of House Hightower "Game of Thrones

*Paw*Initial impression of your piece:
Again, you amaze me with the power and the impact of your words. This is written incredibly well, and gripped me from the start. It doesn't take a bunch of big fancy words to make a story great. You have proven this well, here.

My heart goes out to the little girl in this prose. The saddest part is, this piece reflects what far too many children endure, from those who should love them and cherish them. Again, I find myself relating to this work far too much. I thank God, I was able to break the chain of abuse when I had children.

I don't know you, or your personal history, but this work feels as though it is written by one who has either endured abuse or is somehow very knowledgeable with how it affects a child. This, helps provide the impact of the piece.

*Paw* What I really liked:
I LOVE that in every situation, the angels were there to comfort the child. And although very sad, I feel a wonderful wake up call was sent to potential abusive parents. (Especially, the reality that they can drive their own child to self inflicted death to escape the misery.)

*Paw* Spelling, grammar and punctuation :
No errors noted.

*Paw* Final Thoughts / Side Notes:
Thank you for sharing your gift of words with me, and allowing me to review this piece. Write on!

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Review of Christmas Crime  
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Please understand that this review is based on my own opinion and thoughts. I am not a professional editor or writer, although, I wish I were!

A suprise review for you! From: Lady Patrece of House Hightower "Game of Thrones

*Paw*Initial impression of your piece:
Well, I for one really wondered in the beginning, if this wasn't some kind of criminal activity in the makings. But alas, after reading through to the end, it was actually what it was said to be. A great hook there, because the reader needs to know what is really going on. But the methods employed in order to take care of these dogs, and the worry over sirens makes what wonder.
This story includes a healthy mix of entertainment and humor, along with keeping some guessing going on.
This tale also effectively provoked thoughts and feelings on how the owner of the dog was so quick to flee off to a tropical paradise, not even knowing those whose care the dogs would (eventually) be in. Ha! serves her right to come home to things, not quite as they were left!

*Paw* What I really liked:
What I liked the most was the part where she heard the growling, but could only see a happy go lucky little Cocker Spaniel, as she was halfway through the doggy door. I am glad for Stacy, that the German Shepherd fell victim to the pro-offered treat. German Shepherds are the best!

*Paw* Spelling, grammar and punctuation :
No errors noted.

*Paw* Final Thoughts / Side Notes:
A cute, quirky tale that keeps the reader hooked. One must know how it all turns out. Great job! Thanks for sharing!

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Review of It's Too Late  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Please understand that this review is based on my own opinion and thoughts. I am not a professional editor or writer, although, I wish I were!

A review for you! From: Lady Patrece of House Hightower "Game of Thrones

*Paw*Initial impression of your piece:
Initially, Kevin seemed much to polite and proper for one to believe he had committed the various accusations against him. He was mild, polite, and low keyed when being questioned. But later, when what was going to unfold in mere hours was unveiled, It made a little more sense. After all, anyone who knew what he had known, would want to make the most of that time. It would possibly tempt the most gentle person, to explore their dark side a bit, with no consequence to be faced.
It's a shame Dave hadn't known all of this sooner, and have had the opportunity to be with those he loved before the end came.
This piece grabs the reader, and keeps interest alive throughout. It is nicely written and easy to enjoy.

*Paw* What I really liked:
The continued suspense of the story is wonderful. I really had to wonder why Kevin hadn't shown more concern for his dire situation. There was enough tease there to let the reader know, he knew something that no one else did, but yet, not enough for us to guess what it was.

*Paw* Spelling, grammar and punctuation :
*** Here "...his clothes that didn’t match..."It would read smoother without the "that" in it, considering the rest of the sentence. (This in in paragraph one.)

*Paw* Final Thoughts / Side Notes:
Super read! Thank you so much for sharing and allowing me to read and review this work or literary art. Write on! If there were a 4.75 rating to be given, that is what I'd have given you.

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Review of The Rag Picker  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Please understand that this review is based on my own opinion and thoughts. I am not a professional editor or writer, although, I wish I were!

A review for you! From: Lady Patrece of House Hightower "Game of Thrones

*Paw*Initial impression of your piece:
What a powerful and moving message you have created in this piece. It is also a real eye opener too, if only the reader takes the time to focus on the true message being shared here. It matters not what privilege or opportunity you are born into; if you do not respect and cherish it, it will be lost to you in the end. Likewise, even if you have nothing but hope in life, you can make your dreams a reality. It's a simple matter of wanting to be the best you can be, and making it happen, no matter what. While most born into the more unfortunate scenario would not find the kindness the young Indian boy did, it doesn't change the fact that if you want it bad enough, you can make it happen. It all begins with a positive attitude.

This was an easy and pleasant read, with a smooth word flow and good structure.

*Paw* What I really liked:
The wonderful moral shared in this piece. I do hope others read this for what it truly is.

*Paw* Spelling, grammar and punctuation :
I did not find any errors in this.

*Paw* Final Thoughts / Side Notes:
Keep on writing. You have beautiful messages to share, and often beautiful messages are best shared in the way of a fable or story.

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Review of Teamwork  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Please understand that this review is based on my own opinion and thoughts. I am not a professional editor or writer, although, I wish I were!

A raid review for you! From: Lady Patrece of House Hightower "Game of Thrones

*Paw*Initial impression of your piece:
I find it so difficult to give you any helpful reviews, as your work is always so well done; at least the 3 items I have read and reviewed for you today.
As always, you take the reader by the hand, and walk them right into the midst of your story. I could almost sense myself as being that 'big brother'. Life was similar for me as a child; everything seemed to fall back on me, instead of my own brother having equal responsibilities. (You stirred past memories in me, with your piece.)
I believe that this story holds valuable lessons and morals in its words. The 'Sam's', 'Mum's' and 'Dad's' of this world need to be appreciated and valued. The 'Lisa's' of this world, need to open their eyes and realize that all should share in the responsibilities as equally as all should share in the rewards. Ah, but the meat of this story is so typical of today's families.

*Paw* What I really liked:
Again, I love how reader friendly this story is as far as: smooth flow, nice spacing, and not overly long sentences and paragraphs.
I adore Sam, and his maturity and obvious care and concern for his mother,who he knows already has so much pressure on her.
Appreciated as well, is that the father recognizes and praises the efforts of his children. This is so important to maintaining their willingness to continue to do so, and boosts their sense of self value. WONDERFUL!

*Paw* Spelling, grammar and punctuation :
You've got me here! I found no errors.

*Paw* Final Thoughts / Side Notes:
I have thoroughly enjoyed reading your work. Thank you so much for sharing your wonderful writing talent with your WDC community!

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Review of Ali and Mitch  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Please understand that this review is based on my own opinion and thoughts. I am not a professional editor or writer, although, I wish I were!

A raid review for you! From: Lady Patrece of House Hightower "Game of Thrones

*Paw*Initial impression of your piece:
Nicely written, and has an easy flow when reading it. You are quite talented with the written word.
Mitch and Ali must have still held a burning love for the other, over the years, even though they ended up with other spouses, for whatever reason. I love that they are so in love even after all of these years, they find instant comfort in each others company. It feels to the reader, as if they had never been apart in all those years. At dinner, they both knew they had to be with the other. As if there had never been any other option.
A fun, touching, and flirty story of the reuniting of two lost lovers. There is no doubt left in the readers mind, that they will be together for the duration, and make the most of the time they have been given.

*Paw* What I really liked:
I love that in this story, you show that just because people age, the need for love, romance,and intimacy still exist. And, that playful flirtation is alive and well.

*Paw* Spelling, grammar and punctuation :
No errors noted.

*Paw* Final Thoughts / Side Notes:
I really enjoy reading your work! You make the reader feel a part of the story, and skillfully invite them in to the world or your characters. Great job! Thank you for sharing!

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Review of Minor Key  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Please understand that this review is based on my own opinion and thoughts. I am not a professional editor or writer, although, I wish I were!

A raid review for you! From: Lady Patrece of House Hightower "Game of Thrones

*Paw*Initial impression of your piece:
It can be interesting from a readers perspective, reading a story written in English, yet where some ways of wording and spelling are different from common American English. I enjoy the differences very much.

This is a VERY nicely written story. You have made excellent work of showing the reader, rather than telling them. You brought this piece alive with vibrant descriptions of person, place, emotion, etc. It grabbed me right away, and held my attention throughout.

I find it a rather sad fact that many people live out their lives similarly. Laden with poor life choices and regrets. Unfortunately I am among them, so my heart goes out to him. I did notice (unless I somehow overlooked it), that you did no give name to your main character.

I appreciate how you kept your paragraphs nicely spaced, and not too long. It makes it much easier to read.

*Paw* What I really liked:
I really liked the way you painted the image of this story with your words!

This piece has a smooth flow to how it reads, and is easy to follow.

I also liked that despite his seeming failures, he tried to live life in a good and decent way.

*Paw* Spelling, grammar and punctuation :
No errors noted here. At first glance a couple of words seemed misspelled, but it is the difference in our types of English spelling, rather than an error.

*Paw* Final Thoughts / Side Notes:
Super work on this! I admire your writing talent and ability! PLEASE write on!

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Review of Rendering  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Please understand that this review is based on my own opinion and thoughts. I am not a professional editor or writer, although, I wish I were!

A raid review for you! From: Lady Patrece of House Hightower "Game of Thrones

*Paw*Initial impression of your piece:
I think this is a wonderful piece! It has the perfect amount of mystery to it, yet not leaving too many unanswered questions. It held my attention well, from beginning to end. I, personally gathered from this story, that she painted things as she wanted them to be, or in some cases how they used to be, and that would become the reality.
Very creative thinking and writing!

*Paw* What I really liked:
Emily is a very likeable character, with an extraordinary talent with painting.
I love the twist at the end, where hidden in her pond painting, was the man that had been asking about her, and I assume, whom she had been trying to distance herself from with the move.

*Paw* Spelling, grammar and punctuation :
***I noted a spacing error, in the paragraph beginning with "Saturday morning, Sarah Peabody straightened the pretty picture..." It is located further into that paragraph.
There were a few areas where I felt there might be a comma missing, but since I am not the 'best' with punctuation, I hesitate to try to correct you on these. Perhaps you could scan back over it, and will catch what I thought I found there. (Or, there are always free online grammar checkers, or good friends here at WDC.)

*Paw* Final Thoughts / Side Notes:
Wonderful, creative and engaging! Great job with this story! Thanks for sharing, and write on!

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Review of The Broken Goose  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Please understand that this review is based on my own opinion and thoughts. I am not a professional editor or writer, although, I wish I were!

A raid review for you! From: Lady Patrece of House Hightower "Game of Thrones

*Paw*Initial impression of your piece:
I found this to be a heartwarming and charming story. I have previously read and reviewed two other stories you have shared. This was quite different. When I looked at the date you published it, I understood! You have grown tremendously as a writer since this piece. While this IS very lovely, it could use a bit of editing and polishing. I did however, truly enjoy reading it.

*Paw* What I really liked:
Funny, it seems most of the best 'stuff' in a short story comes at the end. I thought it was wonderful, that even though Angel never quite found the 'happily ever after' she always wanted, she realized that she was now, quite happy with her life.
I also loved the part where the geese took up residence in her canoe, and she looked after them daily.

*Paw* Spelling, grammar and punctuation :
*** In the first, second and tenth paragraphs, there are sentences that are very long. While they say great stuff, they benefit by being broken into two sentences.
***"...over looking the ocean (comma here perhaps?) would have..."
***Here, I have indicated where there are capitalization's, that shouldn't be in use: "...“Here Momma Goose, Here Poppa Goose, Quack,..."
***"...Poppa Geese..."(Should be Goose).

*Paw* Final Thoughts / Side Notes:
While I did find some areas for improvement, I think this is a wonderful story. I am very inspired to see the incredible progress you have made over the years as well. You asked at the end if you should continue this. I say YES! Especially with the skill you have now. A bit of editing, and polishing will make this beginning great! I want to know what happens after Angel's family comes back home to live and help her run her business!
Thank you for sharing!

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Please understand that this review is based on my own opinion and thoughts. I am not a professional editor or writer, although, I wish I were!

A raid review for you! From: Lady Patrece of House Hightower "Game of Thrones

*Paw*Initial impression of your piece:
Very impressive work. No candy coating, no fluff. The facts, emotions, physical feelings and personal observations and experiences. I was right there, beside these two military journalists throughout the piece. You bring the sense of urgency alive with you frankly stated words.
Strange, isn't it, how we make life choices to better our circumstances, yet at times, just end up with more of the same, only in a more detrimental way? (Escaping the heat and sand of AZ, where he was safe, only to face the same in a deadly and dire situation.)
Writings such as yours, help bring awareness to what is, in my opinion candy coated, or even glamorized when presented to the general population. Far too many people, take for granted or even deny the hell our troops live (or not) through when subjected to a life of war.
Your work on this, kept me riveted throughout the reading of it.

*Paw* What I really liked:
This piece was written in a way that is just so real. And the ending, well, was unexpected, but so touching. The mother of the female journalist was offering comfort to him, although her daughter died protecting his very life.

*Paw* Spelling, grammar and punctuation :
No errors noted here.

*Paw* Final Thoughts / Side Notes:
I truly look forward to reading more of your work! Thank you for sharing. I honestly have zero criticism or improvement suggestions to offer. Write on!

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Please understand that this review is based on my own opinion and thoughts. I am not a professional editor or writer, although, I wish I were!

A review for you! From: Lady Patrece of House Hightower "Game of Thrones

*Paw*Initial impression of your piece:
Again, I enjoy the humor you spin into your writing, even the more subtle humor. It really makes this story great! The more this tale progresses, the more it grabs hold of the reader. You use a wonderful variety of working and keep things spinning. Wonderful job! I look forward to reading chapter 3, when it comes out.

*Paw* What I really liked:
While you keep it worded tastefully and with variance, even the most uneducated reader can easily follow this piece, yet it does not insult the intelligence of those more educated. Again the humor is appreciated and keeps this story in good balance.

*Paw* Spelling, grammar and punctuation :
Things I noticed

*Paw* Final Thoughts / Side Notes:
Thank you once again for sharing. You have a very creative and pleasant writing style. I have no doubt you can go super far, in this crazy world of writing! Write on!

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Please understand that this review is based on my own opinion and thoughts. I am not a professional editor or writer, although, I wish I were!

A raid review for you! From: Lady Patrece of House Hightower "Game of Thrones

*Paw*Initial impression of your piece:
While I found, what I believe to be a few punctuation errors (which I noted below), all in all, I found this story to be well written. It is easy to follow, and reads fairly smoothly. This held my interest as a reader,so good job on that. Some of the best days however, don't end as well, as captured in the twist at the end of the story. You put the plot twist at a perfect place, to make the reader want to read on. Now I'm asking myself all of those questions. Who's body? How long has it been there? Who put it there? Great grab!

*Paw* What I really liked:
I really appreciate the humor infused in this story, for example when referring to the goat, you stated " The baaad girl.". That sounds so much like something I would say! But even more than that, I loved the twist at the very end!

*Paw* Spelling, grammar and punctuation :
I am not the best, or worst at grammar, but will share my thoughts the best I can in this area.What I noticed

*Paw* Final Thoughts / Side Notes:
Great job, and thank you for sharing your work! Write on! (Please forgive me if I didn't get all punctuation suggestions correct. You can always use a free online grammar checker or a smart friend from WDC, to verify it. *Bigsmile*)

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Review of Treat or Trick?  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Please understand that this review is based on my own opinion and thoughts. I am not a professional editor or writer, although, I wish I were!

A Raid review for you! From: Lady Patrece of House Hightower "Game of Thrones

*Paw*Initial impression of your piece:
Wow! Excellent writing is demonstrated in this piece. You must have worked very hard on the editing and creation of it. If you did not work hard on editing, then I wish I had your knack for grammar and such.
I did notice, that during the dream, Kyle told Lisa to relax, that he wasn't going to bite her. But yet at the end of the story, when her friend Kate announced she was coming over, Lisa noted that the puncture marks on her heck, were nearly faded. Hmmm, that's curious for sure. Especially when to Lisa's knowledge of the dream, she was told she only drank of 'his" blood.

*Paw* What I really liked:
Believe it or not, my favorite thing, is that Lisa did not eat her cat! *Laugh*. Okay, so I am an oddball to choose this, but, I do so love animals, and just don't like it when they are victimized. *Blush*

*Paw* Spelling, grammar and punctuation :
No errors noted here! Great job.

*Paw* Final Thoughts / Side Notes:
Strange, that one who passes out at the site of a scratch on her knee, or her monthly cycle, is now offering to commune (via her own blood) with her best friend. It did seem that initially, Lisa was trying to figure out how to hide what happened from her friend, but by the time her friend got there, it was implied, that she were sharing her own fate with Kate.
Lots of plot twists, and turns are incorporated into this work. It definitely keeps the reader on their toes!

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Review of Sweet Larceny  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Please understand that this review is based on my own opinion and thoughts. I am not a professional editor or writer, although, I wish I were!

A raid review for you! From: Lady Patrece of House Hightower "Game of Thrones

*Paw*Initial impression of your piece:
A really cute story, which I enjoyed reading. I learned a lot about what I need to do and not do if I ever go out hunting for honey. *Bigsmile*

*Paw* What I really liked:
I really liked the way the characters spoke when conversing. It made me feel like I was witnessing the conversation, in the cute way in which they spoke.

*Paw* Spelling & Grammar:
What I intendified

*Paw* Final Thoughts / Side Notes:
With some editing and polishing, this story will shine like a beacon. It is very, very cute and deserves to shine! Thank you for sharing it!

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Review of Fun with Wings  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please understand that this review is based on my own opinion and thoughts. I am not a professional editor or writer, although, I wish I were!

A raid review for you! From: Lady Patrece of House Hightower "Game of Thrones

*Paw*Initial impression of your piece:
This is the third of your works I have both read, and enjoyed. I love your flair for the fantastical, in your work. What little girl (or even boy), wouldn't enjoy the transformation of becoming a butterfly and taking to the air. You did a wonderful job with this, especially considering it was for the writers cramp! Bravo!

*Paw* What I really liked:
In the ending, the older sister , even tough young, had enough insight to realize that their mother wouldn't be able to accept (or handle) the truth of their adventure. Being as such, she simply redirected the conversation.

*Paw* Spelling, grammar and punctuation : Please keep in mind, I am not "the best" in punctuation, but not "the worst" either. Where I am pretty certain, I will point things out. You can always double check with a free online grammar checker, if in doubt.
What I noticed

*Paw* Final Thoughts / Side Notes:
Keep up the great work you accomplish in your writings. You have a lovely imagination and true potential to make it big time!

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Review of The First Snow  
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Please understand that this review is based on my own opinion and thoughts. I am not a professional editor or writer, although, I wish I were!

A raid review for you! From: Lady Patrece of House Hightower "Game of Thrones

*Paw*Initial impression of your piece:
This is a super cute story, that perfectly aligns with the contest in which is was written for and entered into. This story reflects the importance of diversity, and the acceptance of such. If all in this world were the same, it would be quite the boring place! It also displays that just because things or people are different, doesn't mean they are dangerous, harmful or bad.

*Paw* What I really liked:
I appreciated the willingness of both the human and fairies, to come together for the occasion. The children were eager to understand the purpose and methods of the celebration. The fairies were open to allowing human participation, even in the preparations for it. Acceptance of differences; such an important ingredient for our world.

*Paw* Spelling, grammar and punctuation : PLEASE double check my accuracy, before making any changes, as I believe these comments are correct, but cannot guarantee it. *Bigsmile**Blush*
What I noted

*Paw* Final Thoughts / Side Notes:
I enjoyed this very much! Thank you for sharing a beautiful message in a way that even young readers can understand and enjoy! Write On!

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Please understand that this review is based on my own opinion and thoughts. I am not a professional editor or writer, although, I wish I were!

A raid review for you! From: Lady Patrece of House Hightower "Game of Thrones

*Paw*Initial impression of your piece:
Wow!Wow!This is an extremely well written story! I can clearly see that much time and effort went into the writing and editing of it. Great job!
I truly enjoyed reading this work. It kept my interest from start to finish, no problem! As a matter of fact, I found myself wishing I could be a fly on the wall when they go to dinner. (Hint, hint; continue this story!) It is creative and endearing!
It has just enough fantasy element, to really take the reader away from the real world for a short while. Isn't that why we read fiction, after all? To escape our reality!

*Paw* What I really liked:
There are two things I especially like. First, the little fairy and dragons' mission, to get the pair together. They knew just what it would take, and made sure it happened.
Second, I really like that when Owen explained to Holly what Alamtra meant, she didn't back out of the date. Instead, she was curious and wanted to know more.

*Paw* Spelling, grammar and punctuation :
No errors noted in this area. Great work!

*Paw* Final Thoughts / Side Notes:
A very lighthearted approach to a budding new love. Nicely written in a way that all audiences can enjoy it. Write on!

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Review of The Diner  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please understand that this review is based on my own opinion and thoughts. I am not a professional editor or writer, although, I wish I were!

A raid review for you! From: Lady Patrece of House Hightower "Game of Thrones

*Paw*Initial impression of your piece:
You used wonderful descriptive statements in this story. It makes one feel as if they are there, viewing the entire scene. Great job! I can only imagine his thoughts, as he waited for her as she requested, until her shift ended. The waitress, determined to find out what kept drawing him in, left with him on her arm. My guess is that 'she' was the draw for him, even if he were to shy to convey this fact.


*Paw* What I really liked:
I love the opening quote! ("The first symptom of love in a young man is shyness; the first symptom in a woman, it's boldness." ~Victor Hugo) It is so applicable to this story, it's crazy! Had her boldness not presented itself, they may have never interacted, nor 'hooked up'.
What a lonely existence it seems he has had. Being in college and yet never having had a significant other.

*Paw* Spelling, grammar and punctuation :
***Here, the first letter needs capitalization: would you sit back down, just for a few minutes?”

*Paw* Final Thoughts / Side Notes:
Nice work! Thanks for sharing. Remember to keep on writing! True potential is at your creative fingertips.

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Review of River Run  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please understand that this review is based on my own opinion and thoughts. I am not a professional editor or writer, although, I wish I were!

A raid review for you! From: Lady Patrece of House Hightower "Game of Thrones

*Paw*Initial impression of your piece:
Wonderful! This writing is captivating and kept my interest the entire time. There is excitement and danger. It is very well written, easy to follow, and made me feel as if I were right there in it! BRAVO! The content of this writing, is much different than most stories I read here. A refreshing change, to be sure. I see that this was written based on a photo prompt. I am very curious as to what the photo was, for it to inspire this piece.

*Paw* What I really liked:
I like the fact that even though written by a man, credit is given to the female partner as seeming to be a step ahead most of the time. It is all too often that women are portrayed to be "weak", and that just isn't always true. Thank you for that!

*Paw* Spelling, grammar and punctuation :
***Here; "My stomach reached," It should be spelled "retched".
***The fifth paragraph up from the bottom of the story is a really long sentence. It would read better split into two shorter ones somehow. It is the paragraph that begins with; "With the rest of the day a bust..."

*Paw* Final Thoughts / Side Notes:
I am very much, enjoying the reading and reviewing of your written creations! You have an excellent talent, and I appreciate you sharing it! Write on!

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Review of Anomanunka  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please understand that this review is based on my own opinion and thoughts. It is meant to be helpful in a caring way. I am not a professional editor or writer, although, I wish I were!

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*Paw*Initial impression of your piece:
I have to say, this is a very well written piece. It is easy to follow, reads smoothly, and keeps the reader engaged; (at least this reader), from start to finish! I would have enjoyed reading more details about what the farmer found upon his return, after the Indian raid. Show me the scene he returned home to, thus bringing it to life for me. Show me his physical and emotional reaction to finding that his wife was taken. I, as the reader, felt left out of this part. I would have liked to read more details too, of Anomanunkas' capture, and his experience of a week on the pole. It is lovely, that his wife snuck out to feed, care for and be with him when he was on the pole.

*Paw* What I really liked:
I love the ending! The explanation of "Anomanunka", and how it explains his patience and cooperation over the many years he was a servant to the chief. All the while, wanting nothing more, than to have his wife back.

*Paw* Spelling, grammar and punctuation :
There were no spelling or punctuation errors found. The only thing I found that I questioned, were a couple of sentences that were a bit lengthy. For example, the first paragraph. It is fairly short but, only one sentence made up the entirety of it.

*Paw* Final Thoughts / Side Notes:
Again, very well written. If the "show" factor was included a bit more in a couple of places, I would have rated this a 5! Thank you for sharing your talent, and allowing me to review it.

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Review of The Dream Fox  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please understand that this review is based on my own opinion and thoughts. I am not a professional editor or writer, although, I wish I were!

A review for you! From: Lady Patrece of House Hightower "Game of Thrones

*Paw*Initial impression of your piece:
Yet another very creative story of morals, written by you. You touch on important life lessons, such as: don't judge a book by it's cover(the Ogre),realizing that what we want most, may be right in front of us, being freely offered to us (the little girls love), that there are consequences to our actions, sometime positive ones, sometimes negative, and that it is wrong to take from others, that which is not freely given.

*Paw* What I really liked:
I liked that the Ogre returned every bad dream to it's owner, explaining to the fox that even one's dreams are a part of them.
I also liked the implied message of being happy with who you are. This doesn't mean we shouldn't strive to be all we are intended to be, but loving oneself is a must, to find true happiness.

*Paw* Spelling, grammar and punctuation :
***No missing words this time! Yeay!
***Punctuation is missing in some areas where it should be used, but again, this is not my strongest point, so I must defer the corrections to an online grammar checker, which there are many good ones that are free, like Hemingway, for example.

*Paw* Final Thoughts / Side Notes:
Nice! Keep up the great writing. I do, so enjoy your work! Run this through a grammar checker, polish it up, and you have a shinining piece of work here! *Bigsmile*

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Please understand that this review is based on my own opinion and thoughts. I am not a professional editor or writer, although, I wish I were!

A review for you! From: Lady Patrece of House Hightower "Game of Thrones

*Paw*Initial impression of your piece:
This is a truly engaging read, that held my interest throughout! Great job! I see that although it is fictional, it is based on a true story. One must hold Nellie (and her real life inspiration)in high regard, as she handled herself and the situation exceptionally well. Given her age, she was lucky to survive the heat, fumes and lack of hydration and oxygen, while in the trunk of the car. I also enjoyed the fact that you shared her thoughts with us, the readers. That goes a long way toward helping the reader "know" the character and a bit of her personality.

*Paw* What I really liked:
I LOVE the spunk of the main character, Nellie. Even in her advanced years, she was unwilling to allow herself to be victimized without repercussions. Without that spunk, she may well have never survived. But, my absolute favorite part was her statement in the very last sentence. "Gettin' old is not for sissies!"

*Paw* Spelling, grammar and punctuation :
Run On Sentences
Punctuation

*Paw* Final Thoughts / Side Notes:
I truly enjoyed this short story, and look forward to reading more of your writing. Thank you for sharing, and allowing me to review this! Keep up the great work! (Or is it play?)


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Rated: E | (2.5)
Please understand that this review is based on my own opinion and thoughts. I am not a professional editor or writer, although, I wish I were!

A review for you! From: Lady Patrece of House Hightower "Game of Thrones

*Paw*Initial impression of your piece: It is refreshing to read something here on WDC that is intended to be inspirational, positive and uplifting. Yet, it is done in a way to help others help themselves. Great job! You share many great ideas with the reader, and you obviously put a lot of effort into encouraging and cheering us on to become the person we want to become. Thank you for that!

*Paw* What I really liked:
Your passion to help others to achieve the personal 'greatness' they desire, shines through like a beacon!

*Paw* Spelling, grammar and punctuation :
***The following excerpt from your piece, is a little difficult to follow as worded. I had to re-read it a couple of times to grasp what you were telling us. "WHAT & HOW YOUR LIFE YOU WOULD LOVE TO LOOK LIKE."
***It would also be easier to follow if you took out the "I__TRY_TO___MANAGE_MYSELF_AS_MY_WORD_htm"
which is in here several times. It is a bit distracting to have the page broken up by this so much, as well as the large spaces between lines.
***As for punctuation and word choice, I noted some errors. It could be helpful for you to run your piece through a free online grammar checker, to assist you with identifying these areas.


*Paw* Final Thoughts / Side Notes:
You share wonderful advice and a very encouraging essay with us, the readers. With a bit of editing and the use of a grammar checker, this piece can shine through and through! Thank you for your kind heart and for allowing me to review this work. Keep on keeping on!

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Review of All For Love  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Please understand that this review is based on my own opinion and thoughts. I am not a professional editor or writer, although, I wish I were!

A review for you! From: Lady Patrece of House Hightower "Game of Thrones

*Paw*Initial impression of your piece:
I really enjoyed reading your story! It is creative and cute, to say the least! I think it is precious that he takes a stroll with his cow each evening, and the affection shared between the two. But then, I love animals (most of them anyhow)so perhaps I enjoy that fact more than many folks would.
The description of the behavior of the two women whom are his cohabitants, makes me really feel for Kevin. No wonder he likes to hide out in his computer room so much! Thankfully he has a wonderful housekeeper and cook, who is very different from those two. She's pretty witty too, playing it off as she suspects there is a woman in the scene.

*Paw* What I really liked:
I love how Kevin leads the women on to believe that he has a 'human' female in his life. He doesn't come right out and lie, but feeds them just enough truth to keep his secret and keep the ole gals from trying to play matchmaker.

*Paw* Spelling, grammar and punctuation :
General errors caught
Punctuation

*Paw* Final Thoughts / Side Notes:
I look forward to reading more of your very creative writings! Great job with this story. Thank you so much for sharing this very enjoyable piece! *Bigsmile*

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