|Hello from Patrece with Simply Positive Reviews!!!
Please understand that this review is based only on my own opinion and thoughts. I am not a professional editor or writer, although, I wish I were! Any suggestions made here are made in an honest and caring effort to help you identify possible areas of improvement, and to share what I believe worked well for you in this writing.
Why I chose to review this work:
I saw your request for open and honest comments / feedback. The title grabbed me as well, because I myself did not have the most pleasant childhood.
Wow! I have to say that this story just breaks my heart into a million tiny pieces! I think it is wonderful that you are writing this out. It may serve to be a form of healing for you, to some degree at least. My heart goes out to all of these tortured souls, but especially to you.
In all honesty, the flow needs quite a bit of work. With edits, some re-wording and a bit of polishing, this can be achieved. (I will share some suggestions shortly). I personally believe this writing is worthy of the effort it will take to get it polished up. Consider this your rough draft, once edited, it will shine!
This writing is packed with emotional punches! Especially the latter part (to me anyhow) where you were forced to choose who you loved more, and to have to prove it in such a way that resulted in extreme cruelty to not only the dog, but to you! While my childhood was pretty messed up, I was never forced to do such painful and self damaging acts, thank goodness. I can only begin to imagine your pain. I felt such extreme sorrow, sadness and pain in your experiences. It made me want to just reach out to comfort you and help you heal. This is one of those writings, that I am sure will remain with me, as the reader for a very long time, if not eternally.
I have several suggestions I would like to share. To make it more organized, I've arranged them in a dropnote list for you. Click the link below, and you will be able to view them. I sincerely hope you find my suggestions to be of value to you. If at any time you would like to talk to me about any of it, do not hesitate to contact me! While I am not the most accomplished writer, I truly believe I can share some helpful ideas.
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Final Thoughts / Side Notes:
Please know that when I rated this as I did, it had nothing to do with the content. It was based on the above information I shared in the suggestion area. I fully encourage you to keep at this, and shine it up and expand upon it. I think it is truly a writing that will be vital to your personal healing process, and something others need to read. Many think they have it hard...few realize how others have it harder. I am here if you ever want to bounce around thoughts or ideas. Thank you for sharing, what had to be a very difficult subject and childhood for you.
Just do the next WRITE thing!
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