Thank you for sharing amazing parts of your grandmother's life. She was truly a fantastic woman before Parkinson's showed up in her life. Your piece shows me that I need to take advantage of the time I have before the symptoms overcome me. I have a handful of symptoms now, and no diagnosis yet. It seems the worst part is the fear of what the future may hold.
Short but powerful. I like the fact that this is a poem instead of an essay. Your love and passion and your sympathy for your grandfather cut like a knife through all the words.
I have symptoms but no diagnosis yet. I wanted to know what the future might be like. I hope years will pass before I get to this point. It seems that death is the only relief.
I am grateful that you shared. God bless you and your grandfather's soul.
I have Parkinson's symptoms but have not been to a doctor for a diagnosis yet. I am 68, and to this point have been healthy, except for an occasional psychotic episode from my bipolar disorder. It is a mood disorder, and I know it will likely be more intense if I am diagnosed.
Thank you for sharing. I understand that I must aqppr4e3ciate my life now as it may be harder to do so in the future.
I need the mailing address so that I can pay my dues by check. Is it in the sitr somewhere or can you send it to me or post the address here in Support?
I need to send you a check by the US Post office for my dues. I know I've seen the address, but I can't find it now. Could you please tell me where to look, or post the address in Support?
What a wonderful essay. Your investment is clearly stated and explained. The author has a deep perception about the body, mind, and soul connection. I enjoyed the read very much.
I love your thoughts, your way of expression. Will send you a private e-mail. Your poem has inspired me to ask you for a favour regarding this great work.
You have an amazing creativity when writing about depressing things. This is another that paints a visual image of a feeling with clarity.
As 'Official Grammar Grouch' I couldn't lose an opportunity to go into action. It's a mistake I always had to stop and think about, and say it out loud to make sure I use the correct form.
What you have written reads, "My candle loses it is flame."
I know that you meant was its, with no apostrophe.
I t ' s stands for "it is". Use its in EVERY other case."
I know you probably know this already. Since you already caught me in a couple of editing positions, I wanted to return the favor (LOL).
Lovely depressing imagery, all the way to including movement in your poem, with "blood dripping." This poem has character and style. I like the way you write, and I understand your imagery all too well.
WOW! This is a very interesting and thought provoking article. I had wondered about the exponential way population seems to grow. When do we run out of room?
I've even heard of plans to start burying people feet down/head up, when being placed in the ground, rather than horizontally laying down, so to speak.. One hundred years ago, people could bury pretty much where they selected. Elvis is buried in his back yard, right?. Now we have all sorts of codes about secure casket sealing tops and vaults with concrete on all sides. Did you know people in Louisiana bury in vaults, mausoleums (sp?) above ground because of the historic flooding in the lowlands. What happens when all the cemetaries fill up?
And what happens to the government deficit when all of us Baby Boomers are no longer generating capital, but needing goverment help for health, food, and a roof to retire under. Is this that economic cliff we are facing now. And many Boomers' parents are still living, and needing care.
I don't think China has the answer, but this is certainly an issue we all should think about.
Excellent article, and welcome to Writing.com. I look forward to reading more of your work. Really enjoyed it.
The only "Star Trek" poem I've ever run across was the one Data wrote about his cat, "Spot." It may still be posted here at Writing.com. I don't think I'll use Data's meter and rhyme as a starting point for any Trek tales I may be ablt to dream up. I know I've had ideas simmering at the back of my mind for ages. How could a writer not?
And only one entry? If I dedicate my writings to a character, it will be a difficult choice. Thanks for a contest that has me motivated!
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Hope this contest catches the eyes of other Trekies!.
This is such a COOL IDEA for a comemorative 46th Anniversary celebration.
What an interesting idea for a WDC activity. I would like to travel the world with you, and see all of the cultural trinkets you can collect for your auction.
Does Texas count as a different culture? I can't donate a pony, sorry. I've got plenty of stickers though.
Thirty days of blogging is actually quite a serious commitment. Actually, I know my limits these days. You can only write so much in 24 hours per day, and I have to have down time too. I', TRYING to edit a manuscript for publication, but I can't make myself work on it anymore. I'm just trying to blog every couple of days to jeep up with myself.
But with a new month coming up, this would sure be a good idea for a writer to go for. Just a few minutes to sit down and blog for 30 days. It's not as long as Lent, for Heaven's sake. You never know till you try, and this sounds like so much fun.
I like this narrative poem, in the realm of those who battled the sea in Greek times. I can almost see the god Zues blowing his wrath, though you never mentioned mythology.
Your rhyme scheme is impeccable; you hit every beat with a great contextual and rhyming word.
And you wraped up the story by having her blow away to freedom in the end, though she didn't feel that way when loosened from theast.
You take your reader from point a and through several emotions to get to an ending that wasn'r necessarily obvious. I like this one.
This is a well-worded advertisement for knowing and using proper grammar. I'm glad you are here as a resource. I used to teach English for 12 years, and I remember most of the rules. I know not everyone does, and I try to help some times.
Sometimes when I bring up the creative usage of punctuation in reviews, the newbie claims " e e cummings" on me, and seems to get offended. I believe you have to work for your best creations, and punctuation, or lack of it is a vital part of that. I also believe that goes double for poetry, but don't get this grammar grouch started about that. There's true and direct purpose behind the use of each mark. Thanks for reminding me and spreading good writing tactics.
Terse and accurate. I'm 57 and put my address on the Internet too much early on. I can't even keep sorted all the mial I get. At this writing I may have a letter from my best friend in the "junk oile". I go thru it twice--a quick scan and a later letter reading, as my vision focus isn't what it used to be.
We Baby Boomer's haven't nearly done enough yet.
Your governmental quotes, and line of attack are great. Super job, and you speak for me too.
Beautiful! I see soft pastel, and the gusts of wind, and almost a view from the hillside. Then you step in with a story. Perfect form. I haven't tried flash fiction myself. Can I study your form? This one is just perfect.
This is a lovely poem, and the beautiful pictures make it even more special. I like the way you used the background and font colors to make the image more visually exciting.
I can tell you have your own system for capitalization, because you were consistent all the way through. Read your favorite poets for variety. I always cap the first word of a line, unless I've indented it. Whatever you are most comfortable with--you're off with angel wings my dear. Write on!
Very informative. I'd never heard of this in dogs, or beagles. Thank you for writing this. I worked in a vet clinic for a year, and studied vet technology for two years. I can tell from your notations that you've done a complete reference for those who may someday need this info for their dear pets.
Powerful and emotionally gripping. Excellent effort--so full of meaning and dubious emotional hideaways. I'm bipolar, and I can really fell it in your work. Very powerful.
Write on, A sunflower in Texas
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