|My allowance was .25/week also! It took me a month to save up for a 45 rpm record. I identify with the character in your story.
One place you put dam when you meant damn. And your sister's idol needs an apostrophe in it, and actually in this case you need to capitalize Mom and Dad because you call them that for their names, and you always capitalize names.
When you say you knew your sister was old enough to chaperone, I would make the comparison bigger, like, at 15 she was practically an adult. Makes it a bit funnier, if it works from your viewpoint.
"They had sung their last song", would be the correct usage. "Heros" doesn't need the apostrophe because it's plural.
I was laughing nout loud at the image of you and your sister gathering all the neighbor's papers. You've done a good job of focusing on your storyline. And Peter was my favorite Monkee too, plus Mickey! And I had a good laugh at the ending too, and a great way to end it. I enjoyed your story very much. If you read it through, there's another part you could edit because it has two apostrophes around one word. This was a fun read. Thanks for sharing!
a sunflower in Texas
ps. Did you know Michael's mother created Liquid Paper? I used to know where her house was in Dallas. That's where I live now: separate Monkees have done shows of late, but I still haven't seen then. Your story makes me remember fun times.