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Review of Between  
Review by Used2BePaulZ
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello there, LunaMoon.

I found this little jewel sitting quietly in your port, and thought to myself: This needs acknowledging.

Such a gentle, simple poem. I love how it quietly hums its veiled words of wisdom as they flow like a spring breeze ever so lightly across my minds' eye.

A lovely poem. Well done.

Paul
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Review of The Squirrel  
Review by Used2BePaulZ
Rated: E | (5.0)
Clever little buggers, aren't they. Fictional or factual. Not to be the guy who spits in you Cheerios, but he'll win, eventually. We're never smarter than Nature. Cleverer in isolated moments perhaps.

Quite an entertaining read however. I never once felt sorry or saddened for Ol' Satan. But you, somewhat. *Headbang*

Couple of spelling items: "dubed" in the intro section has double b's, and "urking" in the paragraph you mention the "REALLLY LONG CREEK!" is Irking. But that's intended as "Just Mentioning", and not nit-picking.

Nice piece!

Paul
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Review of life at eighty  
Review by Used2BePaulZ
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Willy, I gotta tell you, you had me after the short description!

I may only be a Spring Chicken of 68, but when I read the 6th line I mentally shouted "AMEN my brother!"

I can't imagine that so much has ever been expressed in less than thirty words before. Glad I got to read them.

Paul
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Review of The Sound of Ice  
Review by Used2BePaulZ
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Simon,

I like this, I do. Clever, consistent and engaging.

My particular preferences run towards meter which doesn't get in the reader's way, and rhyme which doesn't come off as forced. I believe you've hit both nails quite squarely.

The only question I'd pose is: Are you aware that the 1st line, 5th stanza has the word firmly twice?

Nice job relating a moment most all of us have had the displeasure of experiencing.

You should do more!

Paul
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Review by Used2BePaulZ
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Yo there, Ben, still clever as ever I see. Remember the Cafe Noir? Me, Brenda, Bob and Ben-- Man, them was good days. Yup, PaulZ ~ Je Suis le Reve, that was/is me. Got myself locked out, never able to log-in again for the last near three years. So I finally just up and started over. Since the 19th, yesterday. Now I'm truly feeling like a newbie with the recent changes in maneuvering WDC. Woof!

I was just trying to put a plug in here, and so far failing miserably. The silver lining is spotting your name just above the plug area. So that's a bonus.

Well I'm not certain this falls strictly within the parameters of a review, so let me just say your creativity interlocking the various formats with your own First Person Comments was Top Drawer, and rated several chuckles and consistent smiling on my part. Et Voila, mon vieux.

Paul
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Review of The Mighty...  
Review by Used2BePaulZ
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello there once again, Robin *Bird* Very happy to have found you're still around and active on WDC. Perhaps an introduction/reintroduction would be helpful at this point? As of yesterday, Feb 19th, I created a new account on WDC. You would remember me as PaulZ - Je suis le reve. But around 3 years ago, solely due to my own dunderheadedness which I won't go into just now, I ended up getting myself locked out of WDC. Tell you another time if you like. Funny thing is I can still find my old profile.

Can I just tell you that I forgot how much I admire your style? I read this poem and I found myself remembering what a marvelous poet you are. Perfect meter, wonderfully effective rhyme scheme. Nothing comes off as "forced" in any way.

Hope to hear back from you, if you will, whenever you have a few moments.

Paul
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