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Review of My story  
Review by Peacerose
Rated: 13+ | (2.5)
Dennis,
You need a comma(,) after June. "kissing her new boyfriend" is better. "Has she ever loved me since she broke up with me so easily? Met me saying words like". "but I understood that I got carried away with faking my illness" is unclear. "that nothing would ever get any" could be changed to would not get any". "Convinced that I really wanted to do it" made me "happy imagining her crying...." "What would she be" feeling. "Will she realize how important she was to me?"
These are the major grammatical errors I find with your piece. You can do this!

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Review by Peacerose
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you Pastor Juan. You have given me something to think about.
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Review by Peacerose
Rated: E | (5.0)
Good! It was well written and anger diffused at the right time.
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Review of I always cared  
Review by Peacerose
Rated: E | (4.5)
On the fifth line up from the bottom you need to put in an apostrophe "Ill" needs to be I'll.
Very powerful!
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Review of Smile, please!  
Review by Peacerose
Rated: E | (5.0)
Very insightful and powerful writing! I will probably need to read it again to get it all. But that's fine! Very well written.
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Review of Take Hold  
Review by Peacerose
Rated: E | (5.0)
Very Inspirational!
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Review by Peacerose
Rated: E | (5.0)
Well written!
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Review of True Sentience  
Review by Peacerose
Rated: E | (5.0)
Interesting story. Creative way to look at sentience. I like the story. It's well written.
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Review by Peacerose
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wonderfully written!
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Review by Peacerose
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for your insights. I have been in a similar situation only mine lasted 19 years with 10 more years of recovery. Now I can say that my life is infinitely better. My husband of the last 6 years is truly top-notch. I still live in poverty, but it's easier living here than it was before. Your thoughts are poignant and I can totally relate.
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Review by Peacerose
Rated: E | (5.0)
Insightful and on target. Well written!I
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Review of The Library Lady  
Review by Peacerose
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wonderful story!
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Review of Bugs in Amber  
Review by Peacerose
Rated: E | (4.5)
Good story CJ. Very well told from both perspectives.
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Review by Peacerose
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wonderful Story. My husband even smiled. Great writing!!
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Review of Haunted Hotel  
Review by Peacerose
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Cute story. Along the lines of one I wrote a couple of months ago. I didn't notice anything that needed to be adjusted, but I will go back and read it again. Thank you for writing. The door needs 'its' hinges tightened.
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Review of Panic  
Review by Peacerose
Rated: E | (4.5)
re-find is the only thing I found. Very emotional. I'll remember if I encounter a heart attack. Well written. Thanks for writing.
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Review by Peacerose
Rated: E | (5.0)
Very uplifting! Well written!
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Review by Peacerose
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow!! Thank you for relating that experience! I copied the statement you wrote "I came to the conclusion a life lived without passion is a very slow way to freeze to death." I am going to cross stitch that on a pillow.!
This was well written and thought out. Please keep writing!!
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Review by Peacerose
Rated: E | (4.0)
Well constructed! There is a problem with some of your punctuation that should be at the end of the sentence, but isn't. Quotes should be in " " (quotation marks). Your phrases need to be in quotation marks as well.I think if you fix those points, you will have an easier to read article. I like what you have to say and how you said it.
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Review of Back to Dust  
Review by Peacerose
Rated: E | (4.5)
Well written and graphic! It's a shame he died.
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Review of Nothing Special  
Review by Peacerose
Rated: E | (5.0)
That certainly will help!! Well written. Please write more!
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Review of Sheets  
Review by Peacerose
Rated: E | (5.0)
I used to feel that way, but now that I've thrown off the "sheets" I am able to breathe again and experience life in a new way. Good Writing!
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Review by Peacerose
Rated: E | (5.0)
Very well thought out and constructed. I agree that we are here to bless others and in doing so, we show God that we are grateful! Please keep writing.
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Review of Number 11  
Review by Peacerose
Rated: E | (4.5)
If I have my information correct, the "ball" in ice hockey is called a "puck". Near the end of the 19th paragraph, than needs to be then. Using than, you are comparing. Other than that, it was well written and the career was well documented. Good writing!
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Review by Peacerose
Rated: E | (4.5)
Interesting way to upset a ghost!
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