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A very open and insightful essay on the struggles of living with an aging mentally ill relative. It gives a rich picture of how it has effected your life. Your love and forgiveness is evident throughout the piece. I am glad that you are able to spend this time with her. Thank your for sharing this deeply personal story.
A good cautionary tale. This folklore has the feel of a traditional old-world story. I liked the twist of the goblin growing as he ate the years of the boy. I found him getting thrown all the way around the world was very funny. I really enjoyed reading this.
An insightful essay on writing. Your explanation of the process and your feelings on writing is relatable and maybe even nearly universal. You put the power of words in an eloquent essay that encourages as well as informs. I enjoyed reading this piece.
An intense poem of breaking through pain and suffering. The imagery shows your struggle to overcome cruelties you have experienced and still hold on to hope. The flow carried me through the entire poem easily. I hope you have found yourself in a better place.
An intriguing poem. I found myself asking how being upbeat can be a negative trait. That question is sort of answered that it causes you to act too fast. I liked how you illustrated how we beat each other down. The last line was the perfect end, to warn of burnout. I enjoyed reading this poem.
An entertaining story. The characters were engaging and believable. The build up to the reveal was well done. Not focusing on the scary aspects lightened the story and eased the reader through the story. I liked the end when her grandfather welcomed her home and it was a nice haunting. I enjoyed reading this story.
An entertaining chapter. The action and interaction between all of the characters was smooth and easy to follow. The characters were engaging, believable and likeable. This piece of story makes the reader want to read more. I enjoyed reading this chapter.
A very dramatic poem of the struggles of the colonists as winter arrived. The stark imagery shows the suffering. The flow easily carried me through the entire poem. The colonists dying from poisoned food was brutal, much like the time was brutal. I enjoyed reading this poem.
A very dramatic short story. The characters were engaging and relatable. Their love is evident throughout the entire story. Leaving the question of if they survive and make it to the next star unanswered leaves the reader to answer it for themselves, engaging them with the story. I enjoyed reading this story.
A very loving tribute to your beloved daughter. I am so sorry for your profound loss. The imagery breathes life into the pain of losing a child. The flow gently walks me through the poem. Your love for your daughter are evident in every word. Thank you for sharing.
A very adorable story of a newlywed fight. This story illustrates that marital spats are usually over simple, even silly things. Having the huge drama over a single stolen fry was very amusing. The characters are relatable as a young couple. I enjoyed reading this.
A short but dramatic poem. The imagery creates a vivid picture of the dichotomy of peace and war found in wartime. The flow easily carried me through the entire poem. I found the message of the armistice a hopeful one, only to be clouded over by the breaking of the armistice in the last line. I enjoyed reading this.
An intriguing short story. The parasites were terrifying. The characters were engaging and believable. Their fear was clear to see and fear. Ending the story at the moment that the parasitic worms were about to take over the plane leaves the reader wanting more. I enjoyed reading this.
A very entertaining short story. The deliberate typos capturing the loss of the abilities of thought and typing from loss of blood was amusing. The character was engaging and his struggle and desperation are relatable. Not explaining exactly what the deal he struck with the muse encourages the reader to come up with it themselves. I enjoyed this story.
An interesting story. It captured the emotions very well. The character was engaging. Ending it with an unanswered question leaves the reader wanting more. The mystery of the heart painting being left unsolved has the reader creating their own answers. I enjoyed reading this.
A very entertaining short story. The characters were engaging and believable. I liked how you gave a bit of a writing lesson in the story. The ending was a very happy ending with the kid that did not like to read becoming a successful author. I enjoyed reading this.
A good example of the Italian sonnet. The imagery showed the misery and the tranquil beauty of winter. The flow carried me along easily through the poem. I love winter, so I appreciated the beautiful picture of the snowy scene. I really enjoyed reading this.
I can see why this was awarded a blue ribbon. It is very inspirational. When you feel worn down, the message the poem gives, rejuvenates the spirit. The imagery drew a clear picture of strength and determination.The flow easily carried me along the poem. I enjoyed reading this.
A very dramatic poem. The repeating of the phrase, "You and I" brings it all together as a whole. The imagery painted a vivid picture of love and just being together. The flow picked me up and easily carried me through the poem. I enjoyed reading this poem.
An interesting short story. Having the character being transported to a more exciting life by words on a puzzle, wonderful symbolism of the power of words. The character was engaging. Having a story with only one character worked well. I enjoyed reading this story.
A very sad poem. You managed to pack in a lot of emotion into a very short poem. The imagery created a vivid picture into your struggles. The flow gently walked with you in this snapshot. I hope you are in a better place emotionally.I enjoyed reading this poem.
A wonderful story about the importance of independence and standing up for your dreams. The character was engaging and likeable. The love you showed her Avalon was plain to see. I hope that her family finally accepted her, even though she was following her heart. I enjoyed reading this story.
A very entertaining poem. Having Suzy the Snake turn out to be the scared creature was a pleasantly unexpected shift of perspective. The flow picked me up and easily carried me through the entire poem. The imagery was happy, yet dramatic. I enjoyed reading this poem.
An intriguing short story. To me, the twist at the end, proved to be a commentary on biological/germ warfare. I liked how you left the question of whether the Deemions succeeded in killing everyone in the spaceship and taking over the Universe unanswered, allowing the reader to create the ending themselves.
A very emotional poem. This poem could give voice to others who have experienced an abusive parent. I am sorry you went through that, I hope you are in a better place. The imagery paints a rich picture of a sample of what you experienced. Thank you for sharing.
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