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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hello Samantha, a curious tale. Your main agenda seems to revolve around affirming the right of persons to relate no matter what their sexual orientation. I find myself wondering about the role of the Christian school in communicating this truth. I would want to know more about this school in relationship to what you are talking about. Is it a bully like Jerome that sends people to hell? I leave your writing also wondering about the murder scene that involved Jared and his lover. I do not have a clear sense of what happened because Jared admits guilt and then in the next sentence share how it would be hard for anyone to believe him.
So does that mean that one can get away with murder, even though that obviously is not your main point.
thanks for sharing. You offer a lot to ponder.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (2.5)
Hello Soultress, I leave wondering more about who you are. I can capture that you have been through crisis, are having trouble about communicating what that means in your relationships. I would encourage you to unpack your thoughts with someone you trust. It may not mean anymore to share. It may just mean sorting through how to do the best you can with who you are.
I leave seeing a lot of loose ends. There are spelling and grammar glitches. Above all I experience you as a person looking to love and be loved. I pray that you find that for yourself and share that with the many persons that are feeling lost and wondering if anyone cares.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Now that is a story that I an truly resonate with. I enjoy the way you are able to use language dialect to communicate that there is a bridge between cultures. Much of what you say is truth that I have come to know from talking to others about the religious understanding of the native Indian. As you share much of the issue is working with what is already there, rather than imposing truth on a people, whether you are a pilgrim or Indian. Thanks for sharing. I left feeling a strong connection with you and the truth you share.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Tim well done. It was a great read. I have bowled and the greater temptation is to throw it hard expecting good results. Your rhyme and rhythm offer a different lane to try. It's the way of finesse and working within abilities. At the end of the day results matter. I enjoyed your poem. It was a strike!!😁
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Review of TURKEY TROT  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
It was fun Sandra, especially the anticipation of having a turkey for dinner. I am guessing the mention of cranberry sauce alludes to the fact that you can not have a turkey without it. The dialect is colorful. I feel an earthy invitation at hand to join the dance. Who knows what one will find in the end, Maybe turkey!!!
thanks I just happen to like turkey, Yum, let me dance on over.
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Review of The Sun Is Gone  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Keaton, I guess in a manner of speaking it is all about perception. In this story the writer is the guide. I am lead into a place where the sun is gone... I am left wondering what a world without sun is like. Can I deal with that reality or am I left imagining what was and may never be again.
thanks for sharing. I enjoy the challenge of knowing your work.
There is a misspelling of "there", not the early on. Keep writing. It is always a pleasure to read your work.
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Review of THERE NO MORE  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
hello catdok, there seems to be more to what is going on than what I am seeing. You offer up a presence that is more material than personal. You use the word rigid and add the semblance of a figurine. It comes across for me as a metaphor of life. I am in a sense redeemed for some purpose. Maybe this figure is the same way. It is notices and in awareness. Now let's see what happens once some one knows and admits the being of this thing matters.
thanks for sharing!!
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
People will come to know me
One sentence at a time
One poetic tryst
Stacked in measurable lines
All leading somewhere
They desperately want to go
A great escape through words
A cryptic message made clear
The black sky will burn
What will be left
Will be as bright as any life
Ever thought possible by me
Before such brightness
I read the lines and find a reason to want to know the person. It is in the darkness of anyone person that one comes to find a light like the stars in the sky that look beyond the mystery of deity to a place that allows for a vision to write once more.
Thanks for Sharing Keaton.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
The hook is the whole idea that like Ted this person sees something worth attending to and yet Who is Ted? I enjoyed the description of the bird through this mysterious familiar.
as I’m sure Ted must have done,
with admiration and awe
as he watches this creature
rip and swallow some more.

So majestic!, he sighs,
so I bow my head.
Maybe Ted is part of the allusion of a kill beyond the nest.
thanks for sharing Kat woman.
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Review of There Is A Secret  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I like the tenor of your poem nelson. I enter into a mystery of finding out for myself what it means to be in relationship with a being or thing that has yet to be determined. The metaphor of the book of time lends itself to a marvelous array of impressions. I may be lost for a time and yet in the course of a rhyme I may come to a page that is written as a poem by the name: "There is a Secret". For me that reality is more than enough. Thanks.
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Review of The Price of Fame  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I love the way you write Amani, you write with a sense of offering a reason for wanting to find one's way in a metaphoric way on the football field of life. In your story there is a focus on one hit after another leading to the prospect of a concussion of some kind that might end it all. I guess baseline you offer up the meaning of giving one's life for something that others might remember you for. The format is a bit distracting. I am guessing it has a purpose of racing me down a field. I have trouble keeping up with it. Then there are the few marks in dialog. "a". I have been told why and still don't know. Thanks for sharing. Keep writing.
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Review of Sloppy pig  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
I see what I get really good poet. Another words I am left to create my own pictures. I catch a bit of wit in a cartoonist cuisine. I sense an appreciation for pig culture I have not acquired. Thanks for sharing. I love the way you see for yourself how it works for you. Maybe that is good enough.
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Review of Sunset Star-Rise  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I enjoyed the way you use words to paint a poignant picture with darkness as a background. The splash from the milky way, the crescent moon chasing the sun, the stars springing one by one out of darkness. I thank you for your vision, using a palette of words to see what others only look at.
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Review of The Sad Clown  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
thanks for letting us hear the scream. I love the lucid emotional imagery. You offer a way to get into the world of the addict without needing to become one yourself. The image of the sad clown says it all. In searching for ecstasy she lost sight of friends who were at a loss to know what to do with the frown.
Favorite lines: I saw her before they closed the casket her lifeless face painted up and for the first time in many years she was smiling but, those that knew her know that it wasn’t real it was just the finale act of the show-The sad clown
That says it all. What is real after all?
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Review of Fire  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
Hello Amber, at some points it works for me. I love the allusion to having a voice choked as if it was attuned to smoke in the air. The idea of touch, maybe even warmth. I feel twisted by considering whether you are trying to say the fire is destructive, life affirming or even both. Tell me more about what it means for you to be burnt alive and what this same fire means for you searching for words.
thanks for sharing.
keep writing
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Review of The Choice  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Lynn, that was a fun ride especially if you know anything about golf which you most undoubtedly do. I especially like the way you lift up an internal landscape which mirrors the course that he will "hap"hazardly misjudge and be faced with how his life became a hazard of regrets and resentment, because he lost a game. Maybe it is time he chose a different course/club.
Thanks for sharing.
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Review of A Narrow Escape.  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello sun smiles, It comes in a package that welcomes discovery. I work in security and to realize that something might be wrong, a hunch and being able to respond is a hope in the midst all the terrorist menace. I wish you well. The whispering and the locking speak of something that can heard in a heartbeat. I hope that in time we can all find peace in knowing that the "time" bomb can wait.
thanks.
I only wonder about the sergeant and what the time bomb means for your audience. Maybe that is for another chapter.
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Review of To be like him  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I always enjoy what you write Alexi. It offers a way of looking in the mirror of a self your own to see what that might mean for me. I think of the scripture at the end of I Corinthians in this sense. I am mainly moved my the offering of cleanness as it attaches to no longer feeling afraid. It is as if a way has been prepared and cleared for me to be in the presence of God.
Thanks.
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Review of Lies  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
I like the idea of an interplay between symbols and concepts. I can follow the poetic dynamic of hiddenness and expectations about pay off. The reader is left sorting out confusion to determine the viability of a lie. I am lost in trying to figure out the reason for symbols. Does it enhance or distract? I am not sure.
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Review of Shadow and I  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Bellamy, I enjoy the concept of dark shadowed coming out of the dark to waltz. The intimate interplay is undeniable when the sun is in the right position. The dynamic of light and dark leaves me pondering how the light could cause the shadow go away. Thanks for sharing.
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Review of Love  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi psycho, your interpretation of a love connection is unsettling and all to real. The word "crush" takes on a more intense revelation about what happens when hormones rage. One person is bound to become victimized/crushed. I would like to know how love heals and shares hope. God bless.
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Review of The Strums  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
A creative concert orchestrated by one who knows something about plucking strings. It would have helped to have some knowledge, but that's where your various personifications steal the day. I am left listening to hear a familiar song and dancing along side. Thanks for sharing.
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Review by drifter
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
You got this nailed down real good. I am nearing retirement and I am all too aware of the power of your words. I was trained by someone in his late seventies. He had much more experience. It all came down to conflict issues with the wrong people. And when he tried to screw them...he mysteriously disappeared.
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Review of God is Everywhere  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Thanks Tim, your poem offers the dynamic of inner peace. I am impressed with the extensiveness of God's love and grace. I want to know how this same God wrestles with evil threatening to crush your positive perceptioñ.
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Review of Cockroach  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Kalixta, you bring back a memory. I was with my pastor in on an inner city in house jam. I will never forget those cockroaches on the wall dancing to the beat. Thanks for rekindling that memory.
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