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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Bikerider, you offer a feel good story. I could not help leaving with a smile on my face. I enjoyed the whole idea of the father and son connection that was intimately reeled in through the context of a fishing contest. One of the lessons I caught was that catching the fish was more important than needing to get the biggest fish. The last lines caught me. Jason caught more fish than his bud Randy. Things can only get better.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Powerful expression of what it means to have knowledge expressed from out of the inside of a pen. The last lines stay with me the most. The strong quilled inherit the earth. In this mist of unknowing there is knowledge worth sifting through in order to know truth.
well done
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Review of Alben's Curse  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
A curious tale Than. Some one gets the power of Alben after he dies. The twist is that he dies by committing suicide. I am engaged by what you write Than. I am left wondering what the power is and whether it is worth having if what happened to Alben is any indication.
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Review of Reality  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello bubblegrum, the vision you offer is worth seeking after. Your ending underscores everything that has preceded it love conquers fear.
My favorite lines:
A future broken on the rack (I see this rack as something one is stretched on in a torture chamber)
Hope shall remain when all turns black
And nothing seems to last.

Thanks
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: ASR | (3.0)
I enjoyed entering into your tale. I am fascinated especially by your understandings about what life after death means, especially in the context of the perceived murder of a brother. My main critique are the many misspellings that are in it. I will offer an example:

"You're lying. You know you are... Ther are no garentees, that thing could hvae been anything! Your just trying to trick me into beliving my brother will come home. Well where is home to him? You tell me that. Is it with the slavemasters of Niak, or maybe in the dark realms of the Fire Rush? Or maybe, maybe is it no where? In that bleak cold thing called death." Seteki angrily lept down onto a lower ledge. His thin frame vanishing through t he boulders and sand.
thanks for writing,
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Review of u x  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: ASR | (3.0)
Hello Zzzz, This takes a lot of thought on my part to make sense out of. I consider the first line speaking about having faith in someone. The second one posits where that faith in another resides. The Third looks at the result of efforts to make a connection. The last line is the toughest. There is something hidden/concealed that is worth bringing to light. I am wonder if concealed might be a different word. "dearest veiled"
God bless, keep writing
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Thanks for your holiday offering Oldwarrior, I am immediately stricken by the reality that you share. There are persons that think of nothing but liquor and smokes. The rhyme and rhythms take us to a place where there might be hope. In the manger on the Christmas day is an infant that shares a much different truth and hopefully in the long and short of it we discover what makes life worthwhile. At times this kind of experience is a reminder for some that the plight of hunger and sickness is too real!!
thanks for sharing
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello catdok, I have been in such a place and it is fun to see how one takes words to weave in and out of spaces. I like in particular the parts about moving into wooded and metallic obstacles. There is in the end a finish line and getting the job is what matters most even if you never win the Olympic gold medal. Thanks for giving the mowing experience a soul. My only critique is that I am not always sure where the words in you weaving connect.
God bless.
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Review of Time  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hello Chief, I enjoyed you movement toward an old hag, who shows just how fateful time can be. I loved the personal allusions: her nails, bandaged hand, nose, mouth(ate up the years) and ears. The grip you offer is one that no one can escape. I would rather stay away from Babylon, which sound biblical in essence. You say in your opening there is a lot of nonsense. Maybe I am missing something.
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Review of Will I Run  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Keaton, I have been in this place and I would guess many others have been there. I catch most of all the part about running. I think it explains why I left family and a place I grew up in for a place I did not know. The part that fits is that I am chained to that fate. I am not as clear what the last two lines say. I would guess that sometimes we have no choice but to accept what happened and move on rather than stay a prisoner to what will never change.
Thanks for sharing! It helps to know someone can locate such a place even if it is on the run.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello Nathan, a real curious piece that hooked me into seeing if I would get the communication that you were sharing. I love the dialect. I feel like I am in the mob myself. I feel compassion for Ben and Parker. I guess even in the street drama there is need for the catharsis that comes from writing. Thanks you for the way you communicate this truth by the way you write.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Prosperous snow, I know I could not say the name of that poem very easily. I like the essence of what you proclaim in the form of symphonic ecstacy. I look at how things started out of nothing and see in your charismatic expressiveness God taking the wonderment of musical ennoblement with God as conductor through us letting all that have ever breathed celebrate God. I am reminded of scripture in Philippians 2. Thanks much!!
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello harry, I read this in the light of being asked to do geneolical work for my family. I think all you say rings true. In the present the energy is on what will happen if we are good parents. When all is said and done we look back and realize what makes the labor of keeping the value of family intact worthwhile. I loved the way it was set up. I did not see any grammar errors.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hello Harry, I catch the meaning of what you write on a couple levels. One level sees a need to look closer and see who is really around you(Betty another words). The other level is looking at who I am as the on looker. The problem is not only the one who is not looked upon, it is also on the people who refuse to look.
Thanks for the food for thought.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hey I like what I read StoryMaster, I never thought about all these ways to get out to others what is happening in the life of a writer. I think I am more in the upper realms of consideration. I hope I can find time to get people to look at the writing.com site with me in it and as I see that others see, I may risk steps three through six. Thanks for the ideas.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
You offer grist for the mill Ghost. There is work to be done and it is not going to wait for someone to do it. I hear in your work a recognition that inspires action. It is not enough to notice that something is going on. It is a beginning. When people decide that things can be different there is a decision to change focus about what one wants to see. I pray that you continue to see with your words. God bless in this age and the age to come.
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Review of Lacey's Umbrella  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello calligraphy script, I had a lot of fun with this one, since I have three grandkids about the same age. The sound of the drops speak to me about the rhythm of raindrops preparing the way for a melodic beatific kind of vision. You have captured this quite well through your writing lens. I felt like I was there listening to the rain with you as the girl with blue eyes looks on.
thanks, well done.
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Review of Loving Hands  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Tim, thanks for your pet filled impressions. I like the idea of using sign language to pick up cues about what pets are doing or where the pets might be going. Above all you crescendo it all with prayer that celebrates a blessing from God. I do think that the rareness speaks about a uniqueness and almost soul equality. That is my only critique. The word rare comes across as scarceness of...Thanks for sharing
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello Tineyjo, I think the general thought is that someone (an angel messenger from God) has made a difference in your life. Your poem shares the many ways that you have been offered and received the gift freely given, in knowing what it means to be loved, safe and watched over. The way you have spent "Your" is distracting. You may intend You're.
thanks for writing. I also could use more structure, a stoppage after each line. Yet I respect that this is your style. thanks for sharing
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Review of My Life.  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I celebrate your desire to share who you are in the context of where you have come from. I have virtually no political ponderings and so it was interesting to see the effort you went through to find peace. Imagine shifting so radically. The best part about sharing your journey is that you give others permission to do the same. Most of my struggles are in a religious frame of reference. I am glad that you are finding your self and encouraging others to dialogue with.

I think you are doing yourself a service by putting your feelings/thoughts on paper. If was to look for you in the light of your present views where would I most likely find you.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Tim, it is good to read one of your poems again. This one looks very well polished and ready to go. I like most of all that it allows for a person to feel good about themselves, know they are worthy of having pride. It was funny to know the context involved getting your butt kicked in bowling. You have redeemed something worthy of being read and for that you should be proud and ready for more play. SOAR
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Review of The Moon  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Jules, I hear your voice in what you write. I catch in particular a wondering about the sentient being of the moon and what it thinks of itself. After reading I wonder how you might evaluate what beauty is. Could it be the moon is more beautiful than the earth. I guess only the man in the moon know for sure. lol.
Thanks for writing.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I love your use of alliteration. I see autumn come to life. Pumpkins, leaves, fireplace,crows. Thanks for sharing your testimony of what autumn means for you.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Thanks for your suggestions gibran. I think the bottom lines are that respect is needed in relationships. It hurts to read all the data. We live in a world that seeks escape. I pray persons
Take notes. God bless
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Review of The Nasty Chef  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hello Sandra, I got a big laugh from your turn about is only fair play. I enjoyed reading about the relationship of the mice and the chef. I leave though wondering what the relationship is between the people and the mice. The bottom line is that I liked your cute story. I sure would not want to catch these mice when I am having a bad day or the mice either.
thanks for writing
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