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Review of Minty  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Charcoalsleeves, your poem feel very authentic and real. I can picture, experience you with Minty in a unique way among others, longing for a chomp on the hands.
I read the first lines and am a bit confused. There is heat and the personalities. Are these dogs or people.
"Each personality contrasting starkly to the...(meaning what)
Thanks for sharing
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello Choconut, there was a measure of irony in what you wrote. "I can't find it anywhere". Maybe the reason that it can not be found is that we are not looking in the right place. I then watch as you share an environment whereby discovery of the precious code can happen. The main character Daisy listens in a caring way and eventually the bomb or "catastrophe is mitigated. The end was a bit too quick. The world was quickly saved from what? Maybe that is what I might find out in the next chapter.
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Review of Conflicted  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello flofree, I am glad for your poem. It is a reminder of hurt that often lays buried within threatening to shut us down until I express in words what gives value. The walls are there and yet they are walls that can be seen by yourself and others and because of that life can go on. I think of the old days as you say: "you bought me back to when things were right"
Maybe in the typo (if it is one) is some of the resolution. It is one thing to be bought in a reward sense and quite another to be brought to a place where you are accepted as you are.
thanks for writing.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
It's like a story I have read many times before. I love your poetic frame. It is in the values of being different, separate, resourceful. It is in the values of coming together and recalling foundation of what it means to be a family. I celebrate the hope, survive. Thanks
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Review of I'm sorry  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello why, nice letter to a friend offering forgiveness and hope for tomorrow. My first gut feeling is realizing that in sending the letter you send your heart. I believe you realize you matter enough to offer your voice and in valuing moments of being grateful you celebrate yourself and the other person. I am not sure about what to expect going forward. New beginnings realizing if something happened good before it could happen again.
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Review of In Your Eyes  
Review by drifter
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Alyare, sounds like almost a desparate plea to see and experience an intimate knowing. I love the premise as an invitation to discover what it means to be a friend. I am left with questions about what keeps us apart. Maybe the other person feels the same. What makes it safe? Thanks for sharing
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Review by drifter
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Sara, thanks for your courage in sharing. You message is written in a way that makes it easy for me to read. There is so much material to cover in such a diverse topic. I think the hope is to be found in redefining concepts.
At the moment I am the only male working amongst intellectually disabled adults. I am told to stay away from the female residents, because I am a male and it is company policy. Females can care for males. Men are told they are not even to be in the presence of a female residents that is uncovered. I pray your plea takes with it a need to learn mutual respect.
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Review of Unsure  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Eden and I pray that in that place you write you can find your own paradise. I can recall my own meanderings. I would have to say that my willingness to write has kept me alive. I doubt I will ever see anything published. I have learned that I write for myself and learn that as I take care of my inner world that I can more readily be there for others. I invite you to discover this for yourself. Even lately I ask in my sixties amidst bumps and bruises why keep going! It is the question that keeps me alive and I pray it will lead you to discover for yourself you are worth living and dying for and others you will learn to care about in days ahead will be glad you took time to ask questions that they wondered if anyone dared ask in a public forum.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Infinite Brown, I love the sentiment. I was reminded of the loss I know since having left a city I had dwelt in for 40 years. I could hear the voice and recall the touch, even of the former wife I left behind, so that I could help my present wife get her life back. I went to her home after she was experiencing depression and memory issues. I pray that you can know the memories are there as you share giving hope that the friend in this case you wife live in love through you.
thanks!!
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Review of Tainted People  
Review by drifter
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Kenzie, lots of wisdom from an unlikely source. I am reminded by your piece that life is a parable and all that happens can lead to a teachable moment. I tend to a voice in the silence as I work as an older man with persons who have intellectually disabled. I am an anomaly. I could very easily draw off retirement and yet God's call is there for me. I am a pastor by training and they need to know about God's presence. What better way to share that presence than to work with persons in the role of an attendant so that they might learn God's love is real even to persons who might be tainted and hidden apart from passion to let love be known.

Christians don't need to announce to the world - verbally, that is - that they are followers of the Lord Jesus. They just need to follow His example and the world will know. And if the world cannot tell? Well, apart from a Christian lifestyle, can a Christian ever really glorify God or contribute to society? I think not.
Watch out for typos
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Andi, it was a very painful read in the light of all that has been in the news lately. It reminded me of hurt that I went through the day my brother was at school rushed to the hospital in an ambulance and in days ahead would be diagnosed as having schizophrenia. These moments are survivable, especially when a person knows that they no longer need to be alone with the pain. I celebrate that you share moments of aloneness. I know it had to be painful. I celebrate that in your sharing there is hope to reach out to those who are not being heard, knowing that the Jesse's are out there and will not be silenced. Thanks again.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I love the storied concepts in a conversational tone that invites me to a partake of a feast of loving sentiments, there for the taking. I hope I can encourage you without taking away the fiery spirit that questions conventions and allows for change. An example is this sentence:

"When I returned home I got some beautiful moments about her to feed my heart and serious thought about the society to feed my brain."

It would help to see this in a context that allows me the same moment to ponder the beautiful apart from needing to worry about a society I have no control over.
Some of your sentences are a little awkward in this same way. I may return home to a place where I can have these impressions. Thanks again for your hard work.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
You offer a very lovely piece Alyare and maybe that is where the gift lies. Historically is a story of people who think that they are Godly because of property that they can claim is their inherent right. The Indian as stated here does not springboard off of any sense of entitlement. The property is no meant to be shared. And for this spiritual understanding he ends up being put on a back burner as someone less than human. The reader is invited to take another look at the Indian who has been disenfranchised. The Indian remains who he is: a mystery that can never be discovered apart from realizing that there is always someone who is there first. The spiritual cultivator "I am PROUD I am STRONG." The only true gift worth discovering is the one within. The people who claim entitlement show all too readily by greed and hate they are not.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Catherine, I can sense a person who knows the garden well and strives to as you say at the end of you chapter take the tool to cultivate the gift that lies hidden underneath all the dirt. I love how you greet me with a vision of entering into the wild flower of a dad into the potential of engagement. Their is the invitation to encounter a relationship that will lead to the beauty of a smile and in this case invitation to a circus. I know only to encourage the gift. I can relate a little to the divorced dad who is trying to redeem out of a sense of a accountability. This is the vocation you offer. I enjoy all the metaphor over dead clothes and buried litter. At the same time it seems to distract me. I want to know the people as entities separate from the metaphor you use to expose them. Thanks for sharing.
"I shall be the eternal gardener and plant flowers forever"
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Tim, Thanks for the gift of wisdom and wit. I think all of us can image our own superman. You offer a place to connect. Much hinges on the given that we are all here for a purpose and have something to offer. Infinite pride is the obstacle to receiving what has been ours from the beginning. My favorite part of the poem:
The tasks we desire
To accomplish are real,
But we are due for a fire,
With all of our zeal –
WE are in the battle to win and become all God wants us to be. That is mercy.
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Review of Be real  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Jester, I get hooked by the idea of sitting with a dunce cap learning to sing my own song. I knew those days all too well. I am faced with what gives a person value. I can be counterfeit or real the place between the two is not really a choice because it mimics the madness around me. In my day as a child I was shoved in a corner and made to be stupid because I did not know how to behave in church. Now I just find ways to live out what the church really is! It is as good as it gets. Thanks for sharing. Something to ponder.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Tim, It has been awhile since I have run across one of your poems. As I read the title to your poem I am intrigued about what is worth noticing about life. It helps to know that your category is travel which helps me see a plane overhead looking out into a perception of what really matters in life. The idea of sedate people has a sleepy aspect as if to wake up. The poem itself reads well. It is obvious that you have been some thought into it and have organized/harmonized it well. My gut says that you see clearly from your airplane (feathery flyover) and are able to communicate clearly what you see. I am not in the feathery flyover with you and as I reader I need to be if I want to enter your conclusion. Thanks.
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Review of All these words  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I like you style. You offer a poetic scheme that subtly moves into the arena of where the relationship has gone and where it is going. There is no reason to keep going. It is like needlepoint projects that never get done. Why stay together when the only one working to keep it together is you.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Certainly creative twist to the writing craft. Immediately I create my own image with words that I can invite others to dive in splash, reflect and experience. Once upon a time there was a purple lilac water Lily. Every day it reflected on what does beauty look like. One day it looked beyond the surface into the depths of mysterious darkness, because of that the water Lily was able to see something it had never heard, seen or touched before. Until finally it plunged into the depths of imagination and came face to face with bubble gum Jones. Life for Bubble gum Jones and the water Lily could never be the same, because the water Lily and bubble gum Jones were in a relationship seeking in the vehicle of a short story yet to be created "Fill in the Blanks"
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Review of The WDC Review  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
It sure speaks to me in my writing journey. I look at the blank screen wondering. I love the way you combine words to make your point like slimy similes and metaphorical molasses. The verbiage is the roughage in the way of communicating illusive truths that anyone of worth would look. The only problem is what will it take to get the reward I want.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I think you hit the nail on the head. It is a timely article for our time regardless of political party. I tire of the rhetoric that claims I am right and that makes you wrong. The "savages" look at us in the mirror and share with us how like them we are. Our only salvation is raising the voice of the president from the dead before it is too late.
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Review of Superfood  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Medoff, I enjoy how you invite me to solve a riddle, knowing at the end I will have learned what I did not know before. I feel familiar from the get go and yet I hang on to learn more. I am face to face with a culinary vegetable. Now I really know what I sink my teeth into.
Nice format and grammar.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Baumann, I like your attempt of sharing what it means to be real/authentic. You offer that the reader spend time to get at truth. You offer a mirror that comes of knowing Kreaton. I am in a family reminiscent of the flavor of Tom Sawyer and huckleberry Finn. Kreaton communicates with a banjo. There is a kinship that surpasses family bonds.
Watch out for far grammar errors and typos. Tx for letting me read your piece.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
HELLO it so, I read your piece and was faced immediately with how dark life can be in the context of the story you write. The reader is faced with the cost of being in a state of suffering in order that some entity could shed light.
I could use a paragraph about what happened in the other chapters. You need to look at typos. I have a lot of trouble following this in a fantastic genre. (Ie res of monsters) rough language. Thanks
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Entertaining perspectives on what anger means in the context of an ordinary experience. I liked the way you invited me into your walk so that I might see with you how anger might be understood in a dog's world. The issues of territory, size and the many cats encourage one to choose fights wisely.
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