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Review by drifter
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Thanks Jay, I enjoyed the sense of gratitude and awe filled reverence that permeated your poem. The allusion to the birth of Christ in a parallel Matthew reference from the bible made the poem speak to me. The contrast between a God who gives life and a perception of God as Judge is brought together in a litany of thanksgiving
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Lucas, thanks for sharing your slant on the first day of school and the adventure that it can be for anyone who is getting ready for another year. I like your authentic considerations. Lucas reminds me of who I was as a child. I am not sure of your acronym early on. Maybe the best truth is that one can be a superhero just by surviving a day with mom and an acquaintance on the way to school when the bus is not available. Thanks for sharing.
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Review of ASTRAL TRAVELS  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (2.5)
Hello, A Lazy Writer, you offer an entry into the world that you write about in an internet format. I get caught up in the pen name you give yourself, I can become a lazy reader and thereby miss out of the joy of astral travels. I would like to know more about what a person is writing before I go there. Spiritual in what sense? Maybe that is just me. Thanks for sharing.
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Review of Slither  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Thom, thanks for your sharing. I enjoyed the way you used rhyme and rhythm to reach from a point of lingering doubt that keeps one intensely silent to one that risks to share the anxiety and reality, the reality that says in the writing one reveals what could not in and of itself live. some of my favorite lines. In a sense the slithering like a snake leads to a place that will not go away.
Just insert here the world I see,
Doubts that strip away belief,
The feelings of an uphill battle,
Anxiety rippling, restless and rattled,
The bare-bone fears and unshed tears,
And desperate screams that no one hears:
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Review of The Blur  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello, Jeff, thanks for your sharing. The place in the middle speaks of a complete loss of word and seems to serve as a connection point between the rational/natural and the supernatural. The blur is an interesting concept. Maybe some of what you are saying is to let go and let God. I question what is meant by a delusional tenor. Thanks for sharing.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Harry, I like the way that you use metaphor to bring people to the truth. I was reminded of the story of Scrooge in the midst of your spirit's vision out of the past to know what it meant to keep the spirit of Christmas to the hear and now moment. The couple knows exactly what to do. They look for ways to thoughtfully gift others. Thanks for your gift of letting us know that it is more important to give than receive.
“to please its recipient to fill
us with pleasure. But those days didn’t last.
Everyone’s scattered or died, until
now we are all alone, living in the past.”
thanks
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Review of The Red Caravan  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hello Arthus, you offer a very earthy lucid tale that invites the reader into a lewd and crude world. I liked most the idea of creating language and descriptions of an otherworldly kind in the "speaker".“The End has come and gone, what do we do now old bat?” I would like to know more about what the words mean in the foreign language. There are lot of letters meaning that are distracting. For example counter part vs. counterpart, and a sentence "that not on either". Thanks for your creative jaunt. God bless.
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Review of A Collection  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello desom, I am amused by the premise of your entry. You offer a title called collection and under this the whole idea of there being a test to see what the collection looks like. Then with a guffaw you offer the one word "test" with an exclamation point. The reader gets what they ask for as if to say: "this is a test". Thanks for the humorous gist. I am looking for something and the word "test" becomes the door to what an understanding of humor stands for.
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Review of Untitled  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello LaMour, you offer up a very moving spiritual piece out of a title that seems so nebulous. "untitled" does not at first seem worth the read. And yet from the beginning you prod me to consider what is truly of worth. It is the journey into the Lord's kingdom. There is in this place ever lasting love and joy in my heart. I am reminded of the song "I can only imagine". To be in God's presence is all that matters. What more could one want?
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Keaton, I am glad to reading one of your poems. I am very sure If I could find the money I would buy one of your books. I like the introspective depth with which you express yourself. The Shadow in the background serves as a reflection/metaphor for accepting the parts of me that can not change. I especially liked these verses:
Shadow in the background
My conscientious objector
You will take no part
Through are your hands
Empty is your soul
Such quantifications
Are part you and myself

I can not escape dealing with the shadow which may be the part of me I do not want others to know about no matter what how much I want to. Thanks
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Senmaru, I am seeing this as a chapter in a larger piece of work. In the story various characters are trying to break down a barrier and defeat a foe. I enjoy the concepts and I think the story has possibilities. There are instruments at work here that are out of a different world that have properties of color and light and expressions that add an otherworldly character. My problem is not understanding this world enough to be clear the story will go next. An example is as follows:
Muramaru approached a tree, closed his eyes, and visualized an army of defeated Deas. Muramaru

then prepared himself, enveloped his red Ryuki, and swung his naginata at the tree.

Two days later, Dea and the group are gathered together. "Weeeeeeeellllllll, you guys have a week of training behind you and now it is time for

the test! Yahoo!!!" Dea said as he clapped his hand while everybody looked stern. "No fun!!!" Dea complained and then pouted. "Anyways, it

time to start!!! Muramaru-chan!!!"
There too many foreign concepts that by the time I get to the end of the story and it "WEll until the next act/arc. I am not sure it is an otherworldly concept or misspelling. Thanks for sharing.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I hear life from the perspective of a dog, which could be a metaphor for anyone else who gets locked into a place where they have no voice. It is cute to say the least. I too have a dog and I am very sure he has similar sentiments. He has become even more unsettled since his mom and dad are working. Thanks for sharing.
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Review of Gluttony  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
There you go Candy. I like to eat as much as the next person. I am glad that you take time to put this in perspective. It is one thing to look at a table full of food and eat from it. It is another thing to see a neighbor in need and do nothing about it. That is gluttony at it's worst. Tx
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello joywitchella, thanks for you commentary on the art of baking chocolate cookies. The main rejoinder is the reminder to not heap them too high for one does not want the cookie to crumble. There is the green room as a place of service which I am to suppose is a special place. I am reminded of some shows saying someone is in the green room. I like most the section that sees the cookie as a wish-bone dream with a special curve against the tongue. The stanza comes across as the heart and soul of what makes this poem work "to make memories that refuse oblivion. Thanks for sharing. I only wish you would have saved one for me. Oh well I guess that is the way the cookie crumbles.
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Review of home jobs  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hello Parker, thanks for your more formal way of presentation and marketing which is a reminder that there are many styles of writing that inform our world. I like your premise of having jobs at home. I am not sure what you mean by the defining sentence after. Maybe a punctuation mark might help. As I read I am struck by the technical nature of it. It may be helpful to note an audience to whom you speak. I would also like the type to be bigger. I have to strain my eyes to read it. I am deciding that you are writing in a technical format that is easy for your main audience to follow. As a lay person I struggle with spacing and punctuation. thanks
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Review of Glory Daze  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
hello Cheri, I love the title. It gives me a double dose of sorting out the daze in the days that represented glory for so many people. You have done a fantastic job of creatively putting together a picture of groups that left an impression on you and others. I especially like the part that says "broken again when echoes of the past creep in. I leave your piece not having heard of many of the groups and maybe that is my loss. The first line about the Ames brothers sets the scene for a difficult task. Is your piece a reflection on what your title says or like a puzzle trying to put something together that fits. Thanks for your efforts. You remind us all the powerful role music plays.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.0)
Well in a sense Brodie Pokeman never left, especially in the form of Pokeman go. I like the whole idea of imagination as a resource in dealing with the enemy, which in this case is the bully. I recall Yugio. I think that symbolic language detracts from message. Tx
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Wow Rhyssa, a contemporary telling of the once popular song "all we are is dust in the wind". You offer up a very salient point. What is anything we write or do, but form of dust. Does anyone care or will they recall the gist of what I say. The dust is obvious, but maybe in trust rather than disgust. Well done, you express well your internal angst. In the ballads particles become whole as we sing!!
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Review of Different Views  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Jeff, you offer up food for thought. I am left with an ecclesiastical conclusion. Maybe the truth is to be found in a middle ground. I wonder about the impartial God you offer as divine. The strength of your piece is the offering of dynamic perceptions. One person's trash, another's treasure. In our valuations we discover God and in God a reason to live. Txt for sharing'm watch out for misspellings (ie. Lose vs. Loose)
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Review of The Party  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Wow so much drama Jessica,I was diverted to your piece until the last words. I recalled my own times sneaking with my younger siblings on the stairs to try to figure out what was happening. There even secret places as in this world. It's a bit of a stretch to say dad is a murderer and now the kids must die. It reads like a fairytale. Mom comes to the rescue but who survives? Only mother knows for sure.
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Review of Hereafter  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Elizabeth, you offer some interesting thoughts about what hereafter means in terms of life that has not been given over to newness of life. We only know how good a book is until we get to the end. Before this are intimations of beauty, music and hope.
I struggle with what is real in your poetic journey. Do I have to be in the hereafter to know what it means to be real? Tx
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Review of Guarded By Lions  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Wow Harry, what a wonderful story. It serves as a reminder that our writing has purpose if only to share what others would not know otherwise. I love the story. I am reminded of how to be healthy in my own humanity. The lions serve to remind us of the truth that all persons deserve respect.they are not lying!!
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Review of Mirrors Lie  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Interesting supernatural tale with de man(Demus), vampires and an ethereal atmosphere that draws us to a conclusion in which identical twins clash. In the mix is included Nikki, who offers a passion that is willing to embrace the spectre of death. I especially like the Dragon aura that leads one to speculate about a place of fire that casts away darkness revealing truth.
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Review of Between the lines  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Heleny, a nice melancholy reminder about the need of one generation for another. I am reminded of a recent mentor and my need to pay it forward. My mentor has since retired and is almost ninety years old. I can imagine his sentiments mirror your own postulate. Without my friend Dick I would have given up. In a sense the memory brings him up from the dead so another knows blessing.
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Review of Procrastination.  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
Hello Robert, a tale reminding one of the hazards that detract from the job at hand. It comes across as folksy, the rhyme scheme is consistent and the moral of the tale is predictable. The knight has missed his brawl. I left wondering if procrastination is a value or expectation that attends the writers task. Thanks for writing: embrace life as it embraces you.
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