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Review of I Am Vitruvian  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello slow motion, thanks for your commentary on what makes for acceptance in a derisive world. I could only think of the world that has adopted me for a time. I work with disabled adults who can relate to the world you see. We are to quick to decide what is normal and in so doing lose our own humanity.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I love your interpretation and passion for sport. You offer a window through which we see what it means to be in the zone. I am reminded of my passion for the game of football and the reaching of the end zone and thereby certain victory. Thanks for inviting me to play!!
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Blog City ~ Every Blogger'...  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello whiskers, a fine terse introduction about a person WE can look forward to hearing. There is a comparison/relationship between him and Bruce Springsteen from whom we can see for ourselves what makes Clarence a person that is worth listening to. Txt for the song!!!
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Review of The Mackey Family  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Walknbird, very thorough review over what happens in one occasion of a family experiencing family makeover. In this case it is the Mackeys. I love the feel good reveal and light hearted moments with Ty. I wish only that in a time where people who do not know the show understand all you say. It bright back nothing but good memories for me. Tx
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Review of Darkness Creeps  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I guess it is all a matter of perception. I tend to relate well to the theme. What goes up must come down and the same could be said about a light and victory that appears all consuming. I like especially the reminder at the end. I see the darkness in a horror movie. Is there any hope? Stay tuned.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Dawson girl, I am a baby boomers too and I get your point. We lived in a much different world. I recall my grandma talking about airplanes when they were new. I recall the first color tv in our neighborhood and at school watching the red Sox try to win the world series. There are lots of good memories. At the same time I like the immediacy of Skype since I am far away from my kids. There will always be payoffs and consequences. Thanks for the whimsy. Who knows the challenges ahead for my grandkids? l can only hope they let me into a new strange world. Peace
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Thanks for the invitation to church omg. I liked the idea of a monastery run by numbers draw one into a conversion experience. There is a sense that this coming together of a rational and irrational enticement. There is in the end an order and a place amidst a precise time and place.
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Review of The Room  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello mads, thanks for your reflection on romance that arises in a room that lives in a person's heart. I loved the violin that called you to dance. I was captivated by the joy of dance in mirror. I celebrated that you could dance to the song deep within, without a need for something outside to make it happen.
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Review of Tropical night  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello Sindhbad, thanks for your haunting lucid impression. From the beginning I taking a trip to somewhere I had never been before. At the end the place felt all too familiar. I am not much of a vampire fan. At the same time I resonated with your stream of consciousness revelation that reveals I need to take care of a stench before it takes care of me.
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Review of My Reflection  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hello Bernie, it is fun to look at the world of reflection as a result of looking at in the mirror. It is a reminder about all of us like to imagine what life can be in an idealistic sense and yet in the end we are faced with going back to reality. Some words I like.

I touch my hand to hers, never leaving mine
My eyes make contact with hers, as if searching for a treasurous find
I seem to know her like the back of my hand
Like I'm some crazy psycho fan
I remove my hand and look away knowing what I must know
Knowing that that girl in the mirror is just some sort of show
Just a fake me, a girl I wish I could be
I just have to look there and see
thanks
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Saloni, love is in the air and feathers and thorns are what give flair even if in the end it feels not fair. It is the references to burning and play like a game that seems incongruent. I am thinking that thorn is referring to a rose's attending and feathers that can make one fly and can at the same time fall.
thanks for sharing. It needs to tell me more about feathers and thorns as symbols that mean something.
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Review of Petals  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello again Cara, I read delicate and soft and am hooked to want to touch the petals that flow out of the air. I am reminded of my own wedding with petals tossed. It was fun to see the linger of smells attend the little one's finger reminding of the ring finger's promise of wedded eternity. It was a very idyllic muse. I only wish that my marriage did not end in divorce.
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Review of love rips  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello King, a fun read for the holiday. I do not know if I am reading it right. I hear that there a ghost who gets in "f" in scaring people that come to the haunted house and is put back in human form and is mowed over by a truck, and as a consequence he is under the tutelage of a woman who in my own way of understanding scared the hell into him, to the point he could never love this woman. Maybe that is enough to put the fear in him and everyone else.
Suggestions: there was a a portion that said he want to boast that was distracting. Love rips is a nice title if you talk about resting in peace. Thanks King. You have a way of getting me to rip with love even before halloween hits.
Drifter
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Josh, I enjoy the way you offer an authentic struggle to discover what can make a difference. In this case it is the hope of landing a job. From there I am left curious. Is the demon in the drink, depression or a belief system? The format script is a little small for me to read. I did like the way you were able to share about the getting mail and lead up to a real sense of disappointment after getting a bill and an advertisement for cable. I suggest you look at spelling and grammar(punctuation): for example tho vs. though. It gets in the way of communicating to your audience.
thanks
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Review of Night Dancing  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Charlie, without looking at your title I read it and thought thought that someone is moving out of denial and sis deciding to deal with their demons. I like best the parts that talk about shadows that will not go away and about feeling caught under the covers. I have been in the place you talk about. I am glad you are getting help and support. To let it out in writing is another way to knock down the power it has.
God bless, praying
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Cara, you obviously know your history. I am from Masssachusetss and know it from courses I took. The poem speaks out of the reality of the time, young girls who could on a whim decide who might on the gallows or gruesome test meet their demise. Tx
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Review of DARK PARADISE  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello KV, the message is one that is worth touting. All of us need to know that our legacy and success can depend on how we pursue the dream. The entry part finds power when it says that dreams are stored in tears. It is in the brokenness we can discover what is really worth living and dying for so that we overcome the forces of darkness, so that we know light. I think when you right pursuit in your final stanza you mean pursue. Punctuation needs work. thanks for sharing
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello iKïyå§amaCabre, Thanks for sharing your vignette, the story worked because of your imagination that just happened to include the words that were like ingredients in making something others want to partake of. I am hooked by the note and the curiosity about it and then I see the man and it the mirror of the window glass I see what I came for. A man has sold a painting and now looks forward to taking with him the legacy his father/wife left. Thanks
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello dogpack, I like the perception with which you see. You offer the positives that attract you to the writing.com world. There are gift points, badges and ribbons, not fibbons.
I would suggest that you let me know what DWG refers to. I think you may mean disability writing group. I am not sure. The format might be spread out in ways that allow others to read in sequence:(for example 123, referring to bullet points that help me to see each item and what it means to you. Thanks
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Review of Am I wrong?  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello Whiskerface, you offer a story that can open up some effective dialogue. I have seen both sides of the coin that you talk about. I have cried until I thought I was going to die when my dad died, even if I was silent through the funeral. At my mom's funeral I could not help but smile and want others to smile with me because that was the way mom was. Everyone grieves differently. I can recall one of my students sharing how he laughed at every funeral. That seemed really weird until I realized that he was constantly going to funeral all his life because everyone was older. I like the fact you share your heart. No there is nothing wrong with you or with the others. Grief is all about loss and everyone deals with it different.
tx for sharing
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
hello Sasha, I enjoyed this piece, having had experience as a pastor in a church. It spoke about the real problem of a church that becomes more about a building than the people that can attend it at any one time. The parts that spoke loudest were the hymnal with velvet mossy dressing and a lot of commentary about the need for sheltering the pews from storms and a bone chime melody of decayed timber. I recall my own childhood closing. I pray that we learn how to use a church to meet needs rather to become a need to deal with. Thanks for a timely message.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello Joto-Kai, you picture in articulate fashion what happens when a relationship goes astray. There is mistrust, blame, impotence due to false desire, and above all share. In the wake of it all four couples are forced to decide whether they want to see their relationships go up in smoke, burnt up in the passion of desire. I like most the line "till wrongful glory's blaze shone in storming skies. It is certainly hard to miss. tx
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Review of A dinner for two  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello GEEKy, a very creepy tale about a man in love preparing a meal for someone dead. For some reason it lost momentum after the lips were cold. I expected the ending after that. Maybe if you spent more time on the relationship and how romance worked, I may have got sucked in more. Nice job nonetheless. Thanks
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Review of The Gift  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Thanks for expressing not only the value of the faith of the give, but the realization that there is someone/God who has Faith in US. There is a reminder that it is not what you have, it's what you do with what you have. I think back to the feeding of 5000. Thanks for sharing!!
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello dougo, I guess that is what you might call a twist of fate. It is a fun read. There are two sisters that die by the end of the story and we find out that he is indirectly responsible for both deaths. The first was related to depression and the second was all because the other sister thirsted for revenge. There is a bit of ambiguity about what you might have in mind by a ghostly presence. There is the presence of the sister in the fog and also a haunting that attended the death of two persons that he had made a connection with. Thanks for sharing!!
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