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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello Christopher Roy Denton,

I am not going to lie. I am here reviewing "Sid & Mabel's Diamond Wedding because I need a few more gps to renew my membership. lol With that being said, I am just another writer on WDC like yourself. You can feel free to take or leave anything I say here, but I hope it helps.

Why did I choose to review this item among all the automatic reward choices? Well, the title, description and cover photo worked together to draw my curiosity in to read and review this item. I am also glad you mentioned that it is British spelling. It amazes me how different our spellings can be, but it was good to consider while reviewing this item. I did look quickly for errors and other than the varied spelling, I did not see anything. I can't say I really have any suggestions for improvement.

Overall, I enjoyed reading this item very much. And the ending definitely was not expected, but a bitter-sweet surprise. I was very impressed with your story. Thank you for sharing with the rest of us here at WDC. I look forward to reading more of your writing in the future! Very well done!

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Review of my first "fish"  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello!

Freebird, I am here because you requested a review on "my first "fish".

For the record, I am just another writer like yourself, so feel free to take or leave anything I say here. However, I do hope it helps.

I did not see any grammar or punctuation errors. I don't have any suggestions for improvement in that area. I think it is well-worded. This would be a good communication to someone you were wanting to express these feelings for.

The title and description definitely raised my curiosity. Adding a cover photo would add to the visual appeal to possibly bring in more potential readers.

Thanks for sharing with the rest of us here on WDC. Well done!

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Review of Banana Pancakes  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Queen NormaJean resting up,

Happy Account Anniversary!

I am here to review "Banana Pancakes in celebration of your account anniversary. For the record, I am just another writer like yourself so you can feel free to take or leave anything I say here. However, I certainly hope it helps.

The title "Banana Pancakes" and the description having to do with the ninja monkey contest made me know this had to be good. You know a cover photo can add to the appeal to draw potential readers in to read this item.

This story is fortunately or unfortunately, depending on how you look at it, too relatable for some people, especially these days. I think banana pancakes with applesauce topping is an interesting solution. Rather true or false, this is a fun story.

I saw some punctuation issues.
Flour, sugar, chicken broth, canned chili, peaches, applesauce. Nothing much.
These are not complete sentences. You might combine them into the sentence before.

milk. And those ugly bananas.
This should be part of the same sentence.

And applesauce to go on top. Put a little cinnamon in the applesauce, warm it up. Perfect. I understand what is being said, but it's not exactly proper English. lol I think you know what I mean. There are a few places like this throughout the text. Email me if you would like more detail, but I think now that I pointed it out, you can see where your sentences don't complete a thought or contain a subject and verb.

Overall, It is a good story. It just needs a few touch ups. Great job!

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Review of Embrace  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello LdyPhoenix,

Happy Account Anniversary!

I am here reviewing "Embrace in celebration of your account anniversary. For the record, I am just another writer like yourself, and you can feel free to take or leave anything I say here. However, I really do hope it is of help.

The title and description worked together to raise my curiosity and draw me here to read and review your item. I think a cover photo may add to the appeal and help draw more attention to your poem from other potential readers.

I have read over the poem several times. It is deep and emotional. It is tense and suspenseful. It is pleasing to the ears when read out loud. I think this form of poetry brings a pause to the words at just the right time to add to the mood and emotion of this poem. It gives just enough information to leave your reader intrigued, yet it tells a full story.

I did not find any grammatical or punctuation errors here, and therefore, I don't really have any suggestions for improvement. I absolutely enjoyed reading and reviewing this item. Overall, you did a very awesome job and created a masterpiece of art.

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Review of To Robin Williams  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello ⱲƹbⱲitϚћ,

Happy Account Anniversary!

I am reviewing "To Robin Williams in celebration of your account anniversary. For the record, I am just another writer like yourself. Feel free to take or leave anything I say here. However, I certainly hope it helps.

The title and description are what caught my attention to bring me to read and review this poem. I think it is an interesting choice of cover photo and goes along with the content of the poem.

This poem is simple to comprehend and pleasing to the ears when read out loud. I did not find any grammatical or punctuation errors here. Therefore, I don't have any suggestions for improvement.

I think this poem honors Robin Williams' memory well. Overall, you did a very nice job. Thank you for sharing it with the rest of us here at WDC. I hope to see you continue writing for years to come.

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Review of SURPRISE!!  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello Molly,

Happy account anniversary!

I am here reviewing "SURPRISE!! in celebration of your anniversary. First of all, I am just another writer like yourself. So, feel free to take or leave anything I say here, but I do hope it is of help.

The title caught my attention, and I was curious with the description. I think adding a cover photo will also help draw in other potential readers.

My first thought is, "Wow!" I did not see that ending coming. LOL "Surprise!" is definitely a great title for this one. It is short, sweet, and to the point, but so much is going on. It keeps your interest, and you are kept in suspense until the very end. I could see this being the beginning of a murder mystery novel. LOL

I could be wrong, but the following is what stood out to me:
Grandma smiled discreetly behind her pink handkerchief. I knew that old fart’s ticker would give out. She thought.

I would have written it like this:
Grandma smiled discreetly behind her pink handkerchief, "I knew that old fart’s ticker would give out", She thought.

Even though it is a thought, I am thinking it should be in quotes.

Anyway, overall, what an awesome job! I love it!

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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Whitney,

Happy Account anniversary!

I am here to review "All is Not Lost in celebration of your account anniversary. Of course, I am just another writer like yourself so feel free to take or leave anything I say here, but I certainly hope it helps.

The title, description, and cover photo all worked nicely together to draw me in to read your item.

The rhythm, rhyme, and flow of the poem blend together well to give the poem a natural feel and sounds pleasing to the ears when read out loud. The imagery tells of a friend leading a friend through a difficult time in life and displays a great picture of true close friendship.

I did not notice and grammatical or punctuation errors and have no suggestions for improvement in that area.

Overall, this is a nice poem that others can easily relate to. Awesome job! I hope to read more of your work in the future.

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Review of Scalded Sunburn  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello hyper bunny,

Happy Account Anniversary!

I am here to review "Scalded Sunburn in celebration of your account anniversary. I am just another writer like yourself so you can take or leave anything I say here, but I certainly hopes it helps.

Your title and description are what drew me in to read your item. Adding a cover photo would also help draw attention to your work.

I didn't notice any grammatical or punctuation errors. It has a nice rhythm, rhyme, and flow. I think many people will be able to relate to the strong emotions written in these words of yours.

Overall, great work! I wish you bunches of success!

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Review of Heaven Cent  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Sand Castles Shopgirl 739,

Happy Account Anniversary!

I am here to review "Heaven Cent in celebration of your account anniversary. Of course, I am just another writer like yourself so you can take or leave anything I say, but I sure hope it helps.

The title, description, and cover photo all worked together nicely to draw my attention to your item.

I think this is a cute little story. I could also see this being a children's story easily. I could even see it being a series of stories about the little coin's adventures. I admit the story as it is kind of leaves you hanging as to what the coin's mission actually became.

The only thing that stood out to me that may need some improvement is this phrase at the end, "Now, it’s off to work!" If this is a quote from the little winged one, then I am thinking it should also be in parentheses. Other than that, you did a really awesome job! I hope to read more of your work in the future.

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Review of Knights of Heaven  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Lyons Valentine,

Happy Account Anniversary!

I am reviewing "Knights of Heaven in celebration of your account anniversary. Of course, I am just another writer like you so listen to what you want and disregard the rest.

The title “Knights of Heaven” is definitely an attention getter by itself. However, adding a description and cover photo may help draw in even more potential readers.

The poem basically describes a Salvation experience and the fact that we are always in a Spiritual war and are the knights of Heaven.

The flow, rhythm and rhyme blend together smoothly and are pleasing to the ears when read out loud.

I did not notice any errors so I don't have any suggestions for improvement with grammar or punctuation.
I really enjoyed reading this item. I hope to see more of your work in the future. You did an amazing job! Great work!

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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello celticsea,

Happy Account Anniversary!

I am here o offer a review of "How I Survive Nannying in celebration of your anniversary. Of course, I am just another writer like yourself and you can take it or leave it for what you will but I do hope it helps. I absolutely love acrosstic poetry.

The title is what originally caught my attention. Adding a cover photo would also help draw potential readers like myself in to read your item.

I did not notice any errors. It was a pleasure to read. I love that you added rhyme to it. It is pleasing to the ears when read out loud. I don't really have any suggestions for improvement. You did an awesome job!

I hope to see more of your work in the future.

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Review of The Road  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi D.M. Henry,

Happy Account anniversary!

I would like to offer this review in celebration of you anniversary. I hope you are still writing. I absolutely loved this poem. I am so glad I chose to read and review this item, "The Road.

The title and description is what drew me in to read it. A cover photo would also help grab a potential reader's attention.

This item reminds me of Pilgrim's Progress. I did not notice any errors as I was reading it. I believe it carries an important message. As Christians, we carry Christ in us and have a duty to help others find the freedom in Christ we now have. This poem really spoke to my heart.

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Review of Memorial Day 2022  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello Jay O'Toole,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""Memorial Day 2022" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "Memorial Day 2022" really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


This poem speaks of our soldier's ultimate sacrifice and lined up in a grave yard. We pay them muchrespect as their sacrifice pays for our freedom and gives us hope.

Conclusion:


My favorite line is:

bread upon the waters cast
brings Hope's great lasting prize.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I found no visible errors and have no suggestions for improvement.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review of Break  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello My Sox Rox,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""Break" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "Break" really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


The imagery is that of instead of having a relaxed carefree summer, now kids have camp, vacations, and other activities planned out for them. Not having free time to relax is what makes summer break broken.

Conclusion:


My favorite line is:

You can't call a break something that is not broken,
Not when it comes to fun.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I found no visible errors and have no suggestions for improvement.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review of Dragon Daughter  
for entry "Mother (a poem)
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
   

Hello Tileira,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""Mother (a poem)" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "Mother" really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


The imagery is that of recognizing a mother for all the sacrifices she made to give her child a good life. She went through a lot and gave up a lot in order to provide that good life for them.


Conclusion:


My favorite line is:

Thank you, Mother,
for the life you gave to me.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I found no visible errors and have no suggestions for improvement.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello Jay O'Toole,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""NaPoWriMo: National Poetry Writing Month" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "NaPoWrimo: National Poetry WritingMonth" really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


This is basically an expression of expressing oneself in the form of poetry during poetry writing month. This also expresses that there is more than one way to do so.

Conclusion:


My favorite line is:

Diverted best when with my Lord,
I find secluded bliss
for in His hopeful, daily Word,
I feel the Savior's kiss.




Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I didn't find any errors so I don't have suggestions for improvement.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review of Poetry  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello My Sox Rox,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""Poetry" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "Poetry" really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


I could easily see this in a children's poetry book. It has a very pleasant and simple sound to the ears when read out loud. It is an image of writing some poems for poetry month.

Conclusion:


My favorite line is:

here's a poem for you



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I, personally, would have used some punctuation and capitalization. However, I am not going to be nit-picky with this. So, this is just a suggestion. I didn't notice any errors.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review of Keep it Beautiful  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello My Sox Rox,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""Keep it Beautiful" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "Keep It Beautiful" really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


keep it clean, wild, free, true, safe, ours, yours, and from shore to shore. I see this as saying that this is how we keep America beautiful.

Conclusion:


My favorite line is:

keep it from shore to shore



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I found no errors and I have no suggestions for improvement.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review by Marvelous Friend
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello Jay O'Toole,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""Keep America Beautiful!" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "Keep America Beautiful" really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


The image is not just of trash and liter scattered about. It is an image of the failing morality in America. It is saying keeping America beautiful isn't just about the way things look but also about the actions and hearts of the people in America too.

Conclusion:


My favorite line is:

O, beautify thy heart from sin.
The Savior make thee clean,
that throughout Time in the days of men
blest beauty's always seen.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I found no errors, so I don't have any suggestions for improvement.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello Jay O'Toole,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""He Arose! He's The Rose!" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "He Arose! He's The Rose!" really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


The image is Christ as a rose in a garden. The poem tells of Salvation and praises the Son of God. This expresses the Christian's view of the Easter Celebration of the resurrection of Jesus.

Conclusion:


My favorite line is:

The ground is level at the cross.
All humans have no statured grace.
Salvation’s Hope removes all loss.
For in the Lord we now have place.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I didn't notice any errors, so I don't have any suggestions for improvement.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review of Rain!  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello PiriPica,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""Rain! " and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "Rain!" really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


I get the mental picture of a broken relationship as the person is standing in the cold rain. The outer scene is reflecting what is felt on the inside.

Conclusion:


My favorite line is:

Soft as the mist is the cheek that I think I can feel, like it’s there still;
Eyes closed, to not see that I'm standing alone in the rain.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I didn't find any errors. I don't have any suggestions for improvement.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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for entry "Brown Returns
Review by Marvelous Friend
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
   

Hello Brian K Compton,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""Brown Returns" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "Brown Returns" really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


This pictures people returning to the beach as the weather warms up in Spring and describes a sandy beach once covered in snow. I imagine that would be quite the sight to see.

Conclusion:


My favorite line is:

My shadow marks minutes that last,
erase memory of winter white.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I didn't notice any errors. I don't have any suggestions for improvement.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


Let your creativity flow!
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for entry "Irish Rhythms
Review by Marvelous Friend
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
   

Hello Brian K Compton,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""Irish Rhythms" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "Irish Rhythms" really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.
I enjoyed reading this mixed style.


Imagery & Emotions:


I had to read it a couple of times to fully understand your piece. That isn't a bad thing as it really made me have to think about what I was reading. This poem paints a beautiful word picture of a mother reading Irish poetry to her son when he was small and leaving a huge imprint on his life that gave way to a passion of writing poetry himself.

Conclusion:


My favorite line is:

My first language as a wee lad,
timeless, Irish poetry by the bedside had --
read nightly, filling up my head.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I didn't really notice any errors. I don't have any suggestions for improvement.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


Let your creativity flow!
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for entry "Springtime
Review by Marvelous Friend
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
   

Hello GERVIC,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""Springtime" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "Springtime" really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


I think your poem paints the perfect picture of a Springtime scene. It speaks of the last of the frost melting away and new plants budding and rebirthing new life.

Conclusion:


My favorite line is:

Springtime comes to give rebirth
Of magnificent creation - God's masterpiece.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

The only thing I noticed was that your last line could have been worded better I think.
Instead of "In my silent wish, may springtime will not cease.", I would suggest, "In my silent wish, may springtime never cease."

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


Let your creativity flow!
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for entry "Where We Roam
Review by Marvelous Friend
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
   

Hello Brian K Compton,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""Where We Roam" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "Where We Roam" really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


There seems to be a lot of outdoor activity going on in this poem. It keeps the attention because something new is happening with each line. I kind of see a picture of maybe a yard with a child playing in the puddles, birds flying from tree to tree, and cats watching to see if they can catch a bird for prey. It appears to be a calm and happy scene as warmer Spring weather is enjoyed outside.

Conclusion:


My favorite line is:

Screened fragrance flows
freely within. Dust-lungs deep inhale, exhale soft



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I didn't notice any errors and have no suggestions for improvement.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


Let your creativity flow!
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"WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group


  


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