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Review of Queen Of Darkness  
Review by Marvelous Friend
In affiliation with Space Blog  
Rated: E | (5.0)
A lot of times, anger (leading to evil and malice) is caused by fear an anguish. We should always be aware of this when we are angry or we know someone else is angry. There is usually a root cause. Sometimes we put on a brave front to hide what we really feel inside too. I see no grammatical errors and have no suggestions for improvement. Emotions can be such a touchy subject.


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Review of Random Kindness  
Review by Marvelous Friend
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


Hello flyfishercacher,

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

What brought me here?

I noticed you have a WDC anniversary. Happy WDC anniversary!

What kept me here?

I happen to agree totally with what you are saying here. If Christmas really is about Christ, then we need to celebrate it as though it is. Do all things to the glory of God.

What I liked best:

I like the random gift idea.

My favorite sentence was:

Giving a gift to a stranger with no knowledge of the results was a refreshing experience, and speculating on the outcome has given me pleasure over the many years since.

I imagine it has.

What could be improved?

I didn't notice anything that needs improvement.

Summary:

This is very nicely written! Great job!

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Review of Reviewing ideas  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (4.0)


Hello Maryann,

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

What brought me here?

Anniversary reviews. Speaking of which, Happy WDC anniversary!

What kept me here?

I noticed this item hadn't been reviewed. I read it all the way through. This would be very helpful to someone who didn't know about the review template.

What I liked best:

I like the way it walked me through each step.

My favorite sentence was:

--Did their descriptions make you smile? Cry?
I don't know if I would tell someone it made me cry. Lol Well, maybe I would if it was a sad story.

What could be improved?
I use the Grammarly app., and it has a few suggestions for improvement. I will highlight the ones I feel are relevant in red for you.

1. of your screen; and click on 'my account',
The suggestion here is to change the comma to a semicolon.

2. --Continue being honest, positive, encouraging, and helpful
The suggestion here is to add a comma after encouraging since this is three or more items grouped together.

3. It's always a great feeling to know that you are able to really help a writer.
The suggestion is to change the wording from “are able to” to “can”.

Summary:

I feel this is a very nice item aimed at helping others. Great job!

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Review of Who's a Square?  
Review by Marvelous Friend
In affiliation with Space Blog  
Rated: E | (4.0)


Hello Norman,

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

What brought me here?

Writing about your poem on Space Blog


What kept me here?

This is a different kind of poem, but I can see your sense of humor in it.

What I liked best:

I like the silly humor in this poem.

My favorite sentence was:

So what’s the perfect type?
What makes a dad look cool?
If there were just three sides to me
I’d certainly look a fool.

What could be improved?

I use an app called Grammarly. It has 2 suggested improvements. It suggests a comma after of course, and a dash between pear and shape.

Summary:

I enjoyed reading this.

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Review by Marvelous Friend
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I think our special celebrations should be able to be remembered. We should go all out on special occasions. Is this your own personal quote or is it someone else's? What inspired this quote? I would love to hear the story behind it. I bet it is an interesting story to be told.


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Review of A Talk With Time  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (4.5)
   

Hello Lilliy Loidd 🪔,

It is my pleasure to review your piece today "A Talk With Time" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title ""A Talk With Time" really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


It is giving me a mental picture of someone talking to themself.


Conclusion:


This poem leaves the reader hopeful in-spite of a cloudy sky.

My favorite line is:

"Everything will be okay..."



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

T’is? Do you mean ‘Tis?
https://www.grammarly.com/blog/the-3-most-common-w...

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review of Bye, Dad  
Review by Marvelous Friend
In affiliation with Blog City ~ Every Blogger'...  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

What brought me here?

Your title “Bye, Dad” caught my attention. We all have to say goodbye to loved ones sometimes.

What kept me here?

The progression of the story is what kept me reading to the end.

What I liked best:

I liked the family connection best.

My favorite sentence was:

“I have good memories of us,” I said.

What could be improved?

1. We ate a cherry blossom for desert
Desert should be dessert. Google desert vs. Dessert for more info.

2. In July, he hoped for a full recovery.
I suggest adding the word “a”.

3. He ate a strawberry, four grapes, and a piece of cheese.
I suggest adding a comma after grapes because it is 3 or more things grouped together.

Summary:

I am sorry for the loss. Thank you for sharing your experience with us.

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Review of Images of Hope  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

What brought me here?

Your title “Images of Hope” caught my attention. Who doesn't need a little hope?


What kept me here?

When the subject of 911 came up, I was hooked.

What I liked best:

I like that this story points out that sometimes it is the worst things that happen to us that bring out the best in people.

My favorite sentence was:

Moreover, although it may ring as the ultimate cliche to say that what the world needs now is love, it remains as true as it has ever been.

What could be improved?

1. witnessing a tragedy see by the entire world.
See should be spelled seen.

2. callus metropolis
Callous is the proper spelling here, Google callus vs. Callous for more info.

Summary:

I really enjoyed this story. It leaves the reader feeling hopeful.

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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello Lori J,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "St. Patrick's Day Quilt" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title ""St. Patrick's Day Quilt" really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


I am able to see the thoughtfulness and love here. These were well pictured.

Conclusion:


I like that there is a sense of humor shown in the poem. I have never seen blue shamrocks either. 🤷‍♀️😊

My favorite line is:

But twenty years later,
Blue shamrocks cover the bed.

This shows love and appreciation for the unique gift.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

No critical errors were found.

I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job!



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Review of Lonely Times  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (3.5)
   

Hello Lurie Park,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Lonely Times" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title ""Lonely Times" really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


I love how this poem points to hope in the Lord. It paints this picture well.

Conclusion:


The prompt was St. Patrick's Day. I am sorry but you may have to enlighten me as to how loneliness ties into that subject. I didn't see the connection. Overall, the poem leaves the reader hopeful and on a positive note.

My favorite line is:

When you are in times of dismay
And no one by your side lay
You need someone beside your stay
So you only worship and pray

I like how this points to seeking the Lord as the answer to our problems.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

1. Think beyond the the sky where the sun has risen
You have the written twice here. I just highlighted the extra one in red so it would be easier for you to see it.

2. Ask the Lord why I am lonely?
Lord should be capitalized.

3. And inside your heart core, that's hide
A comma should be placed between core and that's to make reading easier. When you read it out loud, there should be a slight pause there.

4. We can all have love, that's true
There is an unnecessary space between love and the comma.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.


I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review of The Storm  
Review by Marvelous Friend
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello Wonder Queen Sox,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "The Storm" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title ""The Storm" really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


I actually love the emotional feel of this item. It is very dramatic. It pulls the reader in and keeps them in suspense until the end.

Conclusion:


Very nicely written!

My favorite line is:

leaving much hope of shelters found

Unfortunately, this is a truth that I hope someday will change. If you are ever caught out and about during the threat of one of these storms, it can be a very scary experience.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

No errors were found.

I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job!



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Review of FISHING  
Review by Marvelous Friend
In affiliation with Space Blog  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

 
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FISHING  (E)
Oriental Poetry Contest a Pantun Round 57
#2201908 by Monty


What brought me here?

Blogging prompt from Space Blog

What kept me here?

This is actually a nice little poem. I like it.

What I liked best:

It covered both floating on the water in a boat or fishing from the shore.

My favorite sentence was:

Should one stay on water afloat
Or go ashore to sleep on the sand?

What could be improved?

No errors were found. Great job!

Summary:

A very cute and pleasant poem.






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for entry "Seasons
Review by Marvelous Friend
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello Angel,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Seasons" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title ""Seasons" really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


The poem takes us through all four seasons of the year. It describes all the seasons well. I love the same start to each different season. I find it very creative and imaginative. I like the way the Anaphora form is used here. It works great with this poem.

Conclusion:


My favorite line is:

Fading out, with glorious show
Fading out, with shadowy glow
Fading out, with mists and dew
Fading out, with autumns hew

Autumn is my favorite season of the year.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

No errors were found. Awesome job!



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review by Marvelous Friend
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
   

Hello Jay O'Toole,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "The Legacy of Saint Patrick" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title ""The Legacy of Saint Patrick" really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


This tells the story of St. Patrick very well.

Conclusion:


I love the message of the poem. It stays on the prompt very well all the way through to the end from the beginning. When I read it out loud, it is a pleasant poem to read. It may just be me, but poems are kind of like music, and it doesn't sound as smooth to the ears as I would have liked it to. It is like sounding a sour note or two slightly off key. I don't know of a better way to explain it. It could just be the way my ears are hearing it. Overall it is a nice and pleasant poem.

My favorite line is:

“Jesus was restored to life on the third day,
but He restores lost souls, now, without having to wait."



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

1. He further stated,” The saving Lord
There should be a space between the end quote and The.

2. By that act, He became your sin
There should be a comma between act and He.

3. by His actions, He could offer you
There should be a comma between actions and He


I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review by Marvelous Friend
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
   

Hello Lori J,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Five A.M. In Oklahoma" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "Five A.M. In Oklahoma" really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


The vision I get from this item is a storm rolling through and then just rain afterward.

Conclusion:


This is a very short, quick description of a fast-paced thunderstorm.

My favorite line is:

Once more our land
receives the sweet blessing,

Of rain.

I like the fact that the rain and thunderstorm are perceived as a blessing.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

Eventually, they move on.

Please consider adding a comma after eventually.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
   

Hello Kåre Enga, P.O. 22, Blogville,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Trailer Home In Teresita, 2004" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "Trailer Home In Teresita, 2004" really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


Worried, confident, sad were the emotions projected here. The imagery is a typical tornado threat in Oklahoma. It depicts the real threat of an adult woman living in a trailer home with her children asleep while it is storming and hoping she doesn't have to awaken them to go to safety if there is time to do so. The picture was very well painted.

Conclusion:


The rhyme is visible in this poem. The poem is well written. It tells the story and shows true emotion.

My favorite line is:

just another night of sweat
in Oklahoma,
but I'm not O. K. with betting
that this passes over,

As a person born and raised in Oklahoma myself, I get the pun O. K. I think it made for some clever wording. It was a joy to read.


Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I could find no errors. Great job!


I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review by Marvelous Friend
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
   

Hello jaya,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today " Spring Insprations" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Again, Happy WDC Anniversary!

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title " Spring Insprations " really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


The mental picture I get as I am reading this is one of a peaceful scene mixed with anticipation for the summer.


Conclusion:


The poem stayed on the subject and painted the picture of a springtime scene well.

My favorite line is:

All’s new, all’s lovely, the delicious air
Of anticipation spread in nature’s domain.

This line sums up the conclusion of the poem. It ends with the attitude and feeling of anticipation.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

1. Turning more to the sun, days warm up

2. Turning more to sun, days warm-up

3. Inspirations should be capitalized in the title.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (4.5)
   

Hello jaya,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today " Saint of Ireland " and to give you helpful information if needed.

By the way, Happy WDC Anniversary! 😃

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title: Saint of Ireland


Your title " " really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


I feel the imagery and emotions were captured very well. It tells a lot of what St. Patrick's Day is truly about.



Conclusion:


Overall, it is very nice poem. I even chuckled a time or two under my breath as I read it. It was a joy to read.

My favorite line is:

What better symbol than
The Clover for the Holy Trinity
The Father, the Son and the Holy Ghost?

This is a fact I just recently learned myself. You don't hear that mentioned as often as other things about St. Patrick's Day.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

The Father, the Son, and the Holy Ghost?

This was the only issue I found.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.


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Review of Divine Nudges  
for entry "Beyond the Eyes
Review by Marvelous Friend
In affiliation with Space Blog  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Love it! I may post a link or 2 for this on my Bible study forum page and/or Bible study for next week. It goes with what we are studying. Very nicely written and rhymed. It also has a lovely rhythm to it. I like how you included the scripture with it too.


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Review of It's Over!  
Review by Marvelous Friend
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
This is so very sad but unfortunately true. It is like the abuser has 2 sides. He has this sweet charming side he uses to get what he wants, but then there is another dark, mysterious side that is scary and sometimes unpredictable. Stories are also a form of art. I think it is well played. A person who has been through it will definitely get this story all to well.


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Review of The Spiral  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Well, I do believe this poem goes full circle. We never know where our journey in life may take us. I am not as familiar with this type of poetry. At first glance, I don't see anything that needs improvement. When I read it aloud, it almost resembles a type of chant to me.


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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a nice story. It was pleasant to read it. Shouldn't on line be spelled online though? Sounds like a fun trip and Thanksgiving. I have never been personally fortunate enough to travel by plane for work though. So trip requiring flight are few and far between.


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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I love this story. Jesus saves. I would rather be spiritually rich in Christ and physically poor than physically rich and spiritually poor. The title of this is what caught my attention. No misspelling or grammar issues jumped out at me. Overall, I like the way this is written. I hope you continue to write more.


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for entry "~ He Made Me Whole ~
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Praising God for his healing. God is an awesome God, and we can have awesome experiences with him. Visions are interesting and wonderful things. They make our walk with him even more real and personal. I saw nothing standing out to me wrong with your writing. Great job!


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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I love this too. It is very encouraging. In fact it is something I needed to personally hear. We all have our struggles. One of mine is controlling my temper so I can control my words and actions even when angry. So this is a good word for me too. I didn't see anything wrong with the writing or anything that jumps outs at me anyway.


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