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for entry "In the Navy" 
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
   

Hello Dave,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today " "In the Navy" " and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "Le Voyage Magnifique" really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.


This poem is very pleasing to the ears and easy to follow.

Imagery & Emotions:


I find a lot of energy in this poem. I like the analogy at the end of the poem.

Conclusion:


I find the poem simple yet intriguing.

My favorite line is:

Fuel oil delivers power to drive propellers;
coffee provides energy to get sailors through the day.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I didn't find any errors

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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for entry "Duty Calls" 
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello, Dave ,

I am reviewing your entry in the "HONORING OUR VETERANS " . I am no expert. I am just here to give you my opinion of your item for whatever it is worth. You can take or leave it. 🤭

More specifically, "Duty Calls"  is what I am reviewing.

Your title, description, and cover photo are great for getting the attention of potential readers. The entry title is simple but effective.

The form and rhyme makes the poem sound pleasing to the ears when read out loud. It flows fluidly.

The imagery is that of the armed forces patrolling our skies and borders to make sure we are safe and we are not being attacked.

I found no grammatical the or punctuation errors. I don't have any suggestions for improvement.

My favorite part:
we take the fight to them to ensure
the future will not bring
another Nine-Eleven massacre.

Overall, this is an ideal poem. Nicely written and well done. Awesome job! Thanks for entering the contest and good luck on your entry. Thanks for sharing your talent here on WDC!

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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello Sumojo,

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"


I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""I don’t want to go back" " and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "I don't want to go back" really caught my attention.
The description also works well to peak the reader's curiosity.
A cover photo would add to visual appeal and also help draw attention to the item.

Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


A child wants to stay home and not go back to school because they are getting bullied by other kids. They want to learn at home because home is their safe place.

Conclusion:


Unfortunately, this is a reality for some. This is a cute expression of this though. It is realistic and has a warm inviting feel.

My favorite line is:

I’ll stay home and learn
I’ll make you feel proud.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I found no punctuation or grammatical errors so I don't have any suggestions for improvement at this time.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review of Back  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (4.5)
   

Hello Spring in my Sox,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""Back" " and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "Back" really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


It is a picture of classrooms at the beginning of the school year. The school busses are busy again. Summer break is over.

Conclusion:


I don't detect much emotion here. It is matter of fact. The poem has a neutral feel.

My favorite line is:

the wheels on the bus are rolling again



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I would suggest adding some emotional appeal. It is stated matter of fact without much feeling. It would add to the reader's attention to the poem.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review of Peace Defined  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello Jay O'Toole,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""Peace Defined" " and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "Peace Defined" really caught my attention.
The cover photo is an attention grabber and the description adds to the appeal.

Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


What is the peace that man seeks? Is it ceasing from war? Is it quiet and tranquility? Is it the prince of peace, Jesus?

Conclusion:


These are good questions for reflection.

My favorite line is:

The Man of Peace exudes this trait
to bind all ones still bent on war,
but He can loose them e'er too late,
if hearts will change to be restored.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I don't have any suggestions for improvement for you at this time.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello Jay O'Toole,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""Back to School, Seniors of 2022" " and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "Back to School, Seniors of 2022" really caught my attention.
The title, cover photo, and description work well together to grab a potential reader’s attention.

Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


I get the image of an emotional senior year of high school that is over way before you know it. This marks the beginning of adult life.

Conclusion:


I get the impression of giving the experiential knowledge of what senior year is like to the current seniors in high school.

My favorite line is:

then one day th'eternal pull
will show your lasting gold.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

Grammarly didn't like a couple of the phrases or words used, but I get that it is just part of your writing style. Overall, it is a great poem. I don't have any suggestions for improvement.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review of Family Fun  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello LeJenD' Looking Up,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""Family Fun" " and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "Family Fun" really caught my attention.
The title, description, and cover photo are great at grabbing the attention of a potential reader.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


I get the imagery of family fun is about spending time together as a family and making memories more than about the activity chosen.

Conclusion:


I agree. Although, the activity chosen may have an impact on how memorable it is.

My favorite line is:

the pleasure of time spent with loved ones
sharing the excitement and elation
that quality time they spend together
be it daily or in celebration



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I found no punctuation or grammatical errors. I don't have any suggestions for improvement.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review of Minus Willingness  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello Lori J,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""Minus Willingness" " and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "Minus Willingness" really caught my attention.
The description also works with the title to draw attention to your poem.
A cover photo would add to the visual appeal also.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


I get the picture that there is no peace in the world because everyone refuses to compromise. Everyone argues their point without being willing to give in. Everyone stands their ground. Therefore peace eludes us all.

Conclusion:


Is it fair to say no one compromises? I can't say I agree 100%. However, we could possibly say a majority of people refuse to compromise. Although, I get the message you are trying to convey. Each individual has the potential to start a ripple effect that will reach completely around the world. Now, with that, I can agree.

My favorite line is:

International Peace
Eludes the world.
Beginning with us
And those around us.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I found no errors in your grammar or punctuation. The only suggestions I have for improvement are to add a cover photo, and maybe to not come across as saying no one will compromise.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.


I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello Dan I Am,

It is my pleasure to review your piece today " "A Dragon Came to My House " " and to give you helpful information if needed.

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"🥳🎂


Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "A Dragon Came to My House" really caught my attention.
The title with the description made me curious enough to read your poem. It would be even better if you could add a picture of a dragon or a burned house, something like that, as a cover photo.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


I could see very well the mental picture of the dragon accidentally scorching the house or the man’s hair in this story. That would be a very interesting encounter. Although, I am thinking if this was at the back porch door, how big is the dragon compared to the back yard? Of course, this is just me and my imagination talking.

Conclusion:


I love this poem. It is just long enough to tell a complete story, yet it is open-ended enough that you can add to it and build upon what you have. The humor in this piece adds to its appeal. It kept my interest from start to finish.

My favorite line is:

maybe he could stoop, or kneel, or bend,
and try his very most
not to turn me into toast,



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I found no errors in your writing so I don't have any suggestions regarding grammar or spelling at this time.

I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job! This is a very cute poem.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review of Menopause  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, catwoman,

First I want to say, Happy Account Anniversary!🥳

*🎂 HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"🎂*


I am no expert reviewer. I am just going to give you my thoughts and opinions as a reader. You can take or leave anything you want to, but I sure hope you find it helpful. 😊

I wanted to give you an anniversary review. That's why I am here in your port. Your forum’s title caught my attention because apparently I am entering this wonderful phase of life. This is a great idea. I am glad I stumbled across it.

I found no errors in the text. The purpose of the forum is stated well. I would like to suggest you add to this forum links to articles, poetry, blog entries, or other helpful information pertaining to menopause. It would add to the visual appeal as well as to the purpose of starting this forum.

The idea of having open discussion about this topic is wonderful especially for those of us going through it. Thanks for creating this forum on WDC.

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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Genipher,

I am here to review your item, "Common Sense Shortage" .

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Disclaimer


I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer like yourself. I would like to share my thoughts, opinions, and suggestions with you about your story in hopes it is a help to you. You can disregard or use anything I say her as you choose.


Title, Description, and Cover photo:

Adding a cover photo will help attract attention to your story. The title you chose certainly caught my attention. The description added to my curiosity. Well done!

What brought me here?

*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*

What kept me here?

Curiosity is what kept me here reading to see what happened next.

Observations:

I admit, I was caught off guard when it was revealed that the factory manufactured common sense. They were short on quota so the man decides to have his family do without for a month. Hmmm! 🤔 Are you sure he had common sense when making that decision? Lol If the boss doesn't have common sense, how is he going to have the sense to meet the quota next month? 🤷‍♀️ This story has quite the twist. All I could say at first was, “Wow!”.

Suggestions for improvement:

I really didn't find any errors standing out to me. I have no suggestions for improvement.

What did I like the most?

I liked the unexpected twist the most. I would have never thought of common sense being made in a factory. Ha ha!

Overall Opinion:

I think this is a great story. I think you could make a sequel about how that month without common sense went and it could be quite comical.

Thanks for sharing your story here on WDC. It was a pleasure to read it. I hope this review is helpful to you. Have a great day! Keep on writing! 😀

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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Glenny,

I am here to review your item, "A Lifelong Friendship" .

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Disclaimer


I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer like yourself. I would like to share my thoughts, opinions, and suggestions with you about your story in hopes it is a help to you. You can disregard or use anything I say her as you choose.


Title, Description, and Cover photo:

The title with the description is warm and inviting. The cover photo is nice, but I think it would be even better if you had a picture of your friend.

What got my attention?

The title is what got my attention to look at your story.

What kept me here?

It was pleasant to read through your memories of your friendship. It sounds like something very special.

Observations:

We're her calipers a type of brace? How were they used? When you look up the word via Google it says they are a measuring device. As the reader, I could use some more clarity here.

I imagine you could write a book from the memories you have shared with your friend. I am so sorry for your loss.

Suggestions for improvement:

I have an app that I use called, Grammarly. This help me with grammar and punctuation a lot.

1. Diane and I spent a lot of time at each other's place and having lots of sleepovers , even sharing
It appears you have an unnecessary space between your word and the comma. Close that gap.😊

2. my Teacher, Mrs Coleman and
There needs to be a period after Mrs. and a comma after Coleman.

3. telling her he was taking my brother and I home
It should be my brother and me this time. I get these confused sometimes too.

4. As a teen she decided
There should be a comma after teen.


What did I like the most?

I like the way Diane persevered through all her struggles. It sounds like she left a great legacy behind her.

Overall Opinion:

I like the way the story was written. It was heart-warming and easy to follow. The paragraphs help make it easy to keep up with the story. I hope you will be writing a lot more. I look forward to reading more of your writing in the future.

Thanks for sharing your story here on WDC. It was a pleasure to read it. I hope this review is helpful to you. Have a great day! Keep on writing! 😀

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Review of We The People...  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello 🌕 HuntersMoon,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""We The People..."  " and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "We The People" really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


This is a great picture of what the United States Constitution was meant to be. I wish “we the people” still felt the same way and respected and protected the Constitution. Unfortunately, I am seeing a different attitude in the American people as of lately. Every American should make themselves aware of what it says and stand up to protect those constitutional rights. I am afraid the younger generation takes of lot of those for granted.

Conclusion:


I am glad there are some of us who remember what our forefathers fought to establish and defend. I hope we never lose it.

My favorite line is:

Profound ideal; each common word
clearly said, meanings unblurred;
poetic particles of dust
that formed a nation built on trust
in God.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I found nocritital errors. I have no suggestions for improvement.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review of Song of Nature  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello LeJenD' Looking Up,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""Song of Nature" " and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "Song of Nature " really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


I could envision someone sleeping out under the stars while reading this poem. It is well written.

Conclusion:


Overall, this is a comfortable poem and could easily be about camping too.

My favorite line is:

And I don't want to miss
the sun's first kiss
nor early morn's sweet song.




Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I found no errors in your writing so I don't have any suggestions for improvement.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello Redtowrite,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""Dr. DoLittle’s Treehouse " " and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "Dr. DoLittle’s Treehouse" really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


With this poem, I can see a house by the lake with beautiful scenery all around. I can see certain wildlife coming and going. I see a peaceful yard in a peaceful setting. I can almost hear the birds chirping. It is easy to see how you would enjoy spending time there.

Conclusion:


This is a very nice poem. It takes me there and shares it with me in a way. I would love to see it in person.

My favorite line is:

All this beauty we don’t wish to miss



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I found no critical issues here so I don't have any suggestions for improvement.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



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Review of Anniversary  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (4.5)
   

Hello LeJenD' Looking Up,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""Anniversary"  " and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "Anniversary " really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


I think that is pretty awesome that you get to celebrate the two national holidays with your anniversary. Your kisses really bring on the fireworks. Lol

Conclusion:


I like this poem. It is constructed very well. It also sounds pleasing to the ears when read out loud.

My favorite line is:

Canada Day through Independence Day
just a few days of festivity to honor
a love that has withstood the tests of time.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

The moonlight was working it's its magic
It's is the contraction for it is. For this to show possession in this case, should be its without the apostrophe.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


Let your creativity flow!
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Review of The Platypus  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello Words Whirling 'Round,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""The Platypus"  " and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "Platypus " really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


This poem is a good description of a platypus.

Conclusion:


This is a simple yet pleasant sounding poem.

My favorite line is:

From a face like a duck,
to the beaver-tail butt,



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

No critical errors were found here, so I have no suggestions for improvement.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


Let your creativity flow!
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Review of Wheel of Fortune  
for entry "July 19, 2021" 
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
   

Hello ridinghhood-p.boutilier,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""July 19, 2021"  " and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "Wheel of Fortune " really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


I can see an attempt to connect with nature even though in a suburban setting. I get the picture of appreciating what little is there.

Conclusion:


Sometimes what we seek is there just beneath the surface if we look hard enough.

My favorite line is:

Earth's stony core breathes in and out.
All the wildlife I need.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I found no critical errors so I have no suggestions for improvement.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review of City Park  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello LeJenD' Looking Up,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""City Park"  " and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "City Park " really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


I get the mental picture of a large park. This park probably has walking trails and park benches. It sounds like a bit of an oasis in the middle of the city.

Conclusion:


This sounds like a nice place to visit.

My favorite line is:

a haven of wildlife tucked within
this sprawling city's embrace



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I found no critical errors here. I have no suggestions for improvement.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


Let your creativity flow!
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Review by Marvelous Friend
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello Jay O'Toole,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today " "Independence Day 2021" " and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "Independance Day 2021 " really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


I see the comparison of a country of independence and a faith of independence. It is hard to have independence anywhere without first being dependent on God.

Conclusion:


The poem has a pleasant rhythm and sound. The message of the poem is not one that is common but definitely needed to be heard.

My favorite line is:

Independence makes confession's boast,
depending on the Lord.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I found no critical errors. I don't have any suggestions for improvement.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


Let your creativity flow!
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Review of L'aura del Campo  
Review by Marvelous Friend
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
   

Hello Kåre Enga in Udon Thani,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""View from the bridge [179] "  " and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "View From The Bridge" really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


I could easily see a person slowly walking across a bridge and stopping in the middle to look around. I can see the animals doing what they do. I can see a moment of tranquility, and then as the person continues walking, they are loaded down with the cares of the world.

Conclusion:


This poem gives off a bit of a sad vibe. It is like the sad carrying on of nature while others are hurting.

My favorite line is:

Then beavers glide up channels
to gather leaves at the base of half-gnawed trees
where eddies swirl.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I found no critical errors. I have no suggestions for improvement.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


Let your creativity flow!
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Review by Marvelous Friend
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello, Anna Marie Carlson,

I am finally getting to review your crossword puzzle, "Peers Build Confident Friendly People" . None of us are professional reviewers in our little rising stars group, so you know you don't have to listen to a word I say here. 😉 It is a pleasure going through the course with you.

I struggled to figure out the crossword at first too, but eventually figured it out. I see you did too. Don't get too discouraged here. We are all in this together even if we don't always talk much. I really like the questions you came up with. They were a bit different than the others. You were thinking a little outside of the box. I like that. Your puzzle also gave us a chance to get to know each other better. I think it would be easier to have everyone’s ports linked to your puzzle to make it easier to look up the info. Great job!

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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, LorenIsOneOfMyNames!

I finally found time to work and review the crossword puzzle, "Rising Stars Crossword" . This was a great idea for everyone getting to know the other rising stars better. A couple of our other rising stars added links to everyone’s ports which made the answers to the questions easier to find. This would be my only suggestion to you for improvement. Everything else looks great. The questions were fun to answer.

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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, {huser luriepark},

I finally got a chance to do and review your crossword, "Rising Star Crossword" . This was a great idea for a crossword. Answering the questions allowed me to get to know our other rising stars better. The questions made me take a look at everyone’s ports. The crossword was challenging without being overly difficult. I don't have any suggestions for improvement. Everything looks good to me. Thanks for the challenge and help getting to know the other rising stars.

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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Jay O'Toole,

I am here to do an anniversary review for you. I hope you are having a great anniversary month. Happy Account Anniversary!🥳🎉

You know I am no expert reviewer. Take what you like. Ignore the rest. However, I can be quite opinionated, so I am going to let ya know what I think. 😉 I hope you find it helpful.

I just read your poem, "He's Raised Without a Doubt" .

The title, description, and cover photo all work well together.

The rhythm and flow are almost musical. The poem sounds great when read out loud.

The imagery tells the story of the arrest, trial, death, and resurrection of Jesus. The emotions are appropriate and consistent throughout the poem.

I found no errors as I read through your item. It looks very well constructed. I found this to be an awesome poem, and I can find no areas of improvement needed here. Awesome work!

Thanks for sharing your poetry here on Writing.com. I look forward to reviewing more of your writing at a later time and as time goes on. Keep writing to the glory of God!

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