Hello {huser: },
I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.
What brought me here?
I was reading this to write in my blog for Space Blog today.
What kept me here?
This is a cute little story.
What I liked best:
The positive ending is what I liked best. The frog goes from complaining to a grateful reserve at the end.
My favorite sentence was:
I suppose my life isn't so bad, I get to drink here, good friends like Joe and Greg.
What could be improved?
I saw 2 things that hopped out at me. Man! Youβve got to get those frogs under control. Lol
1. Why are Frogs so Happy; They Eat What Bugs Them
I personally would punctuate this differently. I would place a ? Where the ; is. I would also add a period to the end of this line.
2. the time they got to her.There was a bit of trouble
There needs to be a space between the period and the beginning of the next sentence.
Is there a way you can us italics or something to add emphases on the puns/jokes? This would just make them easier to spot for your readers.
Summary:
Overall, I would say this is a cute story. I love the positive ending.