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Review of Song of Nature  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello LeJenD',

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""Song of Nature" Open in new Window." and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "Song of Nature " really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


I could envision someone sleeping out under the stars while reading this poem. It is well written.

Conclusion:


Overall, this is a comfortable poem and could easily be about camping too.

My favorite line is:

And I don't want to miss
the sun's first kiss
nor early morn's sweet song.




Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I found no errors in your writing so I don't have any suggestions for improvement.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review by Marvelous Friend Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello Redtowrite,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""Dr. DoLittle’s Treehouse " Open in new Window." and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "Dr. DoLittle’s Treehouse" really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


With this poem, I can see a house by the lake with beautiful scenery all around. I can see certain wildlife coming and going. I see a peaceful yard in a peaceful setting. I can almost hear the birds chirping. It is easy to see how you would enjoy spending time there.

Conclusion:


This is a very nice poem. It takes me there and shares it with me in a way. I would love to see it in person.

My favorite line is:

All this beauty we don’t wish to miss



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I found no critical issues here so I don't have any suggestions for improvement.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review of Anniversary  Open in new Window.
Review by Marvelous Friend Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
   

Hello LeJenD',

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""Anniversary" Open in new Window. " and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "Anniversary " really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


I think that is pretty awesome that you get to celebrate the two national holidays with your anniversary. Your kisses really bring on the fireworks. Lol

Conclusion:


I like this poem. It is constructed very well. It also sounds pleasing to the ears when read out loud.

My favorite line is:

Canada Day through Independence Day
just a few days of festivity to honor
a love that has withstood the tests of time.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

The moonlight was working it's its magic
It's is the contraction for it is. For this to show possession in this case, should be its without the apostrophe.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review of The Platypus  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello Words Whirling Round,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""The Platypus" Open in new Window. " and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "Platypus " really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


This poem is a good description of a platypus.

Conclusion:


This is a simple yet pleasant sounding poem.

My favorite line is:

From a face like a duck,
to the beaver-tail butt,



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

No critical errors were found here, so I have no suggestions for improvement.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review of Wheel of Fortune  Open in new Window.
for entry "July 19, 2021" Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
   

Hello ridinghhood-p.boutilier,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""July 19, 2021" Open in new Window. " and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "Wheel of Fortune " really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


I can see an attempt to connect with nature even though in a suburban setting. I get the picture of appreciating what little is there.

Conclusion:


Sometimes what we seek is there just beneath the surface if we look hard enough.

My favorite line is:

Earth's stony core breathes in and out.
All the wildlife I need.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I found no critical errors so I have no suggestions for improvement.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review of City Park  Open in new Window.
Review by Marvelous Friend Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello LeJenD',

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""City Park" Open in new Window. " and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "City Park " really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


I get the mental picture of a large park. This park probably has walking trails and park benches. It sounds like a bit of an oasis in the middle of the city.

Conclusion:


This sounds like a nice place to visit.

My favorite line is:

a haven of wildlife tucked within
this sprawling city's embrace



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I found no critical errors here. I have no suggestions for improvement.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review by Marvelous Friend Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello Jay O'Toole,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today " "Independence Day 2021" Open in new Window." and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "Independance Day 2021 " really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


I see the comparison of a country of independence and a faith of independence. It is hard to have independence anywhere without first being dependent on God.

Conclusion:


The poem has a pleasant rhythm and sound. The message of the poem is not one that is common but definitely needed to be heard.

My favorite line is:

Independence makes confession's boast,
depending on the Lord.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I found no critical errors. I don't have any suggestions for improvement.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review of L'aura del Campo  Open in new Window.
Review by Marvelous Friend Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
   

Hello Kåre เลียม Enga,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today ""View from the bridge [179] " Open in new Window. " and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title "View From The Bridge" really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


I could easily see a person slowly walking across a bridge and stopping in the middle to look around. I can see the animals doing what they do. I can see a moment of tranquility, and then as the person continues walking, they are loaded down with the cares of the world.

Conclusion:


This poem gives off a bit of a sad vibe. It is like the sad carrying on of nature while others are hurting.

My favorite line is:

Then beavers glide up channels
to gather leaves at the base of half-gnawed trees
where eddies swirl.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I found no critical errors. I have no suggestions for improvement.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review by Marvelous Friend Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello, Anna Marie Carlson,

I am finally getting to review your crossword puzzle, "Peers Build Confident Friendly People" Open in new Window.. None of us are professional reviewers in our little rising stars group, so you know you don't have to listen to a word I say here. 😉 It is a pleasure going through the course with you.

I struggled to figure out the crossword at first too, but eventually figured it out. I see you did too. Don't get too discouraged here. We are all in this together even if we don't always talk much. I really like the questions you came up with. They were a bit different than the others. You were thinking a little outside of the box. I like that. Your puzzle also gave us a chance to get to know each other better. I think it would be easier to have everyone’s ports linked to your puzzle to make it easier to look up the info. Great job!

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Review by Marvelous Friend Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, LorenIsOneOfMyNames!

I finally found time to work and review the crossword puzzle, "Rising Stars Crossword" Open in new Window.. This was a great idea for everyone getting to know the other rising stars better. A couple of our other rising stars added links to everyone’s ports which made the answers to the questions easier to find. This would be my only suggestion to you for improvement. Everything else looks great. The questions were fun to answer.

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Review by Marvelous Friend Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Jay O'Toole,

I am here to do an anniversary review for you. I hope you are having a great anniversary month. Happy Account Anniversary!🥳🎉

You know I am no expert reviewer. Take what you like. Ignore the rest. However, I can be quite opinionated, so I am going to let ya know what I think. 😉 I hope you find it helpful.

I just read your poem, "He's Raised Without a Doubt" Open in new Window..

The title, description, and cover photo all work well together.

The rhythm and flow are almost musical. The poem sounds great when read out loud.

The imagery tells the story of the arrest, trial, death, and resurrection of Jesus. The emotions are appropriate and consistent throughout the poem.

I found no errors as I read through your item. It looks very well constructed. I found this to be an awesome poem, and I can find no areas of improvement needed here. Awesome work!

Thanks for sharing your poetry here on Writing.com. I look forward to reviewing more of your writing at a later time and as time goes on. Keep writing to the glory of God!

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Review of Page Turner  Open in new Window.
Review by Marvelous Friend Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, January Critic,

I saw you had an account anniversary this month. Happy Writing.com Account Anniversary! 🥳🎉 Anyway, so here I am taking a look inside your port. I just read your item, "Page Turner" Open in new Window.. I would like to give you a review of it.

Of course, I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer like yourself willing to share my thoughts and opinions with you about your work. You can disregard anything I say here. I do hope this review is helpful to you though.

The title is an attention-getter. The description is a little vague but curious enough. A good cover photo would help draw attention to your poem I think.

The imagery I get from this is that of a volcano on an island or near a beach, similar to what you would find in Hawaii. I get the picture of you having your morning coffee on vacation with your significant other when the volcano erupts. Then you have to make a fight or flight decision for the safety of yourself and significant other. Is there a particular shape you are trying to make with the words? An errupting volcano, perhaps? I am not sure.

This poem has a nice rhythm and flow to it though. It is pleasing to the ears when read out loud. The poem is descriptive and suspenseful. It holds the attention from start to finish.

My favorite line is:
With coffee now in my trembling hand
I stand upon darkened sand

I found no errors. I don't have any other suggestions for improvement. Thanks for sharing it with us here on Writing.com. Awesome job! I hope you will continue writing more great poems.

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Review by Marvelous Friend Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, August Orion,

I see you have an account anniversary today, and decided to see what was in your port. By the way, happy account anniversary!🥳🎉

I am glad that I took a peek too. I found and read your item, "Please Don't Fatten the Fowl - 1st Place" Open in new Window., and liked it.

Please keep in mind that I am not an expert reviewer. You don't have to listen to a word I say here. I will just give you my thoughts and opinions on the item, and I hope it helps you out.

The title is comical, drawing attention to the poem by itself. I think it was a great idea to announce it got 1st place in a contest. That helps draw a readers interest to the poem. The cover photo adds curiosity. It is a good choice for this item.

Once the item is opened up, you see the figure of a duck made out of the words to the poem. This was a great idea, and very creative. I am sure you spent a great deal of time and effort on this. It is very impressive. The imagery is one of the ducks getting fed, and knowing that winter is coming so they are preparing for it. The rhythm and flow are appropriate for this poem, especially in creating the image with your words.

My favorite part is:
But surely, YOU know (each visit, you show) it’s hard to change one’s ways
-To much truth in that statement.

Anyway, it was a pleasure to read this. I enjoyed it. Great job! Keep writing.

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Review of Peace prevails  Open in new Window.
Review by Marvelous Friend Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello, hannahswriting,

I noticed you have an account anniversary today. So I decided to take a look in your port. Congratulations, 🎉 Happy Account Anniversary! 🥳

I ran across your poem here, "Invalid Item" Open in new Window.. I would like to give you a review. Please keep in mind that I am not an expert reviewer at all. Feel free to disregard anything I say here. However, I am going to give you my thoughts and opinions, and I hope they help you out.

I love the cover photo, title, and description that you have chosen. I believe they work wonderfully with your poem.

Reading it out loud, it is pleasing to the ears. I think maybe adding some punctuation may help clarify the rhythm. It flows well, but there are a couple of places that the rhythm changes. This could maybe be indicated with a comma in those places. I am not sure but the rhythm feels a little off beat to me. It could just be me. 🤷‍♀️ I can spot the rhyme in various places.

I love the emotion reflected here. It is one of steadfast peace in spite of difficulty. I am personally a Christian. I find it interesting some of the similarities between some of the different faiths. For example, you attribute your peace to Allah. I attribute the same kind of peace to the God of the Bible in which I serve and worship. I think it could be interesting to just sit down sometime in a group of different people from different faiths and compare beliefs. Some people could get confused by that though. Oh well, that's besides the point. I really like your poem though.

I found 3 areas I would like to make suggestions on.
1.Struggles are apart of life
I would suggest writing it like this. Struggles are a part of life.

2. I hope for what ever path you’re on
I suggest making whatever one word.

3. In all honesty, I had no words to say
I suggest adding a comma after honesty.

This is my favorite part:
I hope for what ever path you’re on
You find this peace too

Thanks for sharing this here on WDC. Awesome work! Keep it up!

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Review of Fear (Reflection)  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Allwrite,

I noticed you have an account anniversary today and went snooping in your pot. Happy account anniversary, by the way. 🥳

I am not an expert reviewer. Please feel free to disregard anything I say here if you don't like it. However, I do hope it is helpful to you.

I have just read your item, "Fear (Reflection)" Open in new Window..

Your title and description work great for this poem. I think what you did here is quite creative. Sometimes these fears and reactions are all to real for some people.

The poem has a nice rhythm and flow. The rhyme is noticeable. The poem is pleasant to the ears when read out loud.

The imagery and emotions are rather solemn and sad. Feaar does not seem to produce pleasant effects unfortunately.
I noticed, both at the dark and of life a child cries. Maybe you could change child to man or something else in one of these to add a little more variety. I believe you are trying to cover different fears at different phases of life. Maybe a baby could cry at the fear of life. 🤷‍♀️ I don't know. This is just a suggestion.

I saw no errors that stood out to me. I have no other suggestions for improvement.

Thanks for sharing your item with the rest of us here at WDC. Great job! Keep writing!

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Review of A remote  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Bluebird,

Happy Account Anniversary! 🥳 I hope you enjoy WDC as much as I do.

I just read your item, "A remote " Open in new Window.. I like it. I think we would all do that if we had a remote control for our life.

Your title with the description is what caught my attention to get me to read your poem. The only thing better here would be a cover photo of a remote control.

The rhythm and flow change in the middle of the poem, but it works with it. The emotions change with the rhythm which gave it an added effect. I found your item to be very creative.

I picture someone sitting on their sofa with a blanket, drink, and TV remote on their sofa browsing through the sections of their life. This is the imagery projected. The emotions are mixed depending on what season of life is being viewed at the moment.

I didn't find any errors jumping out at me. So I don't have any suggestions for improvement. I like the poem just the way it is.

Thanks for sharing it here on WDC. Great work! I look forward to reading your work again sometime.

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Review of My Heart's Desire  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Ms.Writeaway,

I noticed that you have a WDC anniversary today. Happy account anniversary! I love your username by the way.

I just read your poem, "My Heart's Desire" Open in new Window.. I like it.

Please note that I am not an expert reviewer. I am just going to give you my thoughts and opinions of your item here. Feel free to disregard any of it that you don't like. However, I hope it is of a help to you.

The title and description work very well with the poem.

The imagery and emotion give off a feel of sadness, but a strong hope the desire will be fulfilled. Another Scripture comes to mind as I read your poem.
Proverbs 13:12
Hope deferred maketh the heart sick: but when the desire cometh, it is a tree of life.

I do believe that as we submit more to God's will, our desires become more like his. Therefore, our desires will be fulfilled because they are in line with God's will. And the verse referenced in the description, also states a condition. We have to delight ourselves in God first. Then he will give us the desires of our hearts. This is a great poem though. I enjoyed reading it.

I didn't find any errors. I can't think of any suggestions for improvement other than to add a cover photo if you get the chance. The cover photos add to the visual appeal of your items. They help attract attention to your work.

My favorite line is:

I'll faith it till I make it, just what I've learned to do
I have to believe that my heart's desire in time, will come true

Thanks for sharing your poem here on WDC. Awesome work! I hope you will continue writing more.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jay O'Toole ,

I am here doing another anniversary review. Happy Account Anniversary!🥳

I am no expert reviewer here. I am just another writer expressing my thoughts and opinions of your work. You may disregard anything as you wish.

I just read "Signs of Love, Signs of Life" Open in new Window..

The title, cover photo, and description go together great.

I think this poem tells a much-needed message if only people will listen. I have often wished I could do more to help the homeless too. I also was not sure what to say or do. What makes it hard is there are so many people scamming others these days. It is hard to know who legitimately needs your help, especially if you don't want to be an enabler. I love the way you describe God providing small things for the homeless man.

I have couple suggestions. They are nothing major.

1. He lost his eye, his job and simple self-respect.
Add a comma after job.

2. The Maker of each man and woman, Earth and sky
has made us with the dignity of His reply.
Earth doesn't need to be capitalized here.

3. with open hands and loving hearts with gifts we can prepare?
Grammarly suggests adding a comma after gifts. Personally, I don't see it. I think a comma if you were going to add one would sound better after hearts when you think of a comma like a pause. Of course, that is just my opinion.

The rhythm and flow is brought together well. The imagery and emotion is a trust in God that he will provide even in your darkest hour of need. Little things make a difference and count a lot.

This is my favorite paragraph.
When Jesus came to Earth He lived a homeless life.
He spoke of love and life made new beyond all strife.
His birth was in a hay-trough that was not his own.
His tomb was borrowed, not ornate like kingly throne.

I like that you pointed out that even Jesus was homeless and made himself of a humble countenance. We should not neglect the poor or homeless.

Thanks for sharing this poem. Great job! I look forward to reading more of your writings. May God bless your endeavor to spread his word here on WDC.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jay O'Toole ,

I wanted to do a couple anniversary reviews today, and I noticed you had an account anniversary this month. Congratulations! Happy Anniversary!🥳

As you know, I am not an expert reviewer. I am just hear to share my thoughts and opinions with you about your item. You don't have to listen to a word I say here, but I do hope it helps you out.

I just read your poem "To Love LOVE" Open in new Window.. I noticed it wasn't showing any reviews yet.

First of all, the title caught my attention. The description added tomy curiosity. The cover photo is also great for pulling readers in to read the item. I am surprised no one has reviewed it yet. You are a great poet, and have some awesome poems!

I like the way it is written as a prayer and expressing love and gratitude back to the Lord. The imagery and emotions are expressed well.

The rhythm and flow are smooth throughout the poem. The rhyme makes the poem even more pleasing to the ears.

I did find one spot to consider making a change. In this phrase, I want to suggest adding “the” before mind since it is also in front of heart. Of course, I don't know if you were aiming for a certain number of syllables either.
by mind but by the heart,

I am a bit curious as to the meaning in this phrase.
You saved me from the sins that mar,
and from the good to see.
You saved me from the good to see? What was meant by this? That's an unexpected phrase.

Overall, I love this poem. Awesome job! Thanks for sharing it.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Joy- Happy 2026!,

I noticed you have an account anniversary this month, so I thought I would drop by to give you a review and say, “Happy Account Anniversary!” yay!🥳

First of all, please keep in mind that I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer like yourself willing to share my thoughts and opinions about your work. Feel free to disregard anything I say here. However, I hope it is of a help.

I went and looked this music up on YouTube to get a better understanding of the poem. I love poetry and music.

I love how you describe the music in the poem. The imagery is great.

I don't see any errors so I don't have any suggestions for improvement. Awesome job!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Jay O'Toole,

I am reviewing your entry in the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest, "Help for the Mind and for the Heart" Open in new Window..

Please keep in mind that I am no expert reviewer. I am just another writer like you willing to give you my thoughts and opinions of your work. Feel free to disregard anything I say. However, I do hope it helps.

The cover photo definitely catches the attention. The title is appropriate. The description summarizes the main thought of the poem. The three of these together work well to draw attention to your item.

When read out loud, it is pleasing to the ears. The rhythm and flow are smoothly written and the rhyme is obvious.

The emotions are that of hurt, grief, and loneliness. The imagery here is that of hope in God. It is not to disregard all of the Doctors and medication, but to allow God to work through the doctors and medication to make one better. In all illness physical and mental the focus is turned to God who is able to completely heal.

I found 2 places that could use a comma.
1. In open seas, the gifted breeze of gentleness of day
A comma would be good to have placed after seas.

2. but in the end, I know I'll see great days, that better are.
There needs to be a comma after end.

If you read the poem like there is a comma there, you should be able to see what I mean.

I found no other errors and have no other suggestions.

My favorite part:
Restore my soul, Blest Living God. Your righteousness bends low
to walk me through Death's valley deep, where evil tends to blow.

Overall, I think this is a great poem. I enjoyed reading it. Awesome job! Thanks for sharing it with us here on WDC. Thanks again for the entry to the contest.

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Review of Memorial Day 2021  Open in new Window.
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Hello, Jay O'Toole,

I am here to review your entry in the Poetry Topic of the Month, "Memorial Day 2021" Open in new Window..

Please keep in mind that I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer like you willing to give my thoughts and opinions about your work. Feel free to disregard anything I say here, but I do hope it is a help to you.

The title, description, and cover photo all work together to describe the poem and draw a reader's attention.

The rhyme is easily followed. The rhythm and flow of the poem go smoothly. It is pleasing to the ears when read out loud.

I like that there is more of a celebratory tone to the poem instead of a grieving one. The poem pictures the serious sacrifice made for our freedoms, but it celebrates those who made the sacrifices. It is like they are being cheered for. Then we are reminded that it is our choice to continue defending our freedoms or to let them go. The ball is now in our court so to speak. This is a very good picture of reality. Others sacrificed so we could be free, but it is up to us living and survivors what we do with our freedom.

I found no punctuation or grammatical errors in this poem, so I have no suggestions for improvement.

My favorite line:
They gave their oath to fight our foes,
both domestic and abroad,
until someone needed to tag their toes,
while their souls, then stood before God.

Overall, I enjoyed reading this poem. Awesome job! Thanks for sharing it here with us on WDC. Thanks again for your entry in the contest.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Legendary❤️Mask,

I am reviewing your entry in the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest, "I See The Tears She Sheds" Open in new Window..

Please keep in mind that I am not am expert reviewer. I am just another writer like yourself willing to give you my thoughts and opinions about your work. Please feel free to disregard anything I say here as you wish. However, I do hope it is a help to you.

I think the cover photo is pretty and appropriate. I do think if you could get a photo with a flag flying in the rain, it would go even better with this poem. The title with the description is definitely an attention-getter.

When reading the poem out loud, it is pleasing to the ears. It has a soft flow to it. The emotions are somber, sad, and worried. I get the imagery of the nation crying for the sacrifices made for it. I see the worry that the people of the nation are making choices that affect it negatively and hoping those sacrifices were not made in vain. It is very creative to compare a flag flying in the rain to a nation crying.

I found no punctuation or grammatical errors so I don't have any suggestions for improvement.

My favorite line:
May we still have the right to bear our arms to protect those against our enemies.

Overall, this is very well-written. You expressed your thoughts and emotions in a very creative way here. Thanks for sharing this here on the WDC website. Thanks again for your entry in the contest.

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Hello, Jay O'Toole,

I am reviewing your entry in the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest, "Happy Mother's Day 2021" Open in new Window..

Please keep in mind that I am no expert reviewer. I am just another writer like yourself willing to share my thoughts and opinions about your work. You are welcome to disregard everything I say here if you wish. However, I do hope it is of help.

I like the cover photo chosen for this item. The title is appropriate and the description adds to the praise of mothers. All three of these together catch the attention of the reader.

The use of the acronym is really quite creative. It adds a unique and personal touch to the poem and causes it to stand out. It adds to the visual appeal.

The rhyme included is easy to follow. The rhythm has an easy flow. The poem is pleasing to the ears when read out loud.

The image is that of all the things a mother is known to do. The emotion is that of love and admiration for a mother.

I found no errors and have no suggestion for improvement.

My favorite line is,
Serving God, we're taught to pray.

Overall, the poem is very nicely written. Thanks for sharing it with us here on WDC and thanks again for entering the contest. Awesome job!

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Review of The Tin Can Navy  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello, Dave's try to catch up.,

I am reviewing your entry to the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest, "The Tin Can Navy" Open in new Window..

Please keep in mind that I am no expert reviewer. I am just another writer like yourself willing to share my thoughts and opinions of your work. Please disregard anything said here as you wish. However, I do hope it will be of help to you.

The title definitely caught my attention. The cover photo and description help add clarity to the title.

The rhythm and flow were honest and engaging. The poem sounds pleasant to the ears when read out loud. The rhyme is followed easily.

The imagery used makes you feel like you are onboard the ship at least briefly experiencing what the people on board were experiencing. I can sense the feeling of pride and purpose for the temporary discomforts while at sea on the ship. At the end of the poem, I can see you looking back with fond memories. I found the imagery to be vivid.

I only have one grammatical suggestion for you.

to great adventures, a young man craves.
You might consider adding a comma after adventures.

I found no other errors or areas for improvement.

My favorite line was,
These days, I ride nostalgic waves
across a sea of memories
from the Tin Can Navy.

Overall, I enjoyed reading your poem. I found it to be creative and nicely written. Thanks for sharing with us here at WDC. Awesome job!

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