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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello LegendaryMask❤️,

It is my pleasure to review your piece today " The Sound of His Voice" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title " "The Sound of His Voice!" " really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


It is a comforting poem. I see the reassurance one receives from focusing on the voice of the Lord in the midst of chaos. It goes from worry and fear to comfort and peace.

Conclusion:


This is very well written. Nicely done.

My favorite line is:

His voice eases the fear away,



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

Yay! I found no errors.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (4.5)
   

Hello LegendaryMask❤️,

It is my pleasure to review your piece today "He lights up My Soul" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title " ""He lights up My Soul"" " really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


It is filled with the warmth of God's love and light. I get the emotions of rejoicing and relief.

Conclusion:


This is very beautifully written.

My favorite line is:

From the moment I let You into my heart
I felt the warmth of Your love growing within me.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

Rejoicing, praising, and dancing just to say.
Grammarly says you missed a comma after praising. 😉

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (4.5)
   

Hello LegendaryMask❤️,

I hear you have an account anniversary this month my dear cousin. Happy WDC anniversary!

It is my pleasure to review your piece today " This Easter Sunday " and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title ""This Easter Sunday!"  " really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


The emotions are mixed, sad but celebratory. I can see the picture well of the isolation we experienced last year. That was a great way to celebrate by the way.

Conclusion:


2020 was a strange year.

My favorite line is:

Take this new beginning to change your old ways
He has given us a new birth
Of hope to change what is wrong
And make right in the world.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

Hmm! Did you not use Grammarly then?
Celebrating in mass quantities is not allowed.
Consider changing are to is because celebrating is the subject of the sentence and it is singular.

There were a couple other suggestions by Grammarly, but they were kind of petty. Sometimes poetry is different from regular speech and we must be able to discern this.


I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (4.0)
   

Hello sinbad,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Live it, love it, & enjoy it " and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title ""Live it, love it & enjoy it"  " really caught my attention.

Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.


Imagery & Emotions:


I like how you turn the negative into a positive.

Conclusion:


My favorite line is:

Do not take life too seriously. You will never get out of it alive........



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

There are a couple of places you may consider changing the word means to mean (singular to plural).
1 Worries at the start of the day means u r still alive!!
2 *Clothes that don't fit means u have a good appetite.
3 *Taxes to pay means u r not unemployed.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello Jay O'Toole,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today " Secret Christmas: “He Arose”" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title ""Secret Christmas: "He Arose""  " really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging. Was this meant to be a poem? The writing is well done, but it has more of a short story feel and appearance to it.


Imagery & Emotions:


This paints a great picture of what Easter is really about.

Conclusion:

I enjoyed reading this.
My favorite line is:

The Best Present of Christmas was opened on Resurrection Sunday morning.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I found no writing errors.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review of Easter Eggs  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello PiriPica,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Easter Eggs " and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title " "Easter Eggs" " really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


This is a simple colorful explanation of your Easter celebration. I get the feeling of hope and new life after death.

Conclusion:

I think writing the lines in different colors is very creative and a nice way to express yourself.
My favorite line is:

Joyful promises of life
drip from the branches
in a rain of color;



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I found no writing errors in this poem. Well done!

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.

I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (4.0)
   

Hello Prosperous Snow celebrating,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today " April:National Poetry Writing Month" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title " "April: National Poetry Writing Month" " really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


The emotional feel is appreciation for poetry. It is cheery and inspiring. I like how the imagery places faith and poetry together.

Conclusion:


This is a very nice poem about poetry..

My favorite line is:

Faith makes poetry a spiritual experience,



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

1. quintessence of the sacred scriptures,
Consider adding of here.

2. and let its verses inspire.
I am thinking this should be its instead of it.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello Angel,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today " Little Red Riding Hood " and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title ""Little Red Riding Hood (Alt N/Rhyme)"  " really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


My feeling is lesson learned. The emotion is one of warning.

Conclusion:


This is a cute variation of the original story all though I am thinking this is more Litte Red Riding in the Hood. Haha.

My favorite line is:

So don't swindle granny
It's not such a doddle
You may just find
Off to jail you will toddle




Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I found no writing errors that stood out to me.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello PiriPica,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "April is for Poetry " and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title ""April is for Poetry" " really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


The emotion seems to be a cheery one, and I do believe April is for poetry. 😉

Conclusion:


This poem is put together well and nicely written. It has an easy flow and is pleasant to the ears.

My favorite line is:

Words take root in liberty,
attention they demand.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I found no writing errors so I have no suggestions for improvement.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello dogpack:saving 4 premium: DWG,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today " Jesus Gave All: Easter Story Poem" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title ""JESUS GAVE ALL: Easter story poem"  " really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


I do feel the emotions of celebration and excitement here. I think this covers the various ways of celebrating Easter and the reason we celebrate very well.

Conclusion:


This is very well done.

My favorite line is:

Although it’s nice I need not think twice
my salvation an awesome gift from Christ



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I found no errors in this poem.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review of Foole Alert  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello Words Whirling 'Round,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Foole Alert" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title ""Foole Alert" " really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


I get the emotions of mischievousness and paranoia. Imagery is well done describing various pranks that are played on people.

Conclusion:


My favorite line is:

Tread lightly through the trying day;
cast eyes both front and back.
None are safe from prankish play
and patience sorely taxed.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I am assuming the alternate spelling of foole has a reason. I found no errors that I could see.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.


I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
   

Hello Pumpkin,

It is my pleasure to review your piece today "More Earlier Poems " and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title " "More Earlier Poems" " really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


Three for one. Wow! To me, all three have a feel of sadness to them. Imagery is well done. I think the last poem has a little more positive vibe than the first two.

Conclusion:


I get the message of all three poems well. They are not too bad for earlier attempts. 😉

My favorite line is:

I sit tapping my foot,
Typing to the music.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I don't have any suggestions for improvement really. The last poem’s title I find a bit odd though.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow! This is very informative. I enjoyed reading your observations. It is good to hear the thoughts of someone who is not born and raised in the USA. It can give us a different perspective and insight. I hope we can learn from you and others like you to make improvements where needed and make this country even better. Thanks for sharing your thoughts.


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Review of My Best Friend  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello Liam,

It is my pleasure to review your piece today "My Best Friend" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title " "My Best Friend"  " really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


I get the impression of fond childhood memories and current musing.

Conclusion:


The sun as the friend was a bit unexpected, but I like it. I have never thought of the sun as playing hide and seek either. It was refreshing to read a pleasant and different kind of poem. I hope to read more of your work in the future.

My favorite line is:

The sun is such a loyal friend,
he still comes by this spot each day



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do.

I found no errors in this item.


I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.

Happy WDC anniversary!

I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (4.0)
   

Hello mix n match,

It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Lockdown Blues " and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title ""Lockdown Blues (UK)"  " really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


I think this poem said what many people feel. Imagery and emotions are portrayed very well.

Conclusion:


It is a fun little poem about a frustrating situation. I love it!

My favorite line is:

Is there no end to these Lockdown blues?



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

1. Bought a new bike that I can’t use !
There is an unnecessary space before the exclamation point.

2. I paint rubbish pictures , daft colours and hues,
There are 2 things in this line. The space between the comma and pictures should be removed, and it is suggested to add a comma between colours and the word and. I am assuming colours is how it is spelled where you are. In America, it is spelled colors.

I use an application called Grammarly. It has been a great help to me, and these are the suggestions it gave for improvement.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review of Toothache  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (4.5)


Hello jenjenta,

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

What brought me here?

Anniversary Reviews. Happy WDC anniversary!

What kept me here?

I can totally relate. I have been there and it isn't any fun at all.

What I liked best:

Your honesty about your fear of the needle is what I liked best.

My favorite sentence was:

But let’s pretend for a little while more…

What could be improved?

any kind of medicine
The word of should be added here.


Summary:

I only found the one error. Awesome job!

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Review of Snowbird  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (3.0)
   

Hello toni,

It is my pleasure to review your piece today " " and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title ""Snowbird" " really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


I think the imagery and emotions were done very well.


Conclusion:


Overall I really like the poem. I love birds so I completely relate to it.

My favorite line is:

I longed so hopelessly to reach out,



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

1. sitting so still, as if carved
Consider removing the comma.

2. artic chill.
Arctic is the correct spelling.

3. instead, all I could do was to stare
Consider adding a comma after instead.

4. its seeming agony of captivity.
Consider changing seemingly to seeming.

5. I saw it's wings spread
Its would be the correct spelling here.

6. As, it slowly vanished
The comma is not necessary here.

7. peace, love, and happiness.
A comma should be after love.

I use an application called Grammarly. It helps me a lot.


I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review of Something's Fishy  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)


Hello Foxtrot Victor,

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

What brought me here?

It is your WDC anniversary. Happy Anniversary!

What kept me here?

It is a cute little story.

What I liked best:

The Dad's quick thinking.

My favorite sentence was:

“Well, son… Let’s just say mommy’s secret is much worse than a dead fish.”

What could be improved?

The Grammarly app suggests placing a comma where the semicolon is in the following:

now he’s gone; and we’re the only ones here.

Summary:

Overall, I love this story. Awesome job!

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Review of The Stars Above  
Review by Marvelous Friend
In affiliation with Space Blog Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)


Hello Dave,

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

What brought me here?
Space blog

What kept me here?
I like poetry. This poem is easily related to.


What I liked best:

I think it is easy for people to feel the same way. The imagery is great. The emotions can be felt by the reader.

My favorite sentence was:

Despite mundane responsibilities,
we make the time to pray upon our knees.

What could be improved?

I did not notice anything that needs to be improved.

Summary:

Great job writing this poem!

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Review of Random Kindness  
Review by Marvelous Friend
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


Hello flyfishercacher,

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

What brought me here?

I noticed you have a WDC anniversary. Happy WDC anniversary!

What kept me here?

I happen to agree totally with what you are saying here. If Christmas really is about Christ, then we need to celebrate it as though it is. Do all things to the glory of God.

What I liked best:

I like the random gift idea.

My favorite sentence was:

Giving a gift to a stranger with no knowledge of the results was a refreshing experience, and speculating on the outcome has given me pleasure over the many years since.

I imagine it has.

What could be improved?

I didn't notice anything that needs improvement.

Summary:

This is very nicely written! Great job!

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Review of Reviewing ideas  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (4.0)


Hello Maryann - House Martell,

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

What brought me here?

Anniversary reviews. Speaking of which, Happy WDC anniversary!

What kept me here?

I noticed this item hadn't been reviewed. I read it all the way through. This would be very helpful to someone who didn't know about the review template.

What I liked best:

I like the way it walked me through each step.

My favorite sentence was:

--Did their descriptions make you smile? Cry?
I don't know if I would tell someone it made me cry. Lol Well, maybe I would if it was a sad story.

What could be improved?
I use the Grammarly app., and it has a few suggestions for improvement. I will highlight the ones I feel are relevant in red for you.

1. of your screen; and click on 'my account',
The suggestion here is to change the comma to a semicolon.

2. --Continue being honest, positive, encouraging, and helpful
The suggestion here is to add a comma after encouraging since this is three or more items grouped together.

3. It's always a great feeling to know that you are able to really help a writer.
The suggestion is to change the wording from “are able to” to “can”.

Summary:

I feel this is a very nice item aimed at helping others. Great job!

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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I think our special celebrations should be able to be remembered. We should go all out on special occasions. Is this your own personal quote or is it someone else's? What inspired this quote? I would love to hear the story behind it. I bet it is an interesting story to be told.


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Review of Bye, Dad  
Review by Marvelous Friend
In affiliation with Blog City ~ Every Blogger'...  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

What brought me here?

Your title “Bye, Dad” caught my attention. We all have to say goodbye to loved ones sometimes.

What kept me here?

The progression of the story is what kept me reading to the end.

What I liked best:

I liked the family connection best.

My favorite sentence was:

“I have good memories of us,” I said.

What could be improved?

1. We ate a cherry blossom for desert
Desert should be dessert. Google desert vs. Dessert for more info.

2. In July, he hoped for a full recovery.
I suggest adding the word “a”.

3. He ate a strawberry, four grapes, and a piece of cheese.
I suggest adding a comma after grapes because it is 3 or more things grouped together.

Summary:

I am sorry for the loss. Thank you for sharing your experience with us.

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Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (5.0)
   

Hello Lori J,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "St. Patrick's Day Quilt" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title ""St. Patrick's Day Quilt" " really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


I am able to see the thoughtfulness and love here. These were well pictured.

Conclusion:


I like that there is a sense of humor shown in the poem. I have never seen blue shamrocks either. 🤷‍♀️😊

My favorite line is:

But twenty years later,
Blue shamrocks cover the bed.

This shows love and appreciation for the unique gift.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

No critical errors were found.

I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job!



I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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Review of Lonely Times  
Review by Marvelous Friend
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Rated: E | (3.5)
   

Hello Vaishali,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Lonely Times" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:


I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:


Your title ""Lonely Times" " really caught my attention.


Rhythm & Flow:


I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.



Imagery & Emotions:


I love how this poem points to hope in the Lord. It paints this picture well.

Conclusion:


The prompt was St. Patrick's Day. I am sorry but you may have to enlighten me as to how loneliness ties into that subject. I didn't see the connection. Overall, the poem leaves the reader hopeful and on a positive note.

My favorite line is:

When you are in times of dismay
And no one by your side lay
You need someone beside your stay
So you only worship and pray

I like how this points to seeking the Lord as the answer to our problems.



Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

1. Think beyond the the sky where the sun has risen
You have the written twice here. I just highlighted the extra one in red so it would be easier for you to see it.

2. Ask the Lord why I am lonely?
Lord should be capitalized.

3. And inside your heart core, that's hide
A comma should be placed between core and that's to make reading easier. When you read it out loud, there should be a slight pause there.

4. We can all have love, that's true
There is an unnecessary space between love and the comma.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.


I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.


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