Marvelous Friend's (pickmarvilla) Reviews

Marvelous Friend

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372 Total Reviews Given

Review Style

Honest and simple

I'm good at...

Poetry

Favorite Genres

Religious

Least Favorite Genres

Horror

Favorite Item Types

Static

Least Favorite Item Types

Interactives

I will not review...

Erotica, vulgarity, and anything that I don't feel comfortable with.

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#4605132

Review of Lonely Times

Review by Marvelous Friend

In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group

Rated: E

| (3.5)

Hello Vaishali,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Lonely Times" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title ""Lonely Times"

" really caught my attention.

Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.

Imagery & Emotions:

I love how this poem points to hope in the Lord. It paints this picture well.

Conclusion:

The prompt was St. Patrick's Day. I am sorry but you may have to enlighten me as to how loneliness ties into that subject. I didn't see the connection. Overall, the poem leaves the reader hopeful and on a positive note.

My favorite line is:

When you are in times of dismay
And no one by your side lay
You need someone beside your stay
So you only worship and pray

I like how this points to seeking the Lord as the answer to our problems.

Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

1. Think beyond the the sky where the sun has risen
You have the written twice here. I just highlighted the extra one in red so it would be easier for you to see it.

2. Ask the Lord why I am lonely?
Lord should be capitalized.

3. And inside your heart core, that's hide
A comma should be placed between core and that's to make reading easier. When you read it out loud, there should be a slight pause there.

4. We can all have love, that's true
There is an unnecessary space between love and the comma.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.

I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.

Let your creativity flow!

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#4605129

Review of The Storm

Review by Marvelous Friend

In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hello Spring in my Sox,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "The Storm" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title ""The Storm"

" really caught my attention.

Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.

Imagery & Emotions:

I actually love the emotional feel of this item. It is very dramatic. It pulls the reader in and keeps them in suspense until the end.

Conclusion:

Very nicely written!

My favorite line is:

leaving much hope of shelters found

Unfortunately, this is a truth that I hope someday will change. If you are ever caught out and about during the threat of one of these storms, it can be a very scary experience.

Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

No errors were found.

I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job!

I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.

Let your creativity flow!

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#4604989

Review of FISHING

Review by Marvelous Friend

In affiliation with Space Blog Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

STATIC

FISHING

(E)
Oriental Poetry Contest a Pantun Round 57
#2201908 by Monty

What brought me here?

Blogging prompt from Space Blog

What kept me here?

This is actually a nice little poem. I like it.

What I liked best:

It covered both floating on the water in a boat or fishing from the shore.

My favorite sentence was:

Should one stay on water afloat
Or go ashore to sleep on the sand?

What could be improved?

No errors were found. Great job!

Summary:

A very cute and pleasant poem.

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#4604923

Review of The Legacy of Saint Patrick

Review by Marvelous Friend

In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group

Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hello Jay O'Toole,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "The Legacy of Saint Patrick" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title ""The Legacy of Saint Patrick"

" really caught my attention.

Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.

Imagery & Emotions:

This tells the story of St. Patrick very well.

Conclusion:

I love the message of the poem. It stays on the prompt very well all the way through to the end from the beginning. When I read it out loud, it is a pleasant poem to read. It may just be me, but poems are kind of like music, and it doesn't sound as smooth to the ears as I would have liked it to. It is like sounding a sour note or two slightly off key. I don't know of a better way to explain it. It could just be the way my ears are hearing it. Overall it is a nice and pleasant poem.

My favorite line is:

“Jesus was restored to life on the third day,
but He restores lost souls, now, without having to wait."

Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

1. He further stated,” The saving Lord
There should be a space between the end quote and The.

2. By that act, He became your sin
There should be a comma between act and He.

3. by His actions, He could offer you
There should be a comma between actions and He

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.

I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.

Let your creativity flow!

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#4604860

Review of FIVE A.M. IN OKLAHOMA

Review by Marvelous Friend

In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group

Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hello Lori J,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Five A.M. In Oklahoma" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title "Five A.M. In Oklahoma" really caught my attention.

Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.

Imagery & Emotions:

The vision I get from this item is a storm rolling through and then just rain afterward.

Conclusion:

This is a very short, quick description of a fast-paced thunderstorm.

My favorite line is:

Once more our land
receives the sweet blessing,

Of rain.

I like the fact that the rain and thunderstorm are perceived as a blessing.

Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

Eventually, they move on.

Please consider adding a comma after eventually.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.

I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.

Let your creativity flow!

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#4604852

Review of Trailer Home in Teresita, 2004

Review by Marvelous Friend

In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group

Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

Hello Kåre Enga in Udon Thani,

I am reviewing your entry for the Poetry Topic of the Month Contest. Thanks again for your entry.
It is my pleasure to review your piece today "Trailer Home In Teresita, 2004" and to give you helpful information if needed.

Disclaimer:

I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.

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Title:

Your title "Trailer Home In Teresita, 2004" really caught my attention.

Rhythm & Flow:

I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.

Imagery & Emotions:

Worried, confident, sad were the emotions projected here. The imagery is a typical tornado threat in Oklahoma. It depicts the real threat of an adult woman living in a trailer home with her children asleep while it is storming and hoping she doesn't have to awaken them to go to safety if there is time to do so. The picture was very well painted.

Conclusion:

The rhyme is visible in this poem. The poem is well written. It tells the story and shows true emotion.

My favorite line is:

just another night of sweat
in Oklahoma,
but I'm not O. K. with betting
that this passes over,

As a person born and raised in Oklahoma myself, I get the pun O. K. I think it made for some clever wording. It was a joy to read.

Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.

I could find no errors. Great job!

I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.

Let your creativity flow!

"WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"

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#4603540

Review of The Spiral

Review by Marvelous Friend

In affiliation with Blog City ~ Every Blogger'...

Rated: E

| (5.0)

Well, I do believe this poem goes full circle. We never know where our journey in life may take us. I am not as familiar with this type of poetry. At first glance, I don't see anything that needs improvement. When I read it aloud, it almost resembles a type of chant to me.

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#4603538

Review of Maui Wowie

Review by Marvelous Friend

In affiliation with Space Blog Group

Rated: E

| (4.5)

This is a nice story. It was pleasant to read it. Shouldn't on line be spelled online though? Sounds like a fun trip and Thanksgiving. I have never been personally fortunate enough to travel by plane for work though. So trip requiring flight are few and far between.

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#4603481

Review of The gods of wealth.

Review by Marvelous Friend

In affiliation with Space Blog Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

I love this story. Jesus saves. I would rather be spiritually rich in Christ and physically poor than physically rich and spiritually poor. The title of this is what caught my attention. No misspelling or grammar issues jumped out at me. Overall, I like the way this is written. I hope you continue to write more.

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#4602933

Review of ruwth is writing...

for entry "~ He Made Me Whole ~"

Review by Marvelous Friend

In affiliation with Blog City ~ Every Blogger'...

Rated: 18+

| (5.0)

Praising God for his healing. God is an awesome God, and we can have awesome experiences with him. Visions are interesting and wonderful things. They make our walk with him even more real and personal. I saw nothing standing out to me wrong with your writing. Great job!

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#4602932

Review of ruwth is writing...

for entry "~ ✝️ I Choose JOY! ~"

Review by Marvelous Friend

In affiliation with Space Blog Group

Rated: 18+

| (5.0)

I love this too. It is very encouraging. In fact it is something I needed to personally hear. We all have our struggles. One of mine is controlling my temper so I can control my words and actions even when angry. So this is a good word for me too. I didn't see anything wrong with the writing or anything that jumps outs at me anyway.

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#4602931

Review of It's not a formula, it's a relationship.

Review by Marvelous Friend

In affiliation with Space Blog Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

I love it! I have also written something similar to this in my port. It is good to see others write about their faith in the Lord too. I am enjoying reading some of your writings. Keep sharing your faith. It is very encouraging to others with the same or similar beliefs.

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#4602923

Review of Christian Bible Fellowship

Review by Marvelous Friend

In affiliation with Blog City ~ Every Blogger'...

Rated: E

| (5.0)

This is a great idea. I will have to remember this is here. I love it. Scriptures are all the time jumping out at me. I read at least 1 chapter with study notes each day, and I keep a personal prayer journal. Do you advertise this in the newsfeed very often?

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#4601667

Review of Friendship With God

for entry "Beyond - a poem"

Review by Marvelous Friend

Rated: E

| (5.0)

This is a great poem. After reading your testimony previously, I get it. I hear the cries and desperation in your soul. I think it is written just the way it was meant to be written. It is full of deep feeling and thought. I am a poet, and I can hear your message plainly. Sometimes after experiencing something supernatural as you did, words and images just flow from your soul.

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#4601663

Review of Friendship With God

for entry "Lion Of Judah"

Review by Marvelous Friend

Rated: E

| (5.0)

You had my interest from start to finish here. They say sometimes fact can be stranger than fiction. I love the way God works. Who can write a better story then him? This is a very beautiful story of how God rescues his own. The Bible says no one can pluck you out of his hand.

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#4598813

Review of In Praise of Dawn

Review by Marvelous Friend

Rated: E

| (4.5)

I feel the hope and promise of the beginning of the new day. Yesterday is gone, and so is the nighttime darkness. I can picture the sun’s first rays of light bringing hope and promise and warmth. It is a nice little poem. I don’t really have any suggestions for improvement.

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#4598811

Review of Depiction of Guiding Spirit

Review by Marvelous Friend

Rated: E

| (4.0)

This is different from what I am used to reading. I am not quite sure what to think. I am thinking this is possibly describing a carving tool? I am not 100% sure. There are some lines here describing sounds, and I am not aware of their purpose or what they have to do with the subject.

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#4598809

Review of A Love So True

Review by Marvelous Friend

Rated: E

| (4.5)

This is a nice poem. I like the descriptive words used here. I can see a clear word picture of the scene of two lovers watching the sunset and then getting ready for bed. Then I can see them snuggling under the covers together as the temperature drops outside.

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#4598733

Review of Sunlight Dances

Review by Marvelous Friend

Rated: E

| (5.0)

I like this poem. I am thinking it just talking about some garden path or something. Then as I read further, I realized it was a love poem.your rhyme is great. I have no suggestions for improvement. It is a beautiful expression of a long lasting relationship. I hope it is still well with you.

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#4598332

Review of PEARLS OF LOVE

Review by Marvelous Friend

Rated: E

| (5.0)

This poem reflects loneliness. It is a poem of a dreamer who dreams of better times and places and circumstances. Do you listen to your own heart or to what others are telling you? I think other people’s opinions are only making you sadder. They cause you to overthink and analyze. And hang on to those pearls! 🙂 The Bible says we shouldn’t cast them before swine. (Pun intended!) I think it communicates your thoughts and emotions well.

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#4598331

Review of I KNOW NOT

Review by Marvelous Friend

Rated: E

| (5.0)

I know that pain unfortunately. I think this poem communicates your feelings and bewilderment well. I like the repeated line that ties the poem together. I am sensing someone deeply romantic at heart. The lost feeling is captured well too. Nicely written. I have no suggestions for improvement.

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#4598330

Review of I HAD ONCE LOST ALL HOPE

Review by Marvelous Friend

Rated: E

| (5.0)

This is an absolutely beautiful poem. I love it. It touched my heart. I felt the presence of the Holy Spirit while reading it. I believe it got its intended message across. I have no suggestions for improvement. I can feel the love of God and Christ in this, and love that it ends in such hope.

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#4598304

Review of I Don't Have The Sugar!

Review by Marvelous Friend

Rated: E

| (5.0)

So I guess the moral of the story is he has the sugar? 🤪 I don’t see anything that needs improvement. I don’t think that good doctor was telling them what they wanted to hear. I think he didn’t want to give up the sugar and wanted to have the pressure instead. Lol Take it from someone who knows. This fictional character doesn’t want the pressure or the sugar. Just what kind of white granules were those anyway? Lol

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#4598284

Review of D is for Monkey

Review by Marvelous Friend

Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

Ok, well that was different. I am not quite sure what to think about the monkey. 🤷‍♀️ Are we in some illusion or nightmare or a psychotic drug in this story? How did we get into this warped reality? Other than that, I don’t notice any need for improvement.

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#4598148

Review of A Fish Story

Review by Marvelous Friend

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

They say sometimes truth is stranger than fiction. Ha ha! Well at least you have a good sense for adventure. That story does seem mighty fishy. 😂 Overall, it is a great story. As I was reading through it, I didn’t notice anything standing out to me that needed correction. Thank you for sharing this story.

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