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Review of Sea Shore  
Review by qaz4
Rated: E | (4.0)
Wow, I really love the first stanza, it had me hooked. The first two lines are particularly effective. In the second stanza, I think you've got a typo in 'distinguishing'? I didn't find the rhythm as strong in the second stanza, but I enjoyed the poem overall anyway.
Well done.
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Review by qaz4
Rated: E | (4.5)
Very well written, I think you did well in expressing your views. The arguement you used was clear, and concluded nicely at the end. You used texts such as the bible, open to interpretation, to back up your arguement. I think it was wise to include the prelude, as it gives people some idea of what to expect. Well done.
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Review of Paper cut  
Review by qaz4
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Brilliant. Absolutely amazingly brilliant. I love the rhyming, and the very idea of words themselves being poisonous. However, I didn't really understand what you meant by the line, "what will never regain our trust". Overall, I really enjoyed this, well done and keep writing.
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Review of Human Connection  
Review by qaz4
Rated: E | (4.5)
I love this, it's a very powerful poem. I like the last two lines especially, as they completely change the mood of the poem. They sound of hope. I'm not sure if you noticed, but you switched to past tense in the last line. Overall though, very nice, I enjoyed reading this. Well done.
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Review by qaz4
Rated: E | (4.0)
Weird, powerful, eerie, wonderful. The one part about it that I didn't like was the end of the last line, "as it is defined by me." For me, that removed a lot of the power from the poem. Since there's a very loose rhythm, you might get a way with just removing that part, if you wanted. Just a suggestion. The rest of it was simply brilliant. Well done.
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Review of Take Hold  
Review by qaz4
Rated: E | (5.0)
WOW, I am stunned. This is a piece of poetic genius. I simply can't think of any way I could suggest an improvement. I love the whole subject of dreams, and the way you brought in trust is just amazing. My favourite lines are
"Let them take you
places you have never
been before, but wish to
be."
I love the end part of that, 'wish to be'. It is the most powerful expression of the power of dreams that I have read recently.
Very well done.
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Review by qaz4
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wow, this is a brilliantly powerful poem. I love the way you use the sounds throughout. I honestly cannot think of anything I could say to help you improve it. To my mind, it's beautiful as is. I'm not sure if it was intentional, but at one point the poem actually LOOKS like a wave. "In a gasp...tsu … na … mi"
Very impressive. Write on!!
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Review of Four Poems  
Review by qaz4
Rated: E | (4.5)
Projection: Short, sweet. It almost sounds more like a paragraph than a poem, if it weren't for the metaphor carried throughout. Rating: 3.5
Bike Riding: I like the simple rhyming here, and it's a great choice of topic. Rating: 4.5
Miniature Golf: Again, this feels very much like a paragraph. I like the way you used description, "bars where the fox used to fly" and "swing our arms for joy". It just adds something to the poem. Rating: 4
Warm Autumn Night: I really like the imagery in this. It sounds so good I can almost see it. Rating: 4.5

Overall, a very nice collection of poems. Write on!!
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Review of enharmonics  
Review by qaz4
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow, this poem simply stunned me. I love the rhythm, the way you used a couple of images all the way through, the subtle rhyming that works so well... I'm almost speechless. I honestly can't think of any constructive critisism (that doesn't happen often :D). Can't wait to read some more of your writing.
WRITE ON!!
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Review of love is blind  
Review by qaz4
Rated: E | (4.5)
Wow. This poem really impressed me. I love the way you go through the 'love is blind', then describe that idea, then apply it to your past, and your future. The whole layout was just beautiful. Some punctuation might help the flow a bit, but that's up to you. My favourite lines were the last two, they really hit me.
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Review of Clock-Work Life  
Review by qaz4
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, I think this is a beautiful poem, you really touched on something about the routine of life, and I think it's easy to see howa mechanism like this could be controlling it all. I really liked this piece. Thanks for a great read :)
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Review of Heaven  
Review by qaz4
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love the language used in this piece, I think it makes it seem a little, I don't know, slightly dreamy. It adds a beautiful sense to the poem. I thinki ts a great topic, and you've made a masterpiece that was a pleasure to read. Well done.

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