Oni's (raltie) Reviews

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#3791892

Review of Preview to my story (short)

Review by Oni

Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

This story sounds deeply personal, like you're getting a chance to imagine what their lives would be like without you in it. Something I feel every person young or old has imagined, and the chance to do something noble as part of your last breath apeals to our sense of protecting those around us. I dig it!

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#3339292

Review of John Wolfstone-The Book

for entry "Chapter 1"

Review by Oni

Rated: 18+ | (4.0)

Lol! I like it! It has a very light and fun way about it! The way you describe John makes me think he's extremly kind and patient, but not in the least a push over. The world they live in seems to be dangerous for the little humans and if giants exist along side dragons, what are those societies like? Where do they sleep? or do the Giants shrink down to size at will just like a were-wolf? Lot's of fun wrapped up into curious bundle! I'll have to read some more man!

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#3330619

Review of Taking a wife

Review by Oni

Rated: 18+ | (4.5)

*pop*
Did you hear that? That was my mind being BLOWN!!!

I must say I have two opinions about this story.

On the part of the fantasy of experiencing the physical pleasure of switching genders for intercourse, I must say being confused never hurt my head so much! Gotta say this must be at least a wondering of many people in the world today!

On the part of developing a "vehicle" for the fantasy, very well done indeed! It was elegant enough to be welcome as a sexual fantasy. Very tasteful and not so overtly sexual as to be offensive!

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#3330586

Review of A Day on the Farm

Review by Oni

Rated: ASR | (5.0)

Ah a parable! Homer and Jesus would have approved! Hmm...I cant think of any story tellers more famous than those two.
I'm curious what inspired a story about selfishness in your life? And what about the cow and the pig who were looking on as this happened?

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#3330519

Review of Just One More Try.

Review by Oni

Rated: ASR | (4.5)

Being a Christian, this doesn't seem blasphemous to me. However I do believe The End has been pre-ordained and The Second Coming was inevitable prior to the first. However I also believe that God gave us finite minds so that we would guess at his plan, even wonder if this is his first go at a universe.
Good writing! I would say that the Caps for Titles does kinda get old but I understand why you do it. Call them demons and angels sounds cliche and how are we to know if Angels even call themselves Angels? Or if the call the Enemy, Satan or Lucifer? Good premise! Keep up the good work!!!