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I enjoyed this insight. I have lost friends and family because of politics and religion. I have maintained some friendships in spite of politics and religion. That being said I now vet any new friends. Congratulations on your win in the Cramp!
I enjoyed your tale of John and home remedies. I would like to see more concrete details in the narrative, though. Which "old country" did John come from. Did any of his remedies work? Before the availability of drug stores, health food stores, etc. people had to rely on herbs, plants, etc. for healing. And Sue his wife could have certainly used more detail. Happy writing.
Your tale of your ancestors is poignant and moving. Though you are adopted have you had your DNA done? It may give you further insights into your background. Remember, your ancestors flow back in time like a column of saints. Because of your adoption, you would actually have 2 columns--adopted and biological. Blessings!
I appreciate and frequently participate in the shorter word length contests here on writing.com. Your piece introduced me to a contest I have not seen before. Your argument for the Bible is an honest one. However, the Bible, like life has many contradictions and inconsistencies. But I am not here to argue, only to rate. The only criticism I have is I thought this contest was flash fiction, and yours is more essay, not fiction. Nevertheless, happy writing!
I enjoy reading your work and it is not in my nature to criticize another writer. I am a reader not an editor. I have a suggestion though, I would like to see your deeply held beliefs with more personal and original imagery and situations. It would add power and authenticity to your writing. Blessings.
I appreciate and frequently participate in the shorter word length contests here on writing.com. Your piece introduced me to a contest I have not seen before. Your argument for the Bible is an honest one. However, the Bible, like life has many contradictions and inconsistencies. But I am not here to argue, only to rate. The only criticism I have is I thought this contest was flash fiction, and yours is more essay, not fiction. Nevertheless, happy writing!
Thanks for your octet poem. Discovered a new short poetic form. Wondering if this is a real film? Sounds like a fun thing for a Halloween treat. You might want to ferret out a movie, I believe called Cat People or Cat Woman. Old, black and white. Creepy. Always enjoyed The 50-foot woman, too. Blessed Halloween/Samhain.
Curious as to what the slider tool is. Here in Florida the change of summer to fall is much more subtle. October is my birth month and favorite. Also first and second marriages in October--and inexplicably First Holy Communion. I find the last lines confusing, flu ills, summer kills? Summer kills flu ills or flu kills? Blessings.
AH, yes--Walter Pidgeon. Do you think any younger writing.com members will get this reference. I enjoyed this personification poem and your linking the gargoyle to an avian friend.
In the fifth line I believe you spelled eerie wrong. I was unable to get the photo prompt to open so I cannot comment on that as a source of inspiration. The sense of horror is prevalent in the poem. I'd like to know--where is this door? Was it ever opened? Is it a phantasm of imagination? Happy writing!
a delightful story of childhood. I hope it is true. I think when we have cooking disasters we have a story to tell. With a magnificent culinary concoction perhaps not so much. Happy writing and reminiscing. I don't know what the taboo words were, but your story flowed well without them.
I would like to offer just a small suggestion for this poem. Criticism is not my intent here. The idea and central theme is interesting. I would like to see you expand the idea to include more concrete details about specific blessings. I think it would also be interesting to see how a prayer that was answered with a "No" was actually a blessing. Happy writing!
Hard to review such a short, short prompt. I see this is based on a true story--and how inexplicably sad this must have been. The brief introduction makes the reader want to know more details about this tragedy--who, what, where, and why. It is indeed a prompt and I can dee this opening up in to a much longer piece. Happy writing!
A monchielle is a difficult form but you executed it well. I am intrigued by your explanation of the Bab. The Bahai faith is little known. I find it interesting that he is considered descended from the line of prophets as John the Baptist. Though I believe all true prophets are of the same divine lineage. Blessings to you!
I found your take on the dialogue idea, a dialogue with G*d, Hashem intriguing. Prayer is speaking to God, and listening. I will have to explore "farandolae" now, as not familiar. I am assuming it is from "A Wriinke in Time." Could there be a dialogue with farandolae, or mitochondria? An intriguing write. Blessings.
This is such a scorching, searing honest letter. Mental illness is never easy to deal with. I understand why you might cut your sister from your life. Perhaps things will change and she will find stability. I wrested, as a child, with my mother's mental illness. It never got better. Blessings to you. Prayers.
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