Hello...
That was a very beautiful story and it touched my soul. The narration was so simple that one could feel what she was feeling.
The pain that she was going through was beautifully described.
That was very sweet of Margret.
The left a smile on my face. It was sweet and kind of reminded me of my school.
Its is a simple story that refreshes the mind and makes one smile.
Will look forward to such simple writings in future...
Happy Writing!!!
Now that was a sweet fun story to read.
It has suspense and held my curiosity.
I knew Flame was somewhere in there but I had to read on.
Quite refreshing.
It started like a ghost story.
I don't have any improvement to suggest.
It's a beautiful story by itself. :) Happy Writing...
Hi J.O.C
Enjoyed it. Should have read it from end to start :)
Just kidding. Things seemed a little confusing in the beginning but they all fell in places at the end.
Just one confusion:
He swallowed a handful and aimed the crossbow…
…At the head of the unconscious young woman Gwyn was embracing as her skin slowly turning into the color of the night sky.
Is this one single statement?
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