It is a scary story especially since this is what we are moving towards. I fortunately pay my internet bill on the first of the month so they won't cancel me. I was worried when it cancelled him it would be more of a permanent complete "cancellation." I really liked the dialog between him and the AI. It built the suspense for me in a creepy way. Great story.
What a sweet little story. I like the idea of yearly family reunions. I only ever went to two; they were decades apart and I really did not know any of them. I wish I had memories like this to go with them. Family is amazing. The connectedness of this family is really inspiring. Mine was just so dysfunctional. My mother always wanted a big united family like this. I do go to yearly christmas parties with my wife's family sometimes I forget they are my family too. There is only one kid in the family though. Maybe someday I will send him on a snipe hunt...
I loved these poems, though hung together like this it really just made one long poem for me. I enjoyed it. I like the subject I had never thought of writing one acrostic about bingo let alone four. These were well written. I liked the rhyme schemes. Great job of writing these.
This poem reflects the fear and turmoil of the height of the pandemic. It reminds me of the time period. Now covid is just another seasonal vaccination like the flu, but in twenty twenty it was serious and at times terrifying to think of. The hope was it would be a one and done but then the variants began popping up and that actually made me less afraid it made me think of the influenza pandemic of the first world war. I felt like it would become gentler and more treatable by sticking around than it was when it first appeared. Great snapshot.
What a cute little poem. I love it. The rhymes are a wonderful addition. A happy accident of this poem. It doesn't really follow the syllable constraints of a haiku though. It also does not fit the usual theme of nature that is accepted for haiku. So i would suggest not call it a haiku. If it were not reported to be a haiku i would not find any flaws to point out.
What a sweet and loving poem. It is sad that your mother was lost so early in your life but I am glad your granny stepped up to fill the role. I love the echoes of the past in your mothering day celebrations with your family. It is an awesome story poem and the ending was very satisfying for me.
This is a pretty good expression of love forming and ultimately becoming forever. It moves quickly and builds in intensity of emotion well. It is not how I would write of my experience of love at first sight. But I do feel it through the poem. I think if everyone experienced love in the exact same way this would be a boring place. When I met my true love it was like she was outlined in a heavenly halo and I knew I wanted to spend all my time with her. I had her over for dinner and to work on a work project together and then never wanted her to go home. It took me time to admit to myself that i had fallen for her so hard though. She had moved in before we started dating. It made carpooling easier. But I wanted it for more than convenience. We had lived together for months before our first official date and by then neither one of us wanted to ever be apart again.
Absolutely hillarious take on the three little pigs. I love the wolf. I appreciate that this story did not revolve around him having enough lung power to blow the houses down. I also feel like the self centered brothers got what they deserved. It is not that i think the wolf was blameless in the murders, it is just that they just do not seem like the best people. I mean really having the taxidermy brother of another creature in your house. Did he hunt him personally and stuff him himself or did he buy him from someone else. That question alone is morbid enough to nearly excuse Ralph eating him. I love Flowerina's female wolf friends and the way they are so protective of her. I also love that Ralph falls for her as opposed to trying to eat her. Great retelling of the story.
I enjoyed this very short story. Though I am not completely sure it is a full story. There is no suspense or oveall change to the character's starting state. It was a pleasant read. The character reveal is clear. The insertion of vital backstory is good. It is not delivered in too big to digest chunks. I feel like I should feel the shopping mall more since it is the closest this story comes to some kind of resolution. Great story? question mark on the story not on the great. This is definitely a great piece of writing though you are missing an apostrophe in the first paragraph there is a doesnt that should be doesn't other than that I can not really complain.
This is a very structured poem. I do not think it is a particular form but you have really put effort into how it looks and how it reads. I can only hope that this is not a current struggle for you. If it is I offer my condolences and prayers for recovery. This poem is a rough gut wrenching experience to read I can only imagine how much worse it must be to live it. I do not think I could live with myself if I were responsible for someone else's death. I sometimes feel responsible for my mother's passing because I signed the do not resuscitate order, even though she begged me to sign it. That is guilt enough for me at times. My prayers are with you.
This was a cute fun poem. I loved the rhymes; none of them were stretched, but some of them did surprise me. I had not thought of them as rhyming, but they did. Trees, bees and facsimiles was my favorite trio but all of them were cool. I would love to go to the shoe emporium. I have trouble finding shoes that are small enough for my feet. I have ended up wearing size three shoes. For the longest time I wore size five and a half but lately my feet swim in them. I think that the shoe sizing scale must have changed somehow, because feet do not shrink, do they?
That is seriously creepy. Mysterious invitation to a potentially haunted mansion, hard pass for me. I would definitely would not have even rsvped with a no way. I would have just tossed it card, envelope and all. That said this is almost like the beginning of a longer story and I would love to know what the next meeting would consist of. I am curious about why they recieved the invitation. You could take this so many places, past life, time travel, ghost infatuation. I am just so intrigued with the clues that you have seeded through the story. I would hope for more. Make this the first chapter of something longer please.
Hang in there. I searched for decades to find my soulmate. I resorted to dating sites. I even met a man that exactly fit everthing that little girl me said I needed in a husband, only to find he made for an okay freind but not a soulmate. God taught me that wating was acceptable and when I did find my soulmate my virtue was still intact. So I pray that you find that person you are looking for. Just have patience, god moves in his time. And just because you think you know what you are looking for does not mean that you are right. Let go and let god.
Cool. I am glad they both arrived on the island in mostly one piece. I like the whole castaway vibe. She does a great job pulling herself together and getting what needs to be done done. One of them should probably call for help if they still have a signal. It is Gillagan's Island with cell phones. That would have been a short series. I always thought it a bit contrived that they could make a radio to hear signals but not to call for help. Anyway awesome short story. It feels like it is the perfect length to tell the story and it made me wonder about the lives they live.
Oh, how sweet. A lonely old woman who did not even realize she was lonely found someone who needed her as much as she needed them. I love the story. It is told well, but there was a line in the first paragraph that read a little rough
Several time a week keeps happy.
I think you are missing a word in there, the one that tells you who is being kept happy. Perhaps you mean
Several times a week keeps them happy.
It looks like you were just in a hurry to get your awesome idea down and left out a little of the sentence. It is a wonderful story otherwise and you should be proud. All it needs is that slight edit to be just about perfect for me.
This is a deep poem. It is highly political, with a message that the people of my country need to hear. We are not innocent when we allow our leaders to make war just because. It does not just apply to the United States. Other countries like Russia are responcible too. This is a great poem with a great message. Though it might be a touch easier to read if you made the statements of the two mothers into separate stanzas to make it clearer which one is suffering actual losses and which one is just thinking her world sucks despite advantages.
Ooh, a story that is equal parts creepy and sweet. I wish it were longer just because it left me wanting more, though it was a complete story in what you have written. Now to the minus of the story. Writing dot Com does not work like typical word processing programs. Indenting your first line with a tab just does not work. You either have to put in an indent with code or what most people do put an extra return between the paragraphs to differentiate them. It would make it an easier read and not run together as much. It was not to much of an issue in this short story, but in something longer and not as dialog heavy, it could make the difference between someone reading it and someone passing because it is just a bunch of mush. Honestly, if it had not been this short I would have skipped reading it. It is an easy fix, though, and the writing itself is really good. I had the same problem getting used to the site when I first joined but I am okay right now.
This is a sad poem. It made me want to cry. We are currently going through the slow loss of Papa who is in hospice. It is not a romantic love but we do love him none the less. That resonated within me as I read this poem. I like the title you gave. I do wonder what the exact prompt was. I also wish this contest was still running if this is the kind of writing that came out of it. I wonder what I could have come up with. This was written a few years before I joined Writing Dot Com, and it is always interesting to see what I missed out on by not finding it sooner. That is not to say that what we have these days is not awesome but I do regret my missing out.
Awesome poem it worked really well for me. I have begun to have a taste for poetry based on popular media. Tv shows just do not inspire me as well as nature or the inner workings of my own mind. I enjoy the poems other people have written though. I have read a lot of poems inspired by horror franchises recently they are not my favorite. I have to say that this one was more pleasant and fun than any of those. I also like the short form, I know it was part of the prompt but what I remember of the form, this is written well. I like where you went with the prompt. I get a lot of prompts in the poetry prompt challenge that are simply a poetry form, I have trouble with them and usually i end up writing a poem about writing the form. I hate when they specify a subject at the same time.
This is an intriguing story. My idea of what was happening jumped around not at all anywhere around how it ended up. I definitely did not see the ending before it arrived. So Summer was a person and this was their end. I do not know how Summer relates to the girl. Were they lovers? Friends? The same person? It was just too blurry of an ending for me to have it figured out.
Hillarious punchline. I was ready for a really scary story but this was just a really fun trip. The ghost was just trying to keep him from falling through the floor. The dumb bumpkin deserved what he got for swearing at a ghost that was just trying to keep the living safe. The brother totally deserved a broken arm and worse. The one telling the story gets a laugh every time he tells it, you can just tell. The scenery is vivid and I could feel the storm raging around me as I read. Great story I loved it. It was so much fun.
I missed this forty eight hour media prompt, but I knew within the first three lines just what the prompt song had to be. It could only be Royals. This poem echoes the theme of the prompt and really works as a kind of summary of the song in a way. Even though different words are used it stll speaks to me in the same way as the song. I am impressed with it. I wish I had seen this prompt and taken a shot at it. Oh well opportunities missed no point in being sour over it. I am just glad I got to read this example of what could come from this inspiring song.
This poem is a touch upsetting. The idea of unfulfilled dreams and desires being driven off by life. If feels so sad. Then the idea that even after that their faith was not destroyed instead it brightened it. That is the upswing of the poem into inspirational territory. Then came a reapeat of the first line this time it is not omnious it is more of a it was always going to be okay.
Dates like this lead to disappearances. You were lucky that he was not a serial killer. I can see and feel you spending two hours praying he is not a serial killer. Was this a daytime date or an evening date. Did fading light make it more frightening? I am glad you came out of this okay. Lesson learned it is not the best idea to agree to things like this on first dates. But as you said it all turned out okay. Did you see him again or was this one and done with him?
I am so bookmarking this awesome recipe. It sounds positively tasty. It is well written and quite clear in its lists and instructions. It is everything a recipe needs to be. I wonder why you posted this though it is not something I typically think I would find on writing dot com. Maybe I just have not been exploring this place as well as I should. Are you thinking of putting together a recipe book? If they all sound this good, all you will need is pictures.
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