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Review of Eyes of Mist  
for entry "2 - Dark Clouds" 
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
The writer is being drawn into the story in a way he didn't expect because of the girl. It reminds me of the neverending story in the way that there are the characters in the story and then an over story with a reader or in this case writer being affected by it. Is there something way he can affect the story. Can the characters hear him like they sometimes can in the neverending story? The young prince reminds me of prince zuko in Avatar the last air bender. He seems open to a way of thinking the rest of his people are not open to.
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Review of Eyes of Mist  
for entry "1 - Peaceful Days" 
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I like the beginning with the soldiers seeking the fate of the unbreakable fortress. The way they are picked off in the mists is kind of creepy it makes me wonder what kind of Uber warriors the invaders were when the thoughts of the scout is that it seemed strange that they were capable of taking out the fortification. The two sides seem to know little except a just because hate of the other. Does anyone really remember why this war began? What about the mysterious writer in the white land. Is he writing what has happened or what will happen?


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Review of Eyes of Mist  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This would be better formatted in a book format rather than separate items that are linked as chapters it is for the ease of review let's and readers this way of formatting depends an awful.lot on the back button to get the whole story. It is also easier to write in a book format because it allows for easier outlining and editing individual chapter while keeping it easy to see an overview of the story. The summary of the story could be a little tighter. Giving more of the feeling and energy of the story. You shouldn't judge a book by it's cover but you better bet people are going to judge it and decide to read it based on the summary. It needs more action words and showing than the simple third grade book report description. You are trying to entice or seduce readers with your blurb. It is the first and sometimes only chance to hook your reader into reading what you wrote.


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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This seems unfinished. It feels like the end note should include the other examples of the historical wonders of the world. The end note appears to be part of a broken drop note. If properly done it would add to the story about lighthouses rather than taking from it. As it is formatted it detracts from the essay.

The essay itself is strong focused and informative it takes a less than pertinent subject and makes it accessible. I learned a lot about the historical workings of lighthouses. I hadn't considered where the light had come from before electricity. I think we should have more working lighthouses just in case of the technical failure of modern navigation means.


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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Man I feel sorry for Liam. From the first chapter I read this is not how I thought chapter five would turn out. This is the type of story I consider a guilty or hypocritical pleasure. Oh look at how awful the lives of these rich people are, with all of their money, and influence, and fame. It is just so rough to have parents expectations to live up to when they come with solid gold safety nets. Why do I like these stories? Perhaps it is because some people like this author can make the practically alien worlds of these characters vibrant ban relatable.
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Review of Bear  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This appears to be a piece in progress. It suffers from a few places where thoughts haven't been completed, or divided from one another. I think that this would be better served with separate paragraphs describing each individual type of bear. Also I am not sure that American black bears eat bamboo, which is how the sentence currently reads. This has the potential to be an informative and interesting article. Thank you for presenting this for us to read please continue to work on it and send me a link to the completed article so I can re review it. If you need help with linking items or reopening items you already began check out "Noticing Newbies"  for assistance.


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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Challenge accepted! Ahem. I found this to be a really ironic prompt. It expands upon the prompt for this prompt, with what I consider to be an acceptable use of the two-sentence limit placed on this entry. It is a creative use of the prompt word "newspaper." There are just so many directions the author could have gone with the prompt for their prompt. I like the Western, time-travel potentials that their entry offers. Only one real character is offered by their prompt, the ambiguous first-person narrator. It suggests that any response to this prompt would in fact be a first-person narrative. I wonder if it will be possible to smoothly add in another point of view to this mix, perhaps an unreliable narrator that is in fact the main character's foil? The possibilities for good fiction to come of this prompt make me miss the days when this contest alternated between prompt rounds and the round where you would write a story based on the last round's winning prompt. To me this prompt is a real winner whether it wins the contest or not.


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Review of The Hunter  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I like this start. The characters are revealed my the showing of their relationship. They are both good though perhaps only reluctantly so. They are trapped in the battle between salvation and damnation and it sounds as though neither of them qualifies fully for either state. I like the hunter character it is clear how weary she is of the war. It is also clear that she suffered a painful loss in her most recent battle. Basically her life sucks and she has little control over it. She is forced to be an unconnected wanderer and she wishes it would end even if it meant her end.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a clear and well-defined essay on the structure of a monster in the house story. It deals with the two major variations and certain elements that are common to them it defines the story type. It describes the structure of both variations.this structure ties a wide variety of individuals stories into this type, from jaws, to nightmare on elm Street, to alien. I hadn't thought about those movies being so similar until I read this essay. It makes me want to read the original book that this information references.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Been in a state like this before. Desperate indefinable apathy. The words and meanings of this prose poem flow together like watercolor storyboards. There is just enough ill-defined reality to this to carry a character through to the end. The setting is like you are looking at things through a silk scarf. The character too is unfocused. You really can't catch an image of them in your mind but the piece left me thinking they were someone I knew or had at one time been. The whole thing is unethusiastically moving right back into the state where it began. It reminds me of an artistic version of a tiktok reel.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
The punctuation of this poem is lacking as in even lacking apostrophes where they should go. Usually I can ignore punctuation inadequacies in poetry but apostrophes in possessives and conjunctions are a must for a proper read.

That said I sympathize with the poet on the way some just want to shove a pill at any inconvenient emotion. How is it that other people think they have the right to value or devalue another person's emotions in that way. Sometimes there is a benefit to letting a pensive mood flow through you.


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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Awesome I don't know if the last paragraph about guy means he wasn't an angel or what but I love the last glimpse of him. I am so glad that they found each other and fell in love. I am happy about Brian and Stan's improved relationship. I just love the whole story. I am not accustomed to reading scripts but it read just fine to me it was longer than I expected it to be but I wouldn't have left out a bit to make it shorter. The part where Stan practically hijacked the bus after stopping the robbery was a bit extreme but it was a necessary breaking point for Stan.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a well thought to quiz. It wasn't too long or too short. I feel like it was the perfect length. I didn't expect to get as many of the questions right as I did and the question I got wrong I absolutely expected to get them wrong. The end of the quiz refers you to two articles assumably written by the author. It would have helped if those articles were linked. I really would like to read them after taking this quiz. I would hope they would include the answers and links to the reference material used as research.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
It is a lovely story. I see how it could be extended into a wonderful book. It practically outlines itself. But what keeps people from chopping down the tree homes an massacreing the gnomes with garden tools accidentally without knowing they are even there. I mean humans aren't known for letting nature remain free and beautiful. We like putting in sidewalks and fences and new developments instead of scenic forests. Making it so we can't see them doesn't guarantee their safety. Humans eff things up to regularly.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is an interesting premise. I would have love to have read an expanded version. I would have thought when he sat to have a bowel movement he would have noticed the pajamas and his lack of frontal companionship down there. He would have had to drop the pajama pants and most likely panties because women rarely go commando. We tend to wear underwear as a line of defense against staining everything when our monthly visitor arrives off schedule. Basically he would have noticed something was up before he pooped not waking till he heard a man.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a really good begining, it introduces the two characters fast but thoroughly. The uncle sounds mostly like a quack until we learn he isn't a tinfoil hat type but a scientist on the threshold of discovering or rediscovering a new technology.

The direct line between his experiments and ancient Egypt needs to be drawn. Did he Google the effects he was seeing or remember a pseudoscience article about Egypt or what? It doesn't matter much. I just want to see more story and find out. The next scene could be the uncle returning to his lab and telling his colleagues that he didn't have the luck they needed and he gets an update...
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I totally agree with the groundhog. I have one living under my porch and I couldn't help but see that little guy as the one talking to the reporter. Why does it take a rodent to point out just how pathologically stupid the human race is. I think if God wanted to end the world they would just let us to continue to put the same kind of complete idiots in charge as we have been the last hundred and fifty years. We have pretty much ruined the neighborhood ever since we decided to invent World Wars. Now we are so cute just waiting for the next one to start rather than putting in the necessary social, psychological, and scientific maintenance we need to prevent it.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Oh I really was rooting for them. It was clear from the outset how important this was for them. It wasn't until they were doused in water and all of their careful training and prep fell away how far they had reached to try and enter the university. I wish the university were more open to this someone who can work this hard trying to get in would only work harder at the curriculum to stay in. If there are so many races that have universities it only makes sense that there should be at least one that accepts everyone.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh, what a sad story. That poor cat was abandoned. Those people care about it they should take it home. I feel like I am missing something about this poem but I am stuck on what horrible people would just abandon their cat like that. The poor thing watching the whole world go by when their whole world is gone. I wanted so much for them to take it home before the poem ended.it would have been a happier ending. This leaves is sadder and I just don't like the way it felt when it ended. But things don't always end well in life and to have an unhappy poem is a harder thing to do.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I love it, I want more please! What is going on? Will Hannah still be there when her friend gets back? Did her friend even really go back to America? Or did the staff do something hinky with her too. It is the best start to a story I have read in a while. Please write more! everything flows so well. There is plenty of foreshadowing and none of it is too revealing. though at the beginning where you say it was not to be that is to harsh a bit of foreshadowing, I'd take it out and leave it to the more subtle foreshadowing in the rest of the story.
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Review of The Kiss  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Whoa steamy. THat is quite the story. I am impressed with the setup being so nonchalant about the guests though I think the two of them being thick as thieves kind of foreshadowed the kiss. THe description of the kiss is definitely arousing. This revealed a passion and I am impressed that there wasn't any jealousy. and I am glad you didn't sink to the low spot of suggesting a threesome. though from how you ended it it sounds like your love life from that point on was an intellectual threesome. All you're missing is the PHYSICAL presence.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I love the excitement, optimism and energy of this first proper entry for the wonderland challenge. I love the overall organization of the book for this challenge. It is wonderful the way that the author has decided to flip end over end the order of entries in this book. It follows a lot more logical a path that way than the books of those of us that left it in the standard format. It sounds like the author's first trip into wonderland and I do have to kind of laugh at the naivete of the author it seems they don't quite understand what they have signed up for... muah ha ha...
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Review of Off To Wonderland  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a lovely wonderland blog. I like the chosen display of all the entries without having to open each one individually. The author did very well writing poetry, and I love the song they chose to parody and the resultant parody. It tied well into the theme. I have been to several of the blogs and books for wonderland entries this year and every time I have been very surprised at the totally different tack each author has taken to the same short and simple prompts. These entries show a lot of the author's personality and I can't wait to see the final entry where you are supposed to tell what you have learned from this challenge.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This book is as beautifully done as I have come to expect from this author. It is well-organized and structured. Each of the entries so far is detailed and displays a great deal of effort on the author's part. The author made different choices so far in the entries than I did and that just goes to show all of the wild directions the wonderland challenge can take you in. You can do it ten times and each time some new understanding of yourself can be reached and a whole new creation will have been born into our world.
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Review of Wonderland 2024  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I sympathize with life taking over and I know how it can feel to disappoint yourself by coming so close to first and then letting it slip away. I keep making attempts at the review 7 day badge and I keep flaking out. It is funny the things that life can send your way when you have a goal, it is like sometimes Karma just can't let you have the fun of complete success. But it is always possible to redesign your plans and goals to find a different type of success. It is all a matter of definition, and as writers we are good at redefining things.


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