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for entry "January PPC prompts" 
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I thought this was a very dreamy fantastical view of a candle flame. I went for a more practical view. I tried to wax fantastic but mine didn't work anywhere near as well as yours. This is a lovely poem for this prompt. I might have put all of the info on the poem into the dropnote rather than just the meaning of candlelight just to leave the poem in stronger focus.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
The theme of this poem is lovely. I like the contrast between the two homes and views. I hate that the view isn't as nice in the apartment but it's really good that the poem ends with the poet making some sort of peace with the changes that came with the move.
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for entry "Time" 
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I like the focus of this poem it is very direct. It takes a very serious turn on the prompt. I saw a lot of light in the picture and this poem almost seems to take a darker take on it. It just goes to show how different people can see the same thing in so many different ways.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I like the way your theme flows all the way through the poem telling a story of a character. I had so much trouble I was throwing in practically unrelated sentences to keep to form. I feel you did a very good job because of this. I would put the prompt in a dropnote though it takes away from the poem to have the prompt almost taking up the same amount of space.
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Review of Lucky In Love  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I am glad your lack of luck at gambling didn't put your luck in love on a tilt. This poem definitely illustrates the premise you present. You were lucky in love but it didn't allow for luck elsewhere. I hadn't heard the overall premise before but I have to say my life proves it out too.
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Review of Loser's Club  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
It isn't really a full scene to me more of a short vignette. I didn't pick up any real character growth or change the stakes of the conflict just weren't quite clear enough for me. I understood the wager but not why kissla went along with it... she really didn't seem to gain much.
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Review of The Caring Soul  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I am glad this story had a happy ending. So many in the middle of the worst part of the pandemic did not. I was worried the woman would give up and join her husband. I am glad that not only did she survive but she made new friends. Her kids are over protective.
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Review of Crashed Witches  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wonderful magical PSA. I love the premise and the story. Don't drink and fly! I would wholeheartedly get behind a tv campaign on this. I feel bad for Eliza. to go out that way in the middle of a successful career. It really is a sad cautionary tale. I promise never to drink and pick up a broom!!!
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Review of What's Behind Me?  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Awesome! It is totally cool and hilarious! I definitely think she should date steve! He at least didn't run away screaming like a girl! I love the twist you put on all of the horror characters I hope steve and Jessie become really close and invite the whole crew to their wedding!
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Review of Triple Danger  
Review by Spring in my Sox
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is good it is the perfect treatment for a cheating husband he deserves every thing he gets. The fact that the wife arranged it is totally cool and I would hope the trio eventually runs out of customers. But men will be men and follow their little friend around...
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Review of A Strand of Hair  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Yipes. Somebody leaped to a conclusion. There are dozens of reasonable explanations of hair from other people on a person, well maybe not a "personal" type of hair in a personal type of location but that was not specified. Heck she could have even worn a wig for one of her meetings just because a client didn't trust blondes or brunetttes.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Sounds like a pleasant fall afternoon. My poem was a little less optimistic this week but yours sounds like the kind of fun I love to curl up with. It is almost perky for being an ode to procrastination I mean there is a lot of things that NEED done but who cares?
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I know anxiety very well. It does make every day and night an effort. Combined with post it is beyond crippling. Therapy helps if you can find a therapist you can manage to find one you trust. Medication is a lifesaver I am on Buspar and the dose I am at keeps me from being crippled by the anxiety.
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Review of In the Graveyard  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Nice story. I love the sensations and it fits the prompt perfectly. I might put the prompt in a dropnote though I just like the way it looks in my contest entries. they seem so much cleaner to me that way. I really feel the character's sense of loss and could definitely see her crying out aloud in the end.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Very cool. They would have you believe they know everything, but every they I have ever encountered tends to be riding through life by the seat of their pants just like the rest of us they just make it look easier than it feels like for me. They are the cool kids, the smart kids, the confident kids.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
You took the prompt to middle ground. You didn't completely deny that promises could be kept but you also didn't deny that they could be broken. The overall tone of the poem is positive as though the kept promises slightly outweighed the promises that were broken.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is an optimistically positive poem. I hope you are right about things moving forward. It is too true that common sense is uncommonly rare. I wish it would govern more of the decisions made by the government with regards to many things not just the environment.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I just can't wait to get old enough for winter to hurt like that. Sorry turning off sarcasm mode. THis poem was vividly descriptive and made me feel a little crotchety about my future. I thought it hasn't hurt yet so it never will. This fed me the truth and I didn't like the taste.
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Review of Liquid Sunshine  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Pretty. I needed a little sunshine today. This was a nice little puddle of it. Just what the dentist ordered not so sweet as to cause a cavity but just sweet enough to lighten things up a bit. Thank you for posting this today. It really helped me. Thank you...
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Review of Darkened Always  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (4.5)
The wording is strong but the flow is a little awkward I'm not sure it is all in complete sentences or thoughts. It flits around touching a the edges of deep meaning before Tiptoeing back from it like it can't quite commit. I would reread it and adjust the wording to make it flow more smoothly to the end.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I like where you went with this prompt. I like that you went almost sci fi in your story poem, but really it is all about making the right choices at the right times. it is also highly romantic. It makes me sad for the parallel universe where you made the wrong choice.

one thing- when you wrote "Through out choices" i think you might have meant "Through our choices"
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Nice. It didn't read as rough as you seemed to think it would. It dragged you right into the story in the first paragraph. It seemed a bit cliche to start in with a man waking up in a hotel room with a dead woman, but it worked. You fed the back story at a good rate without getting info dumpy.

I was lead from each revelation of the past to the next as Jonah's convenient amnesia allowed him to fall for Baby's trap. That trap was perfectly executed from picking him up outside of the motel to making sure they had a drunken guest to manhandle into the apartment which meant Jonah would be preoccupied while she got the gun.

I do have a few questions if all the jonah's look alike won't the police be looking for him too? Why didn't someone notice six guys that all looked alike? Will Jonah II recognize Baby before she can set a trap for him? What is elmo's place in all of this? What will JonahII discover from the post card. It almost feels like elmo would be wanting to work with the jonahs to restore tech but Baby has infiltrated their network and is working against them.

I would definitely keep going on this I love where it appears to be going. I love that the character that led you into the story is "dead" before the end of the chapter. I can only hope there are enough Jonahs to complete their mission. I can see them dropping like flies.
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Review of I, Zombie  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Ewe! Graphically gross. Awesome details and descriptions. Great story poem Love IT. I wonder how long they marinated in the grave before enacting their revenge. Obviously long enough that the murderer wasn't expecting any consequences though they were ready to murder again...
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
THis is disturbing. Attack of the pod people. Only he was spared because he helped the original alien. WHoa was that a gift or a punishment? Should he have told the authorities when they could have stopped this? maybe but would they have known how to stop this?
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I thought the best was the poem about survival. I have had days like that at the end of the month when shopping trips are by necessity further between. I can smell the funk from the produce drawer and have questioned the last four eggs before. I thought it was hilariously true.
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