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Review of Wonderland 2024  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I sympathize with life taking over and I know how it can feel to disappoint yourself by coming so close to first and then letting it slip away. I keep making attempts at the review 7 day badge and I keep flaking out. It is funny the things that life can send your way when you have a goal, it is like sometimes Karma just can't let you have the fun of complete success. But it is always possible to redesign your plans and goals to find a different type of success. It is all a matter of definition, and as writers we are good at redefining things.


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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
THis was a sweet and honest summary of your journey through wonderland. I have done many of the things you have and been more honest with myself than I have in quite a while. It encouraged me that I am doing this right to read you had some of the same joys and pains in these prompts. I did this once before too and I think I am getting more out of it this time because I am putting in more effort. Thank you for sharing this all with us. I know from experience that sharing this stuff openly is hard, but sharing it with yourself can be harder.
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for entry "~ Learning Spanish ~" 
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This was an amazingly detailed story. It flowed from one attempt to learn to the next. My the middle of the story I felt certain that the author would be successful in their quest to learn Spanish. THere were highs and lows, accomplishments and disappointments. It was a very compelling read considering the subject itself is not given to much excitement. I believe the enthusiasm for the subject possessed by the author pulls the reader along through the tale.

I was disappointed every time one of the attempts to learn failed or was lost. I heartily hope that this is not the end of the story. I hope that one day the author manages to succeed at their goal to become a fluent Spanish speaker. I think a lot of the strategies used by the author were novel and excellent ideas. I would also suggest that the author could seek out bilingual or ESL preschools or kindergartens to volunteer. The author could learn Spanish while helping the children learn English and I don't know an early education center that couldn't use more help.


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Review of Ol' Fat Charlie  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Twisted. I love it. Poor Jack, poor Charlie, poor dogs. The writing is smooth and solid.it was a predictable outcome written in an unpredictable way.i love the details. I wish Jack was a little smarter and had left but I guess things happen as they should. His death by dog was postponed not thwarted.


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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
That is a dark ending to a fairly dark and depressing story. I feel really bad for kicky and not a bit bad about the guard. I wish I couldn't see the reality of this story. I wish something like this was pure fantasy. The writing was as good as I have come to expect from this author. I feel the choice of first person point of view was perfect and the only way to deliver the impact of that ending.


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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Intriguing story. There were a couple places where the word choices weren't as smooth as they could have been, but it wasn't anything bad enough that it drug me from the story enough to make a special note of them. This was fairly topical for a scifi story. It rang heavily of trump and his reelection campaign. I hope Trump gets his just deserts like Thantia does. Unfortunately we don't yet have the tech to catch him in his blatant lies. One can hope though. The story does make me wonder just what Thantia did that was so horrible.


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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Very entertaining. I loved the substitutions, Zeta, Lunk, Morons. I love the game andrelly like the parallels to it. It isn't a literary piece, but it makes you remember the good ol days when rescuing princesses an kingdoms were the important things. Before grocery shopping, mortgages, and parking spots. Thank you for a fun read
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I love this story. It sounds like a beautiful peaceful land. the pace of the story was good. I loved the characters. It is well built tale. My favorite part was where her music changed the dragon into a cute little pet. The music soothing the savage beast was really predictable I knew from the first that it would tame the dragon, but didn't expect it to transform it completely. Though it used a lot of common fantasy elements this story was pleasantly surprising. The traitor shocked me like the devious princes betrayal in Frozen. This was a nice little twist. I do think that the princesses should rule the kingdom jointly since they each have their own type of wisdom and both types together make a good ruler like king Arthur. My one question is how the traitor ordered the dragon to attack from the center of the kingdom. Was the dragon intelligent enough to understand and follow a plan. Also why didn't he just ride the dragon into the castle and declare himself king. Then the princesses would have been too scared to act.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Very nice story. I like the superhero aspect of it. I am a sucker for superhero stories. The world building is simple but clear. Your establishment of the character as a superhero is excellent. It felt all show not tell. I think you could expand this story with more active action you got a little tell not show there. It seemed awfully short for its potential. Give me more characters, show me more about the commissioner. Does The Derg have a Derg lair? Or a really large apartment. Where do they go during the day when they aren't as badly needed?

Give us more.


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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is great and for me expands the character of Scarlet far more than what I have read before. I think you have captured the essence of an empath in her character. SHe makes you feel for her but also for each character that crosses her path. Her endless mission, her endless burden could feel heavy for a weaker character. It bends her over backwards but she is just strong and flexible enough to handle it. SHe is strong with skill and knowledge but doesn't hit me as a Mary Sue type. She isn't perfect or automatically exactly what is needed to fix every situation. SHe struggles with her abilities and mission realistically. She feels the pain of loss as much as the machines within her allow. I think Caleb was more there to heal her than for her to heal him. I feel like she need his insight to the afterlife. THat said the connection to the ghost should be developed a little more. THe ending was abrubt too. I wasn't clear what he died of, OLd age? the first half of the story flows well but the second half doesn't draw you to understanding how the story got to where it ended up.


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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
The subject of the poem is clear and focused. It is a thank you to the people on the Internet that make it a community. I like that the poem ignores the existence of trolls and other negative people. The poem flows well for me and read really smooth for me. I didn't find any elements that jarred me loose from enjoying the poem. A couple of places the rhymes weren't perfect but they read well together. All together this poem was a positive experience for me. To be honest though the subject reminds me of sites like WDC as opposed to the Internet as a whole. Places where there are supportive caring members with a sense of community. If I had written it I would have chosen one of those sites as the subject of the poem, but I applaud the poet for choosing to generalize to the whole Internet. It takes a positive view to write a poem like this.


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Review of 5. Gratitude  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a very positive story given the negativity of the beginning. The first thing that hit me about the piece was that this was written for a show not tell class but you begin by telling us Sarah's life is awful. I think that could be skipped. You show us the reality of that paragraph in what follows. That intro weakened the beginning for me. You did a great job of showing things throughout the piece. When I reread it skipping that intro it was both more enjoyable and more immersive in the character's world. At no point did I need to be told she was an angry bitter person. Her treatment of the others in the story was almost too exaggerated as being awful. I was left wondering what had soured her on life so badly. It seems like her mother's faith should have influenced her at least a little in passing. Perhaps her father was a bitter man... I can't imagine what could have happened to her in her short life to make her that angry. I have had a lot of crap happen to me in my life and I am not like that...


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Review of The Hermit  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I love the message of this story. It is strong, set up well and fully expanded by the ending. The characters were believable, strong, they did not feel cookie cutter either. That is surprising being that stressed out moms and slightly disconnected dads are common in reality and in fiction. The idea of giving the moment minutes of peace and freedom from responsibilities could bring the mom from near the break down point to self awareness is really clear in the story. The actual treatment of that portion of the story was a bit rushed though I did feel the progressive personal growth through it. the overall set up for the ending, basically the part where the crazy was being established was really strong and felt like it had the right pacing. I liked the fact that her life was so stressfully dominating of her awareness that the dream in the beginning of the story was jerked from theoretically peaceful by the thought that she needed to get back to her kids and that she would not in time. Great story.
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Review of Park Bench  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This hit me hard because we just lost grandma last spring. It made me think of what grandpa was going through. I know it is hard for him. But I hadn't thought of all of the ways it was hard for him. It isn't just loosing someone for him. They were together sixty five years. Every morning they woke up together. They spent so much time together. Now every second she is just missing, not where she is supposed to be with him. He can not blink without knowing she is gone. This made me think of all of that. It was so real how you portrayed the loss. You put a positive spin on it for him. He hurts but he is not destroyed by it. I am not sure if I spent that long with someone that I could react in this positive a way. The story hit me on such a personal level that I simply can't read it on a structural level. It jerked tears so well it did not tweak any of my grammar or structural pet peeves. Even if something hits me on an emotional level I can still be pulled out of a story by errors so you are probably good there.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
Rated: E | (4.5)
I like the leadup but the ending seems abrupt and unexpected. There are a lot of things left untied like violet and her obserion with the baby and her mother. Buddy's death comes out of left field. For three fourths of the story it is about the girls then suddenly he's dead without much of an introduction. Honestly I am not sure I care enough about his sisters for me to care what happens to him when I haven't even met him really.
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for entry "The Naughty Elf" 
Review by Spring in my Sox
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This is a cool story. Definitely the naughtiest elf I have ever heard of. I don't like the idea of her having a great time with a human family after all she did. How does she intend to get the sled back home? I like the way Santa had frustrations over electronic toys. It does suck that most everything needs batteries now.

SOme of the paragraphs seemed a little short and it doesn't have a perfect flow to it it seemed like some parts were happening in a nonsequential way. Going back and adding details to things that had already happened.

It is much longer than my entry for the same contest and much more detailed. The characters were better developed than in mine as well. I got a good impression of Zeus Anna's personality. The name seems unusual to me even for an elf. Though I don't know what kind of names are normal for elves, so I can't really criticize it.

I like the details on the sleighs, the old one and the new one, including the detail about the fairy godmother and Cinderella's glass slippers was a cute one.
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Review of The Ooze  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
this is an interesting vignette. I could see it going many directions. What I am most curious about is where it came from. What was the crime. Why does everyone seem to be laughing behind the attorney's back right in front of his face. is it his first case? his last? why do I feel he's guilty but his defendant is not? It really sounds like a capital case. life and death seem to be swinging on the decision but I don't know if it makes me feel like it was a murder, maybe treason? maybe the defendant knows he is supposed to be found guilty and the only one in the room that does not is the poor attorney.


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Review by Spring in my Sox
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This poem goes to the heart of thankfulness. It is a simple but well-written poem. I like the acrostic form of poetry. I feel it offers a certain amount of structure while leaving it creatively open for any material of the poet's choice. This poem expresses to me the strong thankfulness inspired by the poet's faith.
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Review of Contest Entries  
for entry "Her Honor" 
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
It is always hard to write about loved ones that have passed. I wanted to cry when I read this. You conveyed her spirit well in your choice of words. It is true that you can always follow her inspiration and help animals like she did. I think this piece honors her well.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This sounds awesome! I haven't been up to reviewing much for a while but this sounds pretty cool and I think I am going to set up a review response for my stuff. Gotta think of a cool trinket for it though.i hope this will encourage more people to review me.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
The story is a little difficult to get into. The terms used, while understandable were somehow emotionally unrelatable for me. I didn't even understand what was happening with the first murder. I don't understand what they're building, and the detached feeling left me wondering why I cared about the murders. You need to personalize the victims a little before killing them. Explain more what creators are and what they do. I also don't understand why if they caught the killer why they couldn't go through with their plan.
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Review of The Lone Survivor  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This seemed very sad to me. the way the main character was driven along by forces beyond his control. I was almost ready to cry with him at the end, almost. The ending seemed a bit rushed and didn't continue the emotional journey as much as it could have.
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Review of Contest Entries  
for entry "Summary of 23 Candles" 
Review by Spring in my Sox
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
THis was an interesting little story. like a scavenger hunt. I like all of the magical surprises. though I wasn't sure why he needed food coloring paint dye and flowers in all 23 colors. The magical crystals could have come in 23 colors too. what is he going to do with his wand? He should have used it to order his pizza.
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Review of Plot Survey  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I definitely see it as a crime. I don't think it would be too easy to pull off. I don't think that the length of time floats exist are as long as they used to be. I think this would qualify as some form of embezzlement. It is a cool idea though. The plot could easily get pretty tangled.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This really is a good story. I like the characters. The point of view and tone of the narrator's voice are different from a lot of stories I have read. It is a little awkward to follow at first but it adds to your understanding of thi characters and the setting. It is clearly a fantasy realm from the first paragraph and I enjoyed it thoroughly.


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