*teary eyed* The WOW award is well deserved. You touched my heart with this poem and I truly to have tears in my eyes. Such wonderful memories and such freely given love. I greive for your loss and remember the lives of dogs I've lost myself.
Thank you for sharing such an emotional poem. I'll remember it dearly. Would you mind my sharing this poem with my mother? She's not a member of writing.com but I know she'll really enjoy reading this poem.
Have fun and keep writing.
Yours truly, Rebecca Laffar-Smith
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This is touching and heart wrenching. I love the way you can bring out my emotions with your writing. In this peice I can identify with the protagonist., Pauline. I can completely understand where she is coming from since I'm very much the same way.
Fortunately I do encourage my daughter to eat as much as she can but that has more to do with the fact that she had medical problems in her infancy that meant she couldn't eat very much and is still very small for her age. She'll never be a big girl, like I am.
Anyway, another engaging story. You make me want to practice short stories. I avoid writing short stories because they are really hard. I suppose that has to do with not being very experienced at them as yet. You've given me hope, I see how successful short stories can be and I want to give them a try. Thank you for that.
What a sad ending to an intriguing story. It is a shame that she ended that way although I sensed something of the sort coming. I'm certainly glad she didn't suicide because from what I read, despite the troubles caused by her family, she didn't seem the sort to take her own life.
You really manage to capture the listlessness of this youth. You've brought out this character and made me feel for her and care about her. I flinched when her mother said she wished she'd never been born. No child should ever have to hear that.
Thank you for giving me such an enjoyable read.
Have fun and keep writing.
Yours truly, Rebecca Laffar-Smith
I love this article. You peaked my curiosity, I actually googled up the virtual bubble wrap site and the death clock site Very interesting indeed and I love the humorous twine you've given everything. Made a very informal read but accurately depicted a pressing issue clouded with the humor of your experience. Great job and congratulations on your Honorable Mention.
A very good attempt at what you rightly claim to be "a HARD form". Ae Freslighe (pronounced: ay-fresh-lee) consists of one or more stanza's of four lines each. (Yep, so far so good with your poem )
Now what make an Ae Freslighe so difficult is the rhyme scheme mixed with syllable specifics. But you know you got that bit happening too. The only reason your poem didn't quite meet Ae Freslighe specifics is because the first syllable of the first line should be the same word as the last syllable of the last line.
For example, an Ae Freslighe I wrote about a year ago:
Abandoning Dreams
Time ricocheted endlessly
inspiring in all sublime.
Forever spun artlessly
floating within the dreamtime.
Dreams of nothing procreate,
dark illuminates extremes.
Evil nightmares desecrate,
abandoned are these daydreams.
Yes, a difficult form but I think you almost had it. You did present an intriguing image and made me wonder at the possibility behind your words. Enjoyable read despite not adhereing strictly to form. I'd love to see some more Ae Freslighe attempts, the form can really produce some beautiful poetry possibly because each poem written in this form is so difficult to come to.
What a fantastic contest. I wanted to donate to your cause because I think it's wonderful to see a contest encouraging poets to try the various poetry forms available. I also love your idea of giving both a prompt and a free direction for the contest. I gives us writers a chance to spread our wings a little with the prompt giving us a warmup and confidence to try our own matter.
I'll be watching and entering your contest and I hope my donation means there will be many more to come.
Have fun and keep writing.
Eerie, I don't think I'd like being alone on the dark roads once the sun goes down. You manage to put a great deal of imagery and emotion into your poems with as few words as is needed. That's a great accomplishment.
Mmmm, always an important question but the truth is a child shouldn't feel he needs to be the one standing guard to begin with. That's what adults are for. Anyway, you know what I've noticed about the poems in this folder now I think about what you probably read in my "Mental Meanderings" ? No tortured youth. Each of your poems seemed fairly upbeat. Noticing life and nature and accepting of your place in the world.
If you wrote a letter to yourself at age 15 would it be full of inspiring, 'stay strong', 'life is not so bad' messages? Or would you be one of the rare gems who can look back and reminisce on happy times?
I've had a wonderful time browsing this folder, and will be back. I know, said that at the end of the last review But it's true and this time I'm getting off the computer so it doesn't mean in five minutes, lol.
Very nicely written. Compact and to the point, just enough words to capture a crisp thought and put it on the page in all it's glory. That really is the true are of poetry I believe.
I can't really relate the poem to the title except by the connection of the description. The poem itself doesn't really have anything to do with journalists of journalism. It could be confusing to readers who are often just scanning titles for something good to read.
Thank you for another delightful poem. I've enjoyed my stroll through your port and will definately back sometime soon. Have fun and keep writing.
Interesting, but it doesn't capture the writer. I get an impression of a school project or a prompt poem here that was written out of necessity not out of heart. Of course, that's just a first impression and I might be way off.
More wonderful images and the simile is marvellous. Thanks so much for sharing this poem with me, I enjoyed reading it very much. Have fun and keep writing.
This poem conjures some appealing images and a soft mist of emotion that tends to match the mood of the night. I really enjoyed reading it. Thank you for visiting my port and for pointing me in the direction of this folder.
You really wrote this at 15 years of age? It is exceptional for such a young poet. My own poems at that age were immature, undeveloped, horrid scraps that I wish I could use as toilet paper (but alas they'll remain safely stored on a hidden away computer archive.) Wonderful writing, have fun and keep writing.
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Very interesting indeed and I love the humorous twine you've given everything. Made a very informal read but accurately depicted a pressing issue clouded with the humor of your experience. 
