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Review of Genie's Revenge  
Review by Roland King
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Fantasy Unraveled Contest Review
Genie for FU

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Your entry in this month’s prompt is unique in that it is the only written in the first person. As a result it tells the story from the perspective of the genie which I was particularly taken by. It makes it more personable and infuses a little more character into the narration. It's always a little easier for the reader to connect the story when someone is telling their own story rather than having a story be told about them.

I really enjoyed this poem quite a bit and loved that you submitted to fantasy unraveled. Great job!!!!

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Review by Roland King
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Fantasy Unraveled Contest Review
Genie for FU

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I am particularly impressed by the drama here in this poem. You created a scene in media res that is absolutely fantastic in setting tone, plot, and purpose in a matter of a few lines.

I’m a big fan of the descriptive single, word phrases you employed. It’s a very nice touch and a fantastic way to set the mood. When you utilize that type of phrasing it allows things to escalate quickly as we and build tension.

This is a great adaptation of the prompt and well done! Thank you so much for submitting to fantasy unraveled!
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Review by Roland King
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Fantasy Unraveled Contest Review
Genie for FU

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This is an all-around well-written poem. The rhyme scheme and meter is solid throughout and the story crafted in the poem is engaging, crafty, and even a little twisty. The darker tone of this poem gives it a great quality that helps it to shine. Cinderella story lends itself to easily being twisted in a darker direction through the insertion of a demon rather than a godmother you create a completely different route of escape for Cinderella. This is a creative twist stand a great way to set this poem’s story apart from the original story. Great job!

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Review by Roland King
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Fantasy Unraveled Contest Review
Genie for FU

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What a creative way to adapt this prompt! She certainly was a significantly more devious Cinderella than we’re used to seeing and as a result it made this interpretation quite fun to read.

Your rhyme scheme does lock you in to a few tight corners in terms of your available options for rhymes across your stanzas and as a result the rhymes can feel a tiny bit forced. This is by no means something that significantly impacts your poem though, so never fear.

Overall your ability to take this well-known story and turn it upside down in terms of character traits. Gone is the demure princess we all know and instead she has turned into a nefarious maid. Great job!!
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Review of threads of terror  
Review by Roland King
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Official Dark Dreamscapes Poetry Contest Review

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"Quantum strings." That in itself is such a cool phrase and brings to mind so many different images and concepts. Because of this being in your opening lines you make the entire poem in a word: cool.

It's brilliant in its brevity, tense in its tone, and descriptive through its diction and use of sound. You immerse the reader not in a painting of imagery but instead in a dense cloud of feelings and emotions. Because of that, this poem truly shines. Well done and what a pleasure to have you in our contest!

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Review of Eyes  
Review by Roland King
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Official Dark Dreamscapes Poetry Contest Review

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I will fully admit I had a bit of an aha moment at the end as at first I did not catch on to the relationship to the spider's web. At first I was just really impressed by the fabric references so to speak. Even without the link to the spider's web the poem was incredibly impressive. Then add that facet of the storytelling in as well and you truly do have a wonderful piece here. Bravo on this piece! It is an absolute pleasure having you in this contest and I hope you'll check out Fantasy Unravelled as well!

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Review by Roland King
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Official Dark Dreamscapes Poetry Contest Review

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AMAZING job on this poem. You took the Ekphrastic form and made it feel incredibly natural. So often rhyme schemes can act like handcuffs and lock you into forced rhymes and clunky lines. But here the poem ends up being incredibly smooth. You create a graceful flow to the lines and a very natural sound even when you speak the lines aloud. Great job with this prompt overall and fantastic adaptation.

It's nice to see someone utilizing rhyme in a way that is still structured but much more modern and not simply mimicry of older styles. Excellent originality!

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Review of Surround Sound  
Review by Roland King
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Official Dark Dreamscapes Poetry Contest Review

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Yet another impressive example of use of sound. Here also the content is about sound and simultaneously employs sounds. Going so far as to actually even mention sibilance and at the same time utilize it as well! Lovely little touch. The approach to the poem is highly creative and the interpretation of the prompt is great because it really takes the reader in a much different direction than most of the entries.

Well done on the creativity and bravo! Always love to see unique and original ideas! Keep on writing and consider the Fantasy Unravelled contest for September!

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Review of Hollow Cheeks  
Review by Roland King
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Official Dark Dreamscapes Poetry Contest Review

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So much SOUND here! Your wordplay here makes this poem sound so very amazing. I love it! Forgive my all caps here but the amount of sound use really does merit such enthusiasm. When we write often times we create an environment to see. "Paint a picture" we say, "create vivid imagery" we preach, yet I find that just as important is the ability to make such pleasing sounds to the reader's ear. Even if you don't read the poem aloud, you can still hear the grace in the words. Amazing job and excellent wordsmithing skills!

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for entry "Wicked Deeds
Review by Roland King
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Official Dark Dreamscapes Poetry Contest Review

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Ah brevity. The tool so often overlooked. But when one uses it, it can truly create absolute beauty. Words are a truly magical thing. Even in isolation, single words in a series line-by-line can tell a powerful story and create vivid imagery. You captured the imagery and pain of the picture prompt and did so in such a beautiful way. Great choice of form! I believe that form choice can make or break a poem in some cases and can ultimately be the difference between a poem being mediocre and truly great.

A pleasure as always!

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Review of Beyond the Grave  
Review by Roland King
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Unrhymed trochaic tetrameter!!!!!! Good Lord it's been so long since I've seen this written so well. You are truly gifted with storytelling and your rhythm is shockingly perfect. Well-designed meter is truly something that is a challenge to not make sound ridiculously forced. Here there is no such aforementioned ridiculousness. :)

This poem is fantastic and expands upon the prompt so amazingly well. A well-evolving plot with a creepy tone and environment really creates a fantastic portrait for this scene. As always it is a pleasure to read your work. Great job!

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for entry "The Faces Of Fear
Review by Roland King
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Official Dark Dreamscapes Poetry Contest Review

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The two-line stanzas reminiscent of a couplet (but not quite due to the interlocking rhymes) brings a nice touch to a poem with a grim tone and a building storyline that slowly unveils the pain and agony associated with the prompt. There is a very deliberate building of intensity throughout this poem and also it is mirrored by the slow lengthening of each of the couplets throughout the poem. This is a nice touch that does not go unnoticed. You did a great job of building a fantastic match to our picture prompt this month. Thank you so much for your entry.

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Review by Roland King
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Fantasy Unraveled Contest Review
Genie for FU

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You did a great job in this poem of applying some current events into the poem and infusing it is much a way to create a unique experience for Gulliver.

Via time travel, you give him the ability to juxtapose his own life not with that of some different species, but literally a horrific version of the very same humanity to which he belongs. Just in a different time period.

I would say that this poem does need a little bit of proofreading because there were some typos and spelling errors throughout (e.g. rapping instead of raping) which did distract a little bit from the reading experience, but overall this was a great poem. Good job!!!!


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Review of Reptilian Goddess  
Review by Roland King
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Official Dark Dreamscapes Poetry Contest Review

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My my this poem is enough to make a grown man blush. I’m impressed! Your use of sound and word choice is absolutely exquisite. I love the touch where you actually even meaning sibilance in the poem while actually employing it throughout. I enjoyed the creative Tabor of the line links down to very few words by the end of the poem. That was a neat little touch up pleasing shape the eye follows as you get further and further into your poem. The subject material was steamy and still incredibly frightening at the same time so this too also has an excellent balance. It’s entertaining ina truly creepy way.

Way to go and thank you for a truly wonderful entry!


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Review by Roland King
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Official Dark Dreamscapes Poetry Contest Review

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Just like the sirens call this poem is both beautiful and mysteriously menacing. With the Rusalka as well as many of her legendary relatives in other cultures and myths, beauty is juxtaposed with a animalistic danger. He did a fantastic job of capturing that here in this poem. Not only do you show how dangerous she is but you also (through inner dialogue within the speaker’s mind) show how irresistible it is and futile it is to attempt to fight her wiles. This was expertly done and served to provide even more support to the theme and tone of your poem. Well done and thank you for this wonderful entry!

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Review of Lascivious  
Review by Roland King
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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This poem truly is golden. You wove a fantastic original story here that surprisingly connects directly with me picture prompt. Your expansion upon the limited story that the prompt provides shows a high degree of creativity and the ability to successfully think outside the box.

The central conflict was fantastic. It was as though the crucible and scarlet letter had an evil stepchild and this poem was the result. You painted a picture and then continued to reveal more facets of the horror of this relationship. Character development was incredibly important in this poem and he did a masterful job of developing both characters quite well.

Great job and thank you so much for submitting!

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Review of Skin Deep  
Review by Roland King
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Official Dark Dreamscapes Poetry Contest Review

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You know I always enjoy your unique takes on poems and the thought and care that goes into them. You have certainly not last that sharpness in your “brief” reprieve (haha) from our contest. It is of course fantastic to see you writing again and you don’t disappoint with your classic style.

Of particular note, I’m impressed with how you of course made her a sneaky and dangerous predator, which is of course to be expected given the nature of the prompt, but you also made her a creature to be pitied. I thought that was a really nice touch to engage the reader in a unique way. It can be difficult in a poem of this length to actually pull that off but you did a great job so bravo and well done!

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for entry "Invalid Entry
Review by Roland King
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Ooo I like this one a lot. It’s a nice customized free verse with a hint of rhyme to make it still feel as though it has a definitive form. What’s particularly useful about creating a small amount of structure in a free verse poem like this is that it gives you the freedom to have complete control over the feeling of a poem, the tone, the voice, ans even the pace at which the plot unfolds. You made a great choice with how you provided structure to the poem as well and I think you’re really paid off in this poem because it reads incredibly smoothly and keeps the reader’s attention very well. Great job on this one!
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Review of Jack's Beanstalk  
Review by Roland King
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Fantasy Unraveled Contest Review
Genie for FU

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Ha! Did Genie spy a very special guest in this poem! Why yes! Genie likes!

In all seriousness though this was a very nice poem that definitely had an unexpected twist to it. I like that it was a land called “nether” yet is was high up in the clouds rather than way down below. Tbh at was a nice touch and overall the entire realm was a nice surprise as opposed to the typical giant storyline.

Great string rhymes throughout and good tone and language throughout. It was a pleasure reading your work and I hope you continue to submit to our contest!!!

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for entry "Jacked Up
Review by Roland King
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Fantasy Unraveled Contest Review
Genie for FU

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This was a great poem! Your wordplay was fantastic!!!!!!! I just love all the clever play on words you did throughout the poem like the goose goosing his rear end and the wordplay with stalked and stockings. One world to sum up this whole poem: clever. This is a fantastic entry and was truly entertaining to read on a number of levels. You have real talent and I hope to see you enter again in the future! Only one suggested edit below.

Edits:

He fell, gathering speed on his descend. (You meant “descent”. You’ll still get the slant rhyme out of it too so it’ll still work)

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Review by Roland King
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Fantasy Unraveled Contest Review
Genie for FU

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Wow! I probably could not find a better example of show rather than tell. This poem (a narrative on beauty) is truly a work of beauty in itself. In a word the language and imagery expressed is breathtaking. Did I ultimately as a reader care that there was not giant or castle at the top of the beanstalk? No! Because the description of the journey and the beauty at the top reserved for the eagles was stunning and magnificent. As always it is a pleasure reading your work! You are a consummate professional and a true wordsmith. Bravo my friend!

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Review by Roland King
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Fantasy Unraveled Contest Review
Genie for FU

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Well I love that you up front established that the original tale was a lie. This wa a nice touch because it gave you the freedom to do whatever you want to the story and in turn maintain complete credibility with any plot twists you Ishtar insert into the tale. That was an absolutely brilliant strategy. Overall the story and style of the poem were fantastic! Below I have a couple minor edits.

Edits:

1) on line 25 (but gladdened when her vice grip eased) you don’t have another line to turn this one into a couplet. It’s just one stranded line in the middle of the poem. Now if this was intentional please disregard. :]

2) your ML for your drop note is broken so you’ll want to take a look at that,

Besides that everything was fantastic! This is a great entry and I am so grateful you entered this contest!

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Review by Roland King
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Fantasy Unraveled Contest Review
Genie for FU

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Haha this one was quite cute. I enjoyed the many nods to other tales that you threw in here. A few Grimm tales, wizard of oz and even a little touch of Ronald Dahl’s Witches, Very nicely done! You made a creative choice doing rhyming lines but with a relaxed meter. That created a guided experience for the reader without being rigidly strict. It was a really nice touch that fit the theme and tone of the poem. This was a great read and an entertaining story that felt like a greatest hits of folktales and legends. Thank you so much for your entry!
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Review of Jack  
Review by Roland King
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Fantasy Unraveled Contest Review
Genie for FU

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Oh an intriguing story!! I liked this one! I actually would have liked to see this sorry to even deeper! Duplicate jacks with a possibility of infinite jacks? Is that is an intriguing storyline!

My only criticism is a small one and that is the fact that you slightly overused the “he did” or “Jack did” phrase. When we try to write old-fashioned poetry we all tend to overuse this phrase quite a bit. Back I. The day it was used as a thematic tool but know we typically throw it I. Pokes way too much because we use it as a way to ensure our poem sticks to it’s rhythm or sometimes even rhyme. I would say maybe just take a few of those out so that is lightly salted instead of heavily seasoned :)

Overall though this poem was fantastic! I loved the storyline, loved the twist, and liked that there really was only mystery at the top of the beanstalk rather than riches. We ended up getting a big fat “nope” from Jack as far having any rewards at the end of his journey and it led to some very fun storytelling. Great job!

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Review by Roland King
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Fantasy Unraveled Contest Review
Genie for FU

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I liked your twist in this one! Rather than steal the gold there is a harmonious relationship between characters in this poem. Letms be honest depending on how you look at the original, he literally was actually just breaking and entering in the giant’s house and stealing the gold and then commits murder when the victim of the crime gives chase haha! So technically you turned him into a true hero in this version. Great job!

I particularly liked the (forgive the contradiction here) regular irregularity in the meter in this poem. It does not stick to a forcefully strict rhythm and as such keeps the reader engaged in the content rather than just swimming with the current of a perfectly regular meter.

Excellent entry and thank you so much for entering!

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