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Review of Portrait  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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It’s been interesting with this prompt watching people’s interpretations. Some people have viewed it as a portrait while others have viewed it as a mirror. However, the common denominator that all of them focus on is her mysterious and tragically beautiful hair.

I love your descriptions of her hair as well as her other features in general. your word choice and language use is always impeccable and I find myself always going back to reread your poems for the sheer joy and appreciation of your wordcraft.

This is a fantastic adaptation of the prompt and I have absolutely no edits to suggest as this is darn near perfect as far as I can see. Great job and it is a true pleasure having you in our group.
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Review of Poetic Pieces  
for entry "Life, Overdrawn
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Well I am pleased to see that this picture prompt is breeding some genuinely super creepy poems. This one has a gnocchi horror feel would have made Poe proud. She is quite murderous and also quite resolute in her mission. I was curious as to the title an how that was going to fit in and it had a great payoff with the tie-in to the very last line. That was a really nice touch that I truly appreciated. Titles are important. And when you put some thought into your title it really shows.

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I have some reservations with one section of your poem:

"my icy fingers in your head
will make for you it seem
that me, you never really saw"

This poem does follow somewhat of a more archaic language pattern both for ambiance as well as to fit into the more strict structure of the rhyme scheme. However, this passage is forced into an incredibly awkward sentence structure that comes off feeling a little contrived. Again I understand it is mainly done so to fit the rhyme scheme already established, but you might consider taking this one and massaging it a little more to see if you can make it fit with a more easy-to-read to sentence structure. Again though this is a very minor thing in terms of the overall poem.

Great job and thanks for an awesome entry!

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Review of Sepulchral  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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(Starts the slow clap in order to get the audience soon into a standing ovation.) This. poem. is. amazing.

First off, your language throughout this is poem is amazing. I mean "My oil-based microcosm" and "my prototype possessed" are just two examples of some great language choice. Then we talk about the brevity of your lines that somehow, in a total of only thirty-six, manage to pack a heck of a story into these stanzas.

It's sort of like reading "The Picture of Dorian Gray" or even Poe's "The Oval Portrait" from the perspective of the painting. It's a beautiful piece and a tragic, even heart-breaking narrative spoken by something with timeless beauty that just once would actually like to feel the touch of mortality.

This is a brilliant piece of art and an amazing addition to our entries for DDP. Well done!

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Review of Oh, Man!  
for entry "Mistaken Identity
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Ooh I like this one. To take this prompt and turn it into a commentary on the expectational image others have of us versus the version of us we truly own on the inside...that is a really good angle.

I really liked the phrase "Some dark caress." It elicits both a visual as well as tactile response and it adds a nice touch that fits in well with the picture prompt.

Also I love the word "fractured" in your first line followed by "mirrored" in the next, creating that notion of a shattered mirror. It;'s yet another detail to support that concept of a broken image conveyed to those around us.

Great job on this poem!


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for entry "Dark Dreamscapes
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Wow. Honestly when we chose this prompt I was not sure in what direction the poems for this one would go. I am curious to see how each entrant interprets this one, but as the first entry for Week 3, this poem really does set a fantastic tone.

I like how your interpretation of this poem delves into the emotional. It tells a story of not only love lost but the complex emotions and disillusionment afterwards. Considering this long lost love to be a stain on the wall is a very interesting image and the direct connection to the prompt was a master stroke.

Great in-line enjambment with the hyphens as well. That was an awesome touch. Fantastic entry and well done! Always a pleasure to read your work.

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for entry "Graveyard Tryst
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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I have to admit that if I was writing for this prompt rather than judging, I too would have definitely thrown in some element referencing Romeo and Juliet so I am glad to see someone took that approach. This was a great poem and it gains its unique position in our contest through its brevity. I am one who appreciates all forms of course, but along with poems featuring excellent backstories as well as emotional impact, I am a big fan of poems that succeed in their brevity.

Poets who can tell their story in few lines are a rare bunch and it's clear to see that your magnificent voyage through poetry has given you quite a few tools in that poetic toolbox. This is a great poem and a fantastic addition to our collection for this prompt. Great job!

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Review of Eglantine  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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As always, I can count on you to create a fantastic backstory out of a simple picture. You truly do inspire that part of me that loves spinning a good yarn.

To be perfectly honest, with the exception of Angel Lansbury's character in 'Bedknobs and Broomsticks," I've never actually heard the name Eglantine. That in itself was a nice surprise to see an uncommon name. Then to learn it was another name for sweetbriar was an even more interesting fact. And that was just from the name of your poem!

But your poem overall was just as inspiring, from Billy Jenkins (You have a gift for making up a great character name) to the loverly language and descriptions. Your scenes are vivid, your language crisp and clean and the texture of your work is like a finely painted canvas.

As always, I tip my hat to you.

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Review of Oh, Man!  
for entry "Desire
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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A deadly passion and a deadly lover. What's not to enjoy about this poem? You even mention that their mating dance was a "Black Widow chance." That in itself generates a fantastic tone in this poem. Not only am I impressed by the tone you established but you also created a story that perfectly captures the essence of the two characters in the prompt. Given the opportunity, he can’t help but love her and obsess about her. And given a similar opportunity, she can’t help but kill him. It’s a dark and mysterious story that this poem does a great job of portraying.

Great job!

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Review of 'Til Death  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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I love the duality here of this poem. Both of your characters seem to be personifications of death and in so doing this, you've created a situation where their "other half" is not only their significant other but also seemingly the other half of death.

Your wordplay is great as well. bouncing back and forth between he and she and creating some cool rhymes with this wordplay at the same time. There is a simultaneously dark but also playful fun poked at the someone dysfunctional nature of their relationship.

I'm rather fond of you last line as well. There is a bit of dark humor to it that made me chuckle. It's so normal of a line yet taken in the context of the poem it comes of as quite humorous given the extreme nature of their relationship. That line really is a moment of brilliance in an already stellar poem. The irony of the two halves of death having only one answer to divorce (that answering murder) is a great little touch to this poem.

Well done and it was a pleasure to read and review your entry for DDP!

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Review of The Dance  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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I like the brevity of this charming little warning to the not-so-happily-ever after romance. Clearly the romance spoken of in this poem is far from perfect. In fact obsession is mentioned early enough in the poem to suggest that this romance is actually on the rocks.

Unfortunately obsession can sometimes drive a person to do some crazy things. In this instance we know from the picture prompt that it could also lead them to a moment that is quite dark.

As I mentioned before I love the brevity of the poem and it was a fantastic piece that showed off your talent. Thank you for submitting!!!!
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Review of I Write In 2020  
for entry "The Sorceress
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I really enjoyed your subject material and your creativity with this prompt. You took the picture and crafted a great tale into it. Your storytelling is superb!!
My only Suggestion: punctuation consistency. I noticed you have punctuation lol periods and commas in a couple places beut it is not consistent throughout the document. My recommendation Would be either work on consistency all the way through or just get rid of the punctuation altogether..

Regardless this is a great poem and was a pleasure to read. Thank you for submitting!
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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I think one of the details I appreciate the most about your construction of this poem is the fantastic meter and rhythm in this piece. You established a very comfortably regular poem that is occasionally offset by a stutter that only enhances certain moments. Not unlike the tango itself you creates a driving rhythm with those brief moments of interruption via some well-placed metrical substitutions. Your meter helps support your tone and theme and goes a long way towards making this a standout poem. Great job and keep submitting!!!

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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The exploration of sadism here is quite interesting in this poem. She clearly derives pleasure from the pain and fear she cause her victims and this is a concept you explore quite well in the plot of your poem.

She is not exactly the cuddliest of lovers (lol) so exploring why she does what she does is an interesting avenue to explore. I’m glad you wandered down this path because it provides for a very intriguing and creepy poem. Great job and thanks for submitting to the Dark Dreamscapes Poetry Contest!

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Review of Abandoned Ladder  
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This is a tricky rhyme scheme to adhere to without become contrived sounding or downright forced. Your poem is well-written and works to avoid both of these outcomes.

I would have liked to see a little bit more of an overt connection to the picture prompt however. In isolation this poem is fantastic! But when applied to the picture prompt it is missing a lot of its connection. As I said, disregarding the prompt for a moment. this pole rocks. In the realm of this contest though, I fear you have missed some of the overt connections I would like to have see in thy is context for this contest.

Nevertheless, this was a fantastic poem and a pleasure to read!!!!!


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Review of Poetic Pieces  
for entry "The Witch
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Well you certainly did a fantastic job turning they creepiness dial to an 11 with your main character’s mischievous revenge. Having been scorned, she takes a hands-on approach to getting her revenge and shows just how powerful one person can be. I like the backstory developed regarding her hanging and accusatory sentencing. It’s a great touch that sets up the theme of vengeance quite well. Only one edit here:

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“beneath the branch of her execution”

This needs a period at the end of this line to make it match the rest of the poem’s structure.

Thank for the fantastic entry!!!!

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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I loved how you structured this poem around a well thought-out plot. And it doesn’t get much darker in DDP than a poem that even features our murderess climax while she’s doing her dark deed! This little bit of dark erotica really set the tone for the poem and in my opinion matches the theme of the picture quite well. This is a fantastic adaptation of the prompt and a well-written poem overall. I have only one edit to recommend which you can find below. Great job and thanks for submitting to DDP!


Edits:

1)“to a couple embracing”

In the line above, I would recommend putting a comma at the end of the line just to make the entire stanza flow a little more naturally.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I love the noir vibe this poem has. It was very slick in its tone and language and all-around atmosphere of mystery. She is a creepy and deadly lady, but there is a certain level of seductive and sultry emotion surrounding her that makes her truly fascinating.

This was an intriguing and entertaining piece. Well done and thanks for adding this contribution to DDP!

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for entry "Carve Alive
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Wow! Great job on this one! First off way to go as far as developing a form that actually matches the theme and tone of your content. This “dissected pantoum” you created works well in conveying the sense of disjointed horror present in your poem.

I love how you twist the connotation of how happily we normally carve our jack o lanterns on Halloween and turn into something with a truly murderous and downright demonic connotation.

This poem displays a fantastic amount of creativity and originality as well. Way to go!! This entry was a pleasure to read. Thanks for submitting to DDP!

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Review of The Collector  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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First off, any poem that successfully can use the word “eldritch” gets some applause from me. Haha!

Utilizing a villanelle form is challenging. It is popular, but also incredibly limiting due to the repetition and strict rhyming pattern. Also because of these two factors, it’s not easy to build a compelling or detailed story in a villanelle form. Needless to say, this poem does not suffer from these problems. Rather it thrives and is legitimately creepy.

Great job on this one and thank you for submitting!

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for entry "Halloween Treats
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Hello again and happy to see you submitting to DDP’s octoberfest challenge! This poem was unique in its style and language. I was intrigued actually and reread it quite a few times to let the language mill around in my head. Your first stanza, written in a present tense, as if the action happens right now actually almost reads like a newspaper headline the way it is written. Then your second stanza switches tenses conveying the aftermath of actions told in the present giving it quite a it of impact. It’s a nice touch.

I love the incredibly accurate description of what is going on in the picture prompt too. It was nice to see you pull all of those details out of the picture. The storytelling twist of incorporating Coronavirus was a really nice touch too.

Great job and thanks for submitting!

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Review of Nightmare Days  
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I see what you did there changing the name of jack Skellington to Skullington. Hehe. This was a fun little poem and I enjoyed it quite a bit. It is appealing in its brevity and also vivid in its imagery. It’s a great balance of artistry and creep fun that is perfect for the spooky holiday season!

Great job and thank you for submitting to DDP!

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Review of Cliche'  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Haha! This one made me chuckle. With this poem you dive saw into the off-used cliches of Halloween and then abruptly you turn the scene Of Halloween on its head and instead point out the need for some extra sleep on that day. I enjoyed the brevity of the poem as it definitely matched the attitude of the speaker in the poem.

Great job and keep submitting!

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Review of Darkness  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Oh how I love to see the villanelle make an appearance now and then. I appreciate any time seeing a villanelle in this contest mainly because of the challenge they pose. Having so many duplicate refrains adds an increased challenge to crafting a purposeful and accurately built villanelle. Balancing the quality of content with form is a very good skill to have and I must say this form worked well for this poem.

You told a great story however I do wish the story you’re telling actually had a more direct link to the picture prompt. I find myself searching for an obvious link between the two.

However besides that, this is a fantastic standalone villanelle that you should be proud of! Great job!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Way to go incorporating current events into our creepy Octoberfest theming!! I love the macabre and dark humor in this poem. Ghastly twists, a pandemic-riddled universe, and even death himself, make this poem a true gem. I like the storyline and the flow.

My only critique would be that I would have liked to see some more connections to even actual picture prompt. Even if it’s just a call out to the outfit he is wearing or something to help link the poem and the prompt even more. Thiis a very minor suggestion and besides that I have no other suggestions to make! Great job!!!!

Thank you so much for entering DDP!

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Review of Poetic Pieces  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Ooooh this one is devilishly good!

I think the thing I appreciate the most about this pole is it’s pacing. You create a very well-paced narrative. The entire beginning of the poem is like a slow camera pan from the sky down to the ground from which our villain emerges. In creating that slow build to the reveal, you foster a significant amount of tension for the reader and you create a much more satisfying experience versus just jumping straight into the action.

Your descriptions are great and the use of multiple senses in those descriptions enhance the experience even more. No suggestions or edits from me!

Great job and thank you so much for writing for DDP’s Octoberfest!!!

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