You did a nice job with this piece Tony. Your images were excellent and I liked your use of metaphor. Good flow good grammar good spelling. I love writing about nature and appreciated this. Job well done. Sweethonesty
Your really nailed it YellowRose. This is such a profound piece. I read it over and over. Well said and true to a beautiful form. Thank you for sharing this lovely piece with the world. I swear she is my mom.....Sweet Honesty.
This was a beautiful tribute to your mother. Your love was so clearly defined in your words. Good form, good grammar and spelling. So heartfelt. Yours is not only the gift of a wonderful mother but the gift of being able to put it to word. Thank you for sharing. I am sorry for your loss but somehow that love will live on forever.
Sweet Honesty
I liked this piece. It was well written grammar and spelling no errors that I could see. The theme was most familiar to me. I just brought my first book to publication this year. I had many opinions as well and I had surprises as to who just did not care. I could understand this poem. Good job. Write on. Feel free to drop by my port anytime and take a look. Sweet Honesty
This is an excellent piece and expresses deep feeling with a profound exactness. You have a gift of expression. Do not let that light burn out. I really enjoyed this piece. Good luck on your endeavors. Try not to go down too far in those dark thoughts as getting back out gets more difficult each time. Thank you for this read. Sweet Honesty
This was thought provoking piece. Do we not all feel this way at some time in our lives. I know I have. You did a good job of relaying your message. Good flow. Good grammar, good spelling. You are a very deep thinking person and this alone says that you will find your way to the life that you so dearly deserve. Yours is the gift . Write on. Sweet Honesty
This was be sweet rendering of your connection with God. I liked it. The story was good and so was the rhyme.
For myself I like to keep my lines even in the amount of syllables simply because it keeps the flow smoother but you have done a good job. Thank you for sharing. Sweet Honesty.
This is the second of your works I have read for review and I loved it as much as the first. You are wonderful with words. Yours is the gift my fellow poet. The flow of this one was excellent as was the use of metaphor. I look forward to reading much more of your work. I would love to have you stop by and review one of my works anytime. I am fairly new at this but I love poetry and short story and my head is always in creative mode also. Thank you for the trip. Sweet Honesty
This is a lovely read. Nice flow with good rhyming and grammar. How true it is when we need them how angels somehow find a way to come to us. Nicely said. Write on
Sweet Honesty
This poem was a nice read. It has the gift of inspiration and reminds one never to give up. Good flow, good use of simile. grammar and spelling without error. Write onb
Sweet Honesty
You said it all and quite clearly I might add. Good job. Good flow and grammar. Unfortunate for those who are not aware of a very old saying. "Words Hurt" Glad that you did not make her hurt you. She just put your juices to the on position. You made lemonade. I liked it. Write on
Sweet Honesty.
This was a good read. Story flowed well and held me throughout. It was real and very soulful. Good grammar good spelling and my favorite line was the last line. "It was fifteen years ago now, and the last time I saw a full Moon." Good job. write on. Sweet Honesty
What a wonderful imagination. I really enjoyed this story. Good images and great flow of story. I would have preferred to see the brothers survive but that is me the forever optimist. You and your son did a great job. Look forward to more. Write on sweet honesty
I enjoyed this poem. The message remains eternal. The flow was good as was grammar and spelling.
Good metaphors also.Favorite line was the last line "He whispers in afterthought." Write on Sweet Honesty
How beautiful and yet how sweet and honest. A lovely poem that I enjoyed so much I read it twice. My favorite line was 'Look between the giggles and smiles" So pure so simple so honest. Thank you for a lovely poem. I need not tell you to write on, I know you will. Sweet Honesty
This was amazing as I sit here with the hairs on the nap of my neck standing. I found it so touching and so sincere. Beautifully written. It was an excellent flow and easy to hold on to. Thank you so much for sharing a beautiful story. I have often hoped that one day my daughter will go to that very spot you talk of and find the peace that you apparently did. Sweet Honesty.
This is a heartfelt piece and beautifully honest. My only critique would be to input the punctuation. I think it could be better understood with it. Sometimes without punctuation the sentences get run on and confuse the reader. Other than that I loved it. You have a gift of communication and writing. Write on my fellow poet. Sweet Honesty
For a first poem I am really impressed. You did a great job and the impact at the last line was amazing. Good flow and message beautifully given. No errors in spelling or grammar. My favorite line was, "That dark deep hole whose name be strife." Thank you for a good read. Write on you have talent. Feel free to stop by and review one of mine. Merry CHristmas. Sweet Honesty.
This was a heartfelt piece. I could feel just what you were saying. This time of year can be so very hard without the one love by your side. You have my wishes if in fact that is the case. Nice job well rhymed good flow and very touching. Best to you and hope you have a Good New Year. Write on. Sweet Honesty.
This is well written. Your grammar and spelling were flawless. Story is clear but I must say to you, Never let someone else determine your happiness. Nice poem well written. THank you. Sweet Honesty
This is a good read and there were no errors in grammar or spelling. However, I did find the sentences a little long. That is not to say this is not a good piece I just had trouble keeping up with the theme because they were so long. I think it would read easier if the beginning had a few more breaks. That is just my opinion and I am not an expert. You did a good job with your descriptions and I felt I was watching spring come back. Thank you Good job. Write on. Sweet Honesty
This was an interesting read. Your rhyme was good as was your grammar and spelling. I am a poetry lover so I enjoyed the story. The poem had good story line and it flowed well. Good job. Write on Sweet Honesty
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