This isn't really a review, but more of a head's up. Part of the contest rules for Daily Flash fiction is that you must submit the total number of words to be eligible for judging. If you wrote your story using MS Word or another program like ti, there should be a menu item under "Tools" for you to use. You can also use the "Item Tools" menu on the right-hand side of your item's header in your portfolio.
I hope you get the word count in before the deadline. It's a good story.